Unit 8 Literature Writing Workshop 读后续写 课件-2024-2025学年高中英语北师大版（2019）选择性必修第三册

—The Last Leaf A Continuation of a Story Unit 8 Literature Writingworkshop 1 Learning objectives analyze the story’s main elements. learn the skills on continuation writing. apply what you have learnt to the Continuation Writing. learn and appreciate the possible story ending. At the end of this class,I can You are going to write a continuation of the story The Last Leaf. Writing Task where who what why /how in Greenwich Village Johnsy ,Sue and Behrman Johnsy had fallen ill and was dying of pneumonia Mr.Behrman painted the last leaf and he died when in November Task1: Read for the basic information. RisingAction Climax Task 2 :Reread the story and figure out the plot. Climax RisingAction In November, Johnsy ___________________. The doctor said . z got sick with pneumonia she might not get better She counted the ______ out the window. She thought she must go when the last leaf ____ leaves fell Figure out the plot. Falling Action Continuation The doctor ____________________________. Mr Behrman____________________ said she would live and get better was sick with pneumonia Behrman and Sue looked out the window and found ___________.The next morning Johnsy ________________________ one leaf left saw the leaf was still there. The next day, Mr Behrman _____. The last leaf was painted by Mr. Behrman. died Climax Johnsy survived and ... Figure out the plot. Climax RisingAction Jhonsy was ill. Johnsy counted the leaves outside. There was only one leaf outside the window. The following day, the last leaf was still there. Johnsy survived.Mr behrmandied What happened to Johnsy ? Why did she became a famous painter? The plot Continuation Characters Personality Examples (Evidence) Johnsy pessimistic stubborn waited to die; mind was made up Sue considerate kind, patient encouraged Johnsy constantly and took care of Johnsy carefully Behrman ambitious selfless brave For forty years he had been about to paint a masterpiece. He sacrificed his life to saveJohnsy. Analyse the characters characterization Tears came to Johnsy’s eyes as she knew what Mr. Behrman had done for her.________________________________________ Ten years later, Johnsy became a famous painter due to her dedication and hard work. _______________________________ Writing Task 对段首语进行分析、设问。 两个段首语是重要的续写提示，控制着情节的发展方向。对其分析设问，能够将预测的故事情节以问题的形式呈现，利于打开思路，整理信息和组织语言。 Task 3: Analyse the two given sentences Para 1: Tears came to Johnsy’s eyes , as she knew what Mr. Behrman had done for her Para 2: Ten years later, Johnsy became a famous painter due to her dedication and hard work. Why did she cry? What was her feeling？ What would she say ? What would she do when she realized her dream ? How did she feel when remembered the past? What was Mr.Behrman’s influence on her paintings ? → Johnsy was too depressed to utter a word and promised that from today on, she will put all her heart and soul into painting. What did she do for Mr.Behrman? Para.1 .Tears came to Johnsy’s eyes as she knew what Mr. Behrman had done for her. Q2：What did she do? Q1：What were her feelings ? Went to see Mr.Behrman immediately and said goodbye to him. Q3：What would she say to Mr.Behrman? surprised, heartbroken,and grateful Expressing her deep gratitude and told her future dream Task4: Develop the plots feelings words behaviors Para.2 Para.2.Ten years later, Johnsy became a famous painter due to her dedication and hard work. Q1:What would she do when she realized her dream ? Q3:What was Mr.Behrman’s influence on her paintings ? Q2: How did she feel when remembered thepast? Return to the Greenwich Village . Recall the old times and felt moved again Keep him in mind and made his dream come true. Feelings Tears came to Johnsy’s eyes as she knew what Mr. Behrman had done for her. Ten years later, Johnsy became a famous painter due to her dedication and hard work. . 列大纲：两段12句法 1） 2） 3） 4） 5） 6） 7） 8） 9） 10） 11） 12） 列大纲：两段12句法 1）固定 2） 3） 4） 5） 6）固定 7）固定 8） 9） 10） 11） 12）固定 结局/升华主旨 承接首段首句 承接二段首句 承启二段首句 Tears came to Johnsy’s eyes as she knew what Mr. Behrman had done for her. Ten years later, Johnsy became a famous painter due to her dedication and hard work. 列大纲：两段12句法 1） 2） 3） 4） 5） 6 Tears came to Johnsy’s eyes as she knew what Mr. Behrman had done for her. Ten years later, Johnsy became a famous painter due to her dedication and hard work. Johnsy cried She decided to see Behrman She saw Behrman She said goodbye to him She expressed gratitude She promised “In November, a cold, unseen stranger, whom the doctors called Pneumonia, arrived in Greenwich Villiage.”(para.2) “I want to go sailing down, down, just like one of those poor, tired leaves.”(para.6) “Johnsy’s eyes were open, but they weren’t watching her. Instead, she stared ot the window and counted backwards:’Ten, nine, eight, seven...’”(para.4) “Didn’t you wonder why it never moved an inch when the wind blew? Ah, dear, it’s Behrman’s masterpiece...”(para.13) personification the vividness of details simile & personification the sursprising but logical ending Writing styles of O.Henry hints: simile (明喻) personification(拟人) the vividness of details (生动的细节描写) the surprising but logical ending (惊人但合逻辑的结局) 17 say: claim, ask, reply, cry, tell see: look, watch, stare, notice die: go, go sailing down, go away, slip away How does the writer use different words to express similar meanings in the story? variety in language Wonderful expressions and beautiful sentences Expressions: 1. Vivid words & various expressions （生动的词/多样的表达） 2. Verbs in action（表动作的词） 3. Varied sentence patterns（句式多样） 4. Plots corresponding to the given passage（情节紧扣） 5. Proper statement of the theme（主题升华恰当） 写句式 招招升级 招式1：名词性从句 常见句型：What was surprised was that... 招式2：“so ... that ...” 因果关系逻辑强，动作情绪全包含，想更高级也容易，so提前变成倒装 。 招式3： 完全倒装 表示时间、地点、方位的介词或副词置于句首时，使用完全倒装 结构，即“谓语动词+主语” 招式4： 强调句 “It was ... that/who ...” 写句式 招招升级 招式5： 虚拟语气 常用句式：Without.../But for..., Sb. could/couldn’t have done... 招式6： 非谓语动词 常用句式： ① ...,doing ② Doing… ③ Having done..., ... 招式7： 定语从句 “先行词n. + who/that .... ” 招式8： 无灵主语 招式9： 动作链 Para Surroundings 环境 Events 事件 Places 地点 Emotions 情绪 1 Tears came to Johnsy’s eyes as she knew what Mr. Behrman had done for her.________________________________________ Ten years later, Johnsy became a famous painter due to her dedication and hard work. _______________________________ Task5: Composing 读后续写的高考评分标准 评分标准： 1.本题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。 2.评分时，先根据所续写内容和语言（词汇语法、篇章结构）等考虑。 （1）与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度； （2）内容的合理性； （3）应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性； （4）上下文的连贯性； 3.先根据作答的整体情况确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量、确定或调整档次，最后给分。 4. 评分时还应注意： （1）拼写与标点符号是写作规范的重要方面，评分时应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑，英美拼写均可接受； 5. 书写较差，以至影响交际，可将分数降低一个档次； 6. 词数少于130的，从总分中减去2分。 v 使用多样化的语法结构，使用高级词汇表达，并在此基础上保证准确性。 力争“升档”，严防“掉档” 续写内容与所给段首句和短文有合理的衔接。 保证所写情节的合理性 有效地使用语句间的连接成分，短文结构紧凑。 有最低字数要求，但无明确上限，建议不超过180词 拼写、标点及试卷的整洁度会影响整体得分。 Para.1 Tears came to Johnsy’s eyes as she knew what Mr. Behrman had done for her. Looking out of the window and staring at the last ivy leaf that never moved an inch, Johnsy couldn’t help crying sadly. Although she was too weak to sit up and move around, she was determined to see Mr Behrman the last time. Supported by Sue, Johnsy got out of bed and went downstairs. There was Mr. Behrman lying dead in his bed. Holding Mr. Behrman’s hand tightly, Johnsy whispered to the pale face, “Dear Mr. Behrman! It’s you who gave me a second life and I promise that I will continue my painting.” A simple version Para.1Tears came to Johnsy’s eyes as she knew what Mr. Behrman had done for her. Looking out of the window and gazing at the last ivy leaf that never moved an inch, Johnsy could not contain herself any longer and broke into tears. In fragile health as she was, she was determined to see Mr Behrman the last time. Supported by Sue, Johnsy struggled out of bed and shuffled downstairs. There was Mr. Behrman, the poor old painter, lying dead in his bed. Holding Mr. Behrman’s hand tightly, Johnsy was too depressed to utter a word. After what seemed like ages, she held back her tears and murmured to the pale face, “Dear Mr. Behrman! It’s you who gave me a second life. I promise that from today on, I will put all my heart and soul into painting.” Advanced version 1.Polish Para1. 2.Finish Para2 and polish it. Homework 列大纲：两段12句法 1） 2） 3） 4） 5） 6 7 8） 9） 10） 11） 12 Tears came to Johnsy’s eyes as she knew what Mr. Behrman had done for her. Ten years later, Johnsy became a famous painter due to her dedication and hard work. Johnsy cried She decided to see Behrman She saw Behrman She said goodbye to him She expressed gratitude She promised Her paintings were popular She returned She saw the leaf She recalled the times She finished the drawing The last leaf is the hope Para.2Ten years later, Jonhsy became a famous painter due to her dedication and hard work. Her paintings were widely admired and on exhibition at art galleries all over the world. One day, she returned to Greenwich Village. When she opened the window and saw the leaf on the wall, she decided it was the right time for her to draw the painting that she had longed to produce. In the painting, a leaf held firmly onto the dry branches in the icy wind. With the last stroke on the paper, Johnsy smiled broadly. To her, the last leaf is a glimmer of hope that an old man gave to a desperate girl at the cost of his own life. Paragraph2. Ten years later, Jonhsy became a famous painter due to her dedication and hard work. Her paintings were highly acclaimed and on exhibition at art galleries all over the world. One day, she returned to Greenwich Village. It was the first time she set her foot in the house after she left ten years ago. When she opened the window and caught sight of the leaf on the wall, she knew it was the right time for her to draw the painting that she had been longing to produce all these years. In the painting, a leaf clung firmly to the dry branches swaying in the icy wind. With the last stroke on the paper, Johnsy gave a broad smile on her face. To her, the last leaf is a glimmer of hope that an old man gave to a desperate girl at the cost of his own life. Tears came to Johnsy’s eyes as she knew what Mr. Behrman had done for her. Ten years later, Johnsy became a famous painter due to her dedication and hard work. 列大纲：两段12句法 1） 2） 3） 4） 5） 6） 7）固定 8） 9） 10） 11） 12） Johnsy --surprised, sad,grateful would value life and devote to painting struggled to get up supported by Sue,went to visit Mr. Behrman Mr. Behrman was lying on the bed showed gratutide to him 结局/升华主旨 承接二段首句 $$