2024-2025学年高一&高二上学期读后续写框架搭建练习（人与自然）+解析

Continuation Writing 人与自然——遇险类 In order to, we should first know 1 读后续写解读 五 评分要求 “考查内容？ 与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度； 内容的丰富性和对所给关键词语的覆盖情况； 应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性； 上下文的连贯性. （教育部考试中心 2015） Logic Descriptive details Get key information echoed main characters linking clues （foreshadows）in the climax those given in the first sentences of the writing part. Variety&Accuracy grammar coherence; linking words What we should mainly write about? 2 Reading (including the sentences given in the writing part) Writing The natural process of conflict resolution and the ending Story Mountain Have another continuation writing practice. 3 Step 1 Reading 圈出linking words和故事情节的基本要素； 关注情景和情感转换； 辨别主要矛盾 和可能需要在续写中再次出现的细节 【人物；线索词（一般在情节高潮部分出现）】 勾主线 抓矛盾 定主旨 材料阅读（审题） It was summer, and my dad wanted to treat me to a vacation like never before. He decided to take me on a new trip to the Wild West. We took a plane to Albuquerque, a big city in the state of New Mexico. We reached Albuquerque in the late afternoon. Uncle Paul, my dad’s friend, picked us up from the airport and drove us up to his farm in Pecos. 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 Read for the change of scenes and feelings; might be excited His wife cooked us a delicious dinner and we got to know his sons Ryan and Kyle. My dad and I spent the night in the guestroom of the farm house listening to the frogs and water rolling down the river nearby. Very early in the morning, Uncle Paul woke us up to have breakfast. “The day starts at dawn on my farm,” he said. After breakfast, I went to help Aunt Tina feed the chickens, while my dad went with Uncle Paul to take the sheep out to graze (吃草). I was impressed to see my dad and Uncle Paul riding horses. They looked really cool. Read for the change of scenes and feelings; who when what how pleased In the afternoon, I asked Uncle Paul if I could take a horse ride, and he said yes, as long as my dad went with me. I wasn’t going to take a horse ride by myself anyway. So, my dad and I put on our new cowboy hats, got on our horses, and headed slowly towards the mountains. “Don’t be late for supper,” Uncle Paul cried, “and keep to the track so that you don’t get lost!” “OK!” my dad cried back. After a while Uncle Paul and his farm house were out of sight. It was so peaceful and quiet and the colors of the brown rocks, the deep green pipe trees, and the late afternoon sun mixed to create a magic scene. It looked like a beautiful woven (编织的) blanket spread out upon the ground just for us. when what how must be amazed/immersed Read for the change of scenes and feelings; Paragraph 1: Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. Paragraph 2: We had no idea where we were and it got dark. 很重要的续写提示，很大程度控制着情节的发展方向。 Conflict: got lost In the afternoon, I asked Uncle Paul if I could take a horse ride, and he said yes, as long as my dad went with me. I wasn’t going to take a horse ride by myself anyway. So, my dad and I put on our new cowboy hats, got on our horses, and headed slowly towards the mountains. “Don’t be late for supper,” Uncle Paul cried, “and keep to the track so that you don’t get lost!” “OK!” my dad cried back. After a while Uncle Paul and his farm house were out of sight. It was so peaceful and quiet and the colors of the brown rocks, the deep green pipe trees, and the late afternoon sun mixed to create a magic scene. It looked like a beautiful woven (编织的) blanket spread out upon the ground just for us. foreshadows 情节主线(linking words)： A summer vacation trip to Uncle Paul’s farm. A night in the guestroom listening to frogs and a river rolling. Some activities the next morning. In the afternoon, my dad and I headed to the mountains riding horses. 情感线： impressed to see them riding horses peaceful and immersed in the mountains Paragraph 1: Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. Paragraph 2: We had no idea where we were and it got dark. We got lost. ? --- worried; nervous relieved/… excited and pleased Step 2 Writing 先确定时态和结尾 （第一小段结尾参考第二段开头；第二段结尾参考文本主旨）； 重复关键信息（线索词、人物等） 体现出矛盾化解的过程，积极正向； 通过基本要素（5W1H）的提问充实写作内容。 Writing devices: a. 增加细节描述情感和心理状态，如body language（适当使用动作链）、voice和facial features；b. 适当使用对话，每小段不宜超过2句，且不宜太长不讲废话; c. 适当环境描写; d. 使用衔接手段 情节主线： A summer vacation trip to Uncle Paul’s farm. A night in the guestroom listening to frogs and a river rolling. Some activities the next morning. In the afternoon, my dad and I headed to the mountains riding horses. 情感线： impressed to see them riding horses peaceful and quiet in the mountains Paragraph 1: Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. Paragraph 2: We had no idea where we were and it got dark. We got lost. What was our reaction? How did we get lost? What was the consequence? “rabbit”& “get lost” ? panicked the horse chased the rabbit … ? worried; nervous relieved/… track Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. Its abrupt appearance panicked my horse, making it run off the track wildly. I spared no efforts to hold on as hard as I could and couldn’t help letting out the screams. My dad was trying to keep up, extremely worried about my safety. Fortunately, minutes later, the horse stopped before a river, out of breath. Relieved, we looked around trying to find the track. However, it was nowhere to be found. So aimlessly did the frightened horse run that we got lost unconsciously. … panicked my horse run off the track wildly spared no efforts to hold on as hard; keep up stopped before a river tried to find the track but failed got lost changes of feelings linking words details (心理/动作) worth learning; easy to copy 13 Variety of expressions abrupt appearance 突然出现（名词短语） spare no efforts to…不留余力做某事 panic-panicked-panicked relieved 松了一口气的 unconsciously 无意识地 非谓语作结果状语 Its abrupt appearance panicked my horse, making it run off the track wildly. 形容词作状语；非谓语作目的状语 Relieved, we looked around trying to find the track. 结果状语从句so…that的倒装 . So aimlessly did the frightened horse run that we got lost unconsciously. 情节主线： A summer vacation trip to Uncle Paul’s farm. A night in the guestroom listening to frogs and a river rolling. Some activities the next morning. In the afternoon, my dad and I headed to the mountains riding horses. 情感线： impressed to see them riding horses peaceful and quiet in the mountains Paragraph 1: Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. Paragraph 2: We had no idea where we were and it got dark. We got lost. ? worried; nervous relieved/… What was our reaction? How did we find the way back? What did I learn? the process of conflict resolution How did we find the way back? 自救 他救 它救 how? 1. 根据自己故事理解加常识有逻辑续写 2. 兼顾1 的和上文echo （伏笔或关联） We found the way back In the afternoon, I asked Uncle Paul if I could take a horse ride, and he said yes, as long as my dad went with me. I wasn’t going to take a horse ride by myself anyway. So, my dad and I put on our new cowboy hats, got on our horses, and headed slowly towards the mountains. “Don’t be late for supper,” Uncle Paul cried, “and keep to the track so that you don’t get lost!” “OK!” my dad cried back. After a while Uncle Paul and his farm house were out of sight. It was so peaceful and quiet and the colors of the brown rocks, the deep green pipe trees, and the late afternoon sun mixed to create a magic scene. It looked like a beautiful woven (编织的) blanket spread out upon the ground just for us. Situation 1 他救 Situation 2 它救 by following the tracks His wife cooked us a delicious dinner and we got to know his sons Ryan and Kyle. My dad and I spent the night in the guestroom of the farm house listening to the frogs and water rolling down the river nearby. Very early in the morning, Uncle Paul woke us up to have breakfast. “The day starts at dawn on my farm,” he said. After breakfast, I went to help Aunt Tina feed the chickens, while my dad went with Uncle Paul to take the sheep out to graze (吃草). I was impressed to see my dad and Uncle Paul riding horses. They looked really cool. Situation 3 自救 hear water rolling down a river nearby Echo some information to help with the solution Key clue that lead the development of plot 16 We had no idea where we were and it got dark. Nothing in sight was familiar and neither did we know where the farm house was. Just at the point of desperation, from the distance came a faint voice calling our names. “It must be Uncle Paul,” I exclaimed excitedly. That we didn’t come back for dinner made him realize something unusual might have happened. So my uncle went out to look for us. Finally, we reached our uncle’s farm house safe and sound. “Do you regret taking the horse ride?” asked my uncle. “No. I’m looking forward to the next ride, but I’ll be much calmer and more cautious.” I replied with determination. Nothing in sight was familiar came a faint voice explained why my uncle came to look for us reach the farm house safe and sound, sharing my feelings. changes of feelings linking words details worth learning; easy to copy 17 Variety of expressions at the point of desperation 在绝望的边缘 exclaim 呼喊；大声说 safe and sound 安然无恙地 neither 倒装句+宾语从句 … and neither did we know where the farm house was. 地点状语提前，完全倒装 …from the distance came a faint voice calling our names. That引导的事实性主语从句 That we didn’t come back for dinner made him realize something unusual might have happened. 读后续写新题型解读 五 评分要求 “考查内容？ 与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度； 内容的丰富性和对所给关键词语的覆盖情况； 应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性； 上下文的连贯性. （教育部考试中心 2015） Logic Descriptive details Get key information echoed main characters linking clues in the climax those given in the first sentences of the writing part. variety grammar coherence; linking words $$ It was summer, and my dad wanted to treat me to a vacation like never before. He decided to take me on a new trip to the Wild West. We took a plane to Albuquerque, a big city in the state of New Mexico. We reached Albuquerque in the late afternoon. Uncle Paul, my dad’s friend, picked us up from the airport and drove us up to his farm in Pecos. His wife cooked us a delicious dinner and we got to know his sons Ryan and Kyle. My dad and I spent the night in the guestroom of the farm house listening to the frogs and water rolling down the river nearby. Very early in the morning, Uncle Paul woke us up to have breakfast. “The day starts at dawn on my farm,” he said. After breakfast, I went to help Aunt Tina feed the chickens, while my dad went with Uncle Paul to take the sheep out to graze (吃草). I was impressed to see my dad and Uncle Paul riding horses. They looked really cool. In the afternoon, I asked Uncle Paul if I could take a horse ride, and he said yes, as long as my dad went with me. I wasn’t going to take a horse ride by myself anyway. So, my dad and I put on our new cowboy hats, got on our horses, and headed slowly towards the mountains. “Don’t be late for supper,” Uncle Paul cried, “and keep to the track so that you don’t get lost!” “OK!” my dad cried back. After a while Uncle Paul and his farm house were out of sight. It was so peaceful and quiet and the colors of the brown rocks, the deep green pipe trees, and the late afternoon sun mixed to create a magic scene. It looked like a beautiful woven (编织的) blanket spread out upon the ground just for us. 注意： 1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右； 2.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。 Para.1 Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. ___________________________ Para.2 We had no idea where we were and it got dark. _________________________________ 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$