第16讲 如何设计续写情节（复习讲义）（全国通用）2026年高考英语一轮复习讲练测

第16讲 如何设计续写情节 目录 知识点1 六字真经法 1 知识点2 十句五定法 11 情节是叙事性文本的构成要素之一，由一系列相互关联的事件构成，是叙事性文本中最为典型、最为生动的内容。解读叙事性文本，不仅应抓住情节的起因、发展、高潮、结局，更应抓住情节的内在冲突、矛盾等。一方面，高考续写内容主要集中在情节的高潮和结局部分。此部分反映个体经验及思想上的困惑 与冲突、危机的出现或转折、矛盾冲突以某种方式得到解决及事件的最终结局。因而，合理的续写情节应包括矛盾冲突、危机转折、问题 解决和最终结局。另一方面，高考读后续写不是独立存在的，它是已有叙事情节的延续，这就要求学生在主题、情感、人物和事件等方面与已有情节保持一致 。 知识点1 六字真经法 一、六字真经：给故事装“镜头” 1. 看：拍人物的眼神、动作、环境（像电影特写）； 1. 听：录对话、笑声、环境音（像收音麦）； 1. 想：探人物的回忆、纠结、悔意（像读心术）； 1. 讲：设计符合性格的台词（让人物自己开口）； 1. 做：抓具体动作（让人物 “动” 起来）； 1. 感：串起情绪变化，点破主题（让读者共情）。 二、示例01：2025年6月新高考1卷（狗引发的兄弟风波） My wife and I wanted to share our new home with family and friends by hosting a small gathering in the early summer. She had prepared lots of snacks, while my job was to have the backyard in order. There was plenty of space for the kids to run and play. There was just one thing I hadn’t counted on: My brother chose to bring his dog Toby, a 50-pound ball of fire. Though friendly, he could easily knock over my niece’s small boys and my six-month-old granddaughter. So, when my brother showed up, I asked him to watch Toby and keep him outside. My plan was working out just fine. Toby was using up his energy by running back and forth in the backyard and giving the kids plenty of room. Unexpectedly, after supper, the weather changed. It started to rain and everyone went indoors. It was an awkward moment. I didn’t want Toby to be running around in the house, and my brother wasn’t happy with driving home with a wet dog. Eventually, my brother decided to leave rather than force the issue. A few days passed, and I hadn’t heard anything from my brother. I texted him and expressed wishes for him to come out again. His reply came as a surprise — a shock, actually: “Not a chance.” Clearly, he was unhappy over the way we had parted. After all, I had left him little choice. Well, he’ll get over it, I reasoned. Two months passed. My wife suggested I get in touch with my brother, but I resisted, thinking he should call first. However, my conscience (良心) kept bothering me. I tried to put myself in my brother’s shoes. He was facing health issues and his wife of thirty-five years had passed away a few months earlier. Toby was his constant companion, the one who kept him going. 注意: (1)续写词数应为150个左右； (2)请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 I realized it was me who was at fault. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother’s door. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 原文矛盾链： 1. 导火索：派对上，“我” 怕狗撞孩子，让哥哥把狗（Toby）留在户外 → 下雨后哥哥被迫带湿狗离开； 1. 冷战升级：哥哥拒联系，“我” 嘴硬等他先低头 → 但良心发现：哥哥 丧偶 + 重病 + 狗是唯一陪伴（矛盾深层：“我” 的 “理性” vs 哥哥的 “情感依赖”）； 1. 续写任务：拍 “我” 从 “固执→愧疚→求和”，到 “兄弟和解” 的过程。 用六字镜头拆解每一句 第一段：I realized it was me who was at fault. 六字维度 答案例句 镜头解析 想（心理） I had been so focused on keeping the party under control that I failed to consider how important Toby was to my brother during this difficult time. 用 “换位思考” 戳破自私：只盯着 “派对秩序”，却忽略哥哥 “丧偶 + 重病” 的绝境，狗是他的 “救命稻草”。 做（动作） One evening, I picked up the phone and left him a voice message... 突破 “好面子” 的固执！“拿起电话” 是关键动作 —— 犹豫过，但最终行动，体现 “愧疚压过 pride”。 讲（语言） ...apologizing for my behavior and asking if we could meet. 道歉很 “赤裸”：没找借口（如 “我也是为了孩子”），直接认 “错”+ 求 “见面”，符合兄弟间的坦诚。 感（情感） To my relief, he called back the next day... 从 “不安（怕哥哥还在气）” 到 “宽慰（他愿意回应）”，用 “relief” 精准捕捉情绪转折。 第二段：With the biscuits...arrived at my brother’s door. 六字维度 答案例句 镜头解析 看（场景 + 神态） He opened it with a surprised smile, and for a moment, neither of us spoke. 拍 “惊喜→沉默” 的表情变化：哥哥没想到 “我” 会来（surprised），但又不好意思马上热情（shy），沉默里藏着 “想念 + 尴尬”。 听（对话 + 环境音） “Thank you,” he said quietly. We talked for hours, laughing... 录两个声音：① 轻声的 “谢谢”（克制的感动，符合男性含蓄）；② 笑声（破冰的信号，呼应过去的亲密）。 做（动作 + 互动） We sat on the porch with Toby resting beside us, and I handed him the box of biscuits. 抓两个动作：① 递饼干（妻子做的，是 “家的温度”，比语言更有诚意）；② Toby 休息（狗从 “亢奋” 到 “安静”，暗示氛围从 “紧张” 变 “松弛”）。 感（主题升华） As I watched Toby gently rest his head on my brother’s leg, I knew we were finally on the path to healing. 借狗的动作点题：Toby “把头靠在哥哥腿上”，象征 “陪伴” 回归，也暗示 “我” 和哥哥的关系 “愈合”—— 放下固执，拥抱彼此。 3 个升级例句 1. 让「想」更扎心（加回忆 + 细节）： 1. 普通版：I felt bad for my brother. 1. 升级版：I remembered how he used to hold Toby like a baby after our dad died — now, with his wife gone, the dog was all he had. How could I take that away?（用 “父亲去世时的回忆” 对比 “现在的孤独”，让愧疚更具体） 2. 让「做」更有戏（加动作链 + 悬念）： 1. 普通版：I went to my brother’s house. 1. 升级版：*I clutched the biscuit box, paused at his door, and knocked — my hand shook so much I almost dropped the box.（“攥盒子→停顿→敲门→手颤抖”，动作链体现 “紧张 + 期待”，比 “直接去” 更有戏） 3. 让「感」更动人（用隐喻 + 画面）： 1. 普通版：We became close again. 1. 升级版：When our shoulders touched as we sat, it was like a warm light melting the ice between us — the kind of warmth we hadn’t shared since mom’s kitchen.（用 “肩膀触碰 + 融冰 + 厨房回忆”，把 “和解” 写成 “温度回归”，更戳心） 三、示例02：2025年6月新高考2卷（名字架起文化桥） “What is your name? ” is a question most frequently asked when people meet for the first time. But for me, it was the first challenge I encountered as an international student in Ireland. The pronunciation system of the Chinese language is quite different from that of English. For native speakers of English, some Chinese words are rather difficult to pronounce. My given name Qiuyu (秋雨), for instance, happened to be a great challenge for many of them. Every time I gave a self-introduction, I had to explain how to pronounce my name at least five times, yet they still could not say it the way I did. Once in a lecture, the professor tried repeating my name after me over and over in front of thirty classmates. I really did not know whether I should continue correcting him or simply drop the matter. I feared that my classmates might grow tired of my efforts or even lose patience with me. After all, I did care about how others would think of me. I realized that if I didn’t stop, the entire lecture would be ruined. “It’s okay, professor,” I shrugged (耸肩). The awkward moment ended with the class erupting into laughter. I forced a smile, unsure how to respond further. After that incident, I stopped acting as a “Chinese teacher.” Instead of correcting others when they were struggling to pronounce my name, I just smiled and nodded approvingly. This approach spared me the discomfort of having to over-explain. However, I soon found that by doing so, I might be losing something more important: the opportunity to share a small part of my cultural identity. 注意： (1)续写词数应为150个左右； (2)请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 In a class discussion I was invited to explain the meaning of my name. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Many of my classmates got interested and came up to me after class. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 1. 原文矛盾链 1. 导火索：“我” 的中文名 “秋雨” 英文发音难，课堂纠正教授时尴尬，之后不敢再解释，怕同学不耐烦； 1. 深层纠结：“回避纠正” 虽免了尴尬，却丢了分享文化身份的机会（矛盾：“怕麻烦” vs “想传递文化”）； 1. 续写任务：通过 “课堂解释名字含义”→“课后互动”，完成 “我” 从 “躲文化” 到 “迎文化”，用名字搭起文化桥的过程。 第一段：In a class discussion I was invited to explain the meaning of my name. 六字维度 答案例句 镜头解析 想（心理） Standing up, I felt a mix of nervousness and excitement. 还原真实心理：紧张是因为之前有 “纠正发音尴尬” 的阴影，兴奋是因为终于有机会说清名字背后的文化，矛盾感很真实。 讲（文化台词） “My name, Qiuyu, combines the characters for autumn and rain... Autumn represents harvest... rain symbolizes nourishment...” 用 “拆字 + 象征义” 讲文化：不堆砌复杂术语，把 “秋”“雨” 对应 “收获”“滋养”，外国人能听懂，还传递了中文名字的诗意。 看（他人反应） I noticed the rapt attention of my classmates, their eyes reflecting curiosity and respect. 拍同学的 “专注眼神”：没有嘲笑，只有好奇和尊重，这是 “文化被接纳” 的信号，也给 “我” 的自信加分。 感（主题初显） It was a moment of connection, a bridge built between cultures through the simple act of sharing my name. 情绪从 “紧张” 到 “笃定”：用 “文化桥” 比喻，点出 “分享名字 = 传递文化” 的核心，为下文铺垫。 第二段：Many of my classmates got interested and came up to me after class. 六字维度 答案例句 镜头解析 看（场景氛围） They surrounded me 拍 “围过来” 的画面：热闹但不拥挤，体现同学的热情，和之前 “课堂尴尬笑” 形成对比，氛围从 “尴尬” 变 “亲近”。 听（好奇提问） “What other names have beautiful meanings in Chinese?” “Can you teach us how to write our names in Chinese characters?” 录同学的提问：问题围绕 “中文名字含义”“写汉字”，精准戳中 “文化分享” 的点，说明 “我” 的讲解真的勾起了他们的兴趣。 做（文化动作） I took out a piece of paper and began to sketch out characters, explaining each stroke and its significance. 抓 “画汉字 + 讲笔画” 的动作：不只是 “说” 文化，还 “做” 文化 —— 一笔一画教，让外国同学触摸到中文的细节，互动更真实。 感（主题升华） I realized that by embracing my cultural identity, I was not only preserving my heritage but also enriching the lives of those around me. 情绪从 “温暖” 到 “自豪”：总结分享文化的意义 —— 不只是 “不丢传统”，还能 “丰富别人”，把 “名字桥” 升华为 “双向的文化滋养”。 3 个升级例句 1. 让「想」更贴文化纠结（加回忆细节） 1. 普通版：I was nervous to talk about my name. 1. 升级版：I thought of the time I shrugged off the professor’s mispronunciation—now, holding the chance to talk about Qiuyu, my hands twisted a little, but my heart yelled “don’t hide!”（加入 “之前耸肩回避” 的回忆，对比现在 “想分享” 的冲动，文化纠结更具体） 2. 让「做」更有文化细节（加动作特写） 1. 普通版：I taught them to write Chinese characters. 1. 升级版：I held a pen, drawing the “秋” character slowly—“See? This part is ‘grain,’ like autumn’s harvest,” I said, pointing to the top stroke, while my classmate leaned in, eyes fixed on the paper.（加 “握笔”“指笔画”“同学凑过来” 的细节，文化互动更有画面感） 3. 让「感」更触文化共鸣（用比喻 + 小事） 1. 普通版：Sharing my name helped them understand Chinese culture. 1. 升级版：When a classmate said “Qiuyu sounds like a soft poem,” I felt warm—my name wasn’t just a hard-to-pronounce word anymore, but a little key that let them peek into Chinese people’s love for nature.（用 “诗”“钥匙” 比喻，把 “名字” 和 “中国人对自然的热爱” 挂钩，文化共鸣更细） 四、示例03：2025年1月八省联考（ 彪悍机车党的柔软爱心） I was in Philadelphia for a conference when I saw an ad in the hotel. A nearby theater was showing a documentary (纪录片) about several local animal shelters that were helping to save abandoned dogs across the country. I love animals, and I felt an urge to go to this fundraising event. However, none of my co-workers would go with me, and I was worried about walking on the street alone at night. I resigned myself to spending the evening in my hotel room, but as soon as I got back to my room I felt restless and bored. The theater where the event was taking place was only about five blocks from the hotel, and the area around the hotel didn’t seem particularly dangerous. So, I decided to brave it. I gathered up my wallet and room key and set off. It was already getting dark and the streets were nearly deserted. I managed to find the street the theater was on, but when I turned the corner, I stopped in shock. In front of the theater were a group of bikers–very big, tough-looking bikers. I’ve known lots of motorcycle enthusiasts and most are nice people. However, in this case, I was a woman all alone, in a strange neighborhood, at night, and there were twenty or so very large men–all wearing insignia (徽章) that indicated they were in some sort of club–standing before me. Warning bells began to sound in my head, and my heart was pounding. Was I at the right theater? Had I misread the date of the event? A sign outside the theater told me that I was in the right place on the right evening. Nevertheless, I wondered if I should rush back to my hotel instead of walking through that crowd of bikers. I finally decided that I would be safer inside the theater. Hopefully, the bikers would have gone away by the time the film was over. 注意： （1）续写词数应为150个左右； （2）请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1: I hurried into the theater, only to find there were even more bikers inside. _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2: When the film began, I realized that the bikers were an animal rescue group. _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 1: I hurried into the theater, only to find there were even more bikers inside. 六字维度 答案例句 镜头解析（紧扣 “恐惧→松动” 矛盾） 想（心理） My palms sweated as I spotted rows of leather jackets— 记忆中 “凶悍” 的标签让我想转身就跑，但对动物的热爱又拽住了脚步。 加入 “记忆标签” 与 “现实冲动” 的冲突，还原 “怕麻烦 vs 想救狗” 的内心拉扯。 看（他人反应） A biker with a sleeve tattoo was gently unwrapping a dog biscuit for a stray puppy at his feet. 特写 “纹身男喂狗” 的反差画面，用细节打破 “彪悍” 刻板印象。 听（环境音） “Last week we drove 200 miles to pick up a litter of kittens,” someone whispered, voice warm. 收录救援故事的对话，用 “温柔语调” 对冲 “外表威慑力”，传递善意信号。 做（动作） I inched toward a corner seat, 指尖却被一张掉落的传单勾住 —— 上面是机车党抱着流浪狗的合影。 抓 “犹豫移动” 和 “被传单吸引” 的动作，暗示好奇心战胜恐惧。 讲（对话） “Need a cushion? These seats are hard on the back,” the tattooed man asked, pushing a pillow toward me. 设计主动关怀的台词，用 “递靠垫” 的细节显温柔，呼应后文 “救援者” 身份。 感（情绪） My racing heart slowed a little—maybe these “tough guys” were just... dog lovers like me. 情绪从 “恐慌” 到 “怀疑”，为第二段身份揭晓铺垫。 Paragraph 2: When the film began, I realized that the bikers were an animal rescue group. 六字维度 答案例句 镜头解析（紧扣 “误解→感动” 转变） 看（画面） 屏幕上，他们的机车后座绑着宠物笼，大雨中为流浪狗撑伞 —— 大手上的金属戒指蹭着小狗湿漉漉的毛发。 用电影特写强化 “彪悍外表 + 温柔行为” 的反差，视觉冲击直击内心。 听（声音） The theater echoed with sniffles as a biker’s voice on screen said, “These pups deserve a warm home, same as us.” 收录观众（包括主角）的抽泣声，用他人反应烘托情感共鸣。 想（心理） 我想起街角相遇时的戒备，脸颊发烫 —— 原来 “危险信号” 是我误读的善意邀请函。 加入 “回忆对比”，用 “脸颊发烫” 外化羞愧，完成 “以貌取人” 的反思。 做（动作） I walked up to the tattooed man, 指尖颤抖着递出钱包：“For the shelters... and sorry I judged you.” 抓 “递钱道歉” 的动作，用身体语言显真诚，呼应 “筹款” 主线。 讲（对话） He waved away the money, pointing to his paw-print badge: “Keep it for the next rescue run—you’re one of us now.” 设计接纳性台词，用 “徽章” 符号强化身份认同，搭建 “陌生人→同伴” 的桥梁。 感（主题） As their laughter mixed with dog barks from the film, I knew: kindness wears no uniform, only a willing heart. 用 “笑声 + 狗吠” 的场景升华主题，点破 “善意不分外表” 的核心。 3 个矛盾强化升级例句 让「想」更贴反差冲突（加感官细节） ・普通版：I felt nervous about the bikers. ・升级版：My mind screamed “danger” at their leather jackets, but my eyes caught a biker’s keychain—a tiny dog tag swinging next to his heavy bike keys.（用 “听觉心理” vs “视觉细节” 强化矛盾） 让「做」更有情感张力（加动作对比） ・普通版：I apologized to them. ・升级版：My hand that once clutched the room key in fear now trembled as I shook theirs, their calloused palms warmer than any leather.（用 “过去握钥匙” vs “现在握手” 的动作对比，显情感转变） 让「感」更触主题共鸣（用隐喻 + 场景） ・普通版：They were kind despite their looks. ・升级版：When the last biker left, his bike’s headlight lit up a stray cat—just like how their rough exteriors had lit up my wrong beliefs.（用 “车灯照猫” 隐喻 “善意驱散偏见”，场景与主题交融） 知识点2 十句五定法 读后续写续写的内容有两段，即paragraph 1&paragraph 2.每段写五句，一共十句。其中有五句已经定下，如下图所示 paragraph 1 paragraph 2 1 衔接para1首句 6 衔接para2首句 2 7 3 8 4 9 结局（正能量） 5 衔接para2首句 10 升华主题 其他五句根据前后情节发展进行补充即可，可用到五大描写：情绪，动作，心理，语言，环境。 句号 固定/不固定 句式结构 作用 示例句式 1 固定 情感描写 通过心理活动描写，为故事设置情感基调，引入情节 A wave of + 情感名词 + welled up in sb.'s heart and surged through sb. 2 不固定 细节描写 补充第一句情感描写的细节，进一步加强代入感 My hands trembled slightly as sweat trickled down my forehead. 3 固定 动作链推进 通过角色连续的动作描写，推动情节发展，连接开头与转折点 Upon doing sth., sb. did A and then B. 4 不固定 环境或背景描写 渲染故事的环境或背景，为情节发展提供合理设定 The forest was eerily silent, with only the rustling leaves breaking the stillness. 5 不固定 冲突铺垫 通过动作或语言引出冲突或矛盾，为后续情节转折埋下伏笔 I hesitated for a moment, unsure of what to do next, when I heard a faint cry for help. 6 固定 情节转折 设置故事的高潮或转折点，推动故事向结局发展 No sooner had sb. done sth. than sb. did sth. 7 不固定 动作与情感结合 表现转折后的情感与行为反应，进一步推动故事走向结局 With tears of joy streaming down my face, I sprinted towards the rescuers. 8 不固定 他人反应或对话 引入其他角色的语言或行为，增强故事的层次感与生动性 “Don’t worry, we’ve got you,” the rescuer said, his voice calm yet firm. 9 固定 结局升华 总结故事的结果，体现正能量或情感升华 Having done sth., sb. felt + 情感名词, realizing that + 从句. 10 固定 主题点睛 点明故事的主旨或总结意义，为文章收尾 This experience has left an indelible mark on my life, teaching me the value of + 抽象主题. 二、示例01：2024年6月新高考卷（诚信回报陌生司机相助） I met Gunter on a cold, wet and unforgettable evening in September. I had planned to fly to Vienna and take a bus to Prague for a conference. Due to a big storm, my flight had been delayed by an hour and a half. I touched down in Vienna just 30 minutes before the departure of the last bus to Prague. The moment I got off the plane, I ran like crazy through the airport building and jumped into the first taxi on the rank without a second thought. That was when I met Gunter. I told him where I was going, but he said he hadn't heard of the bus station. I thought my pronunciation was the problem, so I explained again more slowly, but he still looked confused. When I was about to give up, Gunter fished out his little phone and rang up a friend. After a heated discussion that lasted for what seemed like a century, Gunter put his phone down and started the car. Finally, with just two minutes to spare we rolled into the bus station. Thankfully, there was a long queue (队列) still waiting to board the bus. Gunter parked the taxi behind the bus, turned around, and looked at me with a big smile on his face. "We made it," he said. Just then I realised that I had zero cash in my wallet. I flashed him an apologetic smile as I pulled out my Portuguese bankcard. He tried it several times, but the card machine just did not play along. A feeling of helplessness washed over me as I saw the bus queue thinning out. At this moment, Gunter pointed towards the waiting hall of the bus station. There, at the entrance, was a cash machine. I jumped out of the car, made a mad run for the machine, and popped my card in, only to read the message: "Out of order. Sorry." 注意： （1）续写词数应为150个左右； （2）请按如下格式在答题纸的相应位置作答。 Paragraph1：I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news. ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph2：Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised. ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ · 写作思路(十句五定法) 第一段思路（五句） 解释坏消息 我带着尴尬的表情告诉他我取不出现金的坏消息 Gunter的反应 听到我的话，Gunter却以他一贯的微笑回应，他告诉我别担心，我可以方便的时候再付款。 我的情感反应 我如此惊讶和感动，以至于我一时语塞，无法说出话来。 我记下号码 允诺还钱 我迅速拿出笔记本，询问Gunter的电话号码并匆忙记下，承诺我会回电给他。 离开 然后，我匆忙跑向公交车，心怀感激地离开了。 第二段思路（五句） Gunter接电话 Gunter一接电话就好像知道我要打给他一样，他温柔地说我知道是你。 再次见面 表达感激 第二天我们在出发地点见面时，我向他表达了深深的感激之情。 还款并给予小费但Gunter拒绝 我还钱给他并给了10美元小费，但是他拒绝了，说“这没什么大不了的”。 我感到温暖 一股暖流涌上心头。 主题升华 那一刻，我感到非常幸运能遇到像Gunter这样热心肠、心地善良的人。 · 小试牛刀（十大语法句式） 1.“对不起，我不能取现金。”我不好意思地说，脸上火辣辣的。 2.听到我的话，Gunter脸上带着熟悉的微笑回答道:“没关系，走吧，你可以在方便的时候付钱给我。” 3.我是如此惊讶和感动，以致于一句话也说不出来。 4.我拿出笔记本，问了Gunter的号码，匆匆记下，答应我会给他回电话。 5.然后我疯狂地跑向公共汽车，离开了。 6.Gunter一拿起电话（状语从句），他似乎就知道我会打来,并轻轻地说“我知道是你。” 7.第二天我们在出发地点见面时（状语从句），我向他表达了我的感激之情。 8.我还钱给他并给了10美元小费，但是他拒绝了，说“这没什么大不了的”。 9.突然，一股暖流冲刷着我。 10.就是在那个时候，我觉得自己很幸运，遇到了像Gunter这样一个热心肠的人，他有一颗金子般的心。 三、示例02：2022年6月新高考卷•身残志坚的男孩 It was the day of the big cross-country run.Students from seven different primary schools in and around the small town were warming up and walking the route(路线) through thick evergreen forest. I looked around and finally spotted David,who was standing by himself off to the side by a fence.He was small for ten years old.His usual big toothy smile was absent today.I walked over and asked him why he wasn't with the other children.He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run. What was wrong?He had worked so hard for this event! I quickly searched the crowd for the school’s coach and asked him what had happened.“I was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him,” he explained uncomfortably.“I gave him the choice to run or not,and let him decide.” I bit back my frustration(懊恼).I knew the coach meant well—he thought he was doing the right thing.After making sure that David could run if he wanted,I turned to find him coming towards me,his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward. David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children,but at school his classmates thought of him as a regular kid.He always participated to the best of his ability in whatever they were doing.That was why none of the children thought it unusual that David had decided to join the cross-country team.It just took him longer—that􀆳s all.David had not missed a single practice,and although he always finished his run long after the other children,he did always finish.As a special education teacher at the school,I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination. 注意: 1.续写词数应为150左右; 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me. _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ · 写作思路(十句五定法) 第一段思路（五句） 大卫的表现 他低头试图避免与我目光接触。 我的鼓励 我拍拍他的肩膀，小声说:“我知道你怕被人嘲笑，但我觉得这是你证明自己的好机会。大卫，不要让任何事或任何人阻止你。” 大卫的转变 大卫抬头看我，他一贯的大露齿微笑回来了。 大卫决心参赛 在我的鼓励下，大卫下定决心参加大型越野跑。 我的反应 看到大卫脸上重拾的信心，我感到轻松愉快 第二段思路（五句） 比赛开始 随着一声“轰”的巨响，所有的跑者像离弦的箭一样冲出了起跑线。 大卫落后但不放弃 没有平衡地向前摆动他的脚，他上气不接下气以至于落后了，但他并没有放弃，竭尽全力向前跑去。 到达终点 观众反应 当他一越过终点线，观众爆发出雷鸣般的欢呼和掌声。 获得自己有史以来最好成绩 事实证明，他通过自己的努力取得了有史以来最好的记录。 主题升华 正是他勇敢的心和坚定的信念最终让一些不寻常的事情发生了。 · 小试牛刀（十大语法句式） 1.他低着头，试图避免与我目光接触。 2.我拍拍他的肩膀，小声说:“我知道你怕被人嘲笑，但我觉得这是你证明自己的好机会。大卫，不要让任何事或任何人阻止你。” 3. 大卫抬头看着我，他一贯的大露齿微笑回来了。 4.在我的鼓励下，大卫下定决心参加大型越野跑。 5.看到他脸上重拾的信心，我感到轻松愉快。 6.随着一声“轰”的巨响，所有的跑者像离弦的箭一样冲出了起跑线。 7.没有平衡地向前摆动他的脚，他上气不接下气以至于落后了，但他并没有放弃，竭尽全力向前跑去。 8.当他一越过终点线，观众爆发出雷鸣般的欢呼和掌声。 9.事实证明，他通过自己的努力取得了有史以来最好的记录。 10.正是他勇敢的心和坚定的信念最终让一些不寻常的事情发生了。 20 / 29 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$ 第16讲 如何设计续写情节 目录 知识点1 六字真经法 1 知识点2 十句五定法 11 情节是叙事性文本的构成要素之一，由一系列相互关联的事件构成，是叙事性文本中最为典型、最为生动的内容。解读叙事性文本，不仅应抓住情节的起因、发展、高潮、结局，更应抓住情节的内在冲突、矛盾等。一方面，高考续写内容主要集中在情节的高潮和结局部分。此部分反映个体经验及思想上的困惑 与冲突、危机的出现或转折、矛盾冲突以某种方式得到解决及事件的最终结局。因而，合理的续写情节应包括矛盾冲突、危机转折、问题 解决和最终结局。另一方面，高考读后续写不是独立存在的，它是已有叙事情节的延续，这就要求学生在主题、情感、人物和事件等方面与已有情节保持一致 。 知识点1 六字真经法 一、六字真经：给故事装“镜头” 1. 看：拍人物的眼神、动作、环境（像电影特写）； 1. 听：录对话、笑声、环境音（像收音麦）； 1. 想：探人物的回忆、纠结、悔意（像读心术）； 1. 讲：设计符合性格的台词（让人物自己开口）； 1. 做：抓具体动作（让人物 “动” 起来）； 1. 感：串起情绪变化，点破主题（让读者共情）。 二、示例01：2025年6月新高考1卷（狗引发的兄弟风波） My wife and I wanted to share our new home with family and friends by hosting a small gathering in the early summer. She had prepared lots of snacks, while my job was to have the backyard in order. There was plenty of space for the kids to run and play. There was just one thing I hadn’t counted on: My brother chose to bring his dog Toby, a 50-pound ball of fire. Though friendly, he could easily knock over my niece’s small boys and my six-month-old granddaughter. So, when my brother showed up, I asked him to watch Toby and keep him outside. My plan was working out just fine. Toby was using up his energy by running back and forth in the backyard and giving the kids plenty of room. Unexpectedly, after supper, the weather changed. It started to rain and everyone went indoors. It was an awkward moment. I didn’t want Toby to be running around in the house, and my brother wasn’t happy with driving home with a wet dog. Eventually, my brother decided to leave rather than force the issue. A few days passed, and I hadn’t heard anything from my brother. I texted him and expressed wishes for him to come out again. His reply came as a surprise — a shock, actually: “Not a chance.” Clearly, he was unhappy over the way we had parted. After all, I had left him little choice. Well, he’ll get over it, I reasoned. Two months passed. My wife suggested I get in touch with my brother, but I resisted, thinking he should call first. However, my conscience (良心) kept bothering me. I tried to put myself in my brother’s shoes. He was facing health issues and his wife of thirty-five years had passed away a few months earlier. Toby was his constant companion, the one who kept him going. 注意: (1)续写词数应为150个左右； (2)请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 I realized it was me who was at fault. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother’s door. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 原文矛盾链： 1. 导火索：派对上，“我” 怕狗撞孩子，让哥哥把狗（Toby）留在户外 → 下雨后哥哥被迫带湿狗离开； 1. 冷战升级：哥哥拒联系，“我” 嘴硬等他先低头 → 但良心发现：哥哥 丧偶 + 重病 + 狗是唯一陪伴（矛盾深层：“我” 的 “理性” vs 哥哥的 “情感依赖”）； 1. 续写任务：拍 “我” 从 “固执→愧疚→求和”，到 “兄弟和解” 的过程。 用六字镜头拆解每一句 第一段：I realized it was me who was at fault. 六字维度 答案例句 镜头解析 想（心理） I had been so focused on keeping the party under control that I failed to consider how important Toby was to my brother during this difficult time. 用 “换位思考” 戳破自私：只盯着 “派对秩序”，却忽略哥哥 “丧偶 + 重病” 的绝境，狗是他的 “救命稻草”。 做（动作） One evening, I picked up the phone and left him a voice message... 突破 “好面子” 的固执！“拿起电话” 是关键动作 —— 犹豫过，但最终行动，体现 “愧疚压过 pride”。 讲（语言） ...apologizing for my behavior and asking if we could meet. 道歉很 “赤裸”：没找借口（如 “我也是为了孩子”），直接认 “错”+ 求 “见面”，符合兄弟间的坦诚。 感（情感） To my relief, he called back the next day... 从 “不安（怕哥哥还在气）” 到 “宽慰（他愿意回应）”，用 “relief” 精准捕捉情绪转折。 第二段：With the biscuits...arrived at my brother’s door. 六字维度 答案例句 镜头解析 看（场景 + 神态） He opened it with a surprised smile, and for a moment, neither of us spoke. 拍 “惊喜→沉默” 的表情变化：哥哥没想到 “我” 会来（surprised），但又不好意思马上热情（shy），沉默里藏着 “想念 + 尴尬”。 听（对话 + 环境音） “Thank you,” he said quietly. We talked for hours, laughing... 录两个声音：① 轻声的 “谢谢”（克制的感动，符合男性含蓄）；② 笑声（破冰的信号，呼应过去的亲密）。 做（动作 + 互动） We sat on the porch with Toby resting beside us, and I handed him the box of biscuits. 抓两个动作：① 递饼干（妻子做的，是 “家的温度”，比语言更有诚意）；② Toby 休息（狗从 “亢奋” 到 “安静”，暗示氛围从 “紧张” 变 “松弛”）。 感（主题升华） As I watched Toby gently rest his head on my brother’s leg, I knew we were finally on the path to healing. 借狗的动作点题：Toby “把头靠在哥哥腿上”，象征 “陪伴” 回归，也暗示 “我” 和哥哥的关系 “愈合”—— 放下固执，拥抱彼此。 3 个升级例句 1. 让「想」更扎心（加回忆 + 细节）： 1. 普通版：I felt bad for my brother. 1. 升级版：I remembered how he used to hold Toby like a baby after our dad died — now, with his wife gone, the dog was all he had. How could I take that away?（用 “父亲去世时的回忆” 对比 “现在的孤独”，让愧疚更具体） 2. 让「做」更有戏（加动作链 + 悬念）： 1. 普通版：I went to my brother’s house. 1. 升级版：*I clutched the biscuit box, paused at his door, and knocked — my hand shook so much I almost dropped the box.（“攥盒子→停顿→敲门→手颤抖”，动作链体现 “紧张 + 期待”，比 “直接去” 更有戏） 3. 让「感」更动人（用隐喻 + 画面）： 1. 普通版：We became close again. 1. 升级版：When our shoulders touched as we sat, it was like a warm light melting the ice between us — the kind of warmth we hadn’t shared since mom’s kitchen.（用 “肩膀触碰 + 融冰 + 厨房回忆”，把 “和解” 写成 “温度回归”，更戳心） 【参考答案】 I realized it was me who was at fault. I had been so focused on keeping the party under control that I failed to consider how important Toby was to my brother during this difficult time. My pride had kept me from reaching out, and now months had passed without a proper conversation. One evening, I picked up the phone and left him a voice message, apologizing for my behavior and asking if we could meet. To my relief, he called back the next day, and we agreed to get together soon. With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother’s door. He opened it with a surprised smile, and for a moment, neither of us spoke. Then we hugged — something we hadn’t done since before his wife passed away. We sat on the porch with Toby resting beside us, and I handed him the box of biscuits. “Thank you,” he said quietly. We talked for hours, laughing, remembering old times, and slowly rebuilding what had been lost. As I watched Toby gently rest his head on my brother’s leg, I knew we were finally on the path to healing. 三、示例02：2025年6月新高考2卷（名字架起文化桥） “What is your name? ” is a question most frequently asked when people meet for the first time. But for me, it was the first challenge I encountered as an international student in Ireland. The pronunciation system of the Chinese language is quite different from that of English. For native speakers of English, some Chinese words are rather difficult to pronounce. My given name Qiuyu (秋雨), for instance, happened to be a great challenge for many of them. Every time I gave a self-introduction, I had to explain how to pronounce my name at least five times, yet they still could not say it the way I did. Once in a lecture, the professor tried repeating my name after me over and over in front of thirty classmates. I really did not know whether I should continue correcting him or simply drop the matter. I feared that my classmates might grow tired of my efforts or even lose patience with me. After all, I did care about how others would think of me. I realized that if I didn’t stop, the entire lecture would be ruined. “It’s okay, professor,” I shrugged (耸肩). The awkward moment ended with the class erupting into laughter. I forced a smile, unsure how to respond further. After that incident, I stopped acting as a “Chinese teacher.” Instead of correcting others when they were struggling to pronounce my name, I just smiled and nodded approvingly. This approach spared me the discomfort of having to over-explain. However, I soon found that by doing so, I might be losing something more important: the opportunity to share a small part of my cultural identity. 注意： (1)续写词数应为150个左右； (2)请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 In a class discussion I was invited to explain the meaning of my name. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Many of my classmates got interested and came up to me after class. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 1. 原文矛盾链 1. 导火索：“我” 的中文名 “秋雨” 英文发音难，课堂纠正教授时尴尬，之后不敢再解释，怕同学不耐烦； 1. 深层纠结：“回避纠正” 虽免了尴尬，却丢了分享文化身份的机会（矛盾：“怕麻烦” vs “想传递文化”）； 1. 续写任务：通过 “课堂解释名字含义”→“课后互动”，完成 “我” 从 “躲文化” 到 “迎文化”，用名字搭起文化桥的过程。 第一段：In a class discussion I was invited to explain the meaning of my name. 六字维度 答案例句 镜头解析 想（心理） Standing up, I felt a mix of nervousness and excitement. 还原真实心理：紧张是因为之前有 “纠正发音尴尬” 的阴影，兴奋是因为终于有机会说清名字背后的文化，矛盾感很真实。 讲（文化台词） “My name, Qiuyu, combines the characters for autumn and rain... Autumn represents harvest... rain symbolizes nourishment...” 用 “拆字 + 象征义” 讲文化：不堆砌复杂术语，把 “秋”“雨” 对应 “收获”“滋养”，外国人能听懂，还传递了中文名字的诗意。 看（他人反应） I noticed the rapt attention of my classmates, their eyes reflecting curiosity and respect. 拍同学的 “专注眼神”：没有嘲笑，只有好奇和尊重，这是 “文化被接纳” 的信号，也给 “我” 的自信加分。 感（主题初显） It was a moment of connection, a bridge built between cultures through the simple act of sharing my name. 情绪从 “紧张” 到 “笃定”：用 “文化桥” 比喻，点出 “分享名字 = 传递文化” 的核心，为下文铺垫。 第二段：Many of my classmates got interested and came up to me after class. 六字维度 答案例句 镜头解析 看（场景氛围） They surrounded me 拍 “围过来” 的画面：热闹但不拥挤，体现同学的热情，和之前 “课堂尴尬笑” 形成对比，氛围从 “尴尬” 变 “亲近”。 听（好奇提问） “What other names have beautiful meanings in Chinese?” “Can you teach us how to write our names in Chinese characters?” 录同学的提问：问题围绕 “中文名字含义”“写汉字”，精准戳中 “文化分享” 的点，说明 “我” 的讲解真的勾起了他们的兴趣。 做（文化动作） I took out a piece of paper and began to sketch out characters, explaining each stroke and its significance. 抓 “画汉字 + 讲笔画” 的动作：不只是 “说” 文化，还 “做” 文化 —— 一笔一画教，让外国同学触摸到中文的细节，互动更真实。 感（主题升华） I realized that by embracing my cultural identity, I was not only preserving my heritage but also enriching the lives of those around me. 情绪从 “温暖” 到 “自豪”：总结分享文化的意义 —— 不只是 “不丢传统”，还能 “丰富别人”，把 “名字桥” 升华为 “双向的文化滋养”。 3 个升级例句 1. 让「想」更贴文化纠结（加回忆细节） 1. 普通版：I was nervous to talk about my name. 1. 升级版：I thought of the time I shrugged off the professor’s mispronunciation—now, holding the chance to talk about Qiuyu, my hands twisted a little, but my heart yelled “don’t hide!”（加入 “之前耸肩回避” 的回忆，对比现在 “想分享” 的冲动，文化纠结更具体） 2. 让「做」更有文化细节（加动作特写） 1. 普通版：I taught them to write Chinese characters. 1. 升级版：I held a pen, drawing the “秋” character slowly—“See? This part is ‘grain,’ like autumn’s harvest,” I said, pointing to the top stroke, while my classmate leaned in, eyes fixed on the paper.（加 “握笔”“指笔画”“同学凑过来” 的细节，文化互动更有画面感） 3. 让「感」更触文化共鸣（用比喻 + 小事） 1. 普通版：Sharing my name helped them understand Chinese culture. 1. 升级版：When a classmate said “Qiuyu sounds like a soft poem,” I felt warm—my name wasn’t just a hard-to-pronounce word anymore, but a little key that let them peek into Chinese people’s love for nature.（用 “诗”“钥匙” 比喻，把 “名字” 和 “中国人对自然的热爱” 挂钩，文化共鸣更细） 【参考答案】 In a class discussion, I was invited to explain the meaning of my name. Standing up, I felt a mix of nervousness and excitement. “My name, Qiuyu, combines the characters for autumn and rain in Chinese,” I began, my voice steady. “Autumn represents harvest and maturity, while rain symbolizes nourishment and growth. Together, they embody a time of abundance and renewal.” As I spoke, I noticed the rapt attention of my classmates, their eyes reflecting curiosity and respect. It was a moment of connection, a bridge built between cultures through the simple act of sharing my name. Many of my classmates got interested and came up to me after class. They surrounded me, their questions pouring out like a stream. “What other names have beautiful meanings in Chinese?” “Can you teach us how to write our names in Chinese characters?” I smiled, feeling a warmth spread through me. I took out a piece of paper and began to sketch out characters, explaining each stroke and its significance. Through this interaction, I realized that by embracing my cultural identity, I was not only preserving my heritage but also enriching the lives of those around me. It was a small yet meaningful step towards fostering cultural understanding and appreciation. 四、示例03：2025年1月八省联考（ 彪悍机车党的柔软爱心） I was in Philadelphia for a conference when I saw an ad in the hotel. A nearby theater was showing a documentary (纪录片) about several local animal shelters that were helping to save abandoned dogs across the country. I love animals, and I felt an urge to go to this fundraising event. However, none of my co-workers would go with me, and I was worried about walking on the street alone at night. I resigned myself to spending the evening in my hotel room, but as soon as I got back to my room I felt restless and bored. The theater where the event was taking place was only about five blocks from the hotel, and the area around the hotel didn’t seem particularly dangerous. So, I decided to brave it. I gathered up my wallet and room key and set off. It was already getting dark and the streets were nearly deserted. I managed to find the street the theater was on, but when I turned the corner, I stopped in shock. In front of the theater were a group of bikers–very big, tough-looking bikers. I’ve known lots of motorcycle enthusiasts and most are nice people. However, in this case, I was a woman all alone, in a strange neighborhood, at night, and there were twenty or so very large men–all wearing insignia (徽章) that indicated they were in some sort of club–standing before me. Warning bells began to sound in my head, and my heart was pounding. Was I at the right theater? Had I misread the date of the event? A sign outside the theater told me that I was in the right place on the right evening. Nevertheless, I wondered if I should rush back to my hotel instead of walking through that crowd of bikers. I finally decided that I would be safer inside the theater. Hopefully, the bikers would have gone away by the time the film was over. 注意： （1）续写词数应为150个左右； （2）请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1: I hurried into the theater, only to find there were even more bikers inside. _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2: When the film began, I realized that the bikers were an animal rescue group. _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 1: I hurried into the theater, only to find there were even more bikers inside. 六字维度 答案例句 镜头解析（紧扣 “恐惧→松动” 矛盾） 想（心理） My palms sweated as I spotted rows of leather jackets— 记忆中 “凶悍” 的标签让我想转身就跑，但对动物的热爱又拽住了脚步。 加入 “记忆标签” 与 “现实冲动” 的冲突，还原 “怕麻烦 vs 想救狗” 的内心拉扯。 看（他人反应） A biker with a sleeve tattoo was gently unwrapping a dog biscuit for a stray puppy at his feet. 特写 “纹身男喂狗” 的反差画面，用细节打破 “彪悍” 刻板印象。 听（环境音） “Last week we drove 200 miles to pick up a litter of kittens,” someone whispered, voice warm. 收录救援故事的对话，用 “温柔语调” 对冲 “外表威慑力”，传递善意信号。 做（动作） I inched toward a corner seat, 指尖却被一张掉落的传单勾住 —— 上面是机车党抱着流浪狗的合影。 抓 “犹豫移动” 和 “被传单吸引” 的动作，暗示好奇心战胜恐惧。 讲（对话） “Need a cushion? These seats are hard on the back,” the tattooed man asked, pushing a pillow toward me. 设计主动关怀的台词，用 “递靠垫” 的细节显温柔，呼应后文 “救援者” 身份。 感（情绪） My racing heart slowed a little—maybe these “tough guys” were just... dog lovers like me. 情绪从 “恐慌” 到 “怀疑”，为第二段身份揭晓铺垫。 Paragraph 2: When the film began, I realized that the bikers were an animal rescue group. 六字维度 答案例句 镜头解析（紧扣 “误解→感动” 转变） 看（画面） 屏幕上，他们的机车后座绑着宠物笼，大雨中为流浪狗撑伞 —— 大手上的金属戒指蹭着小狗湿漉漉的毛发。 用电影特写强化 “彪悍外表 + 温柔行为” 的反差，视觉冲击直击内心。 听（声音） The theater echoed with sniffles as a biker’s voice on screen said, “These pups deserve a warm home, same as us.” 收录观众（包括主角）的抽泣声，用他人反应烘托情感共鸣。 想（心理） 我想起街角相遇时的戒备，脸颊发烫 —— 原来 “危险信号” 是我误读的善意邀请函。 加入 “回忆对比”，用 “脸颊发烫” 外化羞愧，完成 “以貌取人” 的反思。 做（动作） I walked up to the tattooed man, 指尖颤抖着递出钱包：“For the shelters... and sorry I judged you.” 抓 “递钱道歉” 的动作，用身体语言显真诚，呼应 “筹款” 主线。 讲（对话） He waved away the money, pointing to his paw-print badge: “Keep it for the next rescue run—you’re one of us now.” 设计接纳性台词，用 “徽章” 符号强化身份认同，搭建 “陌生人→同伴” 的桥梁。 感（主题） As their laughter mixed with dog barks from the film, I knew: kindness wears no uniform, only a willing heart. 用 “笑声 + 狗吠” 的场景升华主题，点破 “善意不分外表” 的核心。 3 个矛盾强化升级例句 让「想」更贴反差冲突（加感官细节） ・普通版：I felt nervous about the bikers. ・升级版：My mind screamed “danger” at their leather jackets, but my eyes caught a biker’s keychain—a tiny dog tag swinging next to his heavy bike keys.（用 “听觉心理” vs “视觉细节” 强化矛盾） 让「做」更有情感张力（加动作对比） ・普通版：I apologized to them. ・升级版：My hand that once clutched the room key in fear now trembled as I shook theirs, their calloused palms warmer than any leather.（用 “过去握钥匙” vs “现在握手” 的动作对比，显情感转变） 让「感」更触主题共鸣（用隐喻 + 场景） ・普通版：They were kind despite their looks. ・升级版：When the last biker left, his bike’s headlight lit up a stray cat—just like how their rough exteriors had lit up my wrong beliefs.（用 “车灯照猫” 隐喻 “善意驱散偏见”，场景与主题交融） 【范文1】 I hurried into the theater, only to find there were even more bikers inside. My heart sank and I felt a bit panicked. But I noticed that they were all very orderly. Some were chatting quietly about the dogs they had rescued. I took a deep breath and found an empty seat as far away from them as possible. I was still a bit nervous but tried to calm myself down, waiting for the film to start.  When the film began, I realized that the bikers were an animal rescue group. They were here for the same reason as me - to support the local animal shelters. I felt so ashamed of my initial fear. As the film played, I saw their efforts in saving the abandoned dogs. They were so passionate and kind. After the film, I went up to them and apologized for my misjudgment. They just laughed and said it was okay. We even exchanged contact information to keep in touch about future animal - saving activities. 【范文2】 I hurried into the theater, only to find there were even more bikers inside. My heart sank and I felt like I had walked into a lion's den. They were chatting loudly and seemed to fill every corner of the place. I quickly found an empty seat in a corner, trying to make myself as inconspicuous as possible. I kept stealing glances at them, still feeling extremely nervous.  When the film began, I realized that the bikers were an animal rescue group. They were here for the same reason as I was-to support the animal shelters. They had organized this event to raise funds and awareness for the abandoned dogs. As I watched them watching the film with such passion and care in their eyes, I felt ashamed of my initial judgment. I was touched by their love for animals and glad that I hadn't let my fear stop me from coming. 知识点2 十句五定法 读后续写续写的内容有两段，即paragraph 1&paragraph 2.每段写五句，一共十句。其中有五句已经定下，如下图所示 paragraph 1 paragraph 2 1 衔接para1首句 6 衔接para2首句 2 7 3 8 4 9 结局（正能量） 5 衔接para2首句 10 升华主题 其他五句根据前后情节发展进行补充即可，可用到五大描写：情绪，动作，心理，语言，环境。 句号 固定/不固定 句式结构 作用 示例句式 1 固定 情感描写 通过心理活动描写，为故事设置情感基调，引入情节 A wave of + 情感名词 + welled up in sb.'s heart and surged through sb. 2 不固定 细节描写 补充第一句情感描写的细节，进一步加强代入感 My hands trembled slightly as sweat trickled down my forehead. 3 固定 动作链推进 通过角色连续的动作描写，推动情节发展，连接开头与转折点 Upon doing sth., sb. did A and then B. 4 不固定 环境或背景描写 渲染故事的环境或背景，为情节发展提供合理设定 The forest was eerily silent, with only the rustling leaves breaking the stillness. 5 不固定 冲突铺垫 通过动作或语言引出冲突或矛盾，为后续情节转折埋下伏笔 I hesitated for a moment, unsure of what to do next, when I heard a faint cry for help. 6 固定 情节转折 设置故事的高潮或转折点，推动故事向结局发展 No sooner had sb. done sth. than sb. did sth. 7 不固定 动作与情感结合 表现转折后的情感与行为反应，进一步推动故事走向结局 With tears of joy streaming down my face, I sprinted towards the rescuers. 8 不固定 他人反应或对话 引入其他角色的语言或行为，增强故事的层次感与生动性 “Don’t worry, we’ve got you,” the rescuer said, his voice calm yet firm. 9 固定 结局升华 总结故事的结果，体现正能量或情感升华 Having done sth., sb. felt + 情感名词, realizing that + 从句. 10 固定 主题点睛 点明故事的主旨或总结意义，为文章收尾 This experience has left an indelible mark on my life, teaching me the value of + 抽象主题. 二、示例01：2024年6月新高考卷（诚信回报陌生司机相助） I met Gunter on a cold, wet and unforgettable evening in September. I had planned to fly to Vienna and take a bus to Prague for a conference. Due to a big storm, my flight had been delayed by an hour and a half. I touched down in Vienna just 30 minutes before the departure of the last bus to Prague. The moment I got off the plane, I ran like crazy through the airport building and jumped into the first taxi on the rank without a second thought. That was when I met Gunter. I told him where I was going, but he said he hadn't heard of the bus station. I thought my pronunciation was the problem, so I explained again more slowly, but he still looked confused. When I was about to give up, Gunter fished out his little phone and rang up a friend. After a heated discussion that lasted for what seemed like a century, Gunter put his phone down and started the car. Finally, with just two minutes to spare we rolled into the bus station. Thankfully, there was a long queue (队列) still waiting to board the bus. Gunter parked the taxi behind the bus, turned around, and looked at me with a big smile on his face. "We made it," he said. Just then I realised that I had zero cash in my wallet. I flashed him an apologetic smile as I pulled out my Portuguese bankcard. He tried it several times, but the card machine just did not play along. A feeling of helplessness washed over me as I saw the bus queue thinning out. At this moment, Gunter pointed towards the waiting hall of the bus station. There, at the entrance, was a cash machine. I jumped out of the car, made a mad run for the machine, and popped my card in, only to read the message: "Out of order. Sorry." 注意： （1）续写词数应为150个左右； （2）请按如下格式在答题纸的相应位置作答。 Paragraph1：I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news. ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph2：Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised. ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ · 写作思路(十句五定法) 第一段思路（五句） 解释坏消息 我带着尴尬的表情告诉他我取不出现金的坏消息 Gunter的反应 听到我的话，Gunter却以他一贯的微笑回应，他告诉我别担心，我可以方便的时候再付款。 我的情感反应 我如此惊讶和感动，以至于我一时语塞，无法说出话来。 我记下号码 允诺还钱 我迅速拿出笔记本，询问Gunter的电话号码并匆忙记下，承诺我会回电给他。 离开 然后，我匆忙跑向公交车，心怀感激地离开了。 第二段思路（五句） Gunter接电话 Gunter一接电话就好像知道我要打给他一样，他温柔地说我知道是你。 再次见面 表达感激 第二天我们在出发地点见面时，我向他表达了深深的感激之情。 还款并给予小费但Gunter拒绝 我还钱给他并给了10美元小费，但是他拒绝了，说“这没什么大不了的”。 我感到温暖 一股暖流涌上心头。 主题升华 那一刻，我感到非常幸运能遇到像Gunter这样热心肠、心地善良的人。 · 小试牛刀（十大语法句式） 1.“对不起，我不能取现金。”我不好意思地说，脸上火辣辣的（with复合结构）。 “Sorry, I can’t take cash out.” I said embarrassedly, with my face burning. 2.听到我的话（非谓语作状语），Gunter脸上带着熟悉的微笑（with复合结构）回答道:“没关系，走吧，你可以在方便的时候付钱给我。” Hearing my words, Gunter replied with the familiar smile on his face, “That’s OK, just go ahead, you can pay me at your convenience.” 3.我是如此惊讶和感动，以致于一句话也说不出来（倒装）。 So surprised and moved was I that I couldn’t say a word out. 4.我拿出笔记本，问了Gunter的号码，匆匆记下（三连动），答应我会给他回电话（非谓语作状语）。 I took out my notebook, asked Gunter’s number and wrote it down hurriedly, promising I would call him back. 5.然后我疯狂地跑向公共汽车，离开了。 Then I made a mad run for the bus and left. 6.Gunter一拿起电话（状语从句），他似乎就知道我会打来,并轻轻地说“我知道是你。” The moment Gunter picked up the phone, he seemed to know I was going to call and said softly “I know it’s you. 7.第二天我们在出发地点见面时（状语从句），我向他表达了我的感激之情。 As we met the following day at the departure place, I expressed my great gratitude to him. 8.我还钱给他并给了10美元小费，但是他拒绝了，说“这没什么大不了的”。 I paid him back and offered an extra $10 tip, however, he refused the tip, saying “It is not a big deal.” 9.突然，一股暖流冲刷着我（无灵主语）。 Suddenly, a warm current washed over me. 10.就是在那个时候，我觉得自己很幸运，遇到了像Gunter这样一个热心肠的人（强调句），他有一颗金子般的心(定语从句)。 It was at that time that I felt lucky/blessed to have met such a warm-hearted man like Gunter who has a heart of gold. 三、示例02：2022年6月新高考卷•身残志坚的男孩 It was the day of the big cross-country run.Students from seven different primary schools in and around the small town were warming up and walking the route(路线) through thick evergreen forest. I looked around and finally spotted David,who was standing by himself off to the side by a fence.He was small for ten years old.His usual big toothy smile was absent today.I walked over and asked him why he wasn't with the other children.He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run. What was wrong?He had worked so hard for this event! I quickly searched the crowd for the school’s coach and asked him what had happened.“I was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him,” he explained uncomfortably.“I gave him the choice to run or not,and let him decide.” I bit back my frustration(懊恼).I knew the coach meant well—he thought he was doing the right thing.After making sure that David could run if he wanted,I turned to find him coming towards me,his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward. David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children,but at school his classmates thought of him as a regular kid.He always participated to the best of his ability in whatever they were doing.That was why none of the children thought it unusual that David had decided to join the cross-country team.It just took him longer—that􀆳s all.David had not missed a single practice,and although he always finished his run long after the other children,he did always finish.As a special education teacher at the school,I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination. 注意: 1.续写词数应为150左右; 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me. _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ · 写作思路(十句五定法) 第一段思路（五句） 大卫的表现 他低头试图避免与我目光接触。 我的鼓励 我拍拍他的肩膀，小声说:“我知道你怕被人嘲笑，但我觉得这是你证明自己的好机会。大卫，不要让任何事或任何人阻止你。” 大卫的转变 大卫抬头看我，他一贯的大露齿微笑回来了。 大卫决心参赛 在我的鼓励下，大卫下定决心参加大型越野跑。 我的反应 看到大卫脸上重拾的信心，我感到轻松愉快 第二段思路（五句） 比赛开始 随着一声“轰”的巨响，所有的跑者像离弦的箭一样冲出了起跑线。 大卫落后但不放弃 没有平衡地向前摆动他的脚，他上气不接下气以至于落后了，但他并没有放弃，竭尽全力向前跑去。 到达终点 观众反应 当他一越过终点线，观众爆发出雷鸣般的欢呼和掌声。 获得自己有史以来最好成绩 事实证明，他通过自己的努力取得了有史以来最好的记录。 主题升华 正是他勇敢的心和坚定的信念最终让一些不寻常的事情发生了。 · 小试牛刀（十大语法句式） 1.他低着头，试图避免与我目光接触（非谓语作状语）。 He hung his head, trying to avoid eye contact with me. 2.我拍拍他的肩膀，小声说:“我知道你怕被人嘲笑，但我觉得这是你证明自己的好机会。大卫，不要让任何事或任何人阻止你。” I patted him on the shoulder and whispered,“I know you’re afraid of being laughed at, but I think it’s a good chance for you to prove yourself. David,don’t let anything or anybody stop you.” 3. 大卫抬头看着我（独立主格），他一贯的大露齿微笑回来了。 David looking up at me, his usual big toothy smile came back. 4.在我的鼓励下（非谓语作状语），大卫下定决心参加大型越野跑。 Encouraged by me, David made up his mind to participate in the big cross-country run. 5.看到他脸上重拾的信心（非谓语作状语），我感到轻松愉快。（无灵主语） Seeing his regained confidence on his face, a sense of relief and delight took hold of me. 6.随着一声“轰”的巨响，所有的跑者像离弦的箭一样冲出了起跑线。 With a big sound of“Bang”, all runners rushed off the starting line like the arrows. 7.没有平衡地向前摆动他的脚（非谓语作状语），他上气不接下气以至于落后了（so...that倒装），但他并没有放弃，竭尽全力向前跑去。 Swinging his feet forward. without balance,so breathless was he that he left behind but he didn’t give up and ran forward with all his strength. 8.当他一越过终点线，观众爆发出雷鸣般的欢呼和掌声（the moment 状语从句）。 The moment he crossed the finishing line, the spectators burst into thunderous cheers and applause. 9.事实证明，他通过自己的努力取得了有史以来最好的记录。（it 形式主语） It turned out that he achieved his best record ever with his efforts. 10.正是他勇敢的心和坚定的信念最终让一些不寻常的事情发生了。（强调句） It was his brave heart and strong faith that could make something unusual happen finally. 20 / 29 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$