Unit 3 Section Ⅵ Writing（课件PPT）-【新课程学案】2025-2026学年高中英语必修第一册（外研版）

该高中英语课件聚焦回忆类家庭故事写作，通过课文范例（如照片引出话题、比赛场景开头）导入，构建从靓丽开头、主旨升华到逻辑衔接的学习支架，引导学生掌握记叙文六要素及生动表达技巧，形成从输入到输出的写作能力培养脉络。 其亮点在于融合语言能力（如“tip-toed”等动词生动描写）、思维品质（“爱如神奇原料”暗喻升华主旨）和学习能力（提能训练与素材储备），通过实例解析与专项练习，帮助学生提升写作逻辑与表达精度，教师可借助系统指导与训练资源高效开展教学。

　Writing Section Ⅵ 写作项目——Writing about a family memory 本单元的写作任务是写一篇回忆类故事，记述一段家庭往事。该类作文主要对家庭中某一事件的发生、发展和结果进行叙述，在详细叙述事情发生、发展过程的同时，应点明对自己的启发和感悟。写作时要注意交代清楚记叙文的六要素：时间、地点、人物、事件的原因、经过和结果。 |由课文学写作| 一、学靓丽开头 1．本单元Physical appearances部分的短文通过一张十年前在同样的露营地拍摄的照片引出话题，激发了读者的好奇心，促使读者迫不及待地想继续阅读。 2．本单元Developing ideas部分的Just A Brother的开头部分描述了Alistair Brownlee 和他的弟弟Jonny在铁人三项最后一程比赛中最激动人心的场景，迅速引起了读者的阅读兴趣。 3．写作部分短文的开头，作者通过在整理房间时发现的一张旧照片，引出一段与家人的美好回忆，开头设置的悬念引人入胜。 二、学主旨升华 写作部分短文的选材为生活中的一件小事：在妈妈生日当天为妈妈亲手做煎蛋。作者通过简洁生动的语言描写了轻松温馨的家庭日常和母女情深。“I guess love is indeed a magical ingredient.”运用了比喻的修辞手法，将爱比作神奇的原料，让作者烹饪失败的食物竟也获得了妈妈的赞赏，巧妙地进行了主旨升华。这种情感升华，能激发读者思考，让读者产生情感上的共鸣。通常我们可以通过阐述人生感悟、生活真谛、生活哲理、人生观或价值观来进行情感升华。 [提能训练|完成句子] ①物种之间可以架起坚实的桥梁。(借用人生感悟升华主题) Solid bridges ___________ between species. ②通过这个难忘而非凡的事件，我终于明白了， 有志者，事竟成。(借用名言警句来升华主题) Through this unforgettable and remarkable event, it eventually dawned on me that _____________________________________________ ____________________. can be built nothing is difficult with a willing heart/where there is a will, there is a way 三、学亮点表达 1．亮点词汇 (1)写作部分短文第二段中的tip-toed意为“踮着脚走”，描述作者唯恐吵醒父母，悄悄溜进厨房的情形，动词的运用生动活泼。类似的用法还有Just A Brother第二段中“Alistair ran towards Jonny, caught him and started pulling him towards the finish line”，这句话运用动词ran, caught, pulling勾勒出了Alistair 迅速把弟弟扶起，并拖着他跑向终点这一激动人心的画面。 (2)写作部分短文第二段“I woke up really early ...”中的副词really强调了作者醒得很早，真切地表达了作者把“给妈妈做煎蛋”当成了一件很重要的事情，充分体现了作者对妈妈的爱；第三段“I showed her the eggs and sadly explained what happened.”中的副词sadly增强了感情色彩，使语言表达效果更佳。 [提能训练|补全语段] I opened the box ①_________ and the beautiful dress I had been ②__________ about came into my view.What a surprise! I threw my arms around my mother, tears welling up in my eyes.I knew my family was ③__________to make ends meet, but I was ④______ happy because I was rich in love. curiously dreaming struggling really 我好奇地打开盒子，我一直梦想着的那件漂亮的连衣裙出现在我的眼前。真是个惊喜！我搂着母亲，泪水夺眶而出。我知道我的家人在努力维持生计，但我真的很幸福，因为我拥有很多爱。 2．亮点句式 (1)As I was looking at it, the lovely memory of that day came back to me. 赏析：本句中As引导时间状语从句，呈现了作者看照片时的心理活动，描绘了安静美好的画面。 (2)I was about to throw everything away when my mother came in. 赏析：本句运用了高级句式“be about to do ...when ...”，意为“正要做某事……这时候……”。把“扔东西”与“妈妈进来”两个动作紧密连在一起，语言流畅，画面感强。 四、学逻辑衔接 1．句内、句间衔接 写作部分短文第二段“I had never cooked anything before, so I tried to copy how she did it.But somehow they ended up burnt.”中的so和But把“不会做饭→模仿妈妈做饭→成果很不理想”这一情节自然顺利地衔接在一起，用词不多，但表达简洁紧凑。 2．段落之间衔接 本篇日记写作主旨明确，段落间逻辑顺畅，内容层层递进，环环相扣，情节生动有悬念。第一段运用了倒叙手法，很自然地引出了the lovely memory, 二、三段承接第一段详述了十年前在妈妈生日那天作者为妈妈做煎蛋的美好回忆，并升华主旨：爱确实是有魔力的原料。最后一段再次提到妈妈生日即将到来，作者将会再次给妈妈做煎蛋，与二、三段内容呼应衔接，并引发读者对未来美好事情的遐想，画面由近到远再回到眼前，使文章产生悬念，引人入胜。本短文以小见大的写作手法让关爱家人的美德体现得真切，扣人心弦。 五、学修辞手法 本篇日记第三段中“I guess love is indeed a magical ingredient.”运用了比喻修辞手法中的暗喻，将爱比作神奇的原料，让作者烹饪失败的食物也获得了妈妈的赞赏。 暗喻是对两种具有共同特征的事物或现象进行对比，但与明喻不同的是暗喻的本体和喻体之间多通过be动词来联系，或者进行隐性比较，属于喻体直述式。暗喻往往可以激发读者的联想，使其对文本产生更深刻的认识。在读后续写中，一个得当的暗喻可以让阅卷者眼前一亮。 [提能训练|完成句子] ①My sister's hair _______________ streaming down over her shoulders. 我姐姐的头发像是一条金色的河流从肩上流淌下来。 ②The corridor ________________ curious children. 走廊里挤满(flood)了好奇的孩子。 is a golden river was flooded with |写作技法指导| [框架构思] Part 1 To introduce your special/unforgettable family memory Part 2 who, when, where, what (详细叙述事情发生、发展的过程) Part 3 Why is it special? (主旨升华) [拟写开头] 本文开头选用睹物思事的倒叙手法，这种写作手法的使用，能够快速引起读者的阅读兴趣。写开头时，首先进行头脑风暴，选出你生活中与家人有关的最珍贵物件(如：小时候的自行车、玩具等)，然后用此物自然引出一段家庭往事。比如：你至今保存着一辆爸爸送你的小自行车，爸爸用它教会你骑自行车，它代表着一段温馨的家庭往事。试完成下面语段： There is a small bike ①____________ in our garage.It is quite old and ②____________________, but I still keep it there, ③___________ ___________________. 有一辆小自行车静静地躺在我们的车库里。它已经很旧了，我不能再骑它了，但我仍然把它放在那里，因为它让我回想起了一段美好的回忆。 lying quietly I can no longer ride it as it brings back a sweet memory [故事要素] who my father and I when Many years ago, it was a Sunday morning on my sixth birthday. where in the garden what My father taught me how to ride a bike. [拟写主旨升华句] 学骑自行车时一定有害怕的心理，此时爸爸的信任非常重要，在爸爸的鼓励下作者变得勇敢起来，这会让作者引以自豪，故本事件的主旨可以表达如下： It is still one of my most precious possessions, for not only was it my first bike, but ①________________________________________ _____.And I learnt that ②__________________. 它仍然是我最珍贵的财产之一，因为它不仅是我的第一辆自行车，也是我的勇气和我父亲的爱的象征(symbol)。我了解到爱有巨大的力量。 a symbol of my courage as well as my father's love love has great power [随堂针对练笔] 根据上面的故事要素，写一篇主旨明确，立意新颖的家庭往事，注意语言要生动，情节要有起伏。 _____________________________________________________ __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Many years ago, it was a Sunday morning on my sixth birthday.My father bought me a new bike.I could not wait to get on it and learn how to ride, so I begged my father to teach me in the garden.After I sat on the new bike, my father helped me put my two hands on the handlebars (把手) and my feet on the pedals (踏板)． Then, he pushed the bike so that the pedals started to move. _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ I was scared! But my father kept encouraging me.I could cycle around the garden shortly after my first try.It was amazing.But unluckily, I was so busy waving at him that I didn't see a small tree in front of me.I hit it and fell off the bike.It hurt a lot and I started to cry.My father encouraged me to stand up, be brave and try again.Gradually, I was able to ride the bike more skillfully. |写作素材储备| 一、背写作佳句 [导入话题] 1．On ..., I witnessed a ...on my way to ... ……(时间), 我去……的路上看到…… 2．It was around ...in the afternoon and hardly had I ...when ... 下午大约……(时刻)，我刚……，……发生了。 3．This summer holiday, I went to ...with ..., which was an unforgettable experience for me. 这个暑假，我和……去了……，对我来说，那是一次难忘的经历。 4．I have had a very wonderful time with ...in ...last Sunday. 上周日我和……在……一起度过了一段美好的时光。 5．Yesterday, a sad thing happened to ... 昨天，……碰巧发生了一件难过的事。 6．The event took place/occurred in the early morning. 那件事发生在一大早。 [说明事件] 1．I decided to ...but ... 我决定……，但是…… 2．I was about to ...when ... 我正要……， 突然…… 3．The view was so beautiful in the ...that ... ……的景色如此美丽，以至于…… 4．We wandered in ..., seeing ... 我们在……漫步，看到…… 5．We ended up ... 我们最后…… [抒发感想] 1．It seemed as if we were ... 我们就像…… 2．All in all, we had a very good time/an unforgettable experience/a meaningful activity last summer holiday. 总的来说，我们上个暑假过得很开心/有一段难忘的经历/有一个意义非凡的活动。 3．From this experience, I learn that I should ... 从这次经历中，我明白了我应该…… 4．We are all supposed to be honest with our family and teachers. 我们都应该对我们的家人和老师诚实。 二、背“描述亲情”佳句 1．She gave me a warm hug with a smile of happiness on her face. 她给了我一个温暖的拥抱，脸上洋溢着幸福的笑容。 2．My mother rushed over, helped me take off my wet coat, and passed me a cup of milk to warm me up. 妈妈冲了过来，帮我脱下湿漉漉的外套，递给我一杯牛奶，让我暖和起来。 3．The instant she saw the gift her brother had brought her, her face lit up and tears of joy welled up in her eyes. 她一看到哥哥给她带来的礼物，脸上就亮了起来，眼里涌出了喜悦的泪水。 4．Her eyes fell on the photos of her and me at my fourth birthday party. 她的目光落在我和她在我四岁生日聚会时拍的照片上。 课时跟踪检测 一、写作专项训练 Ⅰ.完成句子(共7空，14分) 1．我正要从超市离开这时候发现我的弟弟不见了。(be about to ...when ...) ______________________________________ I found my brother was out of my sight. 2．我努力去寻找他，但是哪里也找不到。(逻辑衔接) _______________________ he was nowhere to be found. I was about to leave the supermarket when I tried to look for him but 3．结果我惊慌失措起来， 泪水顺着脸颊流下来。 I ended up ________, with tears streaming down my face. 4．“哥哥，我在这儿呢。”他充满魔力的声音让我喜出望外。(surprise ...with) “Brother, I am here.” He ________________ his magical voice. 5．我破涕为笑，伸出(stretch)胳膊紧紧抱住了他。(用动词生动描述) I _______ through tears, _________ out my arms and ________ him tightly. in panic surprised me with smiled stretched hugged Ⅱ.基础写作(10分) 假定你是红星中学的学生李华，请用英文写一篇日记，记述今天你和父母一起参加森林公园健步走活动的过程及感受。 注意：1.写作词数应为80左右； 2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 选择恰当的句子补全作文并认真抄写在文中空白处 Saturday May 12th Sunny Today, I went to the Forest Park with my parents to take part in an activity called “I Walk and I'm Fit.” Arriving early in the morning, ①_____________ already waiting excitedly at the registration place.We gathered at the starting point, ②________________.Soon, a signal was given off and we went along the walking route.Some people walked briskly, ③________________. After more than one hour's walking, ④________________.My parents and I cheered each other for our success.Regular activities like this not only keep us fit, ⑤________________. A．we finally reached the finish line B．but also help get us closer to each other and to nature C．we were surprised to find many participants of different ages D．stretching arms and legs to prepare ourselves for the coming long-distance walking E．while others just took their time to enjoy the fresh air and the beautiful natural scenery 答案：1～5　CDEAB Ⅲ.片段续写(15分) 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落的开头、结尾续写一个片段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 “Alice！We need to get going before it rains，” my father shouted as he got into the car.I rushed out of the house with my teddy bear.Once inside the car, I rested my head on my mother's shoulder, feeling sad to leave the house I had grown up in.I hugged my teddy bear close to me as my father drove us to our new house. All the afternoon，I was a good daughter who helped my parents unpack all the boxes that we had brought with us.I was so tired and went to bed early.That night it started pouring，I was awoken by a whining (呜咽) sound outside the house.I gathered up my courage and looked out through my bedroom window.I was shocked when I saw something moving at the front door! Not knowing what was happening，I rushed downstairs.I opened the door and saw a tiny white furry (毛茸茸的) ball with black spots trying to get under our door mat (垫子)．It was wet completely and shivering (颤抖的) from the rain.I'm too pity on it and carried it inside quickly. 注意：1.词数80左右； 2．准确运用动词、形容词和副词，突出情节的生动活泼。要求逻辑通顺，情节合理。 Once in my bedroom, it looked so weak that it couldn't open its eyes. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Now, the dog has become part of our family.We walk him in the park，play with him and take good care of him.In turn, he brings us happiness and keeps us company. 参考范文： Once in my bedroom, it looked so weak that it couldn't open its eyes.Immediately，I wrapped a clean towel around the trembling puppy.Then I kept it warm by placing it on a thick rug.After feeding it food and milk，I gave it a shower.I was so glad to see the puppy recover.It was so lovely and I wanted to keep it.Looking at the black spots on its body，I had the perfect name for it! The next morning，my parents came to know about the unexpected guest.“Can we keep Spotty？” I asked my mother eagerly.To my surprise, she agreed smilingly.Now, the dog has become part of our family.We walk him in the park，play with him and take good care of him.In turn, he brings us happiness and keeps us company. 二、阅读拓展训练 阅读七选五 When my kids were young, finding ways to connect with them was easy. If you're looking for easy and fun ways to connect with your teens, you have to be willing to step into their world. Watch What They Watch on TV The next time your teens are watching television, sit down and watch whatever they're watching with them. ____Watch the documentary (纪录片) that interests them. It's a great way to spend time with your kids doing something they love. 1 Listen to the Music They Love Not long ago, my son and I were on a flight, and my son offered to “share” one of his earbuds with me. It sounded like a really good idea at the time until I realized my son is into rap music. ____ I showed an interest in his interest and I made him feel special by proving to him that his mum cared about what he cared about. 2 Get to Know Their Friends By the time our kids hit the teen years, so often, our kids' friends become their world. To them, their friends aren't simply friends ...They're family. Whether you love your teens' friends or perhaps you're not totally fond of your teens' choices, get to know them. ____ 3 Find Out What They Love and Love It, Too If your son is crazy about a particular video game, find out what he loves about it and play it with him sometimes. If your daughter's favourite pastime is drifting (漂流), go drifting with her. ____ It's just that they want to spend time with us doing things that interest them. Bottom line, find out what your teens love and love it, too. 4 Connect on Social Media ____ Watch silly videos together, and send them funny quotes via text. Connect with your teens on their terms, in their world. And, since social media is a huge part of their world, it's a great place to stay connected and close. 5 A．If your teens are reading a book, read it, too. B．Take part in your child's Imaginative Play ideas. C．Watch the TV series they're a little addicted to. D．Connecting with your teen is as easy as jumping into their world. E．Encourage your teens to invite their friends over for a BBQ or a movie night F．I asked questions — “Hey, who sings this？” “Is this your favourite song？” G．Instead of watching your teens stare at their phone, get in on the action with them. 语篇解读：本文是一篇说明文。文章主要介绍了一些父母与青少年建立联系的方式。 1．选C　上文提到可以陪孩子一起看电视，C选项“Watch the TV series they're a little addicted to.”和下文并列，列举了可以一起观看的具体节目。 2．选F　根据本段小标题“Listen to the Music They Love”可知，本段内容和音乐有关，再根据下文内容可知，此处应是作者对孩子的爱好表现出兴趣，且应用第一人称，所以F选项“I asked questions — ‘Hey, who sings this？’‘Is this your favourite song？’”符合语境。 3．选E　设空处在段尾，为段落总结句，上文提到要了解孩子们的朋友，所以E选项“Encourage your teens to invite their friends over for a BBQ or a movie night.”符合语境，鼓励孩子们邀请他们的朋友来玩有助于了解他们的交友情况。 4．选A　上文提到，找到孩子喜欢的东西，和他一起做，所以A选项“If your teens are reading a book, read it, too.”符合语境，举例说明上文提到的方法。 5．选G　设空处位于段首，为段落主题句，本段主要讲述的是父母可以通过社交媒体和孩子保持联系，所以G选项“Instead of watching your teens stare at their phone, get in on the action with them.”符合本段主题，且能引出下文内容。 本课结束 $$