Unit 8 Section Ⅶ Writing(课件PPT)-【精讲精练】2024-2025学年高中英语选择性必修第三册（北师大版2019）

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At 9 p.m.，the ambulance brought in a man in his 60s who was having a heart attack.His face was pale，and he was frightened.The whole night I did my best to save his life.Before I left in the morning to spend New Year with my family，I stopped by to see how he was doing.It was still tough，but he had survived the night and was sleeping. The following year I got New Year's Eve duty again.At 9 p．m.sharp，the ward clerk told me there was a couple who wanted to speak with me.When I approached them，the man introduced himself as Mr Lee and said，“You probably don't remember me，but last New Year's Eve you saved my life.Thank you for the year you gave me.” He and his wife hugged me，handed me a small gift，and left. The following year a new doctor had joined the group，but I wanted to see if Mr and Mrs Lee would return.This time，I volunteered for the shift.I kept an eye on the door.Once again，at exactly 9 p．m.，the Lees appeared，carrying a warmly wrapped bundle.It was their new grandchild. Mr Lee，his family and I spent 13 New Year's Eves together.In the later years the staff all knew about the story and would work to give me time with him in the break room，where we spent a half­hour each New Year's Eve. Last year I saw Mrs Lee alone in the hospital with a gift for me. I carefully opened the package and found a crystal(水晶) bell inside with the word “Friendship” engraved(雕刻) on it. [审题谋篇] ★审题定调 审前文大意以及要点： 第一段：介绍作者新到一家小医院急诊室上班，新年除夕值班； 第二段：介绍作者抢救一位患心脏病的人，早晨病人转危为安； 第三段：病人夫妇感恩作者，到医院送礼物； 第四段：作者主动值夜班，期望见到病人夫妇。 第五段：连续13年病人一家人都在除夕夜和作者团聚。 续写部分构思： (1)第一段所给首句：Last year I saw Mrs Lee alone in the hospital with a gift for me. 上文提到Mr Lee一家人连续13年和作者一起过除夕夜，结合首句中的alone可知，Mr Lee可能因病去世，而Mrs Lee拿着的礼物可能是Mr Lee临终前留给作者的。 (2)第二段所给首句：I carefully opened the package and found a crystal bell inside with the word “Friendship” engraved on it. 作者打开包裹看到的是一个上面刻着“友谊”二字的水晶铃。由此作者所想到的应该是他们一起度过的新年除夕以及他们之间的友谊。 结尾句：应该围绕the crystal bell收尾。 ★谋篇布局 体裁 记叙文 话题 医患之间的友谊故事 时态 一般过去式 人称 第一和三人称 结构 第一段：Mr Lee 去世，Mrs Lee转送我礼物 第二段：水晶铃让我们永远珍视友谊 [语言组织] 就本篇习作而言，每个部分围绕以下内容组织语言。 1．第一段：Mr Lee 去世，Mrs Lee转送我礼物。 普通表达 高级表达 Mr Lee died from another heart attack two days ago. She told me Mr Lee died from another heart attack two days ago. He had never forgotten our appointment and he prepared the last gift days ago. He had never forgotten our appointment，so he prepared the last gift days ago. He lived with a grateful heart and had a meaningful life for 13 years. He lived with a grateful heart and had a meaningful life for as long as 13 years. 2.第二段：水晶铃让我们永远珍视友谊。 普通表达 高级表达 When I saw the bell，I looked back on the New Year's Eves which I spent with the Lees and the friendship between us. Seeing the bell，I looked back on the New Year's Eves spent with the Lees and the friendship between us. My family，my friends and I ring that bell on every New Year's Eve at exactly 9 p．m.and offer our best wishes to the man who we won't forget. Now，my family，my friends and I ring that bell on every New Year's Eve at exactly 9 p．m.，offering our best wishes to the man who we won't forget. [连句成篇] Last year I saw Mrs Lee alone in the hospital with a gift for me.Mrs Lee looked pale.She told me Mr Lee died from another heart attack two days ago.He had never forgotten our appointment，so he prepared the last gift days ago.He lived with a grateful heart and had a meaningful life for as long as 13 years.The appointment is a reminder of the fortune he got from me.Mrs Lee then handed me a package. I carefully opened the package and found a crystal (水晶) bell inside with the word “Friendship” engraved (雕刻) on it.Seeing the bell，I looked back on the New Year's Eves spent with the Lees and the friendship between us.Now，my family，my friends and I ring that bell on every New Year's Eve at exactly 9 p．m.，offering our best wishes to the man who we won't forget.The bell always reminds us of being helpful to others and thankful to people who have helped us. 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。续写词数应为150左右。 It was a warm summer morning.I was reading the grocery specials in the paper when I found a particularly good deal—the bonus chicken packs: chicken quarters packed in family sizes.But if I drove over to the store for just one item，wouldn't the gas cost cut into the savings? Five minutes later，I was headed to the store on my bike: helmet on my head，and old backpack on my back.As I rode the two miles to the store，I noticed the temperature seemed to have gone up a little.When I entered the store，I headed straight to the chicken counter.I picked a package weighing slightly over ten pounds，and then headed for the checkout. After getting outside，reality set in when the air hit my face.It was really hot.I realized I didn't have the car，so the chicken would be riding on my back.I put it into my backpack and thought to myself，“It's only two miles.If I concentrate，I will be home in no time.” Actually the partially frozen chicken felt cold against my back but the rest of me was beginning to sweat. As I approached a signal light，it turned yellow so I stopped.Suddenly，I heard a woman screaming.The light turned green but the cars didn't move.Maybe there had been an accident? I looked behind me even though I never heard any cars crash. What I saw was a small crowd of people coming up the road towards me.I heard someone yell，“I'm a nurse.” I looked around again and still，no accident.Moving faster，this crowd of folks started talking loudly in my direction.“Are you alright? We're here to help.” “Who are they talking to？” I wondered.“Can we help you？” they all asked.Out of the corner of my eye，I saw traffic piling up.I was confused! “No！” I told the crowd.“I'm fine！” It was their turn to look confused. I pointed to the backpack as I started to laugh. [语篇解读]　本文讲述了作者想要去商店购买打折的鸡肉，但是如果开车，花费的汽油钱就抵消了打折的钱，于是作者决定骑自行车去商店。天气很热，在回来的路上，作者背包里的冻鸡肉融化了，作者的身上全是血水，以至于过路人认为他出了意外的故事。 【写作指导】 根据第一段首句内容“轮到他们看起来困惑了。”可知，第一段可描写过路人的困惑，以及作者终于明白发生了什么。 根据第二段首句内容“我指着背包开始笑。”可知，第二段可描写作者解释原因，每个人都如释重负。 One possible version： It was their turn to look confused. Someone spoke up，“You are bleeding all over! Why don't you get off your bike and check？” I got off my bike.Willing hands held my bike and helped me get my backpack off.“Were you in an accident? Were you wounded？” I was peppered with strange questions.Then I looked down at my backpack，sitting now on the white concrete line of road.There was a red ring around it! I realized my arms and legs also had blood on them. I pointed to the backpack as I started to laugh. “It's my chicken，” I told the frightened group of people.They opened my backpack not knowing what to expect.And they found ten pounds of chicken parts，the ice of which had seriously melted.The mixture of water and blood ran through my backpack and all over me.I looked like an accident victim.Suddenly，everyone was laughing out of relief.All of a sudden I realized how hot it was! All this for cheap chicken! $$