读后续写03-（五点爆破法&动作链）-急流救人 课件--2025届高三下学期英语一轮复习专项

Continuation writing （3） “五点爆破”法&动作描写 （急流救人） “五点爆破”法 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 The afternoon was very hot and dry. Sweat ran down Richard’s face as the 24-year-old kept cycling along a rural road. Suddenly, he noticed a small bike lying by the roadside. He immediately got off the bike and approached the spot, noticing a water bottle and a small pink helmet (头盔) lying nearby. He bent closer and saw fresh little muddy footsteps disappearing into the woods. Richard’s eyebrows (眉毛) shot up as he hurried toward the entrance of the thick forest. It seemed highly unusual for a little kid to be alone there. He had seen several houses on his way here, but even the nearest one was about five miles away. What would a kid be doing here all alone? Richard was confused and anxious. Richard’s instincts (直觉) told him something was wrong, so he cupped his hands around his mouth and called out: “Hello, anyone there?” Just as he changed course, he heard a distant cry from the heart of the woods. It was a little girl’s voice crying for help. “Help...I’m stuck...Help...” The voice faded with the wind. “I’m coming! Hold on!” Richard rushed toward the voice. As he got closer, he was shocked by what he saw. Tree branches moved quickly in circles on the muddy-brown river, the powerful current rushing through the rocks. He noticed a little girl and a dog holding onto a log (原木) floating in the water. The current was washing away everything on its course, and the girl was lucky as the log was stuck onto something under the surface. But it wouldn’t hold for long as the current was growing faster and stronger. Richard was running out of time. He had to pull the two out to the bank before they were washed toward the edge of the waterfall, which was just meters away. His mind acted fast,and he ran back to get something. “Hold on! I’ll be right back,” he promised her. Moments later, Richard returned with a long length of jungle vine (藤) tied around his waist. Richard jumped into the river and swam toward them._____________________________________________ Finally getting his breath back,Richard asked the girl how she ended up there. _________________________ The afternoon was very hot and dry. Sweat ran down Richard’s face as the 24-year-old kept cycling along a rural road. Suddenly, he noticed a small bike lying by the roadside. He immediately got off the bike and approached the spot, noticing a water bottle and a small pink helmet (头盔) lying nearby. He bent closer and saw fresh little muddy footsteps disappearing into the woods. Richard’s eyebrows (眉毛) shot up as he hurried toward the entrance of the thick forest. It seemed highly unusual for a little kid to be alone there. He had seen several houses on his way here, but even the nearest one was about five miles away. What would a kid be doing here all alone? Richard was confused and anxious. Richard’s instincts (直觉) told him something was wrong, so he cupped his hands around his mouth and called out: “Hello, anyone there?” Just as he changed course, he heard a distant cry from the heart of the woods. It was a little girl’s voice crying for help. “Help...I’m stuck...Help...” The voice faded with the wind. “I’m coming! Hold on!” Richard rushed toward the voice. As he got closer, he was shocked by what he saw. Tree branches moved quickly in circles on the muddy-brown river, the powerful current rushing through the rocks. He noticed a little girl and a dog holding onto a log (原木) floating in the water. The current was washing away everything on its course, and the girl was lucky as the log was stuck onto something under the surface. But it wouldn’t hold for long as the current was growing faster and stronger. Richard was running out of time. He had to pull the two out to the bank before they were washed toward the edge of the waterfall, which was just meters away. His mind acted fast,and he ran back to get something. “Hold on! I’ll be right back,” he promised her. Moments later, Richard returned with a long length of jungle vine (藤) tied around his waist. 1. 落点：浏览所给信息，确定大意与主题 2. 重点：梳理已知段落，确定主要情节 主要情节 beginning development climax ending … … kept cycling along a rural road… ... saw fresh little muddy footsteps... hurried toward the entrance of the thick forest …heard a distant cry… …a little girl and a dog holding onto a log (原木) floating in the water… …returned with a long length of jungle vine (藤) tied around his waist… 3. 突破点：借助段落开头，确定续写内容 研读续写 段落的开 头语 Para. 1 Richard jumped into the river and swam toward them. Para. 2 Finally getting his breath back, Richard asked the girl how she ended up there. 续写内容 Para. 1 Para. 2 （突破点）Richard 是如何救人的？ （突破点）小女孩去那里的原因+结尾 Richard 是如何救人的？ 小女孩去那里的原因+结尾 3. Richard reached the bank; exhausted; out of breath 1. How did Richard save the girl? 2.What made the rescue so hard? 2. ending（送女孩回家）+升华 1. Why did the girl go to the forest? 4. 亮点：刻画细节冲突，使语言表达连贯 刻画细节冲突 添加细节 营造冲突 1. Richard 救人的动作、语言描写以及对周围环境的描写。 2.小女孩去森林的why&how(细节)。 1. 放大 Richard 救人时与河水的冲突（河水湍急，浑浊）。着重描写救人的艰难。 2. 小女孩去森林的原因（狗）。 5. 基本点：做到首尾呼应，使结构完整合理 为了做到首尾呼应，使文章结构更加完整。 例如：前面提到的房子就是小女孩的家。 I.Individual Verb （单个动作描写） 主语+动作A +Adv(副词/表示心情类的副词)/PP(介词短语) He rushed away. He cried. immediately. fearfully and loudly. without hesitation (毫不犹豫地), suddenly(突然地), instantly(立即地), rapidly(立即地), quickly, undoubtfully/without doubt(毫无疑问地), unexpectedly(意料之外地), ultimately(最终地), at once(立即地), tightly(紧紧地)...... He continued to move forward with determination. 他以坚定的决心继续向行。 II.Action Chain （动作链） 在读后续写中，为了写出一个传神的动作，刻画人物的心理状态或行 为反应，可以运用“动作拆解法”，将一个简单的动作分解成2个甚至是3个一连串的细微的动作。 The muddy water had blocked his vision and choked his breath. 浑浊的泥水遮蔽了他的视线，也让他窒息。 主语+动作A, and 动作B He rushed away immediately. He cried fearfully and loudly. He cried fearfully and loudly and rushed away immediately. Richard pulled the log toward him, seized the dog’s leash in one hand, and swam toward the bank. Jane挥动她的衬衫。（浙江卷）。 简单： 拆解： 升级： Jane waved her bloouse. “站起来”--“喊叫”--“挥动” Jane stood up, screamed at the top of her lungs and waved her yellow blouse with every bit of her strength. 谓语动词三连：A, B and C Richard把木头拉向自己，用一只手抓住狗的皮带，然后向岸边游去。 Finally, Richard brought them to safety, and lay on the land, completely worn out but hugely relieved. 她跟着阴影走。 简单： 拆解： 升级： 谓语动词二连：A and B,（非谓语C...） 最后，Richard将他们带到了安全的地方，然后躺在地上，精疲力尽，但松了一口气。 She followed the shadows. “深信”--“跟随”，--“惊奇” She took a leap of faith and followed the shadows, surprising herself with each turn and stretch. Drawng closer, he shouted to the frightened girl, instructing her to reach out her hand. Lily冲出了教室。 简单： 升级： 非谓语A, 谓语 B, 非谓语 C 靠近一些后，他朝着那个惊恐的女孩大声喊叫，指示她伸出她的手。 Lily stormed out of the room. Boiling with rage, Lily stormed out of the room, screaming, “ I’m never coming back!” Having rested for a while, Richard walked them to their home, one of the houses he had passed. 他保持沉默。 简单：He kept silent. 升级： 我匆忙回家了。 简单：I went home hurriedly. 升级： Having done A, 主谓... 休息了一会儿后，Richard带着他们走向他们的家，那是他之前经过的一座房子之一。 Having thought it over carefully, he decided not to say anything. Having buried the bird scretly, I went home hurriedly. Richard jumped into the river and swam toward them. The muddy water had blocked his vision and choked his breath, but he continued to move forward with determination. Drawing closer, he shouted to the frightened girl, instructing her to reach out her hand. She obeyed, stretching her arm out towards him with a trembling hand, and Richard lifted her onto his back. Gathering all his strength, Richard pulled the log toward him, seized the dog’s leash in one hand, and swam toward the bank. Finally, Richard brought them to safety, lay on the land, completely worn out but hugely relieved. Finally getting his breath back,Richard asked the girl how she ended up there. She explained that her dog had run off after hearing firecrackers earlier that day. She followed it on her bike. When the dog ran into the woods, she left her bike behind and went after it. After the dog accidentally fell into the river, she jumped in to save it without hesitation, but she got stuck too. Having rested for a while, Richard walked them to their home, one of the houses he had passed. The girl’s parents, who had been anxiously searching, were deeply grateful. Richard’s bravery and quick thinking saved two lives. $$