Continuation Writing 读后续写之脱险类主题导学案-2024届高三英语二轮复习

读后续写之脱险类 2024.04.28 Liang sir 添加标题文字 1 Lead-in Before watching the video 1.What is the video about? 2. What can we learn from the video? 添加标题文字 2 Lead-in 添加标题文字 3 Lead-in After watching the video, can you tell: 1.What is the video about? 2. What can we learn from the video? 添加标题文字 4 Dogs are man’s best friends and sometimes they can save us. 添加标题文字 5 Contents 01.脱险类概念及续写情节构建 02.例题赏析 03.堂上练习 04.课后作业 添加标题文字 6 01.脱险类续写情节构建 添加标题文字 7 Part 01 脱险类文章定义 读后续写中会遇到火灾，水灾，泥石流，龙卷风，地震，溺水，森林迷路，遭到猛兽袭击等故事。我们把对生命造威胁的文章情节，归为“脱险”型。在往年高考真题中，曾经就考过三次：拍摄北极熊遇险；学企鹅抱团取暖；鲨口逃生。 添加标题文字 8 What to read 救助类、情感类、脱险类、成长类... 人物身份、人物性格特点、人物情感 高频出现的事物、促进故事发展的关键事物或行为 三衔接一升华 第几人称? 时态? Theme （主题） Characters （人物） Plots （重要细节） Logic(逻辑) Language （语言） 添加标题文字 9 脱险类续写情节构建： ——（一）遇到危险时描写心情：(焦虑、恐惧、孤独、迷茫、害怕等负面情绪的塑造) ——（二）勇敢地面对危险 &想到脱险方法。即找到solution,解决问题 (开心、激动、感动等方面的描写) ——（三）Happy ending，升华主题(喜悦+感激+升华（感悟)   添加标题文字 10 02.例题赏析 添加标题文字 11 例题赏析1 When I was a kid in Pennsylvania, my family rehabilitated (使康复) wild animals. I grew up with animals running around the house. We would go travelling to Bermuda and I would watch the whales off the shore. I fell in love with them and wanted to know more about what they got up to underwater. Now I've been studying whales for more than30 years and I am the president of the Center for Whale Research and Conservation. In 2017, I was on a boat around Rarotonga in the Cook Islands, working on a film about whale conservation. The crew wanted to get more footage of me in the water with the humpback whales — I often slip in quietly to record their behaviour for research. Seeing a couple of humpbacks in the distance, I slid off the boat wearing a mask and swam towards them. 2024肇庆一模：鲸鱼救“我”脱离鲨口 添加标题文字 12 As I was approaching, one of the male humpbacks came right up to me, touching me with his head and pushing me through the water. It caught me off-guard — in 33 years of doing this work, this had never happened. I put my arm out and tried to push myself away while he attempted to roll up me under his pectoral fin (胸鳍). My scientist brain was in overdrive as I tried to work out what he was doing. I felt a mixed sense of excitement and fear. Then the whale swam underneath me and lifted me out of the water on his fin. I signaled to the boat, then — swoosh — I was pushed back under. After minutes of being pushed around by the humpback, I saw what I thought was a second, smaller whale. But then I noticed the tail — whales move theirs up and down, and this one was moving side to side. I realized with horror that it belonged to a huge, 18-foot tiger shark. Tiger sharks are known to attack people, sometimes fatally (致命地). 添加标题文字 13 The shark had arched its body, which meant that it was in attack mode._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Just over a year later, I was on a boat in the same area when I heard of a whale sighting in the harbour. _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【情节分析】 第一段：鲨鱼处于进攻模式 — 我的反应（要知道我此时在哪里？我可以干什么？） — 鲸鱼做了什么（安全送我上船脱险了） — 我的心情 【情节分析】 第二段：鲸鱼准备离开，我感谢他 — 怎么感谢？我做了什么？（和鲸鱼的互动）— 鲸鱼离开 — 我的感悟 脱险类续写情节构建： 添加标题文字 14 脱险类续写情节构建： ——（一）遇到危险时描写心情：(焦虑、恐惧、孤独、迷茫、害怕等负面情绪的塑造) ——（二）勇敢地面对危险 &想到脱险方法。即找到solution,解决问题 (开心、激动、感动等方面的描写) ——（三）Happy ending，升华主题(喜悦+感激+升华（感悟)   添加标题文字 15 Para1: The shark had arched its body, which meant that it was in attack mode. main plots 1. 主述位第一句衔接：主语或者宾语要做什么？ 2. 遇到危险时描写心情：害怕、紧张、焦虑、恐慌 3. 勇敢地面对危险：坚信能脱险 I firmly believe that... 4. 所以，为了脱险，做了什么： 5. 令人惊喜的是，看到希望/想到脱险方法： 6. 脱险(或者矛盾点解决好了，描写心情：开心、激动、 He smashed his paws madly against the wire fence, thrusting his sharp claws at us. A flood of fear crowded into my mind at the sight of the situation. Though anxious and terrified , I firmly believe that we can get out of here safely. So,in order to get help,I yelled out to loudly the boat. To my relief,the whale had positioned me on the front of his head and was gracefully racing through the water. Finally, under the help of the whale, I safely returned me to the boat and out of the shark’s way and I felt very happy. 添加标题文字 16 Para2: Just over a year later, I was on a boat in the same area when I heard of a whale sighting in the harbour. main plots 7. 主述位第一句衔接：主语或者宾语要做什么？ 8. 脱险后表达感谢，具体怎么感谢，做了什么： 9. 对方的反应，做了什么以回应感谢?我的反应如何？： 10. 主题升华， I was very excited while hearing the news. I went close to the whale and I told the him that I loved him and thanked him as he was to swim off. He looked me in the eye. I slid overboard and swam towards him............ It was a touching moment. Only then did I realize that it is our responsibility to protect these beings because protecting them is protecting ourselves. 添加标题文字 17 范文 The shark had arched its body in attack mode. He smashed his paws madly against the wire fence, thrusting his sharp claws at us.A flood of fear crowded into my mind at the sight of the situation.Though anxious and terrified , I firmly believe that we can get out of here safely. So,in order to get help,I yelled out to loudly the boat.To my relief,the whale had positioned me on the front of his head and was gracefully racing through the water. It was terrifying and yet peaceful. Finally, he had safely returned me to the boat and out of the shark’s way and I felt very happy. Just over a year later, I was on a boat in the same area when I heard of a whale sighting in the harbour. I was very excited while hearing the news.I told the whale that I loved him and thanked him as he was to swim off. He looked me in the eye. I slid overboard and swam towards him. I rubbed his face and he extended his pectoral fin. I swam back to the boat and he stayed around for about 20 minutes after I got back on it. Then he disappeared underwater. It was a touching moment. Only then did I realize that it is our responsibility to protect these beings because protecting them is protecting ourselves. 添加标题文字 18 脱险类文章 万能句式 04 添加标题文字 19 1.遇到危险时描写心情 原句： flood of fear crowded into my mind at the sight of the situation. 句型1：A flood of fear/terror crowded into her mind at the sight of sth./when sb.did sth. 万能套用句型仿句 ①描述一下Helen独自在走在小路，遇到一条蛇时的心情。 A flood of terror crowded into Helen’s mind at the sight of the snake when she was walking on the path . 2.勇敢地面对危险、坚信能脱险 原句：Though anxious and terrified , I firmly believed that we can get out of here safely. 句型2： Though adj. and adj. , sb firmly believe that.... ①尽管又累又怕，她坚信他能找到出路。 Though tired and terrified , she firmly believed that he could find the way out. 添加标题文字 3.所以，为了寻求帮助，做了什么？ 原句：So,in order to get help,I yelled out to loudly the boat. 句型3：So,in order to get help,I did sth. So,in order to get help, Henlen shouted loudly at that direction. ①所以，为了寻求帮助，Henlen大声地向那边方向叫喊着。 万能套用句型仿句 4.看到希望/ 想到脱险方法 原句：To my relief,the whale had positioned me on the front of his head and was gracefully racing through the water. 句型4：To one’s+N，sb did sth ①令她感到庆幸是，终于有人发现了她。。 To her relief , there was someone found her finally. 句型5：It suddenly occurred to sb. that... ①我突然想到我可以向她请求帮助。 添加标题文字 5.脱险(或者矛盾点解决好了，描写心情：开心、激动、 原句：Finally, under the help of the whale,I safely returned the boat and out of the shark’s way and a sense of excitement swept over me. 句型5：Finally,under the help of sb, 冲突点得以解决 and a sense of 抽象名词 swept over sb. Finally, under the help the man,Helen safely returned home and a sense of happiness swept over her. 万能套用句型仿句 ①最后，在她的帮助下，Helen 终于安全地回到家了，一阵幸福感油然而生。 添加标题文字 6.脱险后表达感谢 原句：I told the whale that I loved him and thanked him as he was to swim off. 句型6：I told sb. that I can’t ......without sb’s help and I thanked sb for everything sb had done for me. ①Helen告诉他,要是没有他的帮助的帮助的话，她不可能安全地回到家。 Helen told the man that she could not get back home without his help and she sincerely helped the man for everything he had done for her. 添加标题文字 7.结尾句、主题升华句 (用倒装句) 原句：It was a touching moment. Only then did I realize that it is our responsibility to protect these beings because protecting them is protecting ourselves. 句型7：It was such a +adj +moment.Only then did I realize that+升华句...... 这是一个如此感人的时刻。只有在这时我才意识到当别人有困难时候，我们每个人都应当及时伸出援助之手。 It was such a happy moment. only at that moment did I realize that everyone of us should help others when others are in trouble. 句型7：What an unforgettable experience. From the experience, I learned an important lesson that...... What an unforgettable experience. From the experience, I learned an important lesson that everyone of us should help others when others are in trouble. 添加标题文字 脱险类文章万能句式小结 1.遇到危险时描写心情 句型1：A flood of fear/terror crowded into her mind at the sight of sth./when sb.did sth. 2.勇敢地面对危险、坚信能脱险 句型2： Though adj. and adj. , sb firmly believe that.... 4.看到希望/ 想到脱险方法 句型4：To one’s+N，sb did sth 句型4：It suddenly occurred to sb. that... 3.所以，为了寻求帮助，做了什么？句型3：So,in order to get help,sb did sth. 5.脱险(或者矛盾点解决好了，描写心情：开心、激动、 句型5：Finally,under the help of sb, 冲突点得以解决 and a sense of 抽象名词 swept over sb. 添加标题文字 脱险类文章万能句式 6.脱险后表达感谢 句型6：I told sb. that I can’t ......without sb’s help and I thanked sb for everything sb had done for me. 7.结尾句、主题升华句 (用倒装句\用同位语从句) 句型7：It was such a +adj +moment.Only at that moment did I realize that+升华句. 句型7：What an unforgettable experience. From the experience, I learned an important lesson that+升华句. 添加标题文字 脱险类文章万能句式小结： 1.遇到危险时描写心情 句型1：A flood of fear/terror crowded into her mind at the sight of sth when sb.did sth. 2.勇敢地面对危险、坚信能脱险 句型2： Though adj. and adj. , sb firmly believe that.... 3.所以，为了寻求帮助，做了什么？句型3：So,in order to get help,sb did sth. 4.看到希望/ 想到脱险方法 句型4：To one’s+N，sb did sth 句型4：It suddenly occurred to sb. that... 5.脱险(或者矛盾点解决好了，描写心情：开心、激动、 句型5：Finally,under the help of sb, 冲突点得以解决 and a sense of 抽象名词 swept over sb. 6.脱险后表达感谢 句型6：I told sb. that I can’t ......without sb’s help and I thanked sb for everything sb had done for me. 7.结尾句、主题升华句 (用倒装句\用同位语从句) 句型7：It was such a +adj +moment.Only at that moment did I realize that+升华句. 句型7：What an unforgettable experience. From the experience, I learned an important lesson that+升华句. 添加标题文字 03.堂上练习 2020年新I卷真题原文 添加标题文字 28 Know more about polar bears 添加标题文字 Passage 2 北极熊拍照 (2020高考) 1 One fall, my wife Elli and I had a single goal: to photograph polar bears. We were staying at a research camp outside “the polar bear capital of the world” — the town of Churchill in Manitoba, Canada. 2 Taking pictures of polar bears is amazing but also dangerous. Polar bears — like all wild animals — should be photographed from a safe distance. When I’m face to face with a polar bear, I like it to be through a camera with a telephoto lens. But sometimes, that is easier said than done. This was one of those times. 3 As Elli and I cooked dinner, a young male polar bear who was playing in a nearby lake sniffed, and smelled our garlic bread. 4 The hungry bear followed his nose to our camp, which was surrounded by a high wire fence. He pulled and bit the wire. He stood on his back legs and pushed at the wooden fence posts. 5 Terrified, Elli and I tried all the bear defense actions 添加标题文字 Passage 2 北极熊拍照 (2020高考) we knew. We yelled at the bear, hit pots hard, and fired blank shotgun shells into the air. Sometimes loud noises like these will scare bears off. Not this polar bear though — he just kept trying to tear down the fence with his massive paws (爪子). 6 I radioed the camp manager for help. He told me a helicopter was on its way, but it would be 30 minutes before it arrived. Making the best of this close encounter (相遇), I took some pictures of the bear. 7 Elli and I feared the fence wouldn’t last through 30 more minutes of the bear’s punishment. The camp manager suggested I use pepper spray. The spray burns the bears’ eyes, but doesn’t hurt them. So I approached our uninvited guest slowly and, through the fence, sprayed him in the face. With an angry roar (吼叫),the bear ran to the lake to wash his eyes. A few minutes later, the bear came back. ___________ At the very moment, the helicopter arrived. __________ Theme ? 脱险类 添加标题文字 Para1: A few minutes later, the bear came back. ___________ main plots 1. 主述位第一句衔接：主语或者宾语要做什么？ 2. 遇到危险时描写心情：害怕、紧张、焦虑、恐慌 3. 勇敢地面对危险：坚信能脱险 I firmly believe that... 4. 所以，为了脱险，做了什么： 5. 令人惊喜的是，看到希望/想到脱险方法： 6. 脱险(或者矛盾点解决好了，描写心情：开心、激动、 添加标题文字 32 Para2: Just over a year later, I was on a boat in the same area when I heard of a whale sighting in the harbour. main plots 7. 主述位第一句衔接：主语或者宾语要做什么？ 8. 脱险后表达感谢，具体怎么感谢，做了什么： 9. 对方的反应，做了什么以回应感谢： 10. 主题升华， 添加标题文字 33 Paragraph 1：A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp. ___________________ ________________________________________ ___________With greater rage, the bear roared and tried to tear down the fence with all his might.___________________________________ ___________________Unfortunately, he managed to escape and my heart froze in my chest. At this moment, ________________________________ _______________________________________ At the same time, she would seize a chance to photograph them. To my great surprise, the bear stopped and bowed down to eat the bread. Seeing this, all of us let out a sigh of relief. Before long however, the hungry bear finished eating and pushed the fence again. The fence was about to fall down! A flood of fear/terror crowded into my mind at the sight of the furry animal. Tired and terrified , I plucked my courage to spray him again. it suddenly occurred to Elli that she could throw our garlic bread at the bear. 添加标题文字 脱险类文章万能句式小结： 1.遇到危险时描写心情 句型1：A flood of fear/terror crowded into her mind at the sight of sth when sb.did sth. 2.勇敢地面对危险、坚信能脱险 句型2： Though adj. and adj. , sb firmly believe that.... 3.所以，为了寻求帮助，做了什么？句型3：So,in order to get help,sb did sth. 4.看到希望/ 想到脱险方法 句型4：To one’s+N，sb did sth 句型4：It suddenly occurred to sb. that... 5.脱险(或者矛盾点解决好了，描写心情：开心、激动、 句型5：Finally,under the help of sb, 冲突点得以解决 and a sense of 抽象名词 swept over sb. 6.脱险后表达感谢 句型6：I told sb. that I can’t ......without sb’s help and I thanked sb for everything sb had done for me. 7.结尾句、主题升华句 (用倒装句\用同位语从句) 句型7：It was such a +adj +moment.Only at that moment did I realize that+升华句. 句型7：What an unforgettable experience. From the experience, I learned an important lesson that+升华句. 添加标题文字 Paragraph 2：At that very moment the helicopter arrived. __________________________________________________________________________Seeing the people equipped with guns, he ran away and disappeared in the distance. As we were climbing the rope ladder, Elli prayed like a thousand times to show thankfulness of being safe and sound. Elli and I embraced tightly with still racing hearts. After we calmed down, the locals told us that the bears were losing their homes and food because of human activities and climate changes. On the way back home, I checked the precious pictures in the camera, lost in thought. _______________________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________ Only then did I realize that it was bravery and calmness that can conquer whatever difficulty came in the way. Scared and shocked (by the noises of the helicopter), the bear stopped and turned around. 添加标题文字 小结：脱险类文章套用模板 Paragraph 1：Given sentence 1 S1：A flood of fear/terror crowded into my mind at the sight of/ when sb. did sth.... Tired and terrified, I plucked my courage and tried to一系列自救动作. ....sb. tried all kinds of means ,but unfortunately, in vain. At this moment, it occurred to sb. that +自救办法...S2:(注意和第二段首句的衔接) Paragraph 2：Given sentence 2 S3: (注意和第二段首句的衔接)...S4:(结尾句/升华句)①So unforgettable was that day that it would stay in my memory forever. ②Only then did I realize that it was bravery and calmness that can conquer whatever difficulty came in the way. 添加标题文字 04.课后作业 添加标题文字 38 Thank you！ 添加标题文字 Lavf58.20.100 $$