2023年浙江1月高考真题续写解读讲义-2026届高三英语一轮复习

2023年浙江1月高考真题续写解读 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 I was invited to a cookout on an old friend’s farm in western Washington. I parked my car outside the farm and walked past a milking house which had apparently not been used in many years. A noise at a window caught my attention, so I entered it. It was a hummingbird (蜂鸟), desperately trying to escape. She was covered in spider-webs (蜘蛛网) and was barely able to move her wings. She ceased her struggle the instant I picked her up. With the bird in my cupped hand, I looked around to see how she had gotten in. The broken window glass was the likely answer. I stuffed a piece of cloth into the hole and took her outside, closing the door securely behind me. When I opened my hand, the bird did not fly away; she sat looking at me with her bright eyes. I removed the sticky spider-webs that covered her head and wings. Still, she made no attempt to fly. Perhaps she had been struggling against the window too long and was too tired? Or too thirsty? As I carried her up the blackberry-lined path towards my car where I kept a water bottle, she began to move. I stopped, and she soon took wing but did not immediately fly away. Hovering (悬停), she approached within six inches of my face. For a very long moment, this tiny creature looked into my eyes, turning her head from side to side. Then she flew quickly out of sight. During the cookout, I told my hosts about the hummingbird incident. They promised to fix the window. As I was departing, my friends walked me to my car. I was standing by the car when a hummingbird flew to the centre of our group and began hovering. She turned from person to person until she came to me. She again looked directly into my eyes, then let out a squeaking call and was gone. For a moment, all were speechless. Then someone said, “She must have come to say goodbye.” 注意:续写词数应为 150 个左右。 Paragraph 1: A few weeks later, I went to the farm again.    Paragraph 2: I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared.       第一步：读:记叙文基本要素 通过记叙文基本要素5W(When, Where, Who, What, Why),分析故事的人物、时间、地点及事情经过,了解文章的情节脉络。 When 　The day when I was invited to a cookout on an old friend’s farm Where 　A deserted milking house on an old friend’s farm Who 　A hummingbird, I, my friends What 　I rescued the hummingbird covered in spider-webs, but she made no attempt to fly away. Why 　She wanted to show gratitude to me and said goodbye to me in a special way. 第二步 1.分析人物(性格)特征与情感——抓住情感线; 2.分析存在的冲突、问题或悬念——抓住情节线2; 3.分析“人物情感线”和“故事情节线”中存在的冲突、问题或者悬念,为续写内容提供情节逻辑和情感基础。 hummingbird 　She was covered in spider-webs and desperately tried to escape. 　She ceased her struggle the instant I picked her up. 　The bird did not fly away; she sat looking at me with her bright eyes. 　She soon took wing but did not immediately fly away. 　Hovering, she approached within six inches of my face. For a very long moment, this tiny creature looked into my eyes, turning her head from side to side. 　After the cookout, the hummingbird flew to the centre of our group and began hovering. She turned from person to person until she came to me. She again looked directly into my eyes, then let out a squeaking call and was gone. 1.情感线 before—desperate; ceased to struggle ⇓ now—not flying away; looking at me with her bright eyes; looking into my eyes, turning her head from side to side (It is hard to say goodbye.) 2.情节线2——冲突、问题与悬念 Too tired? Or too thirsty? Why didn’t the bird fly away? How was the bird getting along? Why did the bird appear again? (续表) I 　I picked her up. 　I stuffed a piece of cloth into the hole and took her outside, closing the door securely behind me. 　I removed the sticky spider-webs that covered her head and wings. 　Perhaps she had been struggling against the window too long and was too tired? Or too thirsty? 　I carried her up the blackberry-lined path towards my car where I kept a water bottle. 　I couldn’t help wondering how the hummingbird was getting on. 　I felt a surge of relief. 情感线 before—sympathy; worried ⇓ now—relieved my friends 　Speechless(moved). 第三步：确定主题,遵循正能量 读后续写总是表达正能量的主题。所以“我”再次造访那个废弃挤奶房的时候,想再看看那个窗户上的洞是不是被堵好,想知道被救的蜂鸟怎么样了(揭示人与动物的和谐相处,表达对动物的关切之情)。蜂鸟又一次出现并认出了“我”,再次以特殊的方式向“我”表示感谢。这一幕非常感人,时隔数日被救的蜂鸟还能认出自己,“我”看见蜂鸟也放心了。进一步表现人和动物之间的情感,让读者为之动容。 读后续写之四思:读段首句,构思情节——设问推动情节走,情感延续双线行 通过“自问自答”的方式,激发对后续情节的好奇心及想象力,并借助自己心中的疑惑,为续写构建写作大纲,情节情感双线并进。 段落 设问推进 情节延续 情感延续 第一段 　Did the hosts stuff the hole firmly? 　How was the bird getting along? 　由第一段首句“几周之后,我再次去了农场。”和第二段首句“就在我要离开的时候,蜂鸟出现了。”可知,第一段可描写作者关心蜂鸟的现状,以及废弃的挤奶房窗户上的洞是不是被堵好以防蜂鸟再次被困。 　根据续写第一段首句中的“…I went to the farm again.”可知,“我”对上次救蜂鸟一事念念不忘,因而“我”想看看那窗户上的洞是否被堵好,那只蜂鸟怎么样了(不一定遇到,遇到是奇迹)。 第二段 　Could the bird recognize me? 　In what way did she meet me? 　Was she fine? 　Did I need to worry about her? 　由第二段首句“就在我要离开的时候,蜂鸟出现了。”可知,第二段可描写虽然时隔几周,蜂鸟仍然还能认出“我”。(故事达到高潮,情节感人至深) 　根据续写第二段首句“I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared.”可以推测出,奇迹发生,蜂鸟再次出现并向“我”表达感恩之情,此时“我”如释重负。故事展现了人和动物之间的情感。 参考范文 A few weeks later, I went to the farm again. As my car neared it my thoughts drifted back to the moment when I rescued the hummingbird from the spider-webs. I rushed back to the deserted house. It was a great comfort that the original hole in the window was nowhere to be found. Leaving the house, I couldn’t help wondering how it was getting on now. Had it managed to find its way back home, or was it still out there somewhere struggling to survive? I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared. A flash of movement caught my attention. I turned around to see the same hummingbird hovering in the air. It seemed that the bird was waiting for me, its beady eyes locked on mine as if trying to convey some deep, unspoken gratitude. I felt a surge of relief and awe at the sight of this sound and grateful creature, and I knew that I would always cherish the memories we shared as I climbed into my car and drove away. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$