内容正文:
对应学生P32
[技能突破一] 定主旨意图———明确方向
读后续写不是脱离开原文材料的独立创作.
而是顺着原文作者的思路完成作者未完成的文
本,动手续写前,应先认真阅读原文材料,理清原
文的人物、故事情节的发展线和情感线,把握原文
的主旨大意和写作意图:①记叙文类的主旨大意,
即原文讲述的主要事件和结果;而写作意图是指
故事主要内容传递给考生的信息,可以是情,也可
以是理;②准确理解原文,根据“谁发生了什么”,
快速理清原文对主要人或物的讲述并整理相关事
件,提炼出主旨大意和写作意图;③续写部分要在
主旨大意和写作意图上与原文保持一致.
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头
语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文.
Duringthispastyear,IvehadthreeinG
stancesofcartrouble.Eachtimethesethings
happened,Iwassickof
the way mostpeople
hadntbotheredtohelp.(失 望)Oneofthose
times,Iwasonthesideoftheroadforcloseto
threehourswithmybigJeep.Iputsignsinthe
windows,bigsignsthatsaidNEEDAJACK (千
斤顶),andofferedmoney.Nothing.RightasIwasabouttogiveup
(失望),aMexicanfamilyinasmal
truckpuledover,andthefatherboundedout.
Hesizedupthesituationandcaledforhis
daughter,who spoke English. He conveyed
throughherthathehadajackbutthatitwastoo
smalfortheJeep,sowewouldneedsomething
tosupportit.Thenhegotasaw(锯子)fromthe
truckandcutasectionoutofabiglogonthe
sideoftheroad.Weroleditoverandputhis
jackontop,andwewereinbusiness.
Istartedtakingthewheeloff,andthen,if
youcanbelieveit,Ibrokehistireiron.NoworG
ries
:Hehandedittohiswife,andshewasgone
inaflashdowntheroadtobuyanewtireiron.
Shewasbackin15minutes.(家人一起帮忙).We
finishedthejob,andIwasaveryhappyman.
(高兴)
Thetwoofusweredirtyandsweaty.His
wifepreparedapotofwaterforustowashout
hands.Itriedtoputa$20bilinthemanshand,(作者的感激之情)buthewouldnttakeit,soinG
steadI wentuptothetruckand gaveittohis
wifeasquietlyasIcould.
Iaskedthelittlegirlwheretheylived.
(作者的感激之情)Mexico,
shesaid.TheywereinOregonso Mommyand
Daddycouldworkonafruitfarmforthenext
fewweeks.Thentheywouldgohome.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式作答.
WhenIwasabouttosaygoodbye,thegirl
askedifIdhadlunch.
Aftertheyleft,Igotinto myJeepand
openedthepaperbag.
[第一步] 把握原文大意,明主旨和两线
主旨大意 作者的汽车出故障后,本以为无人愿意帮忙,没想到墨西哥一家人不嫌麻烦,不计回报,帮作者修好汽车.
原文两线
情节线:汽车出故障→好心人帮忙修车→支付报酬
情感线:disappointed→happy→grateful
写作意图 讲述了一个不计报酬和回报的助人为乐的故事,体现了无私奉献精神和爱心的继续传递.
[第二步] 根据首句信息,定续写方向
两段首句
定框架
第一段首句
根据第一段首句关键信息“thegirlaskedifIdhadlunch”可知,续写可接着写作者对此
的回答;接着叙述是否一起吃午饭.
第二段首句 第二段关键信息“thepaperbag”可逆推出,该段应提及墨西哥家庭给了作者一个纸袋子.
两段首句
显能量
①根据第二段首句中的“openedthepaperbag”,第一段首句中的“lunch”和原文中的“a$20bil 可叙
述纸袋里是吃的和20美元;②尾句应呼应原文主题写出感悟,体现正能量:payitforward.
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[第三步] 原、续两线同,加合理细节
◎两“线”相同 续写部分情节线和情感线的发展,应与原文故事情节线和情感线一致.如图:①续写部
分的情节线是和墨西哥家庭一起吃午饭→给作者纸袋→打开纸袋→在纸袋里发现什么,应侧重面部表
情、心理活动和动作细节描写;②情感线的走向应是惊喜→惊讶→感激→感动等情感描写.
◎添加细节 在描写墨西哥家庭邀请作者吃午饭时,可利用面部表情(如微笑)和动作细节描写.情感细
节方面的描写,叙述作者打开纸袋发现里面的东西时应该侧重描写惊喜、惊讶、感激、感动等情感.
[第四步] 依照语言特点,原、续融一体
原文利用简单句、并列句、非谓语动词和主从复合句,进行动作描写(加框内容)和情感描写(画波浪
线内容),续写部分可利用适当的并列句、非谓语和复合句描写动作和情感.
[第五步] 临摹衡水字体,打造完美卷面
WhenIwasabouttosaygoodbye,thegirlaskedifIdhadlunch.AbrightsmileflashedonherfacewhenI
saidIhadnt.Thefamilyinvitedmetoenjoythelunchtogether.Originaly,Irefusedbutwatchingtheirenthusiastic
facesInoddedwithgratitude.Wesharedawonderfulmeal,overwhichtheysharedinterestingstoriesabouttheir
livesinMexicoandonfruitfarms.Afterlunch,thegirlsmotherputapaperbagoffruitinmyJeep.Ishowedmy
gratitudeagainandwesaidgoodbyetoeachother.
Aftertheyleft,IgotintomyJeepandopenedthepaperbag.Insidethebagweresomefruits.Iwasalsosurprised
tofindthe$20bil.Iwasovercomewithamixtureofrespectandgratitude.Itwasawesometoknowthatwhile
manypeopletendtoignorethoseinneed,therearesomekindGheartedoneswhogooutoftheirwaytolendahand.
Thegooddeedtheforeignfamilydidwilneverescapeme.ImsureIwilpayitforward!
[技能突破二] 据两段首句———构思框架 对应学生P33
根据“两段首句定一框,二框二首正能量”的
原则确定续写方向.①两段首句定一框:根据第
一段首句关键信息与第二段首句关键信息确定续
写部分第一段的续写框架,同时注意情节发展合
情合理.②二框二首正能量:根据第二段首句关
键信息推断第二段情节和情感发展,并结合正能
量结尾的续写原则确定第二段的续写框架.
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头
语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文.
“Im goingto missyouso much,Poppy,”
saidthetal,thinteenager.Hebentdown
tohughisoldfriendgoodbye.Hestoodup
,hugged
his
parents,andsmiled
,tryingnottolethisemotions
(情绪)getthebetterofhim.(hugged出现2次:
男孩与小狗和父母的依依不舍)
Hisparents were notquiteableto keep
theirsundercontrol.Theyhaddriventheirson
severalhoursoutoftowntotheuniversitywhere
hewouldsoonbelivingandstudying.Itwastime
tosay goodbyefornow atleast.Thefamily
hugged
andsmiled
throughmistyeyes
andthen
laughed
.(再次出现hugged和smiled:含泪拥抱,
微笑告别,体现一家人的依依不舍和浓浓的亲情)
Theboylifted
thelastbagontohisshoulG
der,andflashedabrightsmile.
“Iguessthisis
it.”hesaid.“Ilseeyoubackhomeinamonth,
okay?”Hisparentsnodded
,andtheywatched
as
he walked
out of sightinto the crowds of
hundredsofstudentsand parents.The boys
motherturnedto
thedog,“Okay,Poppy,timeto
gobackhome.”
Thehouseseemedquietasatombwithouttheboylivingthere
.(比喻)Althatweek,Poppy
didntseeminterested
inherdinner,herfavorite
toy,oreveninherdailywalk.Herownerswere
sad
too,buttheyknewtheirsonwouldbebackto
visit,Poppydidnt.(一家人郁郁寡欢)
Theyofferedthedogsomeofherfavorite
peanutbuttertreats.Theyevenlethersitonthe
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sofa,buttheoldgirljustwasntherusualcheerGfulself
.Her ownersstartedto get worried
,
“WhatshouldwedotocheerPoppyup?”asked
Dad.“Wevetriedeverything.”
“Ihaveanidea,butitmightbealittlecraG
zy,”smiled Mom.“Withoutanybodyleftinthe
housebutus,thisplacecoulduseabitoffun.
LetsgetalittledogforPoppy.
”
It didnt take long before they walked
throughthefrontdoorcarryingabigbox.Poppy
welcomedthemhomeasusual,butwhenshesaw
thebox,shestopped
.Sheputhernoseon
it.Her
tailbeganwagging
(摆动)eversoslowly
,then
faster
asshecaught
thesmel.(一系列肢体动作
暗示Poppy的心理变化,为续写埋下伏笔)
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右.
2.请按如下格式作答.
Dadopenedtheboxandasweetlittledog
appeared.
Afew weekslater,theboyarrivedhome
fromtheuniversity.
[第一步] 把握原文大意,明主旨和两线
主旨大意 男孩离家上大学和父母和狗(Poppy)依依惜别.Poppy自此闷闷不乐,男孩父母决定为它找一个伴.
原文两线
情节线:含泪微笑拥抱道别→回到家中Poppy闷闷不乐茶饭不思→父母想办法哄Poppy开心→提议
寻一只小狗作伴.
情感线:(Poppy)sad→upset&lonely→(parents)sad→worried
写作意图 通过解决Poppy的情绪问题,体现家人之间、人与狗之间的爱、和谐和温情.
[第二步] 根据首句信息,定续写方向
两段首句
定框架
第一段
首句
首句衔接段首语中的“asweetlittledogappeared”描写Poppy好奇和戒备的反应,接着叙述
Poppy与初来乍到的小狗如何相处.
第二段
首句
由原文尾句描写父母认为Poppy快乐起来是给儿子的惊喜,呼应第二段段首语.
两段首句
显能量
①首句衔接段首语“theboyarrivedhome”,可描写男孩和Poppy的拥抱,接着可叙述男孩见到小狗的
反应.②尾句呼应原文主旨:人与狗之间的亲情与和谐.
[第三步] 原、续两线同,加合理细节
◎两“线”相同 续写部分情节线体现的是:接纳小狗→和小狗和谐相处→父母高兴→男孩到家受到
Poppy和小狗的欢迎→一家人享受快乐时光.情感线走向:curious→excited→cheerful→(父母)relieved
→(男孩)homesick→confused→happy.
◎添加细节 ①动作细节:第一段描述Poppy与小狗如何和谐相处,可描写狗的动作、叫声等以增添故事
的画面感.②情感细节:着重描述Poppy从郁郁寡欢到惊喜、快乐的情感变化.
[第四步] 依照语言特点,原、续融一体
原文用大量的简单句和并列句,少量复合句和非谓语进行动作和情感描写,续写部分应利用简单句、
并列句、复合句和非谓语动词进行动作和情感描写,同时沿用原文在描写情感时利用大量形容词(见原文
画波浪线部分)的手法.
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[第五步] 临摹衡水字体,打造完美卷面
Dadopenedtheboxandasweetlitledogappeared.Poppywasalitlecautiousatfirst,backingaway
asthelitlecreaturestruggledtogetoutofthebox.Butaftersnifingtheairforawhile,shegotabitcloser,
andthenletoutacheerfulbarkasshestartedlickingthelitledoghappily.Thetwodogssoonchasedeachother,
joyfulandexcited,soweretheparents,whowatchedthescene.“Itrealywilbeagreatsurpriseforourson.”
saidMom,exchangingadelightedsmilewithDad.
Afewweekslater,theboyarivedhomefromtheuniversity.Howsurprisedhewaswhenheopenedthedoor,
ashewasnotonlygreetedbyPoppyswarmhug,butalso“atacked”byatinycreature.“Wow,MomandDad,
youvegotapartnerforPoppy,”saidtheboyashehuggedhisparentstightly.Thatafternoon,thethreeplayed
happilyinthelivingroom,whiletheparentspreparedtheireveningfeast.Thatevening,thefamilysathappily,
enjoyingdinnerandmostimportantly,thetimetogether.
[技能突破三] 造故事冲突———扣人心弦 对应学生P35
高考读后续写选材为积极的正能量,虽话题
广泛,但基本围绕“Conflict& Solution”展开叙
述,所涉及的冲突主要有4类:①人间自有真情系
列(主人公遇到贫困、残疾或孤独、失败或自卑等
困境);②迷路或苦恼系列;③脱险(摆脱危险的动
物、人或环境)系列;④争吵(误解、背叛或伤害)系
列.解决冲突基本通过4个途径:①他人的:enG
couragement、comfort、kindness、love 和 help;
②他物:如河流、太阳等;③自己的:courage、efG
fort、calmness和inspiration;④自然:突出和谐、
时间和成长.
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头
语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文.
Onefal,my wifeEliandIhadasingle
goal,tophotographpolarbears.WewerestaG
yingataresearchcampoutside“thepolarbearcapG
italoftheworld”—thetownofChurchilinManitoG
ba,Canada.
Takingpicturesofpolarbearsisamazingbut
alsodangerous.Polarbears—likeal wildaniG
mals—shouldbephotographedfromasafedisG
tance.WhenImfacetofacewithapolarbear.I
likeittobethroughacamerawithatelephoto
lens.Butsometimes,thatiseasiersaidthan
done.Thiswasoneofthosetimes.
AsEliandIcookeddinner,ayoungmale
polarbear who wasplayinginanearbylake
sniffed,andsmeledourgarlicbread.
Thehungrybearfolowedhisnosetoour
camp,which wassurrounded bya high wire
fence.Hepuledandbitthewire.Hestoodonhis
backlegsandpushedatthewoodenfenceposts.
Terrified,
EliandItriedalthebeardefenseacG
tionsweknew.We yeled atthebear,hit pots
hard,and fired blankshotgunshelsintotheair.
Sometimesloudnoiseslikethesewilscarebearsof.
Notthispolarbearthough—hejustkepttryingto
teardownthefencewithhismassivepaws(爪子).
Iradioedthecamp managerforhelp.He
toldmeahelicopterwasonitsway,butitwould
be30minutesbeforeitarrived.Makingthebest
ofthiscloseencounter(相遇),ItooksomepicG
turesofthebear.
EliandIfearedthefence wouldntlast
through30 moreminutesofthebearspunishG
ment.ThecampmanagersuggestedIusepepper
spray.Thespray burnsthebearseyes,but
doesnthurtthem.SoIapproachedouruninvitG
edguestslowlyand,throughthefence,sprayed
himintheface.Withanangryroar(吼叫),the
bearrantothelaketowashhiseyes.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式作答.
Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbackto
ourcamp.
Atthatvery moment,thehelicopterarG
rived.
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[第一步] 把握原文大意,明主旨和两线
主旨大意 本文主要讲述了作者和妻子待在营地准备冒险拍摄北极熊,结果北极熊闯入,一场人熊大战即将展开.
原文两线
情节线:在营地等待拍摄北极熊→一头北极熊被美味吸引试图闯入→制造噪音无法吓退北极熊而向营
地经理求助→喷胡椒粉喷雾剂暂时赶走北极熊
情感线:excited,nervous→surprised→worried,frightened→anxious→alittlerelieved
写作意图 人与北极熊对抗并成功脱险,主人公成功拍照心想事成.
[第二步] 根据首句信息,定续写方向
两段首句
定框架
第一段首句
首句衔接段首语,可描写被喷雾刺痛眼睛的北极熊肯定被激怒了,会更猛烈地袭击围栏,
主人公需采取有效办法避险,如利用随身物品应对北极熊的攻击,可写妻子的动作和情
绪,烘托场面的危急.
第二段首句
尾句可将人与熊的冲突推到最大,营造危急的场景,如北极熊马上要破栏而入,呼应第二
段段首语中的“verymoment”.
两段首句
显能量
①首句衔接段首语“thehelicopterarrived”可描写人物“绝处逢生的喜悦”作为第二段开头,接着叙述利
用直升机的优势解决问题,如利用螺旋桨发出的巨大声响吓走北极熊成功脱险等;②尾句应呼应原文
主旨:成功拍照.
[第三步] 原、续两线同,加合理细节
◎两“线”相同 续写部分的两线的发展应与原文两线一致,达到“两情相悦”,续写部分情节线是:双方对
峙→采用新办法避险→脱离险境→拍好照片.情感线是:紧张→恐惧→松一口气但仍心有余悸.
◎添加细节 ①心理描写:夫妇二人面对北极熊一定很恐惧,但脱险后,心理活动会有变化,既感慨逃过一劫又
觉得不虚此行,可通过直接或间接的方式,刻画人物心理.②环境描写:在渲染北极熊袭击围栏的危险场景时,
可描写时间紧迫或用拟人的手法描写周围的事物(如风声、草等),间接烘托人物内心的恐惧.
[第四步] 依照语言特点,原、续融一体
原文利用简单句、并列句、非谓语动词和主从复合句,进行动作描写(加框内容)、情感描写(画波浪线
内容)和心理描写(加下划线内容),续写部分可利用适当的并列句、非谓语和复合句描写动作和情感.
[第五步] 临摹衡水字体,打造完美卷面
Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.Roaringevenmoreangrilythistime,hesmashedhis
pawscrazilyagainstthewirefence.EliandIscreamedatthetopofourlungsandwavedourfistsathiminan
atempttoscarehimaway.Toourdisappointment,altheseefortswereinvain.Thebearviolentlydashed
againstthewoodenpostswhichwereevidentlyonthepointofcolapsing!Chilywindswhippingourfaces,wecould
hearnothingbutthesoundofourheartsbeatingviolentlyinourchests.
Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarived.Thegustingwindfromthehoveringvehiclewipedawayourfear
immediately.Outofthehelicopterdescendedaropetopulusup.Thriledyetrelieved,wegrabbedtheropeand
eventualylandedonthehelicoptersafeandsound.Whilelookingatthebearfromhighabove,Iwasamazedto
spothimcrushthefenceandrushfortheinvitinggarlicbread.AtthisonceGinGaGlifetimemoment,Ireachedinto
mybackpackandpuledoutthecameraphotographingthatimpressivescene.
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[技能突破四] 加合理细节———亮人一眼 对应学生P37
确定续写部分的基本情节后,应添加合理的
细节,用人物动作、心理活动、表情、语言和环境等
描写丰富内容,增强叙述的画面感:①添加的细节
要符合续写部分的叙述情境且应与原文已有的、
与该细节相关的信息(情感线和细节线或伏笔)一致;
②添加的细节中所描述的事件应紧扣原文中描写外
貌(外观)、表情、动作和语言等反映人或物特点的词.
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头
语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文.
My11GyearGolddaughter,Elizabeth,started
totalkaboutquittingswimming,whichbrokemyheart
becauseshelovesswimming.Sowhen
theswimseasonbegan,Icutadealwithher.
ShewouldpracticethreetimesaweekandtryreG
alyhard.Iwouldntmakehercompeteinthe
swimmeets.Elizabethdoesnotlikeswimmeets.
Shegetshorriblynervous
butnotbecauseshe
wantstowin.Shedoesntcareifshewins.
Recently,ElizabethsteamannouncedaspeG
cialswim night:Members11andolderwould
swimatimed50metersrelay.Itwasntexactlya
meet,becauseitwouldinvolveonlyteam memG
bers.Thatwasmyview.Elizabetharguedthatit
absolutelywasa meetbecausethere wouldbe
races.ItoldElizabethIrealywantedhertogo.
Shefoughtbackangrily
butfinalyagreed.
WhenthedayofthespecialswimnightarG
rivedElizabethwasnervous.
ShewastheyounG
gestpersonandshorterbyatleastafootthan
mostoftheotherkids.Shepanicked
whenitwas
timefortheTGshirtrelay.Therelayworkslike
this:Onepersonfromeachrelayteamputsona
TGshirt,apairofsocksandaswimcap;swims
50 meters;and gets out ofthe pool.She
takesofftheclothesandputsthemonthenext
person,whothenswims50meters.ThiscontinG
uesuntileveryoneontheteam hascompleted
alap.
ThenitwasElizabethsturntoswim.She
seemedtoswimfasterintheTGshirtandsocks
thanshedid whenshe wasnt wearingthem.
Approachingthehalfway mark,Elizabethwas
inthelead.Suddenly,somebody noticed that
oneofElizabethssockshadfalenoffandwas
floating(漂)inthepool.“Shehastogetthat
sockonbeforetheendoftherace.”aswimming
officialtoldElizabethsteam.“oryouwilbedisG
qualified.”
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右.
2.请按如下格式作答.
Everybodyonherteam startedscreaming
“Elizabeth! Getthesock!”
Ontheridehome,shesharedhermomentof
winningagainandagain.
[第一步] 把握原文大意,明主旨和两线
主旨
大意
本文主要讲述了作者的女儿Elizabeth要参加游泳比赛,赛前很紧张,害怕游不好,比赛时袜子却脱落了,不
及时穿上袜子就会被取消资格.
原文
两线
情节线:女儿努力训练→作者说服女儿参加比赛→比赛日子到来→袜子脱落漂浮在水上
情感线:nervous→angry→nervous&frightened→competitive&confident
写作
意图
伊丽莎白通过自己和队友的共同努力赢得了比赛,体现竞争、团队和体育精神
[第二步] 根据首句信息,定续写方向
两段首句
定框架
第一段首句
根据首句衔接段首语中的“Elizabeth! Getthesock!”可叙述她听不见大家的喊叫声,再
接着叙述是否有同学帮助她捡起袜子,伊丽莎白是否穿上袜子.
第二段首句 尾句呼应第二段首句关键信息“winning”应叙述伊丽莎白取得了胜利.
两段首句
显能量
①首句衔接段首语内容“在回家的路上,她一次又一次地分享了自己赢得胜利的时刻.”可知,第二段可
描写她回想比赛过程中的激烈竞争、并全力以赴获得团队胜利的经历.②尾句可描述作者赞同女儿的
心态和努力.
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[第三步] 原、续两线同,加合理细节
◎两线相同 续写部分两线呼应原文两线,情节线可为:女儿听不见同学喊捡袜子的声音→一个女孩跳
入水中捡起袜子给她送过去→穿上袜子努力取得成功→回家分享成功→女儿的感悟.情感线走向:scared
→anxious→funny→feelgreat.
◎添加细节 ①动作细节:在描写队友捡袜子追上伊丽莎白和伊丽莎白努力夺取胜利的过程中,可描写丰富
的肢体动作,营造身临其境的比赛场景;②情感细节:续写第二段可描述伊丽莎白愉悦的心情.
[第四步] 依照语言特点,原、续融一体
原文利用简单句、并列句、非谓语动词和主从复合句,进行动作描写(加框内容)和情感描写(画波浪线内
容),因此续写部分利用适当的并列句、非谓语和复合句进行动作和情感描写.
[第五步] 临摹衡水字体,打造完美卷面
Everybodyonherteamstartedscreaming “Elizabeth!Getthesock!”However,shecouldnthearthem.Itwas
timefordesperatemeasures.Agirlonmydaughtersteamjumpedinthepool,grabbedthesockandswamafter
Elizabeth.“Youhavetoputthesockon.”thegirlscreamed.ThegirlinLaneTwowasabouttopassElizabeth.
Withthesockfinalyon,Elizabethswamherheartoutforthelast15meters.Itwasclose.ButElizabethbeat
theothergirltothewalforthevictory.
Ontheridehome,shesharedhermomentofwinningagainandagain.Shetalkedabouthowscaredshewas
whensomeonegrabbedherfootandhowfunnyitwaswhenshecametothefinishandhowgreatthenightwas.
ShetoldmethatiftheTGshirtrelaywasanOlympicevent—andsheisquitesureitshouldbe—herteamwouldwin
thegoldmedal.Itoldherthatinmyprofessionalopinion,shewasabsolutelyright.
[技能突破五] 添合理收尾———完美收关 对应学生P39
在读后续写中,第二段结尾至关重要,除揭示
故事结局外,还应与原文伏笔相呼应,使人觉得在
情理之中.结尾方式有4种:①哲理式结尾:总结
文章主旨,通过哲理性的语言结尾点明主旨,升华
主题.通过以小见大、从物到人、由事及人等方式
升华文章主题.②正能量结尾:结尾句呼应原文
主题,且一定要体现正能量.③以景结情:在续写
中通过寓情于景的描写,使所写环境和人物心情
相照应.④自然结尾:顺着文章所叙之事自然发
展,以其必然结果结尾,简单自然.
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头
语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文.
AVacationwithMyMother
Ihadaninterestingchildhood.Itwasfiled
withsurpriseandamusements,albecauseofmy
mother—loving,sweet,andyetabsentGmindedandforgetful.
(妈妈的性格特点)OnestrangefamiG
lytripwetookwhenIwaseleventelsalotabouther.
(伏笔)
MytwosetsofgrandparentslivedinColoG
radoandNorthDakota,andmyparentsdecided
tospendafewweeksdrivingtothosestatesand
seeingalthesightsalongtheway.Asthefirst
dayofourtripapproached,David,myeightG
yearGoldbrother,andIunwilingly
saidgoodGbye
toalofourfriends.Whoknewifwedeversee
themagain? Finaly,themomentofourdeparG
turearrived,and weloadedsuitcases,books,
games,campingequipment,andatentintothe
carandbravelydroveoff.(伏 笔)WebravelydroveoffagaintwohourslaterafterwedreG
turned hometo getthe purse and travelers
checksMomhadforgotten.(用事实说话:妈妈
健忘)
DavidandI werealwaysalittlenervous
whenusinggasstationbathroomsif Mom was
drivingwhileDadslept:“Youstandoutsidethe
doorandplaylookoutwhileIgo,andIlstand
outsidethedoorandplaylookoutwhileyougo.”
Ihadterriblepicturesin my mind:“Honey,
wherearethekids?”“What? Oh,Gosh...I
thoughttheywerebeingawfulyquiet.”Wewere
neveractualyleftbehindinastrangecity,butwe
werentabouttotakeanychances.(孩子们心有余悸,
担心妈妈心不在焉,轮流放哨)
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Onthefourthorfifthnight,wehadtrouble
findingahotelwithavacancy.Afterdrivingin
vainforsometime,Momsuddenlygotagreat
idea:WhydidntwefindahousewithalikelyG
lookingbackyardandaskifwecouldsetuptent
there? DavidandIbecamenervous.
Tooutgreatrelief,
Dadturneddowntheidea.Mom never
couldunderstand ourobjections.Ifastrange
familyshoweduponherfrontdoorsteps,Mom
wouldhavebeendelighted.Shethinkseveryone
intheworldasniceassheis.(妈妈的善良)We
finalyfoundavacancyinthenexttown.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式作答.
ThenextdaywerememberedthebrandGnew
tentwehadbroughtwithus.
Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlots
ofgreatsightsalongtheway.
[第一步] 把握原文大意,明主旨和两线
主旨大意 本文主要讲述了我们一家四口去祖父母家的途中,由于母亲的健忘发生的趣事.
原文两线
情节线:和朋友道别装好车出发→两小时后返回家中取落下的东西→途中用卫生间各种担心→找旅店
期间妈妈萌发搭帐篷的想法→找到旅店住宿
情感线:unwiling→forgetful,surprised→nervous→amused→relieved
写作意图 通过叙述旅行趣事体现妈妈的性格:forgetful,nice,并体现快乐、母爱和亲情.
[第二步] 根据首句信息,定续写方向
两段首句定框架
第一段首句
首句衔接段首语中的“brandGnewtent”结合妈妈的健忘的性格可描述,妈妈把
帐篷落在酒店,接着叙述返回酒店取帐篷.
第二段首句 尾句可描写作者的感受.
两段首句显能量 ①首句衔接段首语“greatsights”,可在第二段描述自然风景.②尾句正能量说明妈妈的性格“nice”.
[第三步] 原、续两线同,加合理细节
◎两“线”相同 续写部分两线呼应原文两线,情节线可为:帐篷落在酒店→返回酒店取帐篷→接着开
车→欣赏风景→找个地方宿营.情感走向:anxious→relieved→happy→peaceful→sweet.
◎添加细节 ①动作细节:根据原文“意外不断”的基调,可叙述妈妈因健忘发生的趣事与第一段“surG
priseandamusements”相呼应.②环境细节:续写第二段可通过描述景色烘托人物愉悦的心情,体现“亲
情”和“与妈妈一起的趣事”.
[第四步] 依照语言特点,原、续融一体
原文利用简单句、并列句、非谓语动词、虚拟语气和主从复合句,进行动作描写(画横线内容)和情感
描写(画波浪线内容)描写妈妈的性格影响发生在旅途中的趣事,续写部分可适当地利用并列句、非谓语
和复合句进行动作和心理描写,突出妈妈的性格特点.
[第五步] 临摹衡水字体,打造完美卷面
ThenextdaywerememberedthebrandGnewtentwehadbroughtwithus.Butthenwewerehalfanhouraway
fromthehotel,wherethetentwasleftbehind.Dadrecommendedbuyinganewone,whileMominsisted
onourgoingbacktofetchit,saying,“Forgetfulpeoplelikememaylosethingsrepeatedly,soitsunwiseto
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giveupthetent.”Finalywegotbackthetentandhittheroadagain.IfMomhadntbeenthatabsentGminded,
itwouldhavesavedusthetroubleofgoingbackagainandagain.
Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.Thebrightbluesky,thelimitless
greengrass,thesetingsunandthecountlessstarsalkeptmespelbound.Oneday,towardsevening,wefound
agreatcampingsiteatthefootofahighmountain.DavidandIhelpedDadputupthetentandMomwasbusy
preparingsupper.Whenthesetingsuncastanorangelightoverthemountains,thetentwassetupandthemeal
wasready.Sitingaroundthecampfire,wetalkedandlaughed.Everytimewementionedthefunnyincidentsofthe
journeyapleasantsmilewouldspreadoverMomsface.
热点话题一 个人成长类 对应学生P40
主题
特点
个人成长类不仅涉及知识层面,更多地涉及情感、态度和价值观.场景:学校生活、家庭生活及工作(劳动)场
景.最终升华为:承担责任、敢于担当、战胜/挑战自己等.
三
步
法
第一步:情境描写+消极情绪的累积→高潮;
第二步:成长的动机+过程中变化的心情(自信、坚强)等;
第三步:感受(承担责任、战胜自己等)+积极情绪(喜悦、满足和骄傲等).
(20241月浙江卷)阅读下面材料,根据其
内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇
完整的短文.
EvaspentthefirstweekofhighschooltryG
ingtokeepherheadabovewater.OneofthemaG
jorheadachesforherwasfindingherwayinthe
hugeschoolbuilding.ItwasasixGstorybuilding.
Oneachfloor,halwaysstretchedinfourdirecG
tions,leading to classrooms,laboratories,and
teachersoffices.① Somewhereinthebuilding,
therewasalsoalibrary,acafeteria,andagym.
Havingapoorsenseofdirection,Evafound
itimpossibletogetaroundinsuchahugebuildG
ing.② Althedifferenthalwaysandroomswere
too muchtothinkabout,letalonecommitto
memory.Shedecidedthatshewould memorize
whereherclasseswereandthenpretendthatthe
restoftheplacedidntexist.
InherfirstP.E.class,Eva wasshocked
whenCoachPittannouncedthateveryonehadto
run one mile around the track outside.She
searchedthefacesofherclassmatesforsignsof
panic.Therewasnothingshefearedmorethan
havingtorunawholemile.③ ToEva,“amile”
wasusedtodescribelongdistances.Itwasten
milesfrom herhometohergrandfathers,and
thatalwaysseemedlikealongway,eveninacar!
WhenCoachPittblewhiswhistle(哨子),
Evafiguredshewouldbeleftinthedust.④ HowG
ever,whilesomeofherclassmatesedgedahead,
othersactualyfel behind.“ItsjustthebeginG
ning,”shethought.“Ilcomeinlastforsure.”
SoonEvabegantobreathehard,withher
heartpoundingandlegsshaking.⑤ FeelingdesG
perate,Evastartedusingamindtrickonherself.
Shestoppedthinkingabouttheword“mile”.InG
stead,shefocusedonreachingtheshadowcaston
thetrackbyanoaktreeupahead.ThensheconG
centratedonjoggingtothespotwherethetrack
curved(拐弯).Afterthat,shetriedtoseeifshe
couldcompleteherfirstlap.Onelapturnedinto
two,thenthree,thenfour.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式在相应位置作答.
WhenCoachPittsaid“Nicework!”toherat
thefinishline,Evawassurprised.
Evadecidedtousethesametricktodeal
withtheschoolbuilding.
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