Micro-skills of continuation writing（续写微技能） -Verbs “draw” pictures（以动词构建画面）

Micro-skills of continuation writing Verbs “draw” pictures 以动词构建画面 Adapted from “Adversity and Courage” (Unit 4/the 3rd Optional Coursebook ) In continuation writing What should we pay attention to while writing stories? Activity 1 So many verbs here! Read the article Never had I thought this great expedition(探险) with Sir Ernest Shackleton to travel across the Antarctic would end up in failure. Our ship, Endurance, was stuck in ice and months later, was crushed by the ice around. Before we abandoned the ship, Shackleton told us to rescue our most essential supplies—the small boats, our food, the cook stove, candles, clothes and blankets. None of us took away our personal belongings, except a banjo(班卓琴) usually used for parties and celebrations. After months of struggle, we finally arrived at Elephant Island, but things went from bad to worse. Having assessed the situation, Shackleton decided to leave us to find help on South Georgia Island-this voyage was too dangerous and difficult for all of us to make it in our small boats. So twenty-two sailors, including me, watched as Shackleton and his boat sailed away, believing he would return to save us. Holding hands together, we all walked back to our temporary camp, promising to work together. Focus on the verbs in blue Never had I thought this great expedition(探险) with Sir Ernest Shackleton to travel across the Antarctic would end up in failure. Our ship, Endurance, was stuck in ice and months later, was crushed by the ice around. Before we abandoned the ship, Shackleton told us to rescue our most essential supplies—the small boats, our food, the cook stove, candles, clothes and blankets. None of us took away our personal belongings, except a banjo(班卓琴) usually used for parties and celebrations. After months of struggle, we finally arrived at Elephant Island, but things went from bad to worse. Having assessed the situation, Shackleton decided to leave us to find help on South Georgia Island-this voyage was too dangerous and difficult for all of us to make it in our small boats. So twenty-two sailors, including me, watched as Shackleton and his boat sailed away, believing he would return to save us. Holding hands together, we all walked back to our temporary camp, promising to work together. Activity 1 So many verbs here! Focus on the verbs in blue 1) Our ship, Endurance, was stuck in ice and months later, was crushed by the ice around. Before we abandoned the ship, Shackleton told us to rescue our most essential supplies-the small boats, our food, the cook stove, candles, clothes and blankets. 2) So twenty-two sailors, including me, watched as Shackleton and his boat sailed away, believing he would return to save us. Holding hands together, we all walked back to our temporary camp, promising to work together. Activity 1 So many verbs here! Focus on the verbs in blue 1) Our ship, Endurance, was stuck in ice and months later, was crushed by the ice around. Before we abandoned the ship, Shackleton told us to rescue our most essential supplies-the small boats, our food, the cook stove, candles, clothes and blankets. 2) So twenty-two sailors, including me, watched as Shackleton and his boat sailed away, believing he would return to save us. Holding hands together, we all walked back to our temporary camp, promising to work together. # Writing Tip Verbs “draw” pictures! Activity 1 So many verbs here! Develop a story Never had I thought this great expedition with Sir Ernest Shackleton to travel across the Antarctic would end up in failure. Our ship, Endurance, was stuck in ice and months later, was crushed by the ice around. Before we abandoned the ship, Shackleton told us to rescue our most essential supplies—the small boats, our food, the cook stove, candles, clothes and blankets. None of us took our personal belongings, except a banjo usually used for parties and celebrations. ...... In the following days, staying alive took all our time and energy. _______ _____________________________________________________________ Staying alive was never easy, but staying positive seemed much more difficult. _____________________________________________________________ Activity 2 Examples of how verbs “draw” pictures How? How? Problems? Solutions? cold windy hungry thirsty find places to live get food get water make fire To stay alive Tightly _____ in blankets, we ______ under one of our boats. find places to live Activity 2 Examples of how verbs “draw” pictures Tightly wrapped in blankets, we crowded under one of our boats. Sometimes we ___________ on the rocky shore to ______ some ice from the ocean, so we could melt it for water. find places to live get water Activity 2 Examples of how verbs “draw” pictures Tightly wrapped in blankets, we crowded under one of our boats. Sometimes we walked around/struggled hard on the rocky shore to fetch some ice from the ocean, so we could melt it for water. For lack of food, we had to _______ seals and penguins for meat when they were on shore. find places to live get water get food Activity 2 Examples of how verbs “draw” pictures Tightly wrapped in blankets, we crowded under one of our boats. Sometimes we walked around/struggled hard on the rocky shore to fetch some ice from the ocean, so we could melt it for water. For lack of food, we had to catch/hunt seals and penguins for meat when they were on shore. And we also burned animal fat to make fire, which could ______ us but gave off oily black smoke. In such terrible circumstances, we were struggling to stay alive. find places to live get water get food make fire Activity 2 Examples of how verbs “draw” pictures Verbs Tightly wrapped in blankets, we crowded under one of our boats. Sometimes we walked around/struggled hard on the rocky shore to fetch some ice from the ocean, so we could melt it for water. For lack of food, we had to catch/hunt seals and penguins for meat when they were on shore. And we also burned animal fat to make fire, which could warm us but gave off oily black smoke. In such terrible circumstances, we were struggling to stay alive. Activity 2 Examples of how verbs “draw” pictures Pictures All these verbs “draw” the picture where __________. Verbs Tightly wrapped in blankets, we crowded under one of our boats. Sometimes we walked around/struggled hard on the rocky shore to fetch some ice from the ocean, so we could melt it for water. For lack of food, we had to catch/hunt seals and penguins for meat when they were on shore. And we also burned animal fat to make fire, which could warm us but gave off oily black smoke. In such terrible circumstances, we were struggling to stay alive. Activity 2 Examples of how verbs “draw” pictures Pictures All these verbs “draw” the picture where we were struggling to stay alive. Activity 3  “Nezha Teaches You How to Write!” Sentence Pattern 1: V1, V2 and V3 eg: Nezha ran,jumped up and fighted with the enemy . 学生：站起来 抓起书包 冲出教室 The student _________, _______his schoolbags and _________ the classroom like an arrow. stood up seized rushed out of The singer _________the audience, ______________ and ______ to sing. glanced at took a deep breath began 歌手： 瞥一眼观众 深吸一口气 开始演唱 哪吒： 跑 跳起来 打架 尖叫 奔跑 跳入井中 + + screamed ran away jumped into the well The man screamed, ran away and jumped into the well. Tip 1: 动作三连结构（A, B and C结构） 环顾四周 躺倒在地 用纸盖住脸 + + glanced around lay down on the ground covered her face with a piece of paper She glanced around, lay down on the ground and covered her face with a piece of paper. Tip 1: 动作三连结构（A, B and C结构） action chains 动作链 open the door put the elephant in the fridge close the door 将结果性的动作，分解成更细致的连贯性的微动作，使动作结果过程化。 Skill 1: Sb did A, did B and did C Pre-action（先前动作） Trans-action(过渡动作) Post-action (后续动作) 19 took off the clothes The boys rushed to the lake, + Describe：男孩们跳入湖中嬉戏。 jump = + 冲向湖边 脱掉衣服 跳入湖中 and jumped into the water. A B C Skill 1: Sb did A, did B and did C 即时训练： 20 Sentence Pattern 2: V1 （and V2）, doing/done eg: Aobing walked over to Nezha,crouched and comforted him. I put on my coat hurriedly, grabbed my schoolbag and rushed to school . 敖丙： 走 蹲下 安慰 我匆忙穿上外套，抓起书包，冲向学校。 在Jenny的鼓励下，Forrest看着前方，向前跑以躲避那些霸凌者。 __________by Jenny, Forrest _____________ and ______________ to escape those bullies. Encouraged looked ahead ran forward Skill 2 Non-finite verbs (非谓语动词) ① 主+谓, doing sth.（主动） / Doing sth. （主动）, 主＋谓 Observe（观察）: She rushed happily into the rain. She sang and danced. Upgrade（升级）: She rushed happily into the rain, singing and dancing. Singing and dancing, she rushed happily into the rain. 即时训练：哪吒从墙上跳下来。 Nezha jumped off the wall. heard Nezha ______ mom's words, _______ and _______ off the wall. smiled jumped 动作链： 非谓语动词： _______ mom's words, Nezha smiled and jumped off the wall. Hearing ②Having done sth, 主+谓 等了三个小时, 他被告知票被卖完了。 动作1 动作2 后发生的动作---用谓语动词 主动且先发生用非谓语动词表示（having done） Having waited for 3 hours, he was told that the tickets had been sold out. 同一主语动作有先后关系时用——Having done sth(先), 主+谓(后) queue ②Having done sth, 主+谓 即时训练： 1.得知我英语很好之后，他给了我一份打字的工作。 (know) that my English was very good, he (give) me a typing job. Having waited for a long time, I trudged through the snow to school alone/on my own/by myself. Having known gave 2.等了很久之后，我独自在雪地里跋涉(trudge through)到学校。 ③ Done sth. , 主+谓，doing sth. 孩子感动哭了，拥抱妈妈。 孩子被感动 ＋ 孩子哭了 The child was moved by his mothers’ words. The child began to cry. ______(move)by the story, the child began to cry,______ (hug) his mother surprised. 动作与主语逻辑关系为被动时 Moved ＋ 拥抱妈妈 The child hugged his mother. 动作与主语逻辑关系为主动时 hugging 动作链： 找动作： Encouraged by the teacher, he raised his hand high, answering,”I can do it” ③ Done sth. , 主+谓，doing sth. 即时训练： 2、受到老师的鼓舞，他高高的举起了手，回答：“我会做 ” 1、被外面美丽的景色所打动，这只柯基快乐地冲进雪里，又叫又跳。 （touch）by the beautiful scene outside, the Corgi (rush) into the snow joyfully, ___________(bark)and jumping. Touched rushed barking Sentence Pattern 3: ‘with’ structure eg: Nezha stood there ,with his spear in hand. I held a bowl and looked at my father nervously,with my legs shaking . 哪吒： 手拿着长枪 站着 我拿着碗，紧张地看着爸爸，双腿颤抖着。 最后，在只剩两分钟的时候，我们开进了汽车站。 Finally, with just two minutes we the bus station. left drove into Skill 3: ①主谓... , with+sb/sth+非谓语（doing/done/to do) ; ②With+ sb/sth+非谓语（doing/done/to do), 主谓…… Observe and find out the structure: 1、She sat by the window, with a cup of coffee growing cold in the hand. 2、With all things bought ，they went to the park. 3、With much homework to finish, he has no time to play. 即时训练： 她锁上了门，离开了房间。 With the door locked, she left the room. 主动 被动 未做 with + 宾语 + 宾补表达肢体动作  1. 头部动作:  with one's head + 过去分词/现在分词/形容词  With his head lowered, ...（他低着头）    With her head resting on her hand,...（她手托着头） With his head tilted back,...（他仰着头）       With his head bent , ... (他头低着) With head held up high , ... (头高高抬起) 2. 眼睛动作: with one's eyes + 过去分词/形容词 With eyes closed, ...（闭着眼睛）             With eyes fixed on , ...（盯着...） With eyes wide open, ...（睁大眼睛）      With eyes burning with fire , ... (眼睛因愤怒而发光) With eyes shining with pleasure , ...(眼睛因快乐而闪耀) With eyes wide with horror , ...(眼睛因恐惧而睁大) With eyes filled with / full of..., ...(眼睛充满着)   With eyes sparkling/glowing/shining/glistening with..., ...(眼睛因......发光) 3. 手部动作:  with one's hands + 过去分词/现在分词 With his hands crossed, ...（他双手交叉）      With her hands trembling, ...（她双手颤抖） With hands shaking, ...（手颤抖）             With hands waving , ...（手挥动） With hands sweating , ...（手出汗）            With hands clenched , ...（手紧握） 31 4. 脚步/腿部动作: with one's legs/feet + 过去分词/现在分词 With his legs crossed, ...（他跷着腿）          With her feet tapping, ...（她脚尖轻敲着）   With knees trembling, ...（他膝盖发抖）       With legs trembling , ... (腿颤抖) With legs kicking , ...(腿踢动)                  With legs frozen , ... (腿静止) With legs rooted to the spot , ... (腿一动不动) 5. 身体姿态:  with one's body + 过去分词/形容词/介词短语  With his body bent forward, ...（他身体前倾）   With shoulders hunched, ...（弓着肩）  With her arms folded, ...（她双臂交叉） 6. 嘴巴：with one's mouth + 过去分词/形容词    With her mouth open, ...（她张大嘴巴）  7. 手指： with one's fingers + 现在分词       With fingers drumming on the table, ...(他手指敲打着桌子） 8. 脸：with face +doing With face turning pale,...（脸变苍白）With face burning hot,... （脸火辣辣的） 9. 心：with heart +doing   With heart beating/pounding fiercely, ...(心剧烈跳动)   Tip 4: Add other modifiers （修饰语） delightedly, excitedly... angrily, anxiously... sadly, heart-brokenly,... surprisedly,... quickly, bravely.... Emotion Movement 1) Add adverbs（副词） The man let out a scream _________, ran away _________ and jumped into the well _________. 这位男子紧张地尖叫，赶紧跑开，勇敢地跳入井中。 Practice nervously quickly bravely Hearing mom's words, Nezha smiled ___________ and jumped off the wall _______________. Hearing mom's words, Nezha smiled and jumped off the wall. happily 添加副词： quickly surprise Nezha looked at his mom sadness 2) Add prepositional phrases（介词短语） anger fear in high spirits in surprise Nezha looked at his mom sadness 2) Add prepositional phrases（介词短语） anger fear in high spirits in When Nezha came, the villagers fled out of the house__________. in fear Hearing mom's words, Nezha smiled cheerfully and jumped off the wall briskly. 添加介词短语： Hearing mom's words, Nezha smiled cheerfully and jumped off the wall briskly____________________________________. in high spirits Summary Tip 2: Non-finite verbs (非谓语动词): ① 主+谓, doing sth.（主动） / Doing sth. （主动）, 主＋谓 ② Having done sth, 主+谓 ③ Done sth. , 主+谓，doing sth. Tip 3: ①主+谓... , with+sb/sth+非谓语（doing/done/to do) ; ②With+ sb/sth+非谓语（doing/done/to do), 主+谓…… Tip 4: 增加副词获介词短语 Tip 1: Sb did A, did B and did C Develop a story Never had I thought this great expedition with Sir Ernest Shackleton to travel across the Antarctic would end up in failure. ...... In the following days, staying alive took all our time and energy. Tightly wrapped in blankets, we crowded under one of our boats. Sometimes we walked around/struggled hard on the rocky shore to fetch some ice from the ocean, so we could melt it for water. For lack of food, we had to catch/hunt seals and penguins for meat when they were on shore. And we also burned/used animal fat to make fire, which could warm us but gave off oily black smoke. In such terrible circumstances, we were struggling to stay alive. Staying alive was never easy, but staying positive seemed much more difficult. _____________________________________________________________ Activity 4 Have a try! How? A possible version Staying alive was never easy, but staying positive seemed much more difficult. Every time we thought of our uncertain future, we sighed deeply and covered our faces with hands. To cheer us up, one of the sailors always played the banjo when we sat around the fire and recalled the past. If one of us felt down, others would comfort him with gentle words and encourage him to cheer up. The waiting process was really painful, but luckily, we persevered in staying alive. When we were finally rescued, we felt such relief and joy that all of us jumped up and screamed excitedly. Despite difficulties, optimism and teamwork carried us through the toughest times. Activity 4 Have a try! Let’s continue our “expedition” next time. Thanks for listening Lavf58.46.101 Lavf55.33.100 $$ Micro-Skills of Continuation Writing ---Verbs “draw” pictures 教学设计 Teaching Objectives: 1 理解并应用“以动词构建画面”的写作技巧，让学生意识到适当使用动词能够让故事画面感更强。 2 在“以动词构建画面”的写作技巧的帮助下完成读后续写的写作，提升写作意识，丰富写作技巧。 Teaching Methods: 1. Situation-based method; 2. Task-based method 3. Group cooperation Teaching procedures: ● Activity 1: Lead-in (3min) Task 1:Read the article and focus on the words in blue.Then choose some of the verbs to illustrate that“Verbs draw pictures”. Never had I thought this great expedition(探险) with Sir Ernest Shackleton to travel across the Antarctic would end up in failure. Our ship, Endurance, was stuck in ice and months later, was crushed by the ice around. Before we abandoned the ship, Shackleton told us to rescue our most essential supplies—the small boats, our food, the cook stove, candles, clothes and blankets. None of us took away our personal belongings, except a banjo(班卓琴) usually used for parties and celebrations. After months of struggle, we finally arrived at Elephant Island, but things went from bad to worse. Having assessed the situation, Shackleton decided to leave us to find help on South Georgia Island-this voyage was too dangerous and difficult for all of us to make it in our small boats. So twenty-two sailors, including me, watched as Shackleton and his boat sailed away, believing he would return to save us. Holding hands together, we all walked back to our temporary camp, promising to work together. ● Activity 2: Develop a story Task 2:Read the two starting sentences and predict the contents of the following two paragraphs: 1)How could they stay alive? 2) How could they stay positive? Answer the series of questions: 1) How could they stay alive? 2) What problems would they face?(cold, windy, hungry, thirsty) 3) What solutions could be adopted?(find places to live,get food, get water, make fire) Examples of how verbs“draw” pictures Give a detailed description of the four key points.Encourage students to adopt verbs that can help them imagine what was happening when they tried to stay alive. Verbs— Pictures Read the paragraph again and strengthen their awareness of using verbs. All these verbs“draw” the picture where we were struggling to stay alive. ● Activity 3: “Nezha Teaches You How to Write!” Tip 1: Sb did A, did B and did C Tip 2: Non-finite verbs (非谓语动词): ① 主+谓, doing sth.（主动） / Doing sth. （主动）, 主＋谓 ② Having done sth, 主+谓 ③ Done sth. , 主+谓，doing sth. Tip 3: ①主+谓... , with+sb/sth+非谓语（doing/done/to do) ; ②With+ sb/sth+非谓语（doing/done/to do), 主+谓…… Tip 4: 增加副词获介词短语 ● Activity 4: Group work Task 3:Apply the writing technique in groups.Fill in the gaps of the second paragraph, so Ss can take the chance to apply the writing technique into writing. Staying alive was never easy, but staying positive seemed much more difficult. Every time we thought of our uncertain future, we ______ . To cheer us up, one of the sailors always played the banjo when we ___________ . If one of us felt down, others _________ . The waiting process was really painful, but luckily, we __________ . When we were finally rescued, we felt such relief and joy that all of us _________ . Despite difficulties.optimism and teamwork carried us through the toughest times. After Ss worked in groups to fill in the gaps, Ss are encouraged to present their work. Read the possible version Every time we thought of our uncertain future,we sighed deeply and covered our faces with hands. To cheer us up, one of the sailors always played the banjo when we sat around the fire and recalled the past. If one of us felt down, others would comfort him with gentle words and encouraged him to cheer up. The waiting process was really painful, but luckily, we persevered in staying alive. When we were finally rescued, we felt such relief and joy that all of us jumped up and screamed excitedly. Despite difficulties,optimism and teamwork carried us through the toughest times. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$ Micro-Skills of Continuation Writing ---Verbs “draw” pictures 导学案 Task 1:Read the article and focus on the words in blue.Then choose some of the verbs to illustrate that“Verbs draw pictures”. Never had I thought this great expedition(探险) with Sir Ernest Shackleton to travel across the Antarctic would end up in failure. Our ship, Endurance, was stuck in ice and months later, was crushed by the ice around. Before we abandoned the ship, Shackleton told us to rescue our most essential supplies—the small boats, our food, the cook stove, candles, clothes and blankets. None of us took away our personal belongings, except a banjo(班卓琴) usually used for parties and celebrations. After months of struggle, we finally arrived at Elephant Island, but things went from bad to worse. Having assessed the situation, Shackleton decided to leave us to find help on South Georgia Island-this voyage was too dangerous and difficult for all of us to make it in our small boats. So twenty-two sailors, including me, watched as Shackleton and his boat sailed away, believing he would return to save us. Holding hands together, we all walked back to our temporary camp, promising to work together. Task 2:Examples of how verbs “draw” pictures. In the following days, staying alive took all our time and energy. Tightly __________ in blankets, we __________ under one of our boats. Sometimes we __________ on the rocky shore to __________ some ice from the ocean, so we could melt it for water. For lack of food, we had to __________ seals and penguins for meat when they were on shore. And we also burned/used animal fat to make fire, which could __________ us but gave off oily black smoke. In such terrible circumstances, we were struggling to stay alive. Task 3:Apply the writing technique in groups.Fill in the gaps of the second paragraph, so Ss can take the chance to apply the writing technique into writing. Staying alive was never easy, but staying positive seemed much more difficult. Every time we thought of our uncertain future, we ______ . To cheer us up, one of the sailors always played the banjo when we ___________ . If one of us felt down, others _________ . The waiting process was really painful, but luckily, we __________ . When we were finally rescued, we felt such relief and joy that all of us _________ . Despite difficulties.optimism and teamwork carried us through the toughest times. Feedback 1 What is the writing tip we learn today? _________________________________________________________________________________ 2 List verbs that impress you most in the class. _________________________________________________________________________________ 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$