Unit 2 Section Ⅴ Writing（Word教参）-【优化指导】2024-2025学年新教材高中英语必修第三册（译林版2020）

Section Ⅴ　Writing [对应学生用书P62] 读后续写 本单元写作任务为读后续写。读后续写题将阅读与写作紧密结合，做题时需要首先阅读一篇约350词的没有结尾的短文。根据读后的理解，为短文续写一个合理的结尾。 要想写好读后续写，必须掌握正确的写作方法，下面介绍六步写作法，具体如下： 第一步：速读全文——提炼六个要素，获取主旨大意。 读后续写的阅读文本基本上都是记叙文。所以阅读文本时，要提炼出六个基本要素：who, where, when, what, why和how。只有把握好这六个要素，才能总结出人物背景和故事情节，进而推断出作者的写作意图，轻松获取故事的主旨大意。 第二步：细读全文——理清故事脉络，确立价值取向。 读后续写的文体多以记叙文为主。线索是叙事性作品中贯穿整个故事的脉络，它把作品中的各个事件连成一体， 所有的情节均围绕文本主要线索展开。记叙文一般有两条故事发展线索：情节(plots)线索和情感(emotions)线索。 可以利用图表法或思维导图法理清故事的发展脉络及作者的情感变化。确立积极的价值取向。这样，在续写时才可以更好地遵循原文的思路、风格和语言。 第三步：精心谋篇——分析段落首句，进行情节分析。 分析文本后所给的两个段首句对提高所写内容和原文的融洽度至关重要。首先分析所给的两个段首句之间的逻辑关系是顺承关系、转折关系还是因果关系等。然后，根据自己的判断设计几个小问题：根据段首句得知什么？续写开始写什么？接下来写什么？续写第一段的段尾如何衔接？第二段的开头？续写第二段的段尾如何才能照应故事的主旨大意？ 第四步：初步成文——设计结尾情节，写出关键语句。 在做好前三步的基础上，必须紧紧围绕故事的发展脉络，展开合理的想象，巧妙地设计所续写的两段的故事结尾情节。设计结尾情节时，可以借助前文的故事脉络设计一些具体的问题。比如：人物接下来要做什么、如何做、为什么这么做、结果会怎样等。在想好这些问题后，还要注意设计好续写的第二段的结尾，让结尾处的情感得到升华或拔高，把故事所折射出的人生观、价值观充分体现出来。设计好要续写的两段的情节后，然后再列出一些故事情节需要的关键词。最后，根据这些关键词语组织句子，写出连贯一致的句群。 第五步：润色升级——升格低级词句，力求完善成文。 写好两段的内容后，可以根据语法知识把一些低级的词汇或句式进行润色升格。升格低级词句的目的是让续写的内容更加符合原文的语言风格，与原文在衔接上更加融洽。 第六步：复查定稿——复查核对错误，确保认真誊写。 检查行文是否流畅、合逻辑，时态、人称是否一致，句子结构是否清晰，短语使用、单词拼写是否正确。确保无误后认真誊写，保证书写美观整洁。 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。 An 80-year-old man was sitting on the sofa in his house along with his 45-year-old highly educated son. Suddenly a crow (乌鸦)perched on their window. The father asked his son, “What is this？” The son replied, “It is a crow.” After a few minutes, the father asked his son the 2nd time, “What is this？” The son said，“Father, I have just now told you ‘It's a crow.’” After a little while, the old father again asked his son the 3rd time，“What is this？” At this time some expression of irritation was felt in the son's tone when he said to his father with a rebuff.“It's a crow, a crow.” A little while later, the father again asked his son the 4th time，“What is this？” This time the son shouted at his father, “Why do you keep asking me the same question again and again，although I have told you so many times ‘IT IS A CROW’．Are you not able to understand this？” A little later，the father went to his room and came back with an old tattered diary, which he had maintained since his son was born. On opening a page, he asked his son to read that page. When the son read it, the following words were written in the diary： “Today my little son aged three was sitting with me on the sofa, when a crow was sitting on the window. My son asked me 23 times what it was, and I replied to him all 23 times that it was a crow. I hugged him lovingly each time he asked me the same question again and again for 23 times. I did not at all feel irritated but I rather fell affection for my innocent child.” Paragraph 1： After reading the diary，　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 Paragraph 2： Feeling ashamed, the son got down on his knees before his father.　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 Step One　速读全文——提炼六个要素，获取主旨大意 who son, father what An old man asked his son the same question for four times, and his son became very impatient. Later, the old man took out a diary written for his son. when A crow perched on the window where in the father's house why Parents are usually patient with their children while their children may be not. Step Two　细读全文——理清故事脉络，把握价值取向 文本大意：一位八十岁的老人和他的中年儿子坐在沙发上。同一个问题老人才问了三遍，儿子就已经十分恼怒和没耐心了；第四遍时，儿子已开始对他大吼了。伤心的父亲拿出一本破旧的日记让儿子读其中一页的内容：儿子小时候问了23遍同一个问题，父亲仍然耐心解释了23遍。 价值取向：文章告诉我们要像小时候父母爱我们一样去爱父母，善待父母就是善待明天的自己。 Step Three　精心谋篇——分析段落首句，进行情节分析 1．Paragraph 1: After reading the diary，...(看了日记之后……) [情节分析]　由短文大意以及文章最后的结尾部分可知，这里是父子不同态度的对比，上文叙述了父亲让儿子看自己的日记。由续写内容第一段的开头语“After reading the diary”可知，后面的内容应是儿子看了日记后的感受，以及对一些问题的思考。 2．Paragraph 2: Feeling ashamed, the son got down on his knees before his father.(儿子感到非常羞愧，跪在父亲面前。) [情节分析]　 注意关键词Feeling ashamed。由此可知儿子对自己的行为感到愧疚，所以下文会为自己的行为道歉，然后向父亲保证以后好好对待父亲。 Step Four　句式表达 1．完成句子 Paragraph 1： ①看了日记之后，儿子开始记起曾经和父亲坐在一起的日子，眼里满是泪水。 After reading the diary, the son began to remember the days when he used to sit together with his father, his eyes filled with tears. ②父亲往往会耐心回答同一个问题23次也不感到厌烦。而父亲同一个问题只问了他4次！ His father would patiently answer the same question all 23 times without feeling irritation while his father asked him the same question just 4 times! ③儿子心想：如果我老了，儿子会怎么看我呢？ The son thought to himself: If I attain an old age, how will my son look at me? ④他会认为我是一个负担吗？ Will he think of me as a burden? ⑤他会因为我的视力、听觉或理解力差而对我大喊大叫吗？ Will he shout at me because of my poor sight，poor hearing or poor understanding? Paragraph 2： ⑥他向父亲道歉，恳求父亲原谅他的不良行为。 He made an apology to his father, and begged his father to forgive him for his bad behavior. ⑦他大声地说：“爸爸，我承诺让您永远幸福。” He said aloud，“I promise to make you happy forever, Dad.” ⑧您从我小时候起就一直关心我，给予我无私的爱。 You have cared for me ever since I was a little child, showering your selfless affection on me. ⑨为了我能上得起大学，您努力工作赚钱。 You worked hard to make money so that I could afford to go to university． ⑩我要用最好的方式孝敬您。 I will serve you in the best way. 2．句式升级 ①After reading the diary, the son began to remember the days when he used to sit together with his father, his eyes filled with tears.(remember改为高级词汇) →After reading the diary, the son began to think back to the days when he used to sit together with his father, his eyes filled with tears. ②He made an apology to his father, and begged his father to forgive him for his bad behavior.(用分词短语作状语升级) →He made an apology to his father, begging his father to forgive him for his bad behavior. ③You have cared for me ever since I was a little child, showering your selfless affection on me.(用强调句式升级) →It is you who have cared for me ever since I was a little child, showering your selfless affection on me. Step Five　连句成篇 Paragraph 1： After reading the diary, the son began to think back to the days when he used to sit together with his father, his eyes filled with tears. His father would patiently answer the same question all 23 times without feeling irritation while his father asked him the same question just 4 times！The son thought to himself：If I attain an old age, how will my son look at me? Will he think of me as a burden? Will he shout at me because of my poor sight, poor hearing or poor understanding? Paragraph 2： Feeling ashamed, the son got down on his knees before his father. He made an apology to his father, begging his father to forgive him for his bad behavior. He said aloud, “I promise to make you happy forever, Dad. It is you who have cared for me ever since I was a little child, showering your selfless affection on me. You worked hard to make money so that I could afford to go to university. I will serve you in the best way.” 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$