2025届读后续写：Tom放弃赢比赛，选择帮对手，结果不仅没输，还收获了朋友和成长，格局决定结局！讲义

阅读下面材料，标黑加粗斜体黄，可积累文本！黑色块 动词积累或动作串；蓝色（宾从）红色（定从）单斜体（状从）；其余非谓语形式都会标注；B-eli-eve in daily accumulation!(注释) 福建省 2025届高中毕业班英语学科适应性练习卷 Tom Perry concentrated hard. The rocket competition would begin shortly.Every detail mattered, and he was determined not to overlook a single one. The pressure was huge, but Tom was accustomed to being on top.He had never tasted defeat, and he wasn't about to start now.(背景信息，刻画Tom Perry的为人，特点) The other children rarely approached him, and when they did , it felt forced(用别人的感受刻画Tom). Tom preferred to keep to himself, confident(adj短语做补语)in his ability to win yet again. He assembled(组装)his launch platform sorting through(现在分词短语做伴随动作) engines, igniters(点火器), and other tools(宾语名词并列)in his toolbox. Suddenly , his igniter wire slipped from his grasp(无灵主语句) and disappeared into the grass. In a panic(情绪描写), he found another and carefully fitted it into place. Tom checked his rocket again.It was perfect, but when he glanced at the others’ rockets, he found lots of problems immediately. One rocket, however, had the look of a winner. And Tom's heart sank(情绪描写：失落). A thin boy carried it carefully. "Hi," a voice interrupted his focus(无灵主语句). It was the thin boy, Ed, offering a nervous smile(现在分词做伴随动作). " Nice rocket. " Tom whispered thanks, eyes on his tools(独立主格刻画人物). He asked Ed where he tested his rockets because he had never seen him at the competitions before. Ed said he just practiced alone behind his house. Although Tom felt a bit nervous(情绪描写), he pretended not to care much about the contest. “ Good luck ," said Tom, and he continued to concentrate on his own rocket. As Ed lifted his rocket, Tom felt an increasing anxiety. Just then, he noticed a fin (尾翼) on Ed's rocket had loosened(细节衔接点). But Ed hadn't noticed it. Tom felt a bit sorry but decided not to say anything. As Ed's turn approached(时间过渡) , Tom's heart jumped(情绪描写). He had to speak up, despite the risk of losing.“ Ed , hold up!" he shouted , drawing the attention of the crowd(现在分词短语做伴随动作). 注意： 1.续写词数应为150个左右； 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1：Ed stopped, turned around and looked at Tom carefully. Paragraph 2：Tom felt the pain of defeat but also a sense of pride. 福建省 2025届高中毕业班英语学科适应性练习卷 Tom Perry concentrated hard. The rocket competition would begin shortly.Every detail mattered, and he was determined not to overlook a single one. The pressure was huge, but Tom was accustomed to being on top.He had never tasted defeat, and he wasn't about to start now.The other children rarely approached him, and when they did , it felt forced. Tom preferred to keep to himself, confident in his ability to win yet again.He assembled(组装)his launch platform sorting through engines, igniters(点火器), and other tools in his toolbox.with great care,Suddenly , his igniter wire slipped from his grasp and disappeared into the grass. In a panic, he found another and carefully fitted it into place. Tom checked his rocket again.It was perfect, but when he glanced at the others’ rockets, he found lots of problems immediately. One rocket, however, had the look of a winner. And Tom's heart sank. A thin boy carried it carefully. "Hi," a voice interrupted his focus. It was the thin boy, Ed,offering a nervous smile. " Nice rocket. " Tom whispered thanks, eyes on his tools. He asked Ed where he tested his rockets because he had never seen him at the competitions before. Ed said he just practiced alone behind his house.Although Tom felt a bit nervous, he pretended not to care much about the contest. “ Good luck ," said Tom, and he continued to concentrate on his own rocket. As Ed lifted his rocket, Tom felt an increasing anxiety, just then, he noticed a fin (尾翼) on Ed's rocket had loosened. But Ed hadn't noticed it. Tom felt a bit sorry but decided not to say anything. As Ed's turn approached , Tom's heart jumped. He had to speak up, despite the risk of losing.“ Ed , hold up!" he shouted , drawing the attention of the crowd. 注意： 1.续写词数应为150个左右； 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1：Ed stopped, turned around and looked at Tom carefully. Paragraph 2：Tom felt the pain of defeat but also a sense of pride. 1. 文章分类与续写思路分析 文章类型: 本文属于成长与竞争类型的读后续写，主要围绕主人公Tom在火箭比赛中的心理变化和与竞争对手Ed的互动展开。 续写思路构思: 布局: 续写应围绕Tom的心理变化和与Ed的关系展开，重点描写Tom在比赛中的选择及其对结果的影响。 框架提炼: 第一段: 描写Tom提醒Ed火箭尾翼问题后的情景，Ed的反应及比赛结果。 第二段: 描写Tom面对比赛结果的心理变化，以及他从这次经历中学到的东西。 实施: 通过细腻的心理描写和动作描写，展现Tom从紧张、焦虑到释然、成长的过程。 承接原文事项: 保持Tom的性格特点（自信、专注）。 延续原文中的紧张氛围和竞争压力。 注意Ed的反应与Tom的心理变化之间的呼应。 整体注意事项: 保持故事的连贯性，避免突兀的情节转折。 突出Tom的成长和情感变化。 巧妙设计续写内容: 通过Tom的内心独白展现他的矛盾心理。 通过环境描写烘托比赛氛围。 通过对话展现人物关系的变化。 2. 故事山模式分析与原文衔接 分析角度 内容 原文反应句 人物刻画 Tom自信、专注，但内心也有焦虑；Ed谦逊、紧张。 “Tom preferred to keep to himself, confident in his ability to win yet again.” 情感层次 Tom从自信到焦虑，再到释然；Ed从紧张到感激。 “Tom felt an increasing anxiety.” 关键情节点 Tom发现Ed火箭尾翼松动并决定提醒他。 “Tom felt a bit sorry but decided not to say anything.” 语言特色 简洁明了，注重心理描写和动作描写。 “Tom whispered thanks, eyes on his tools.” 关键词分析 火箭、竞争、焦虑、成长。 “The pressure was huge, but Tom was accustomed to being on top.” 心理描写 Tom的内心矛盾：是否提醒Ed。 “Tom felt a bit sorry but decided not to say anything.” 动作描写 Tom组装火箭、发现Ed火箭问题、喊住Ed。 “He assembled his launch platform sorting through engines…” 环境描写 比赛现场的紧张氛围。 “The rocket competition would begin shortly.” 隐含主题 竞争中的友谊与成长。 “Tom felt the pain of defeat but also a sense of pride.” 情感转折 Tom从焦虑到释然，从竞争到合作。 “Tom felt an increasing anxiety.” 空间转换 从Tom的火箭组装区到比赛发射区。 “As Ed lifted his rocket, Tom felt an increasing anxiety.” 时间过渡 从比赛准备到比赛开始。 “The rocket competition would begin shortly.” 伏笔处与冲突点: 伏笔: Ed火箭尾翼松动，Tom是否提醒他。 冲突点: Tom在竞争与道德之间的选择。 隐含线索: Tom的成长，从只关注胜利到关注他人。 解决方案: Tom选择提醒Ed，展现了他人格的成长。 3. 续写语料推荐 动作描写例句: Tom’s hands trembled as he adjusted the rocket’s fin. Ed carefully lifted his rocket, his fingers gripping it tightly. Tom’s eyes darted to the loose fin, his heart pounding. He took a deep breath and shouted, “Ed, hold up!” Ed froze, his rocket swaying slightly in his hands. Tom rushed forward, pointing at the fin. The crowd murmured as Ed set the rocket down. Tom stepped back, his face flushed with relief. 心理描写例句: A wave of guilt washed over Tom as he debated whether to speak up. Tom’s mind raced, torn between winning and doing the right thing. He felt a pang of regret but knew he had made the right choice. Tom’s heart sank as he realized the consequences of his decision. A sense of pride swelled in his chest, despite the loss. He couldn’t shake the feeling that he had done something important. Tom’s anxiety melted away, replaced by a quiet satisfaction. He smiled faintly, knowing he had grown from the experience. 环境描写例句: The air was thick with tension as the competition began. The crowd’s chatter faded into a hushed silence. The sun beat down on the field, adding to the pressure. A gentle breeze rustled the grass, contrasting with the tense atmosphere. The sound of rockets launching echoed across the field. The judges’ eyes were fixed on the competitors, scrutinizing every move. The field buzzed with excitement and nervous energy. The sky was clear, a perfect backdrop for the competition. 高级替换词: 紧张: anxiety → apprehension 胜利: victory → triumph 专注: concentrate → immerse 犹豫: hesitate → waver 骄傲: pride → gratification 4. 语法现象与语料积累 高中语法现象: 独立主格: “Tom whispered thanks, eyes on his tools.” 过去完成时: “He had never tasted defeat.” 条件句: “If he had not spoken up, Ed’s rocket might have failed.” 并列句: “Tom felt the pain of defeat, but also a sense of pride.” 地道搭配: be accustomed to: 习惯于 例句: “Tom was accustomed to being on top.” in a panic: 惊慌失措 例句: “In a panic, he found another igniter.” draw attention: 引起注意 例句: “He shouted, drawing the attention of the crowd.” feel a pang of: 感到一阵 例句: “Tom felt a pang of regret.” 生词短语: igniter (n.): 点火器 近义词: lighter 反义词: extinguisher 例句: “He carefully fitted the igniter into place.” loosen (v.): 松动 近义词: unfasten 反义词: tighten 例句: “A fin on Ed’s rocket had loosened.” anxiety (n.): 焦虑 近义词: nervousness 反义词: calmness 例句: “Tom felt an increasing anxiety.” triumph (n.): 胜利 近义词: victory 反义词: defeat 例句: “He had never tasted defeat, only triumph.” 5. Possible Answers(3) Version 1 Paragraph 1: Ed stopped, turned around and looked at Tom carefully. Tom’s heart raced(心理描写) as he signaled the point of loose fin on Ed’s rocket, his voice trembling slightly(独立主格刻画情绪). “Your fin is loose,” he said, trying to sound calm(现在分词短语做伴随动作). In amazement, Ed’s eyes widened(神态描写), and he quickly assessed what Tom said and adjusted the fin, his hands shaking with urgency(独立主格刻画人物). The crowd held their breath(观众反应) as Ed’s rocket launched, soaring wonderfully into the sky(现在分词做伴随动作). Cheers erupted(无灵主语), but Tom felt a pang of regret mixed with relief(过去分词短语做主语补语). He had sacrificed his chance to win, but he knew he had done the right thing. As he watched Ed’s rocket fly higher, his mind was filled with conflicting emotions—pride in helping someone else succeed, yet a lingering sadness for his own loss. Paragraph 2: Tom felt the pain of defeat but also a sense of pride. When the judges announced Ed as the winner, the crowd erupted in applause(观众反应), and Ed turned to Tom with a grateful smile. “Thank you,” Ed said, shooting out his hand(现在分词短语做伴随动作). Tom shook it, feeling a warmth(现在分词短语做伴随动作) he hadn’t expected. The other children, who had always kept their distance from Tom, now gathered around, inviting Tom to join the celebration for Ed’s. For the first time, Tom felt a sense of belonging. He realized that winning wasn’t everything—true success came from kindness and connection. As he packed up his tools, he noticed the change within himself. The boy who had once been so focused on victory now felt a deeper satisfaction. He had grown, not just as a competitor, but as a person(递进句式). Version 2 Paragraph 1: Ed stopped, turned around and looked at Tom carefully. His eyes widened(神态描写) as Tom pointed to the loose fin on his rocket. “Your fin is loose,” Tom said, his voice steady(独立主格刻画人物状态) despite the pounding of his heart. Ed’s face paled(神情描写) as he examined the fin, realizing(现在分词做伴随动作) how close he had come to disaster. “Thank you,” Ed whispered, his voice filled with gratitude(独立主格刻画人物声音). The crowd watched in silence as Ed quickly fixed the fin, his hands trembling slightly(独立主格刻画神态). Tom stepped back, feeling a strange mix of relief and regret(现在分词做伴随动作). He knew he might have just lost the competition, but he also knew he had done the right thing. Paragraph 2: Tom felt the pain of defeat but also a sense of pride. As Ed’s rocket soared into the sky, perfectly stable(adj做补语), the crowd erupted in cheers(观众的反应). Tom’s rocket, though flawless(adj做补语), couldn’t compare to the joy he felt in that moment. He glanced at Ed, who was beaming with happiness, and realized that winning wasn’t everything. The competition had taught him something far more valuable: the importance of integrity and friendship. As the judges announced Ed as the winner, Tom clapped the loudest, his heart light with the knowledge(独立主格，刻画心理) that he had grown in ways(同位从) no trophy could ever measure. 加分点: 独立主格: “His hands trembling slightly.” 并列句: “He knew he might have just lost the competition, but he also knew he had done the right thing.” 条件句: “If he had not spoken up, Ed’s rocket might have failed.” 亮点词汇短语: 情绪描写: relief, regret, gratitude, pride 动作描写: pointed, examined, fixed, stepped back 升级替换词: relief: solace, comfort regret: remorse, sorrow gratitude: thankfulness, appreciation pride: satisfaction, fulfillment 例句: He felt a sense of solace knowing he had done the right thing. Despite his remorse, he knew he had made the correct choice. Her thankfulness was evident in her eyes. His fulfillment came from helping others, not from winning. Version 3 Paragraph 1: Ed stopped, turned around and looked at Tom carefully. Tom’s heart raced(紧张的申请描写) as he pointed to the loose fin on Ed’s rocket. “You need to fix that,” Tom said, his voice calm but urgent(独立主格刻画说话情绪). Ed’s eyes darted to the fin(刻画人物动作), and he quickly adjusted it, his hands shaking slightly(独立主格刻画人物心理). The crowd held their breath as Ed’s rocket launched, soaring perfectly into the sky(现在分词短语做后置定语). Tom felt a pang of regret but also a strange sense of relief. He had done the right thing, even if it meant losing the competition. Paragraph 2: Tom felt the pain of defeat but also a sense of pride. As the judges announced Ed as the winner, Tom couldn’t help but smile. He had helped someone else succeed, and that was worth more than any trophy. Ed approached him, a grateful smile on his face(独立主格刻画人物神态). “Thank you,” Ed said, extending his hand(现在分词短语做伴随动作). Tom shook it, feeling a newfound respect for his competitor(现在分词短语做伴随动作). The other children, who had once kept their distance from him (对原文的承接), now gathered around, inviting Tom to join them(现在分词短语做伴随动作). For the first time, Tom felt like he belonged, not just as a winner, but as a friend(递进句式). 加分点: 现在分词作状语: “His hands shaking slightly.” 并列句: “He had done the right thing, even if it meant losing the competition.” 条件句: “If he had not spoken up, Ed’s rocket might have failed.” 亮点词汇短语: 情绪描写: regret, relief, pride, gratitude 动作描写: pointed, adjusted, launched, approached 升级替换词: regret: remorse, sorrow relief: solace, comfort pride: satisfaction, fulfillment gratitude: thankfulness, appreciation 例句: He felt a sense of solace knowing he had done the right thing. Despite his remorse, he knew he had made the correct choice. Her thankfulness was evident in her eyes. His fulfillment came from helping others, not from winning. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$