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四川省宜宾市第六中学校 胡孝刚 2024年1月浙江省高考 基于“12345策略”的读后续写 Learning Goals: 阅读一个中心(一个故事说明一个理弘扬一个正能量） 挖掘二个提示句(关键名词和动词，复现回原文，否则新建) 搭建三个情节场景(故事发展合理性逻辑性) 刻画四种描写(情感、动作、环境、结尾) 书写五种句式(语法无误，书写规范) 阅读范围 问题内容 答题 文段内容 人物关系   故事大意   尾段内容 主要问题   提示句 解决办法   全文总结 弘扬精神   1. 阅读：一个中心(一件事说一理弘扬一个正能量） Eva ... huge building... poor sense of direction .... Coach Pitt...run one mile around the track... Eva缺方向感，脑图定位找处所 a mind trick是否有效 将a mind trick用在找处所 自我成长：创新解决问题 挖掘范围 关键词(动词/名词) 复现/新建 第一句   第二句   2. 挖掘：二个提示句（复现回原文，否则新建） Nice work! the finish line the same trick the school building complete her first lap…into two, then three, then four. complete her first lap…into two, then three, then four. stopped thinking ...“mile.“…focused on reaching the shadow cast concentrated on jogging to the spot a six-story building…in four directions Classrooms, laboratories, teachers’ offices, library 搭建 作用目的 情节发展(who & what) 第一段 When Coach Pitt said “Nice work!” to her at the finish line, Eva was surprised. 承接前句 情节1 故事发展 情节2 转承下段 情节3 第二段 Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building. 承接前句 情节1 故事发展 情节2 结尾升华 情节3 3. 搭建：三个情节场景（故事发展合理性逻辑性） Eva:低头自豪笑 Eva:总结利用参考物 Eva:还是担心迷路 Eva:站立时寻找参照物 Eva:成功分清场所 Eva:回家收获感悟 4. 刻画：四种描写（情感、动作、环境、结尾） 段落 刻画范围 情节主要动作描写（头眼嘴手腿躯） ...Coach Pitt “Nice work! ... finish line, Eva ... surprised. 第一段 (承前)情节1 (发展)情节2 (启后)情节3 Eva ... use the same trick to ... the school building. 第二段 (承前)情节1 (发展)情节2 (结尾)情节3 低头笑 总结参照物 担心迷路 寻找参照 分清场所 收获感悟 低头,看脚,微笑 不在意距离，注意参照物 回教室，担心迷路 站，环顾，看见高点参照物 面对参照物，左，右，后,迈向左 回家，高兴，记得 环境：无声 情感：高兴 过渡句：到达教室 过渡句：跑完1公里 过渡句：方法有用 When Coach Pitt said “Nice work!” to her at the finish line, Eva was surprised. 低头自 豪地笑 总结用参照物 还是担心迷路 老师 表扬 ①She completed a whole mile! 过渡句：承接前句，老师为什么表扬 She 干什么被表扬? ②Everything seemed silent around her and she could only hear her heart beating heavily. 环境：无声烘托心中 无声 and she 震撼 . ③She felt like jumping into a world of honey, so sweet and wonderful that she just stood on her feet. 动作：低头,看脚,微笑 低头ing and 看脚ing , she 微笑 . ④Lowering her head and looking down at her feet, she couldn’t hide her smile on her face. 动作：不在意距离，注意参照物 She didn’t 在意距离 but 关注参照物 . ⑤In her mind, she didn’t care about the mile but just focused on the reference. 过渡句：承前启后 She成功! ⑥She made it! 动作：回教室，担心迷路 When she 回教室 , Shen担心迷路 . ⑦But when she began to go to her classroom, she worried about being lost. (88 words) 情感：高兴自豪 She 如坠蜜罐 , so + adj and adj + that shen 只有傻站. Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building. 站立找参照物 成功分清场所 收获 感悟 老师 表扬 动作：站，环顾，看见高点参照物 She 站立, 回顾，and 看见高点参照物 . ①She stood on the track, looked around herself and saw her highest reference, the library on the 4 floor. 动作：面对参照物，左，右，后,迈向左 When she 面对参照，教室左面3楼，实验右面4楼 and 体育馆后面. ②When she faced it, the classroom was on the 3 floor on her left hand, the laboratory on the 4 floor on her right, and the gym behind her. Not 在意方向ing and not在意距离ing, she 迈步向左去 . ③Not thinking about the distance and not caring about the direction, she stepped towards her left hand. 过渡句：承前(向左走的结果）启后(美好结局） She微笑 and 来到教室 . ④A few minutes later, she smiled and came to the classroom. 结尾升华：回家，高兴，记得 When she回家, she高兴, as she 记得. ⑤When she got home, she was still wearing a big smile, as she remembered the trick in her heart. (94 words) 5. 书写：五个句式（语法无误，工整规范） 5. 书写：五个句式（语法无误，工整规范） 评估内容 五星 四星 三星 二星 一星 1. 梳理文章六要素，获取内容和弘扬的正能量           2. 分析尾段出现的矛盾冲突或问题           3. 挖掘提示句中复现的关键名词和动词           4. 快速搭建每个段落3个故事情节           5. 快速进行情感、动作、环境和结尾句4种描写           6. 熟练and, so that, 非谓语, 无灵主语和with句           7. 正确利用时间、地点和短句子作为过渡衔接           8. 正确书写大小写、标点书写           9 正确使用时态、语态和人称           10. 控制字数，书写工整，排版规范           自我总结反思提高 $$