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Unit 12
Innovation
Writing Workshop
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1.To understand the structure of an essay.
2.To write an essay about an inventor and his/her invention.
Learning objectives
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James Watt And The Steam Engine
Who was James Watt?
What's his story with the steam engine?
Let's see what to write and how to organise the information.
Lead-in
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You are going to write about an inventor and his / her invention that you find amazing. Discuss the questions.
medicine?
communications?
transport?
education?
entertainment?
medicine?
communications?
transport?
education?
entertainment?
...
Pre-Writing
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Which inventor?
Which invention ?
How?
What influence?
Read for writing
Read the essay “James Watt and the Steam Engine”. Answer the questions.
1. Who was James Watt?
2. What did he improve?
3. What contribution did he make to human history?
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Read for writing
1. Who was James Watt?
James Watt was an engineer, scientist and inventor, who was born in Scotland in 1736.
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2. What did he improve?
The Steam Engine he invented was a great improvement on the Newcomen steam engine, which was commonly used at the time.
Read for writing
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3. What contribution did he made to human history?
His invention changed the course of human history. Steam engines helped to power factories that started the Industrial Revolution.
Read for writing
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James Watt was an engineer, scientist and inventor, who was
born in Scotland in 1736. As a child, he was gifted in the
areas of maths and science.
who引导的非限定从
作为
be gifted in 在某方面有天赋
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One day when he was 12 years old, he was sitting in
his family kitchen watching a kettle boiling water. As the
water boiled, the steam made the top of the kettle bounce up
and down. He thought deeply about (what was happening), as
steam was only water but seemed to be powerful enough to lift
a kettle top.
was/were doing 过去进行时
现在分词做伴随状语
watch ... doing sth 看...做某事
顶部,(容器的)盖子
上下跳动
what引导的宾从
因为
be+adj+enough to do sth 足够...可以做某事
当...时候
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He reflected further on the process, estimating how much
more power could be created by a larger amount of water.
Later he began to experiment with steam and eventually
developed the steam engine. This was a great improvement
on the Newcomen steam engine, which was commonly used
at the time.
which引导的非限定从,指代Newcomen steam engine
reflect on 仔细思考,反思
非谓语
large-larger-largest
用...进行实验
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Para. 1 How can we introduce the inventor?
Tips 1: The birth time /place / a job or profession are included .
Attributive clauses make sentences concise and powerful
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How did he make the improvement? Find the key expressions.(v. time )
What do the verbs do?
What do the time expressions do?
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Tips 2: These verbs are important , indicating the four stages about a creative process —— preparation, incubation , evaluation and elaboration.
These time expressions are used to introduce the inventing process as well as the the four stages about a creative process .
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Mark the following parts in the essay.
a The inventor and the invention
b The inspiration of the invention and the inventor’s research
c The influence of the invention
In fact, the essay has a specific structure that each paragraph explains one of the parts above. And these three pieces of information are presented in order.
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The inventor and the invention
The inspiration of the invention and the inventor’s research
The influence of the invention
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Write 2-3 sentences for your essay introducing an inventor and his / her invention. Use the Sentence Builder to help you.
Sentence Builder
Time Expressions (2)
James Watt was an engineer, scientist and inventor, who was born in Scotland in 1736.
One day when he was 12 years old, he was sitting in his family kitchen watching a kettle boiling water.
As the water boiled, the steam made the top of the kettle bounce up and down.
Later, he began to experiment with steam, and eventually developed a steam engine.
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Search online for more information about the inventor and the invention you are going to write about.
Take notes of the information in order of time.
Focus on the most important and interesting facts.
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Outlining
Complete the outline of your essay based on Activity 4.
My Outline
Inventor: ______________
Invention: ______________
Inspiration and research: _____________
Influence of the invention:_____________
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..., a great ..., was born in ... and died in ... He / She invented ...
Born in ... and dying in ..., ... was a remarkable ..., who invented ...
During his / her time, ... was popular, but he / she found ...
In order to change this situation, ... invented ..., which allowed ..., and greatly reduced ... costs.
When working as ..., ... used ... to ..., which had many disadvantages.
To change that, ... improved ... by using ... The biggest advantage was that ..., because ...
... invention revolutionised ... and it had a far-reaching impact on ...
... was a great revolution in the history of ..., which made a great contribution to ...
Outlining
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Drafting
Use your outline and the Writing Help to write your first draft.
Writing an Introduction of an Inventor and His / Her Invention
It’s important to:
make your essay well-structured and include the inventor, the inventing process (inspiration), and the influence of the invention
Writing Help
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Writing an Introduction of an Inventor and His/Her Invention
It’s important to:
use a variety of time expressions to introduce how the invention came about;
use the past tense to describe the inventor’s actions in creating the invention.
Writing Help
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开头:对人物进行简要介绍,如身份、出生日期、家庭及爱好等
Stephen Hawking,世界上最具影响力的科学家之一,1942年出生于牛津。
Stephen Hawking, one of the world’s most influential scientists, was born in Oxford, in 1942.
他为物理学的发展做出了重大贡献。
He made great contributions to the advance of physics.
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主体:详细介绍人物,如人物特点,生平大事、成就,可按照时间顺序或主次地位描述。
1966年毕业于剑桥大学,霍金取得了物理学博士学位。
不幸的是,他得了一种名为渐冻症的罕见的疾病
Graduating from University of Cambridge in 1966, Hawking got a doctor’s degree in physics.
Unfortunately, he had a rare disease named ALS.
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结尾:对人物进行评价或发表感想
毫无疑问,霍金被认为是一个伟大的科学家,不仅因为他的研究,更因为他的乐观的人生态度。
There is no doubt that Hawking is regarded as a great scientist, not only for his studies, but also for his optimistic attitude to life.
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Alexander Graham Bell is one of the most famous inventors in the world.
Born in Scotland in 1847, Bell became a knowledgeable person by learning continuously. After years of experimenting, in the year of 1876, he invented the telephone, which is widely used and has a great influence on our daily life today.
Although the invention of the telephone made Bell wealthy, he never stopped his research. He continued to work and invented a lot of other useful equipment. Moreover, he was also a successful teacher of the deaf.
In 1992, Bell died in Canada. However, his attitude towards science and his love for the deaf still inspire us today.
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Write your draft
Use what you have learnt to write an introduction of an inventor and his / her invention according to your outline and the Writing Help.
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While-Writing
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The following expressions can be helpful.
Part 1:
The inventor & the invention
Perhaps no other scientist has had a greater impact on … than …;
… become a pioneer in …;
What might have made him such an outstanding and creative scientist was …;
…was one of the most famous and gifted scientists in ... ;
The computer is one of the most important inventions ... ;
The invention of space rocket has opened a new era for mankind.
While-Writing
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Part 3:
The influence of the invention
Part 2:
The inspiration & the research
… finally proved his idea because he found an outbreak that was clearly related to …;
… had been studying … in the laboratory when the discovery happened …;
… helped … organize his ideas …;
The evidence clearly pointed to …;
… began to work on … so that he was able to develop …
Their inventions, solution to problems, … are appreciated by …;
Human life on this planet has been transformed into …;
… had made him one of the greatest … of the 21st centuries.
While-Writing
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Make an evaluation of your essay.
Evaluation Self Group
Structure Is the writing well-structured, including the inventor, the inventing process, the influence of the invention?
Content Does the writing contain all the dominant elements to support the structure?
Language Does the writer use the past tense to describe the inventor’s actions?
Does the writer use a variety of time expressions to introduce the inventing process?
Handwriting Is the writing neat and clear?
Post-Writing
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Finish your introduction and make some improvements according to your peer’s opinion.
Homework
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