读后续写--车轴上的温暖：一场松木车大赛的心灵救赎 讲义-广西壮族自治区柳州市柳南区柳州铁一中学2024-2025学年高二下学期4月期中英语试题

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Autumn in a small town meant an annual special event where the boys make small wood cars with the help of their dads for a big race: the Pinewood Derby. The Elks Club was crowded. The wooden racetrack was already set perfectly by old men who had spent their lives with levels and squares and pencils riding behind their ears. Before the race was the ceremonial (仪式的)walk-around — each car was displayed and confident boys were enjoying the honors. The room was full of anticipation. Fathers were reliving their youth and proudly watching their sons show themselves. In a corner was Scott, alone. No father. It was the first time that he had attended the event with his own car.He had always stood by and watched before. His car was a rough block painted red. The front axle (车轴) was bent. He stood with his head down. He knew he had to count on himself, so he devoted himself to“fighting with”the front axle. Perhaps the worst experience for a boy of twelve was to be unnoticed. Making the rounds and admiring the craftsmanship was Mark. He noticed. Mark was a local father who had unfortunately lost his own child. His heart, though empty, remained kind and compassionate. He was a man who understood the pain of a child's longing and the importance of a father's love. He watched as other boys and fathers moved silently past Scott's seemingly silly red car. Mark took a few extra steps and stood in front of Scott. “I like the color,” he said. Scott looked up with surprise and nervously responded, “You really like it, Mr. Mark? ” Scott couldn't believe Mr. Mark, who was skilled at making wood cars, liked his car. But there was something wrong with the front axle. Mark knelt down(跪下), his gaze level with Scott’ s. “I see you’ ve put a lot of effort into this,” he said sincerely. “The shape is unique, and I bet it' ll go fast.” 注意： 1.续写词数应为150个左右； 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Scott's eyes were wide open, surprised and doubtful. ————————————— The race began, and Scott's car sped down the track. 一、续写分析 第一段续写分析 核心内容：Mark 与 Scott 的互动深化，展现情感共鸣与成长。 情感转折： Scott 因 Mark 的真诚赞美而卸下心防，坦言自己独自制作赛车的不易（父亲缺席、工具简陋），甚至因车轴弯曲而自卑。 Mark 主动提出调整车轴，用随身携带的小工具细心校准，过程中分享自己曾与孩子一起制作赛车的回忆，用 “不完美才是独一无二” 鼓励 Scott。 细节刻画： 描写 Mark 的动作（“手指轻敲车轴”“从口袋掏出折叠扳手”）与语言（“你看，现在它像不像一只准备冲刺的红鹿？”），体现其耐心与温暖。 Scott 的心理变化：从 “攥紧衣角的手逐渐放松” 到 “眼睛发亮”，最后 “主动说起涂装红色的灵感来自母亲的围巾”，展现信任的建立。 第二段续写分析 核心内容：比赛过程与情感升华，突出鼓励的力量。 比赛场景： Scott 的赛车因车轴修复而平稳起跑，虽未夺冠，但在观众席的欢呼声中（尤其 Mark 的掌声）感受到认可。 赛后 Mark 赠送 Scott 一套迷你工具组，附卡片写着 “每个伟大工程师都需要好伙伴”，其他父亲也纷纷点赞其创意设计。 主题深化： Scott 意识到 “父亲的爱” 不仅限于血缘，也可以是陌生人的善意；Mark 则通过帮助 Scott，治愈了自己的丧子之痛，领悟到 “爱可以传递给需要的人”。 结尾用 “秋日阳光透过俱乐部窗户，在赛车上洒下金色光斑” 象征希望与温暖的延续。 二、故事线 孤独的参赛者：Scott 因父亲缺席，独自带着粗糙的红色赛车参加松木车大赛，自卑又渴望关注。 善意的察觉：丧子的父亲 Mark 注意到 Scott 的失落，主动用赞美打破隔阂。 温暖的修复：Mark 不仅调整车轴，更分享自己的故事，给予 Scott 情感支持。 勇敢的尝试：Scott 带着修复的赛车参赛，虽未获奖却收获尊重与自信。 爱的传递：Mark 在帮助中治愈心灵，Scott 理解 “父爱” 的多元形式，两人形成跨代际的情感联结。 3、 短语积累 count on oneself 依靠自己（Scott 的处境） fighting with 与... 较劲（修复车轴的努力） craftsmanship 工艺（赛车的制作细节） kneel down 跪下（Mark 的平等姿态） level with 与... 齐平（眼神交流的细节） unique shape 独特造型（赛车的亮点） sped down the track 冲下赛道（比赛动态） mini tool set 迷你工具组（Mark 的礼物） heartfelt compliment 真诚的赞美（情感的开端） unnoticed longing 无人察觉的渴望（Scott 的内心） heal a broken heart 治愈破碎的心（Mark 的转变） unspoken bond 无声的纽带（两人的默契） creative design 创意设计（赛车的价值） pass on love 传递爱（主题升华） sunlight 洒下 sunlight spills（环境烘托） 四、主旨升华句（5 句，含汉意） A father’s love isn’t confined to blood; it can be the kindness of a stranger who sees your struggle and chooses to stay. 父爱不限于血缘，也可以是陌生人看见你的挣扎后，选择停留的善意。 In the eyes of a child, a moment of sincere attention can mend a heart as effectively as a tool mends a bent axle. 在孩子眼中，一刻真诚的关注，能像工具修复弯曲车轴一样，有效治愈心灵。 Loss may hollow out a heart, but love has the power to fill it again—not by replacing what’s gone, but by sharing what remains. 失去可能会掏空一颗心，但爱有力量重新填满它 —— 不是通过替代失去的，而是通过分享留存的。 The most beautiful craftsmanship in life isn’t in perfecting details, but in perfecting the courage to show up as you are. 生命中最动人的 “工艺”，不在于完善细节，而在于完善 “做自己” 的勇气。 Sometimes, the greatest races aren’t about winning ribbons, but about finding someone who cheers for your red car, flaws and all. 有时，最伟大的比赛不在于赢得缎带，而在于找到为你的红色赛车（连同瑕疵）欢呼的人。 5、 写作示范 范文一： Scott's eyes were wide open, surprised and doubtful. “Nobody’s ever said that before,” Scott mumbled, staring at his red car as if seeing it for the first time. Mark gently turned the axle, his thumb brushing away a smudge of paint. “My son and I once made a car that looked like a squashed pumpkin,” he said quietly. “It lost every race, but we laughed so hard painting its silly face.” Scott’s shoulders relaxed. “My dad… he’s always too busy,” he whispered. Mark nodded, handing him a small wrench. “Let’s see if we can make this axle sing.” Together, they adjusted the angle, Mark explaining how “a little tilt can turn a wobble into a winner.” When Scott finally smiled, the room seemed to brighten. The race began, and Scott's car sped down the track. It wasn’t the fastest, but it held steady, wobble-free. The crowd cheered as it crossed the finish line in fourth place—far better than Scott had dared hope. Mark hugged him tightly, saying, “That red blur? It looked like fire on wheels.” Later, as Scott examined the tool set Mark gifted him, he found a note: Every car needs a co-pilot. You’ve got mine. The next year, Scott returned with a new car—still red, now decorated with tiny silver wrenches. And beside him stood Mark, wearing a proud smile, finally finding a way to share the love he’d once thought lost. 范文二： Scott's eyes were wide open, surprised and doubtful. Mark pointed to the car’s rough edges. “See this curve? It’s like a mountain trail—full of stories.” Scott hesitated, then confessed he’d used his mom’s old baking pan to shape the body. Mark laughed warmly. “Genius! Aerodynamics from a kitchen! My boy and I used to steal my wife’s cookie cutters for decals.” He pulled a small screwdriver from his pocket. “Mind if I help with the axle? I’ve got a trick or two.” As they worked, Scott talked about his mom’s red scarf (where the paint color came from), and Mark listened, nodding like it was the most important thing in the room. The race began, and Scott's car sped down the track. Cheers erupted as the red car zoomed past three competitors before slowing at the finish. Scott’s hands trembled as he accepted a “Most Creative Design” ribbon from the Elks Club president. Mark knelt again, this time to pin the ribbon on Scott’s shirt. “You see, kid? Courage looks good on you.” That night, Scott wrote in his journal: Mr. Mark said my car was like a story—maybe someday I’ll write one about how he fixed more than just an axle. And in Mark’s garage, a new photo joined the shelf: Scott grinning beside his red car, with the caption: Legacy of love, rebuilt. 范文三： Scott's eyes were wide open, surprised and doubtful. Mark’s fingers hovered over the bent axle, as if sensing the weight of loneliness it carried. “I used to think perfection was the point,” he said, voice soft. “But my son taught me it’s the cracks that let the light in.” He gently 掰直 (straightened) the axle with steady pressure. “There—now it’s not just a car. It’s a survivor.” Scott traced the now-straight axle, feeling the warmth of Mark’s hand still near his. “You’re not just fixing metal, are you?” he asked. Mark smiled sadly. “No, kid. I’m fixing us both.” The race began, and Scott's car sped down the track. The red blur carried more than wood and paint; it carried the echo of two broken hearts mending. When it finished, not in glory but in dignity, Mark’s applause was the loudest. He presented Scott with a keychain shaped like a wrench, engraved with For the builder. “I used to give these to my son,” he said. “Now I’m giving one to you.” Scott clutched it, understanding without words. In the autumn sunlight, their shadows—one tall, one small—stretched together on the racetrack, a new kind of family. 范文四： Scott's eyes were wide open, surprised and doubtful. Mark’s compliment felt like a match struck in the dark. “Tell me about making this,” he urged. Scott started hesitantly, then poured out how he’d stayed up late, using his math ruler as a saw, how he’d painted it red because it was the color of bravery in his favorite book. Mark listened, then said, “Bravery isn’t about having all the tools. It’s about starting with what you’ve got.” He adjusted the axle with a flick of his wrist. “There—now it’s brave and balanced.” Scott smiled, for the first time proud of his “rough block.” The race began, and Scott's car sped down the track. It didn’t win, but as it raced, Scott heard Mark’s voice in his head: “It’s the cracks that let the light in.” When the announcer praised its “heartfelt design,” the crowd cheered, and Scott realized they weren’t just cheering for a car—they were cheering for him. Later, Mark hugged him and said, “You taught me something today, kid. Love isn’t a checklist. It’s showing up.” As Scott walked home, the keychain Mark gave him jingled in his pocket, a reminder that some connections are forged not by blood, but by the courage to care. 六．读后续写参考答案： Scot's eyes were wide open,sarprlsed and doubtfiul."Bu...but it's not as good as the others,The front axle is bent,"hestaramered.Mark gently pated his shoulder and said,"Don't worry.Sometimes,the most special things are a bit diferent.Let'ssee what we cam do about that axle.”Mark spent the nesxt few minutes carefully straightening the axle with a small tcol hehappened to have in his pocket.As he worked,he chatted with Scott,sharing some simpletips on car making.Scott listenedintently,his shyness gradually replaced by excitement. The race began,azed Seot's car sped down zhe track.To everyone's astonishment,it was one of the fastest.Scot jumpedup and dowm,his face beaming with joy.He looked around and found Mark in the crowd,giving him a big thumbs-up.After therace,Scot rushed towards Mark,"Mr.Mark,thank you so much!I couldn't have done it without you,"he said,his voice filledwith gratitude.Mark smiled and replied,"You did all the hard work,Scot.I just saw the potential in you and your car."Fromthat day on,Scott no longor felt alone.Mark became a father-figure to him,and their bond grew stronger with each passing day. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$