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课时作业(五) 读后续写专训
(限时:50分钟)
动作描写之foot动“脚”
单词
barefoot adj.&adv.赤脚的(地)
短语
①get/leap to one's feet 直起身来/跳起来
②jump/rise to one's feet 跳起来/站起来
③drag one's feet 拖着脚步 ④tap/stamp one's feet 跺脚
⑤put one's feet up 跷起脚休息 ⑥in bare foot 光着脚
⑦plant one's feet firmly to the ground 双脚钉在那里
1.按要求用与“foot”相关的表达补全以下各句
(1)她正跷着脚看电视,这时她的父母让她回家。
She was putting her feet up and watching TV when her parents asked her to return home.(动作描写)
(2)当她听到这个消息时,她跳了起来。
She jumped to her feet when she heard the news.
(3)一开始她双脚钉在那里,不肯移动。
At first, she planted her feet firmly to the ground and refused to move an inch .(动作描写)
(4)她的父亲皱着眉头不耐烦地跺着脚。
Her father frowned and tapped/stamped his feet impatiently. (动作描写)
(5)他们既生气又不耐烦,他们把她拖出宾馆,她的脚乱踢。
Impatient and angry , they carried her out of the hotel, with her feet kicking .(with复合结构)
(6)她磨磨蹭蹭很不情愿地跟随父母回了家。
She dragged her feet as she unwillingly followed her parents home. (动作描写)
(7)一到家她就脱下鞋子,光着脚飞快地冲到自己的卧室中。
On arriving home, she pulled/took off her shoes and dashed into her bedroom, barefoot and fast. (形容词作状语)
2.将以上各句合并成小短文并背诵成文,注意使用合适的衔接过渡词汇
One possible version:
She was putting her feet up and watching TV when her parents asked her to return home.However, she jumped to her feet when she heard the news.At first, she planted her feet firmly to the ground and refused to move an inch.Her father frowned and tapped/stamped his feet impatiently.Impatient and angry, they carried her out of the hotel, with her feet kicking.She dragged her feet as she unwillingly followed her parents home.On arriving home, she pulled off her shoes and dashed into her bedroom, barefoot and fast.
★即使时间再紧,也要挤时间把范文抄写在这里,体会如何衔接语篇的同时练习书写。
阅读下面的材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
[1]On a hot September afternoon, Peter and his friend Isabel were on their way to the library.When they passed by Tubman park, Isabel suggested cutting through it to get to the library.As they entered the park, the sight of the swings(秋千) and the merry-go-round brought back a flood of memories of their childhood spent there.But now everything looked so old, sad, and dirty.Litter lay on the ground next to an overflowing trash bin.There were still young schoolchildren playing there but they had to avoid the trash that littered the playground.A little boy told them that the city took the other trash cans away and the remaining one never got emptied often.
[2]As they headed toward the library, the two high school students wrinkled their forehead.In the library, they encountered Mrs Evans, their kind-hearted fifth-grade teacher, retired yet still passionate.Mrs Evans listened as Isabel and Peter eagerly explained what they'd seen.Finally, she recommended them to go to the City Hall to voice their concerns.
[3]The next day, Isabel and Peter went into the building of the City Hall but were met with an impatient officer.They were informed that the city couldn't help with their problem due to a tight budget.Discouraged, they left and turned to Mrs Evans for help.
[4]Under her guidance, they decided to ask Go Green, a non-profit organization whose goal is to protect the environment, for help.“This group is good at raising money for projects just like yours, ” said Mrs Evans.She promised to arrange them to present their ideas to Go Green.Hearing this, their face lit up.
[5]Two main tasks remained ahead: researching ways to clean up the park and preparing a convincing presentation.As Isabel was good at researching while Peter always had a talent for speaking, they cooperated quite well.Isabel learned from a science magazine that a new type of trash bin can squeeze the trash down without being emptied often, which saves time, money, and energy.Based on this, Peter practiced his presentation over and over again.
注意:续写词数应为150左右。
A week later, Peter stood nervously at the back of the hall where Go Green was meeting.
After the meeting, Isabel excitedly told Peter the good news.
1.文本分析
主要人物
Peter, Isabel, Mrs Evans
事件主线
Peter和Isabel发现Tubman公园破败不堪,垃圾满地,于是决定想办法改变其面貌。
情感表达
(原文依据)
[Para.2] wrinkled their forehead→[Para.3] discouraged →[Para.4]their face lit up
2.线索推测:两段首句定发展,始终不忘“3衔接1呼应”
标出两段首句关键词
续写第一段:A week later, Peter stood nervously at the back of the hall where Go Green was meeting.
续写第二段:After the meeting, Isabel excitedly told Peter the good news.
3衔接1呼应
第一段内容和第一段首句密切衔接;第一段结尾和第二段首句密切衔接
❶根据第一段首句可知,一周后,Peter 紧张地 站在“绿色行动组织”开会的大厅后面。第一段应描写:Peter向 “绿色行动组织”作报告 的情况。
Tips: 叙述应该从 Peter 的角度展开。
❷根据第二段首句可知,会后,Isabel兴奋地告诉了Peter这个 好消息 。第二段应描写:得知“绿色行动组织” 同意提供帮助 ,Peter和Isabel接下来为让 公园 恢复生机展开了一系列行动。
❸由此可推测:第一段的结局:Peter的报告 非常成功 ,报告结束后,Isabel继续和 “绿色行动组织” 开会。第二段的结局:经过Isabel和Peter的 努力 ,公园 焕然一新 。
第二段内容和第二段首句密切衔接;第二段结尾和文章主旨相呼应
3.细节构思:每段三个微情节原则
第一段
情节
①轮到Peter作报告;②Peter克服了 紧张 ,报告非常成功失败;③Isabel留下来继续和 “绿色行动组织” 讨论一些细节
动作描写
calm…down (使……镇静)→ clear one's throat (清嗓子)→ conclude (结束)
心理描写
信心 n. confidence ;专心致志的 adj. absorbed
第二段
情节
①Isabel告知Peter 好消息 ;②Peter和Isabel接下来的目标——让公园 恢复生机 ;③经过Isabel和Peter的努力,公园 焕然一新
动作描写
approve (批准)→ inform sb of sth (告知某人某事)→ replace (代替) → take on a new look (呈现新的面貌)→ make a difference (有影响)
心理描写
兴奋的 adj. excited ;欢乐的,快乐的 adj. merry/happy
4.遣词造句:连词成句,连句成篇
高级词汇、词块&熟词生义
① wildly adv.狂乱地
② convincing adj.令人信服的
③ logical adj.合乎逻辑的
④ well-organized adj.有条理的
⑤ absorbed adj.专心致志的
⑥ conclude v.结束
⑦ officially adv.正式地
⑧ approve v.批准
⑨ maintain v.维持
⑩ tireless adj.不知疲倦的
⑪ calm…down 使……镇静
⑫ clear one's throat 清嗓子
⑬ go smoothly 进展顺利
⑭ base on 基于
⑮ inform sb of sth 告知某人某事
⑯ get down to doing/set out to do/set about doing 开始做……
⑰ recreational equipment 娱乐设备
⑱ be replaced with 被替换为
⑲ take on a new look 呈现新的面貌
⑳ at the sight of 一看到……
㉑ make a difference 有影响
高分句型
(1)v.-ing作状语&独立主格
站在几位来自“绿色行动组织”的专家面前,尽管心跳加速,Peter还是清了清嗓子,开始了演讲。
Standing in front of several experts from Go Green, though his heart beating wildly , Peter cleared his throat and began the presentation.
(2)谓语动词的强调
他确实很有天赋——他的声音清晰而令人信服,他的演讲合乎逻辑且有条理。
He did have the talent —his voice was clear and convincing, and his speech was logical and well-organized.
(3)not only 置于句首引起部分倒装
“绿色行动组织”不仅会为清理公园提供帮助,还同意提供他们购买垃圾桶所需的资金。
Not only would Go Green offer assistance to clean up the park but also agreed to provide the money they needed to purchase the trash bin.
(4)so…that…意为“如此……以至于……”
他们非常激动,立即把这个好消息告诉了Mrs Evans。
They were so excited that they immediately informed Mrs Evans of the good news.
5.成文誊写
One possible version:
A week later, Peter stood nervously at the back of the hall where Go Green was meeting.Finally, it was time for him to do the presentation.Walking to the front of the hall, Peter tried his best to calm himself down.Standing in front of several experts from Go Green,though his heart beating wildly, Peter cleared his throat and began the presentation.Peter gradually got back his confidence.He did have the talent—his voice was clear and convincing, and his speech was logical and well-organized.Everything went so smoothly with the experts fully absorbed.Peter concluded his presentation with a deep bow and left while Isabel stayed to discuss the details based on the research.
After the meeting, Isabel excitedly told Peter the good news.Their ideas were officially approved.Not only would Go Green offer assistance to clean up the park but also agreed to provide the money they needed to purchase the trash bin.They were so excited that they immediately informed Mrs Evans of the good news.Then, they got down to cleaning the park.All the recreational equipment was properly maintained as well.The old trash cans were replaced with the new type of trash bin.With their tireless effort, eventually, the park took on a new look.Children in the neighbourhood started crowding in and enjoying themselves.At the sight of the merry scene, Isabel and Peter looked at each other, feeling they made a difference.
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