内容正文:
话题三 人与动物类
[典题示例](2020浙江高考7月卷改编)
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文.
Onefal,mywifeEliandIhadasinglegoal:tophotographpolarbears.Wewerestaying
ataresearchcampoutside“thepolarbearcapitaloftheworld”—thetownofChurchilinManiG
toba,Canada.
Takingpicturesofpolarbearsisamazingbutalsodangerous.Polarbears—likealwildaniG
mals—shouldbephotographedfromasafedistance.WhenImfacetofacewithapolarbear.I
likeittobethroughacamerawithatelephotolens.Butsometimes,thatiseasiersaidthan
done.Thiswasoneofthosetimes.
AsEliandIcookeddinner,ayoungmalepolarbearwhowasplayinginanearbylake
sniffed,andsmeledourgarlicbread.
Thehungrybearfolowedhisnosetoourcamp,whichwassurroundedbyahighwire
fence.Hepuledandbitthewire.Hestoodonhisbacklegsandpushedatthewoodenfence
posts.
Terrified,
EliandItriedalthebeardefenseactionsweknew.Weyeledatthebear,hit
potshard,andfired blankshotgunshelsintotheair.Sometimesloudnoiseslikethesewil
scarebearsoff.Notthispolarbearthough—hejustkepttryingtoteardownthefencewithhis
massivepaws(爪子).
Iradioedthecampmanagerforhelp.Hetoldmeahelicopterwasonitsway,butitwould
be30minutesbeforeitarrived.Makingthebestofthiscloseencounter(相遇),ItooksomepicG
turesofthebear.
EliandIfearedthefencewouldntlastthrough30moreminutesofthebearspunishment.
ThecampmanagersuggestedIusepepperspray.Thesprayburnsthebearseyes,butdoesnt
hurtthem.SoIapproachedouruninvitedguestslowlyand,throughthefence,sprayedhimin
theface.Withanangryroar(吼叫),thebearrantothelaketowashhiseyes.
注意:
1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式作答.
Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.
Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.
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[五步续写]
第一步 把握原文大意 明主旨和两线
主旨
大意
作者和妻子待在营地准备冒险拍摄北极熊,结果北极熊闯入,一场人熊大战即将展开
原文
两线
情节线:在营地等待拍摄北极熊→一头北极熊被美味吸引企图闯入→制造噪音无法
吓退北极熊→向营地经理求助→喷胡椒粉喷雾剂暂时赶走北极熊
情感线:excited,nervous→surprised→worried,frightened→anxious→alittlerelieved
写作
意图
讲述人与北极熊对抗成功并脱险,主人公成功拍照心想事成
第二步 根据首句信息 定续写方向
两段首句
定一框
①首句衔接段首语,可描写被喷雾刺痛眼睛的北极熊肯定被激怒了,会更猛烈地袭
击围栏,主人公需采取有效办法避险,如利用随身物品应对北极熊的攻击,可描写
妻子的动作和情绪烘托场面的危险;②尾句将人与北极的冲突达到最大,营造危急
的场景,如北极熊马上要破栏而入,呼应第二段段首句中的“verymoment”
二框二首
正能量
①首句衔接段首句中的“thehelicopterarrived”,可描写人物“绝处逢生的喜悦”作
为第二段开头,接着叙述利用直升机的优势解决问题,如利用螺旋桨发出的巨大声
响吓走北极熊成功脱险等;②结尾应呼应原文主旨:成功拍照
第三步 原、续两线同 加合理细节
◎高度融洽 续写部分两情线的发展应与原文两情线一致,达到“两情相悦”,续写部分情节线体
现的是:双方对峙→采用新办法避险→脱离险境→拍好照片,情感线的走向应该是:紧张→恐惧
→松一口气但仍心有余悸.
◎添加细节 ①心理描写:夫妇二人面对北极熊一定很恐惧,但脱险后,心理活动会有变化,既感
慨逃过一劫又觉得不虚此行,可通过直接或间接的方式,刻画人物心理;②环境描写:在渲染北极
熊袭击围栏的危险场景时,可描写时间紧迫或用拟人的手法描写周围的事物(如风声、草等),间
接烘托人物内心的恐惧.
第四步 沿原语言特点 完美连贯表达
原文利用简单句、并列句、非谓语动词和主从复合句进行动作描写(加框内容)、情感描写(画波浪
线内容)和心理描写(加下画线内容),续写部分可利用适当的并列句、非谓语动词和复合句描写
动作和情感.
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第五部分 读后续写
第五步 临摹衡水字体 打造完美卷面
Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.Roaringevenmoreangrilythis
timehesmashedhispawscrazilyagainstthewirefence,tryingtotearuswithitssharpclaws.
Panickedaswewere,EliandIscreamedatthetopofourlungs,andwavedourfistsathimin
anatempttoscarehimaway.Toourdisappointment,altheseefortswereinvain.Thebear
violentlydashedagainstthewoodenpostswhichwereevidentlyonthepointofcolapsing!Chily
windswhippingourfaces,wecouldhearnothingbutthesoundofourheartsbeatingviolently
inourchests.
Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.Thegustingwindfromthehoveringvehicle
sweptawayourfearimmediately.Outofthehelicopterdescendedaropetopulusup.
Thriledyetrelieved,wegrabbedtheropeandeventualylandedonthehelicoptersafeandsound.
Whilelookingatthebearfromhighabove,Iwasamazedtospothimcrushthefenceandrushfor
theinvitinggarlicbread.AtthisonceGinGaGlifetimemoment,Ireachedintomybackpackand
puledoutthecameraphotographingthatimpressivescene.
(2025河北邯郸市高三一模)LastDecember,JamieMcCalwasonacrossGcountrydriveas
shepreparedtomovefromFloridatoMichiganbeforeChristmas.Shestoppedatahotelforthe
nightinCleveland,Tennessee,andwhileshewasgettingherselfabitetoeat,herbelovedcat
Tuckerescapedfromherroom.“Mycatsanescapeartist,”explainedMcCal.“Hesitsbeside
thedoorandwaitsforsomeonetoopenit,thenherunsout.”
ItsomehowhappenedduringMcCalsquickmission,andshewasshockedtoreturnand
findTuckermissing.“Icouldnotfindhim.Ilookedeverywhere,forhours.”
WhenTuckerstilhadntturnedup,McCalhadnochoicebuttocontinueherjourneyto
Michigan,thoughitbrokeherhearttodriveonwithoutTucker.AfriendtoldhertopostTuckG
eronline,whichshedid.
Twodayslater,HolyLilardwasatworkatadrugstorenearMcCalshotel.Shewent
outsidetosweepandsawacatjumpoutfromunderneathsomeonescar.Shecaledthecatover,
andhecame,whichmadeLilardrealizethathebelongedtosomeonewhowasmissinghim.
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Lilardaskedaroundandwhennooneclaimedhim,shepostedaphotoofTuckertoher
areas“LostandFoundPets”onlinegroup,whereshewasaregularthere,notjustbecause
shesananimalloverwhoseowndogsarealsoescapeartists,butbecauseherauntandcousin
arethepageadministrators.
Beforethedaywasevenover,McCalhadfoundLilardandherpost.“Shesentpictures
andIknewimmediatelyitwasTucker,”saidMcCal.Therewasjustoneproblem:Bythetime
theyconnected,McCal wasalreadyinMichigan.
“Iwastryingtomakearrangementstogethimbacktome,butIjustcouldntaffordit,”
saidMcCal.“Iwasnotfinancialyabletohavehimshippedbacktomeoranythinglikethat.”
注意:
1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式作答.
Lilard,however,hadanunexpectedsolution.
Lilardsgrandfathercompletedthe600GplusGmilejourneywithTucker.
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第五部分 读后续写
途径三 学以致用
细节描写1 Father,whohadwhitehair,lookedveryold
withsomewrinklesonhisforehead.Healsohadwrinkles
nexttohiseyeswhenhesmiled,yethissmilewasstilas
heartwarmingasbefore,thesmileofafatherwhojust
wantedagoodlifeforhisfamily.
细节描写2 Hestaredatmeagain,meetingmyeyeswith
thestrangestexpressiononhisface—itwashostileand
angry.Ilookedawayquickly,shocked,andmyfacewent
redagain.
细节描写3 Imtotalynotanextrovertperson.IdontreG
alyliketotalkalottostrangers,yetthepeoplewho
knowmewiltelyouthatImverytalkative.Imnota
sociableperson,butIwishIare.Lastbutnotleast,Im
veryoptimistic.Ialwaysseethingsverysimple,butI
donttakethingsforgranted.
细节描写4 Isatfrozeninmyseat,staringblanklyathim.
Hewassomean.Itwasntfair.Ibegangatheringupmy
thingsslowly,tryingtoblockthesorrowthatfiledme,
forfearthatmyeyeswouldtearup.
细节描写5 Then,suddenly,atthebackofthechurch,
therewasatotalsilenceandeveryoneturnedtoseewhat
washappening.Andsoon,walkingbeforethemal were
theverytwoboystheyweretheretoprayfor.
细节描写6 1.Lucysaid,“Itsveryniceofyoutoinvite
me.”
2.“Imverygladyoucouldcome,Mr.Liu.Pleasetakea
seatattheheadofthetable.Itsaninformaldinnerand
pleasedontstandonceremony.”MrsSmithcontinued
“Mr.Liu,wouldyouliketohavesomechicken?”
3.“Whatkindoflifedoyouprefer,citylifeorcountry
life?”Jimasked.
细节描写 7 Thechurchwasfiledwithsingingvoices.
Tomevensangloudly.Heknewthatthiswouldbeaday
hewouldalwaysremember.
途径四 学以致用
1.sheseemedtoenjoythesunriseandthesunsethappily
withthem
2.thesunshinebrighterthanIeverknewbefore
3.Areyourealywilingtoleadatoughlifewithme?
Yes! Forme,itisnotasufferingtolive.
4.Everycoinhastwosides
5.felashinywhitepearlworththousandsofdolars
6.NeverhadIhadsuchathrilingyetdangerousvacation
before.ThespecialtriptotheWildWestmadeadeepimG
pressiononmymind
第四节 读后续写话题详析
话题一 学以致用
[参考范文]
Threemonthslater,thecommunity announced a
paintingcontest.MydaughterputthepostertomydrawG
ingboardandsaid,“Mom! LetspaintourgardendinoG
saurs!”For manydays,wepaintedtogetheronabig
woodenboard.SometeenagerslaughedatourbigTGRex
withaflowercrown,butkindshopkeepersgaveusfruits.
Onthelastnight,whenI wasdrawingstarsonthe
dinosaursclaws,myoldbusinessteacherwalkedby.“InG
terestingbutisthisuseful?”heasked.BeforeIcouldsay
anything,my daughtersaid, “Dreams dont need reG
sumes!”
Attheawardceremony,asilverGhairedjudgeapG
proached me.“Yourpaintingdidntfitanyofourold
rules,”shesaidwithasmile.“Sowemadeanewprize:
MostCourageousReimagining.”Later,ascamerasflashed
andweheldourGoldenCup,Isawateenagegirlinthe
crowddrawingquickly.Inhernotebook,astronautswere
paintingwalsonMars.Ileaneddownandsaid,“Dontlet
anyonetel youthatsimpossible.”Shesmiledanddrew
rainbowrocketsaroundthem.
话题二 学以致用
[参考范文]
Approachingthedoorway,Lucywasverynervous
andtookadeepbreath.Standinginfrontofthedoor,she
wasafraidwhetherhermotherwouldforgiveherforher
rudeness.Butwhenshethoughtofhermothersfamiliar
faceandthenoodleselerskindadvice,shedecidedto
knockonthedoorbravely.Hermotheropenedthedoor
butLucy wassoashamedthatshedidntknow what
tosay.
Agentletouchonherhaircalledhermindback.Lucy
couldnthelpcryingandsaid“Sorry,mom,IknowIhave
madeabigmistake.Ishouldnthavequarreledwithyou.I
shouldnthaverunawayfrom home.Couldyouforgive
me?”Lucysmotherwasmoved,saying“Goodgirl,never
mind,Ialsoshouldmakeanapologytoyouforscoldingat
youangrily.Iamveryworriedaboutyou.”Tearsroled
downfrombothoftheirfacesandtheyhuggedeachother
tightly.
话题三 学以致用
[参考范文]
Lillard,however,hadanunexpectedsolution.Her
grandparents,wholivednearherinTennessee,happened
tohaveahomein Michigan,too,andthey would be
comingupinDecember.Tuckercouldcatcharidewith
them and Lilards grandfather would drop him offat
McCalsnewplace.Thus,McCal wasabletobereunited
withhim.“Whataretheodds?”Lilardasked,laughing.
Excitedandoverjoyed.McCalofcourseacceptedLilards
suggestionwithgratitude.
Lillardsgrandfathercompletedthe600GplusGmile
journeywithTucker.GettingtogetherwithTucker,McG
Calsaidherjoywasbeyonddescription.“Hereturnedto
merightbeforeChristmas,andIwashavingarealyhard
timethen,”shesaid.“Itwasawonderfulthing.”Notonly
didMcCalgetTuckerback,LilardalsosentalongahandG
madeChristmasgiftforMcCal,withsomemoneyinside,
which moved McCal totears.Thereisnodoubtthat
TuckerscrossGcountryadventurewasthestarttoalasting
friendshipbetweenMcCalandLilard.
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