2025届广东省广州市高三下学期一模英语试题续写分析及下水文 课件

2025广州英语一模读后续写 分析及下水文 目录 CONTENT 01 02 03 故事原文 续写分析 下水文与原文答案评析 PART 故事原文 01 第二节(满分25分) 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Li Ming was a 17-year-old exchange student from China. With a heart full of dreams and a little bit of nervousness, he flew to the United Kingdom to start a new adventure. He had always imagined what it would be like to walk through the historic streets of England and meet people from different parts of the world. But as soon as he arrived at his new school, he felt a little unsure. In his new class, Li Ming struggled to start conversations with his British classmates. They spoke so quickly and used words and phrases he didn't understand. When he tried to join their conversations, he felt shy about his accent and worried that he might say something wrong. He also noticed that British students seemed to value their personal space more than he was used to, which made it even harder for him to find the right moment to start a meaningful talk. Group work was even harder. During a group project in literature class, Li Ming had trouble explaining his ideas clearly, feeling like his ideas were getting lost in translation. And he started to doubt himself. Social events outside of class were just as difficult. At a school party, Li Ming watched his classmates laugh, dance, and sing along to the latest pop songs. He felt left out, not knowing the songs or the dance moves. He wanted to join the fun, but the fear of looking silly kept him on the sidelines. One day, the school announced a talent show, Li Ming, who practiced traditional Chinese kung fu, really wanted to try. While he was hesitating, a group of British students interested in cultural performances invited him to join them. Li Ming agreed. 注意: 1.续写词数应为150个左右; 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1: During their practice, the group was amazed by Li Ming’s Chinese kung fu.___________________________________ ________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2: After the show, Li Ming noticed some changes happening.________________________________________________ _____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 第二节(满分25分) 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Li Ming was a 17-year-old exchange student from China. With a heart full of dreams and a little bit of nervousness, he flew to the United Kingdom to start a new adventure. He had always imagined what it would be like to walk through the historic streets of England and meet people from different parts of the world. But as soon as he arrived at his new school, he felt a little unsure. In his new class, Li Ming struggled to start conversations with his British classmates. They spoke so quickly and used words and phrases he didn't understand. When he tried to join their conversations, he felt shy about his accent and worried that he might say something wrong. He also noticed that British students seemed to value their personal space more than he was used to, which made it even harder for him to find the right moment to start a meaningful talk. Group work was even harder. During a group project in literature class, Li Ming had trouble explaining his ideas clearly, feeling like his ideas were getting lost in translation. And he started to doubt himself. Social events outside of class were just as difficult. At a school party, Li Ming watched his classmates laugh, dance, and sing along to the latest pop songs. He felt left out, not knowing the songs or the dance moves. He wanted to join the fun, but the fear of looking silly kept him on the sidelines. One day, the school announced a talent show, Li Ming, who practiced traditional Chinese kung fu, really wanted to try. While he was hesitating, a group of British students interested in cultural performances invited him to join them. Li Ming agreed. 续写首段提示 续写第二段提示 Paragraph 2: After the show, Li Ming noticed some changes happening. 02 Paragraph 1: During their practice, the group was amazed by Li Ming’s Chinese kung fu. 01 续写提示 1【文本主旨】 本文讲述了Li Ming作为交换生前往英国开启学习生涯的新一片段，却遭遇了种种cultural shock，可是没想到学校的一次才艺秀，改变了他的境遇，立足于源远流长、精深的中国文化，让他找回了自信，文化交流也让他融入了新的集体和生活。 8 Li Ming 17岁的李明开启新旅城，前往英国作为留学交换生，心里既怀着期待又有些许小紧张。到英国之后，一切又有一点不确定。 种种 cultural shocks 课上，李明很难听懂同学，交流海派出糗，同学们很注重个人空间，很难抓住时机融入；小组活动更难参与，自己很难表述自己；社交活动也很难，似乎跟不上同学的流行文化，想加入又怕看起来很傻。 转机 a talent show 学校要办talent show,李明跃跃欲试，他的犹豫被一群热爱文化表演的同学注意到了，并力邀他加入… 2 故事 3. What are the plots given in the reading part? （给出信息）17岁的中国学生Li Ming在英国做交换生，满怀期待和小紧张开启了新旅程，他幻想着，可到了新学校又有点不安。→在新班里，他努力试图和同学交流，听不懂，怕出错，注重隐私空间的同学让他很难抓住切入时机；→小组活动也艰难，李明很难用英语表述自己的想法，让他开始自我怀疑→ 社交活动也糟糕，看着同学们笑跳唱，感觉自己落伍了，想加入又怕出糗，只能让他置身事外；→一天，学校宣布举办才艺秀，一直练习功夫的李明跃跃欲试，犹豫的他被热爱文化活动的团体力邀，他答应了。 Paragraph1: Sally started daydreaming about joining other school clubs.______________________________ __________________________________________ Paragraph2: Recalling her mother’ s words, Sally was woken from her daydream.___________ __________________________________________ The plotting Who: Li Ming, British classmates, Where: a school in UK When: some time, one day. What: Li Ming, an exchange student, flew to UK to start his career, with many imaginations and uncertainty. While in his new class, he felt it hard to adapt to the new environment. He couldn’t understand his classmates, feared making mistakes, or find good chances to start a talk. In group work, he had trouble getting his idea across to classmates in English, and in social events, he thought he was out of date, left out by their pop culture. One day, the school was to launch a talent show. Li Ming was eager to try but hesitated to join. A group of culture fans invited him to join them. How: She began to show his talent and conquer them with his unique cultures. The plotting Brief introduction/Background info: Li Ming, an exchange student went to UK, with a lot of anticipations and a little nervousness. The beginning: Upon arriving new schools, he felt little uncertainties. The development: While in his new class, he felt it hard to adapt to the new environment. He couldn’t understand his classmates, feared making mistakes, or find good chances to start a talk. In group work, he had trouble getting his idea across to classmates in English. In social events, he thought he was out of date, left out by their pop culture. One Climax: One day, the school was to launch a talent show. Li Ming was eager to try but hesitated to join. A group of culture fans invited him to join them. The bigger climax: It depends on you…. PART 续写分析 02 单击此处添加标题 根据原文，本续写段落最好通过紧密的逻辑衔接、细腻的情感描写、合理的情节想象与开头的伏笔呼应，将Li Ming的个人经历用自身才艺打动同学升华为灿烂中国文化搭起沟通桥梁，促进跨文化交流。既要满足情节的合理性，又要赋予故事深度，诠释人与人和谐共进及中国文化名片的自豪和魅力。 14 Li Ming在练习当中，展现中华武术的魅力，惊艳众人，带着众人表演中国武术，架起沟通桥梁，打通隔阂，文化就是普世的名片，这是小沟通，崭露头角，开始破冰。 情节合理性 01 Li Ming想融入，却又有少年合理的顾虑，那么在武术这个文化魅力的加持下，自身获得了自信，也征服了同学的心，应该是围绕他组件武术表演节目，收获了有效沟通和信心。 情感铺垫 02 续写首段分析 注意到变化 演出成功后，才会有量变到质变，变化是内心的，扩展到生活学习的方方面面，对照原文，要对三个方面进行阐述，课堂，小组，和社交。 01 02 Li Ming由最初的害羞，害怕，甚至自我怀疑，逐渐过渡到自信和自豪，这通过Li Ming在第二段当中的具体活动中得到体现。 情感升华 续写第二段分析 单击此处添加标题 首尾呼应：老板邀请Rita“随时探望Max”（visit the dog anytime），既为故事增添开放性，也暗示Rita未来可能通过与小狗互动来延续善举，与前文“童年创伤”形成闭环。 Li Ming，在前文中开启交换生生涯，遇上种种文化冲击，那么利用自身中华文化的特色和魅力，打通交际隔阂，架起沟通桥梁，逐渐克服之前前文的“种种困难”形成闭环。 首尾呼应： 单击此处添加文本具体内容，简明扼要地阐述您的观点。根据需要可酌情增减文字，以便观者准确地理解您传达的思想。单击此处添加文本具体内容，简明扼要地阐述您的观点。根据需要可酌情增减文字，以便观者准确地理解您传达的思想。单击此处添加文本具体内容，简明扼要地阐述您的观点。根据需要可酌情增减文字，以便观者准确地理解您传达的思想。单击此处添加文本具体内容 单击添加标题 续写情感走向 情感链条：anticipation/imagination+a little nervous（flew to UK）→ uncertain（arrive at new school）→ shy+ worried（in new class）→ doubt himself+unconfident（group work）→ fear and feel left out（social event）→hesitant (launch of talent show)，前文展示了Li Ming初期在异乡他国的种种情感冲击。 →续写需要收复失地→自信（confident） →自豪(proud) →和谐（harmonious） 情感走向与主题深化 1.把握内容要点 所给首句：阅读每一段中的首句，进行布局、解读。在布局第一段的内容时，要兼顾两段的首句：第二段的首句决定着第一段的走向。 1: During their practice, the group was amazed by Li Ming’s Chinese kung fu. 2: After the show, Li Ming noticed some changes happening. Step 2 审题与构思 注意：第一段续写要巧妙衔接第二段，陈述方案一定要通过- 对应好消息。 Step 2: Outline the possible plots or events in each paragraph. 1. 所续写的短文词数应为150左右,主线清楚;描写视角是第三人视角称Li Ming； 2. 关键人物和角色随故事情节逻辑发展转变自然，人称保持一致; 3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好; 用过去时态； 4. 确定好续写情节，用合理句型和直接引语表达; 原文段末交代talent show，在续写中都需要交代，第一：准备talent show当中展示了精湛武术，迷倒无数，组队进行talent show表演；第二：一武（舞台）成名，打开任督二脉，从此交换生涯开挂，所有问题慢慢迎刃而解，。 文章主题： 强烈的文化认同感促进自我意识和自信，让个人能从容面对自身经历和外界交流。 A strong sense of cultural identity______________________________, enabling individuals ______________________________________ with the outside world. 中华文化的魅力助力少年找回自信，在异国文化生活中，克服交流障碍，弥合文化隔阂，与异国文化和谐共生。 The charm of Chinese culture_________________________________, overcome communication barriers in a foreign cultural environment,________________________________, and achieve harmonious coexistence with diverse cultures. the awareness of cultural identity--- building cross-cultural confidence--- overcoming communication barriers--- embracing and navigating cultural diversity with assurance fosters self-awareness and confidence to navigate their experiences and interactions empowers young individuals to regain confidence bridge cultural divides What to write? 段1首句: 1. During their practice, the group was amazed by Li Ming’s Chinese kung fu. 1. How did Li Ming’s kung fu show stunned them? (既然李明的功夫秀惊艳到他们，能否描写下李明的功夫) 2. How did Li Ming feel and what were the group’s responses? （描写下李明得到的赞许，表演的心态和文化小组的反应） 3. What were their further exchanges for the talent show and preparations? (既然是为talent show做准备，那么接下来互相交流沟通为show做准备) 4. How was the show? The core: Li Ming’s Chinese kung fu their exchanges for talent show How was the show? What to write? 段2首句： 2: After the show, Li Ming noticed some changes happening. 1. What changes happened in his exchange life? (紧扣原文，形成闭环：原文交代的三个不适应，一一破解。 1) in his new classes 2) Group work 3) social events outside classes) 2. How was his life and study and his feelings? 3. What were Li Ming’s gains or understandings after his adaptive process? The core: 1. What changes have happened in Li Ming’s exchange life in UK? 2. What lesson did he learn? Practice of kung fu 1. 他的动作敏捷且准确，与英国同伴马虎的动作是鲜明的对比。 His movements were swift and precise, ______________________the casual demeanor of his British peers. 2. 他敏捷优雅的招式结合了力量感的出击创造了一种令人兴奋的引人入胜的舞蹈。 _______________________________________combined with powerful strikes created a thrilling and mesmerizing dance. 3. 步子敏捷手握拳在空中挥舞，李明每次移动口中利落地喊出“啊”，好似东方战神。 Stepping nimbly with a clenched fist in the air, Li Ming yelled a crisp "ah" each time he moved,______________________________. 4. Li Ming 完成一套复杂的招式和表演时，步子优雅而准确，这套招式结合了武术，舞蹈和杂技。 Li Ming ___________________________________as he executed a series of complex moves and stunts combining elements of martial arts, dance, and acrobatics. a stark contrast to His swift and graceful moves as if he were an oriental warrior moved with grace and precision Interactions in rehearsal 1. 他的行云流水般的动作和精准的动作迷住了所有人，激发了大家对中国文化的好奇也弥合了代沟。 His fluid movements and precise techniques captivated everyone, ____________________________________and bridging their gap. 2. 他们的真诚的兴趣让李明觉得被重视，合作的氛围消除了他的紧张。 Their genuine interest made him feel valued, and _____________________________________________________________. 3. 最初李明还有点害羞，随着教导同伴们功夫招式也变得越来越自信了。 Li Ming, initially a bit shy, _________________________as he taught them some basic kung fu postures. 4. 通过交流，语言和文化障碍慢慢消散了。 Through this interaction, the language and cultural barriers _______________________. sparking curiosity about Chinese culture the collaborative atmosphere eased his nervousness became increasingly confident started to fade away Nervousness 1. 当听到自己的名字后，Li Ming可以听到自己的心跳声甚至紧张的呼吸声。 When hearing his name called, Li Ming could hear his own heartbeat and even nervous breaths. 2. 他如此紧张以致他可以感觉到手心出汗心脏猛跳。 So nervous was he that he could feel his palms sweating and his heart pounding violently. The performance turned out to be a success, ___________________ filling in the whole theatre. (独立主格). 演出结束，观众投来赞许的目光，热烈的掌声。 When their show was finished, the audience _______________________ at them, thunderous applause echoing around the hall. The audience ______________ thunderous applause. thunderous applause cast approving glances broke into The show The performance turned out to be a success, ___________________ filling in the whole theatre. (独立主格). 演出结束，观众投来赞许的目光，热烈的掌声。 When their show was finished, the audience _______________________ at them, thunderous applause echoing around the hall. The audience ______________ thunderous applause. thunderous applause cast approving glances broke into The show Excitement and Joy 1. 听到雷鸣般的掌声响彻礼堂Li Ming内心狂喜。 Li Ming was wild with joy when hearing thunderous applause echoing in the hall. 2. 演出成功让他一阵兴奋，让他确信他得到了认可。 The news sent a ripple of excitement through him, convincing him that he was well received. 3. 喜不自胜，Li Ming和他的团队庆祝他们的合作成功。 Transported with pleasure/Delighted beyond measure/Beaming with pleasure, Li Ming celebrated their success of cooperation with the group. The changes in Li Ming’s life 1. 他的同学们带着敬仰和好奇找他，告诉他他的表演有多惊艳，表示了对他和中国文化的兴趣。 His classmates approached him with curiosity and respect, ____________________________________________________and that they were interested in him and his culture. 2. 李明觉得更容易开启交流对话，他的口音曾经一度是他的焦虑源，现在也被视为了他的独有文化名片。 He found it____________________________________, and his accent, once a source of anxiety,_________________________________________. 3. 小组活动中，他的团队成员会额外尽力吸纳理解他的观点，耐心倾听他的表述。 In group work, his groupmates____________________________________, patiently giving ear to his presentation. telling him how they were impressed by his performance easier to strike up conversations was now seen as a unique cultural identity card made extra effort to include his ideas sublimation (1) 才艺秀成为了一个转折点：他的独特性，曾经让他自我怀疑，现在让他能更好融入大家。 The talent show ___________________________: his uniqueness, once a source of doubt, now connected him to others. (2) 在会场，她们也被深深感动朝他竖起了大拇指。 It dawned on him that ______________________________________that helped him find the confidence and pride to integrate with the outside world. (3)自信和骄傲洋溢在眼中，李明意识到弘扬自身文化的意义，这极大促进了他的自信弥合了代沟。 With______________________________________, Li Ming eventually realized the significance of promoting his own culture, which greatly_________________________________________________. (4)是的，坚信自己的文化身份，李明把这次才艺秀-伪装的小确幸-变成了一个契机。 Yes,__________________________________, Li Ming transformed the showcase, a blessing in disguise, into an opportunity to be known and well-received by the outside world. it was his unique cultural identity who were also deeply impressed by confidence and pride brimming in his eyes boosted his confidence and bridged the gap with a firm belief in his cultural identity became a turning point PART 下水文与原文答案评析 03 Paragraph 1 During their practice, the group was amazed by Li Ming’s Chinese kung fu. His swift and graceful moves combined with powerful strikes created a thrilling and mesmerizing dance. As they watched in awe, they constantly cheered him on, captivated by his performance. Li Ming, at first a bit shy, gradually became more confident. He patiently taught them some basic kung fu postures. Through this interaction, the language and cultural barriers started to fade away. They laughed and joked while practicing gradually forming a strong and lasting bond through their shared experiences. 34 Paragraph 2 After the show, Li Ming noticed some changes happening. His British classmates, now eager to learn more about Chinese culture, came to him more often for guidance and insights. In group work, they actively listened to his ideas, and he found it much easier to express himself, At social events, he was no longer on the sidelines. He was invited to join in the fun, and they shared their favorite songs and dances with him. Li Ming realized that by showing his talent, he had opened the door to a new world of friendship and cultural exchange. 35 与原文及段落开头语衔接合理，内容基本合理，情感表达完整，语法结构和词汇使用基本准确。 上下文连贯性需加强，词汇丰富性有限，部分细节逻辑待完善。 增加过渡词和细节描写，替换重复词汇，尝试使用更丰富的表达，补充关键细节，完善故事逻辑。 优点 不足 改进建议 原文答案评析 During their practice, the group was amazed by Li Ming’s Chinese kung fu. They watched in awe as he demonstrated the fluid movements and powerful strikes that he had practiced for years. Li Ming’s dedication and skill sparked their genuine interest and admiration. “It’s a combination of strength and beauty,” a member exclaimed in amazement. Without a second thought, they decided to present a kung fu show on the school’s stage, offering Li Ming the opportunity to share more about his culture. The following days witnessed the disappearance of shyness and fear, replaced by a shared passion for learning. Not only did they improve their understanding of Chinese culture but also Li Ming’s confidence built up. The big day finally came. And the show turned out to be a big hit, with thunderous applause and cheers echoing around the hall. After the show, Li Ming noticed some changes happening. His classmates approached him with curiosity and respect, expressing their interest in learning more about Chinese culture from him. The positive feedback made Li Ming feel more accepted and less self-conscious about his accent and language skills. In classes, he actively joined in more conversations and even struck up a few himself. In groupwork, Li Ming was glad to find his ideas got across and respected. Social events no longer became daunting as well. At the next social event, Li Ming recognized a pop song from their practice sessions and tentatively joined the dancing. By sharing his unique talents and cultural identity, he finally found confidence as well as a way to connect with others. Self-assessment Yes No 1. 情节发展是否合理？ . 2. 提炼的主题是否恰当？ 3.上下文是否连贯？ 4. 语言是否丰富？（从句，非谓语，倒装，虚拟等） 5. 语言是否和原文风格贴切？（动作，心理，神态和环境描写） 6. 语法是否正确？ 7.书写是否美观（排版、字体、少涂改）？ Thanks for listening 主讲人： AiPPT $$