读后续写：老师送活页夹，学生开挂画画，比赛逆袭成赢家 讲义-2025届高三英语上学期一轮复习专项

阅读下面材料，标黑加粗斜体黄，可积累文本！黑色块 动词积累或动作串；蓝色（宾从）红色（定从）单斜体（状从）；其余非谓语形式都会标注；B-eli-eve in daily accumulation!(注释) 高三英语春季模拟检测 第二节（满分25分） 67.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 When I was in second grade, I had a teacher named Mr. Applebaum. He was a tall man with a kind smile, the sort of teacher who always seem to notice the little things about his students. He paid attention not just to what we did, but to who we were. I didn't know it then, but that year he surely changed the course of my life. I wasn't particularly good at math or spelling. My handwriting was messy, and I was terrible at staying in the lines when we did color painting. But I loved to draw. Whether it was the break, snack time or during lessons, I was always doodling. My notebooks were filled with animals, smiling suns and super heroes with oddly shaped capes. I didn't think much of it at the time; drawing was just something I'd love to do. One afternoon as we were packing up to go home. Mr. Applebaum called me over to his desk. I remember feeling a pang of nervousness ---had I done something wrong? But when I got there, he wasn't holding a stack of unfinished math worksheets or pointing to the classroom rules. Instead he held out a blue three-ring binder filled with blank loose-leaf paper. “This is for you,” he said, placing it in my hands. I stared at it, puzzled. “I noticed you like to draw,” he continued. I thought you might need a place to keep all your works. I didn't think I fully understood what he was giving me at that moment. It weren't just paper and a binder. It was the idea that my passion for drawing wasn't just the pastime but something worth encouraging. To an eight-year -old, it felt like magic--- like being handed a key to a secret door. 注意： 1.续写词数应为150个左右； 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1：From that day on, the blue binder was by my side at all times. Paragraph 2：Noticing my progress, Mr. Applebaum encouraged me to take part in a competition. 高三英语春季模拟检测 第二节（满分25分） 67.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 When I was in second grade(状从), I had a teacher named Mr. Applebaum. He was a tall man with a kind smile, the sort of teacher(同位语解释说明老师的类型) who always seem to notice the little things about his students. He paid attention not just to what we did, but to(并列递进式) who we were. I didn't know it then, but that year he surely changed the course of my life. I wasn't particularly good at math or spelling. My handwriting was messy, and I was terrible at staying in the lines when we did color painting(状从). But I loved to draw. Whether it was the break, snack time or during lessons(并列), I was always doodling. My notebooks were filled with animals, smiling suns and super heroes with oddly shaped capes(并列). I didn't think much of it at the time; drawing was just something I'd love to do. One afternoon as we were packing up to go home(状从). Mr. Applebaum called me over to his desk. I remember feeling a pang of nervousness ---had I done something wrong? But when I got there(状从), he wasn't holding a stack of unfinished math worksheets or pointing to the classroom rules. Instead, he held out a blue three-ring binder filled with blank loose-leaf paper(过去分词短语做后置定语). “This is for you,” he said, placing it in my hands(现在分词做伴随动作). I stared at it, puzzled(adj做主语补语，刻画情绪). “I noticed you like to draw,” he continued. I thought you might need a place to keep all your works. I didn't think I fully understood what he was giving me at that moment. It weren't just paper and a binder. It was the idea that my passion for drawing wasn't just the pastime but something worth encouraging. (递进句式)To an eight-year -old, it felt like magic--- like being handed a key to a secret door. 注意： 1.续写词数应为150个左右； 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1：From that day on, the blue binder was by my side at all times. Paragraph 2：Noticing my progress, Mr. Applebaum encouraged me to take part in a competition. 1. 文章分类与续写思路分析 文章类型：本文属于成长与启发类的读后续写。文章通过讲述主人公在老师Mr. Applebaum的鼓励下，逐渐认识到自己对绘画的热爱，并从中获得自信的故事，展现了成长过程中关键人物的影响。 续写思路： 构思：续写应围绕主人公如何通过老师的鼓励，进一步发掘自己的绘画天赋，并最终在某个比赛中获得认可或成长。 布局：第一段可以描述主人公如何珍惜并使用蓝色活页夹，逐渐提升绘画技巧；第二段可以写Mr. Applebaum如何鼓励主人公参加比赛，并最终取得成绩。 提炼框架：成长（主人公的绘画进步）→ 鼓励（老师的支持）→ 挑战（参加比赛）→ 结果（成功或感悟）。 实施：通过细腻的心理描写和动作描写，展现主人公的成长过程，突出老师的引导作用。 承接原文：续写需承接原文中Mr. Applebaum对主人公的鼓励，以及主人公对绘画的热爱。 巧妙设计：可以通过主人公在比赛中的心理变化（如紧张、自信）来增强故事的戏剧性，并通过环境描写烘托氛围。 2. 故事山模式与原文分析 分析角度 内容 原文反应句 人物刻画 Mr. Applebaum是一位细心、关心学生的老师，主人公是一个热爱绘画但缺乏自信的学生。 “He was a tall man with a kind smile... He paid attention not just to what we did, but to who we were.” 情感层次 主人公从最初的紧张到感受到老师的鼓励，再到对绘画的热爱和自信。 “I remember feeling a pang of nervousness... It felt like magic--- like being handed a key to a secret door.” 关键情节点 Mr. Applebaum送给主人公蓝色活页夹，成为故事的转折点。 “This is for you,” he said, placing it in my hands. 语言特色 语言朴实，情感真挚，通过细节描写展现人物的心理变化。 “I stared at it, puzzled... It felt like magic.” 关键词分析 “drawing”（绘画）、“encouragement”（鼓励）、“confidence”（自信）。 “I noticed you like to draw... It was the idea that my passion for drawing wasn't just the pastime.” 心理描写 主人公从紧张到感动，再到充满希望的心理变化。 “I remember feeling a pang of nervousness... It felt like magic.” 动作描写 Mr. Applebaum递给主人公活页夹的动作，主人公的反应。 “He held out a blue three-ring binder... I stared at it, puzzled.” 环境描写 教室的环境，放学前的氛围。 “One afternoon as we were packing up to go home.” 隐含主题 成长与鼓励，关键人物的影响。 “He surely changed the course of my life.” 情感转折 从紧张到感动，再到充满希望。 “I remember feeling a pang of nervousness... It felt like magic.” 空间转换 从教室到主人公的内心世界。 “I was always doodling... I stared at it, puzzled.” 时间过渡 从放学前的场景到主人公未来的成长。 “One afternoon... From that day on, the blue binder was by my side at all times.” 伏笔与冲突点： 伏笔：Mr. Applebaum注意到主人公喜欢绘画，并送给她活页夹，暗示未来会鼓励她进一步发展。 冲突点：主人公缺乏自信，需要克服对比赛的恐惧。 隐含线索：活页夹象征着主人公的潜力，老师的鼓励是她成长的催化剂。 解决方案：通过参加比赛，主人公获得自信，并认识到自己的价值。 3. 续写语料推荐 动作描写例句： He gently placed the binder on the desk, his eyes filled with encouragement. Her hands trembled as she opened the binder, revealing the blank pages. She carefully sketched the outline of a bird, her pencil moving smoothly across the paper. With a deep breath, she stepped onto the stage, clutching her artwork. He patted her shoulder, a silent gesture of support. She glanced at the clock, her heart racing as the competition drew closer. Her fingers traced the edges of the paper, feeling the texture beneath her touch. She stood up, her legs shaking slightly, and walked towards the judges. 心理描写例句： A wave of nervousness washed over her as she faced the blank page. She felt a surge of confidence as she remembered Mr. Applebaum’s words. Doubt crept into her mind, but she pushed it away, focusing on her passion. Her heart swelled with pride as she looked at her finished drawing. She couldn’t help but smile, feeling a sense of accomplishment. Anxiety gnawed at her, but she reminded herself of how far she had come. She felt a mix of excitement and fear as she handed her artwork to the judge. A sense of calm settled over her as she realized she had done her best. 环境描写例句： The classroom was quiet, the only sound being the scratching of pencils on paper. Sunlight streamed through the windows, casting a warm glow on her desk. The competition hall buzzed with excitement, filled with young artists and their creations. The walls were adorned with colorful paintings, each telling a unique story. A gentle breeze rustled the pages of her binder as she worked outside. The clock ticked loudly, marking the minutes until the competition began. The room was filled with the scent of fresh paint and paper. The judges’ table was neatly arranged, with name tags and score sheets ready. 高级替换词： Encourage → Motivate, Inspire, Spur, Urge, Foster Nervous → Anxious, Apprehensive, Jittery, Edgy, Tense Draw → Sketch, Illustrate, Doodle, Depict, Render Progress → Advancement, Development, Growth, Improvement, Breakthrough Competition → Contest, Challenge, Tournament, Showcase, Event 4. 语法现象与语料积累 常见搭配： Pay attention to：关注 例句：He paid attention not just to what we did, but to who we were. Feel a pang of：感到一阵 例句：I remember feeling a pang of nervousness. Hold out：递出 例句：He held out a blue three-ring binder. Think much of：重视 例句：I didn’t think much of it at the time. 生词短语： Doodle (v.)：涂鸦 近义词：Scribble, Sketch 反义词：Erase, Delete 例句：She loved to doodle during class. / His notebook was filled with doodles. Binder (n.)：活页夹 近义词：Folder, Portfolio 反义词：Loose sheets 例句：He gave her a blue binder. / She kept her drawings in the binder. Pastime (n.)：消遣 近义词：Hobby, Recreation 反义词：Work, Duty 例句：Drawing was her favorite pastime. / Reading is a common pastime for many. Encourage (v.)：鼓励 近义词：Motivate, Inspire 反义词：Discourage, Deter 例句：Mr. Applebaum encouraged her to draw. / Her parents encouraged her to pursue her dreams. 5. Possible Answers Version 1 Paragraph 1: From that day on, the blue binder was by my side at all times. Every spare moment I had, I would open it and let my imagination run wild. The blank pages became a canvas for my dreams(人物刻画), filled with vibrant colors and intricate designs(过去分词做后置定语). Mr. Applebaum’s gift had ignited a spark within me(与原文的衔接), and I found myself drawing not just for fun, but with a sense of purpose(并列递进句式). I began to experiment with different styles, from realistic portraits to abstract shapes(介短做补语), each piece reflecting a piece of my growing confidence(刻画人物). The binder was no longer just a gift; it was a symbol of my journey(并列递进). Paragraph 2: Noticing my progress, Mr. Applebaum encouraged me to take part in a competition. At first, I hesitated, my mind flooded with doubts(心理描写). What if my work wasn’t good enough? What if I embarrassed myself? But Mr. Applebaum’s reassuring smile reminded me of the magic I felt when I first held the binder(状从). With his encouragement, I submitted my best piece—a colorful depiction of a sunrise over a mountain(同位语解释说明). When the results were announced(状从), I was stunned to hear my name called as the winner(过去分词做后置定语). That moment, I realized that my passion for drawing was more than just a pastime; it was a part of who I was.(递进句式) 加分点与替换词： Imagination run wild（想象力奔放）→ Creativity flow freely, Mind wander freely 例句：Her imagination ran wild as she painted. / His creativity flowed freely during the project. Ignited a spark（点燃火花）→ Inspired, Awakened, Fueled 例句：His words ignited a spark in her heart. / The book inspired her to write. Experiment with（尝试）→ Explore, Try out, Test 例句：She experimented with different art styles. / He explored various techniques in his work. 情绪描写亮点： Flooded with doubts（充满疑虑）→ Overwhelmed by uncertainty, Filled with hesitation Reassuring smile（安慰的微笑）→ Comforting grin, Encouraging look 动作描写亮点： Let my imagination run wild（让想象力奔放）→ Unleash creativity, Dive into fantasy Submitted my best piece（提交最好的作品）→ Presented my masterpiece, Handed in my creation Version 2 Paragraph 1: From that day on, the blue binder was by my side at all times. It became my constant companion(拟人，刻画人物), a silent witness to my growth as an artist. I filled its pages with sketches of everything I saw—birds in the sky, flowers in the garden, even the faces of my friends(并列). Each drawing was a step forward, a small victory over my self-doubt. Mr. Applebaum’s words echoed in my mind: “Your passion is worth encouraging.” Those words pushed me to keep going, even when I felt like giving up(状从). The binder was no longer just a gift; it was a testament to my perseverance.(递进句式) Paragraph 2: Noticing my progress, Mr. Applebaum encouraged me to take part in a competition. The idea terrified me(无灵主语句，刻画人物情绪), but I knew I had to face my fears. I spent weeks preparing, pouring my heart into every stroke of the pencil(现在分词短语做伴随动作). On the day of the competition, my hands trembled as I presented my piece—a detailed drawing of a tree(状从), its branches reaching toward the sky(独立主格). When the judges praised my work(状从), I felt a surge of pride I had never known before. Mr. Applebaum’s encouragement had not only helped me discover my talent but also taught me the value of believing in myself. 加分点与替换词： Silent witness（无声的见证者）→ Quiet observer, Unseen companion 例句：The old tree was a silent witness to their childhood. / The diary became her quiet observer. Echoed in my mind（在脑海中回响）→ Resonated, Lingered, Repeated 例句：His words echoed in her mind for days. / The melody resonated deeply with her. Pour my heart into（倾注心血）→ Devote myself to, Invest deeply in 例句：She poured her heart into the project. / He devoted himself to his studies. 情绪描写亮点： Terrified（害怕）→ Petrified, Frightened, Anxious Surge of pride（自豪感）→ Wave of confidence, Burst of joy 动作描写亮点： Hands trembled（手颤抖）→ Fingers shook, Palms sweated Presented my piece（展示作品）→ Showcased my work, Displayed my art Version 3 Paragraph 1: From that day on, the blue binder was by my side at all times. It became my sanctuary, a place where I could escape from the world and express myself freely. I started to see the world differently, noticing details(现在分词短语做伴随动作) I had never paid attention to before—the way light danced on water, the texture of tree bark, the expressions on people’s faces(并列). Each observation found its way into my drawings(无灵主语句), making them more vivid and alive. Mr. Applebaum’s gift had opened my eyes to the beauty around me, and I was determined to capture it all. Paragraph 2: Noticing my progress, Mr. Applebaum encouraged me to take part in a competition. The thought of competing made me nervous, but I reminded myself of how far I had come and how fortunate I was founding the true gift in my life(现在分词短语做伴随动作). I chose to draw a scene from my favorite park, a place that held countless memories. As I worked(状从), I felt a sense of calm, as if the world had faded away and only my art remained(状从). When I won third place, I was overjoyed. It wasn’t just a prize; it was proof(递进句式) that my passion had meaning(同位从). Mr. Applebaum’s belief in me had turned a simple hobby into a lifelong journey(与原文的衔接，升华主题). 加分点与替换词： Sanctuary（避难所）→ Haven, Refuge, Safe space 例句：The library was her sanctuary. / His garden became a haven of peace. Open my eyes（开阔眼界）→ Broaden my perspective, Enlighten me 例句：Traveling opened her eyes to new cultures. / The book enlightened him about history. Capture it all（捕捉一切）→ Preserve, Document, Record 例句：She tried to capture the moment in her painting. / He documented every detail in his journal. 情绪描写亮点： Overjoyed（非常高兴）→ Ecstatic, Thrilled, Elated Sense of calm（平静感）→ Feeling of peace, Tranquility 动作描写亮点： Light danced on water（光在水面上舞动）→ Sunlight sparkled, Rays shimmered Faded away（逐渐消失）→ Disappeared, Vanished 无灵主语句 “Each observation found its way into my drawings.” 无灵主语句（Inanimate Subject Sentence） 主语是无生命的事物或抽象概念：在这句话中，主语是“Each observation”（每一个观察），它是一个无生命的概念。 谓语动词通常具有拟人化的意味：这里的“found its way into”（找到进入的方式）赋予了“observation”一种主动的行为，仿佛它自己有意识地进入了画作中。 语言生动，形象化：无灵主语句通过拟人化的表达，使句子更加生动、形象，增强了语言的表现力。 无灵主语句的作用： 增强语言的表现力：通过赋予无生命的事物以生命感，使句子更加生动。 突出主题：在这句话中，强调了“observation”对画作的影响，突出了观察的重要性。 使语言更地道：无灵主语句是英语中一种常见的表达方式，使用它可以使语言更贴近母语者的表达习惯。 类似的无灵主语句例子： The idea struck me suddenly.这个想法突然击中了我。 The news spread quickly across the town.消息迅速传遍了整个小镇。 A sense of calm washed over her.一种平静感涌上她的心头。 The memory of that day still lingers in my mind.那天的记忆仍然萦绕在我的脑海中。 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$