读后续写：河中救援故事写作 讲义-2025届甘肃省兰州市高三下学期第一次诊断考试（一模）英语试题

读后续写 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Jameson Lobb, a 24-year-old investment banker from Toronto, had just started his new job on Wall Street. He was sharing a New York City apartment with his college friend, Raphael Jafri, an artificial intelligence engineer. One lunchtime, while working out on Pier (水上码头) 15, overlooking the East River, Lobb suddenly froze. “Someone’ s in the water,” he said. Without hesitation, he climbed over the rail and jumped into the cold, polluted river, still wearing his shoes. Jafri didn’t see the victim but trusted Lobb’s instincts. “Maybe he saw someone in trouble,” he thought. “Or maybe he needs my help.” Without delay, Jafri kicked off his shoes and dove in after his friend. Lobb reached the unconscious man first. He was middle-aged, well-dressed, and weighed about 200 pounds. The man was sinking fast, already three feet below the surface. Lobb dove down,grabbed him, and kicked upward until they both resurfaced. By then, Jafri had arrived. Together,they floated the man on his back, with Jafri supporting his shoulders and Lobb holding his hips and knees. The water was swirling (旋动), and their muscles burned as they struggled to pull the heavy,lifeless body toward the pier. The man’s skin was blue, and he wasn’t breathing. When they finally reached Pier 15, they faced another challenge: how to get out. The pier’s deck was 10 feet above them, and the water’s surface was covered in sharp shellfish. Jafri, barefoot, couldn’t climb without injuring himself. Suddenly, the man stirred (微动), breathing again. In his confusion, he lashed out, hitting Jafri in the face before slipping back into unconsciousness. The two friends, exhausted and struggling,now had to find a way to save themselves and the man they had risked everything to rescue. 注意： 1.续写词数应为150个左右； 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 On the pier, a crowd had gathered. ____________________________________________________________________________________________ Lobb and Jafri remained in the water a few minutes more, until they were rescued by theCoast Guard. ____________________________________________________________________________________________ 河中救援故事写作 续写要点（两段）​ 第一段续写要点：详细描述码头上人群的具体反应。刻画不同人的表现，如有人焦急地呼喊，有人冷静地打电话报警，有人四处寻找救援工具。着重描写扔绳子的人，包括他的动作、神态，以及绳子抛下时在空中的轨迹。细致描绘 Lobb 和 Jafri 接到绳子后，艰难地将其套在落水者身上的过程，突出他们此时体力的极度消耗，如双手颤抖、呼吸急促。展现众人合力将落水者拉上码头的场景，描述拉拽时的用力动作、喊号子声，以及成功将落水者救起后人群的短暂欢呼，最后强调 Lobb 和 Jafri 仍在水中的困境，如身体因寒冷和疲惫而麻木。​ 第二段续写要点：具体描写海岸警卫队到来时的场景，如船只快速行驶的声音、溅起的水花。详细描述船员救援的过程，包括准确地抛出救生衣，有力地将 Lobb 和 Jafri 拉上船的动作。刻画 Lobb 和 Jafri 上船后的状态，如瘫倒在船上、脸色苍白。交代落水者被送往医院的后续情况，如得知他脱离生命危险且有望完全康复的消息。突出 Lobb 和 Jafri 被视为英雄的情节，如人们的赞扬、媒体的报道，以及这一事件对社区的积极影响，如激励更多人勇敢面对困难、传递正能量。​ 情感线​ 第一段情感线：码头上人群最初看到 Lobb 和 Jafri 在水中救人时，表现出惊讶与担忧。随着救援的艰难推进，人群的情感转为焦急，迫切希望能提供帮助。当有人扔出绳子时，人群稍感欣慰，而 Lobb 和 Jafri 成功将绳子套在落水者身上时，人群又燃起希望。但看到 Lobb 和 Jafri 仍在水中，人们再次陷入担忧。Lobb 和 Jafri 在水中则从最初救人时的坚定，逐渐因体力消耗而感到疲惫、绝望，当看到绳子时又重拾希望，可在落水者获救而自己仍被困时，再次陷入无助。​ 第二段情感线：Lobb 和 Jafri 看到海岸警卫队到来时，心中涌起获救的喜悦与安心。上船后，他们因身体的疲惫和精神的放松，情感从紧张恐惧转变为平静。得知落水者有望康复时，他们感到欣慰与自豪。成为英雄后，他们收获了他人的赞扬与钦佩，内心充满成就感，同时也因这一经历对勇气和友谊有了更深刻的感悟。​ 故事线​ Jameson Lobb 在码头锻炼时发现有人落水，毫不犹豫地跳入冰冷且污染的河中救人，他的朋友 Raphael Jafri 随后也跳入水中帮忙。​ Lobb 和 Jafri 在水中艰难地救起昏迷的中年男子，他体重约 200 磅，且已下沉至水下 3 英尺，两人合力将其拉至水面并向码头游去。​ 到达码头后，他们面临新挑战，码头高出水面 10 英尺且水面有尖锐贝类，Jafri 赤脚无法攀爬，此时落水者苏醒并打伤 Jafri 后再次昏迷。​ 码头上人群聚集，有人呼喊鼓励，有人报警，有人扔出绳子，Lobb 和 Jafri 用尽最后力气将绳子套在落水者身上，众人合力将其救上码头，而 Lobb 和 Jafri 仍被困水中。​ 海岸警卫队迅速赶到，船员扔出救生衣并将 Lobb 和 Jafri 救上船，他们上船后被裹上温暖毛毯。​ 得知落水者被送往医院且有望完全康复，Lobb 和 Jafri 成为英雄，其事迹在社区传颂，激励他人。​ 主旨升华句​ This heroic rescue vividly demonstrates that in the face of danger, the courage of individuals and the power of collective action can triumph over even the most daunting of challenges, highlighting the indomitable spirit of humanity.（这次英勇的救援生动地表明，在危险面前，个人的勇气和集体行动的力量能够战胜最艰巨的挑战，凸显了人类不屈不挠的精神。）​ The story of Lobb and Jafri serves as a powerful reminder that selflessness and friendship are the cornerstones of a harmonious society, inspiring us all to be brave and lend a helping hand when others are in need.（Lobb 和 Jafri 的故事有力地提醒我们，无私和友谊是和谐社会的基石，激励我们所有人在他人需要时勇敢伸出援手。）​ Through this remarkable rescue, we learn that unexpected acts of kindness can have a profound impact, not only saving a life but also igniting a spark of hope and courage within a community, fostering a spirit of unity.（通过这次非凡的救援，我们了解到意外的善举可以产生深远的影响，不仅能拯救一条生命，还能在社区内点燃希望和勇气的火花，培养团结精神。）​ This event teaches us that true heroes are not defined by their superhuman abilities but by their willingness to put themselves at risk for the well - being of others, and their actions can inspire a generation to embrace compassion and bravery.（这次事件告诉我们，真正的英雄不是由超人的能力定义的，而是由他们为了他人的福祉甘愿冒险的意愿定义的，他们的行为可以激励一代人拥抱同情和勇敢。）​ The rescue operation on the pier is a shining example of how ordinary people can rise to extraordinary heights in times of crisis, proving that the bonds of friendship and the courage to act can overcome any obstacle and make the world a better place.（码头的救援行动是一个光辉的例子，展示了普通人在危机时刻如何能达到非凡的高度，证明了友谊的纽带和行动的勇气可以克服任何障碍，让世界变得更美好。）​ 写作示范一​ 第一段续写​ On the pier, a crowd had gathered in an instant. Some onlookers were screaming words of encouragement, their voices hoarse with anxiety. A young woman, her hands shaking, quickly dialed the Coast Guard. Meanwhile, an older man, with a determined look on his face, rushed to the edge of the pier and threw a long, sturdy rope down towards Lobb and Jafri. The rope unfurled in the air, like a lifeline sent from above. Lobb, his arms trembling from exhaustion, grabbed the rope with his numb hands. He and Jafri, gritting their teeth, managed to loop it around the unconscious man. The people on the pier pulled with all their might, their muscles straining. With each tug, the man in the water edged closer to safety. Cheers erupted when he was finally pulled onto the pier. But Lobb and Jafri, their bodies shivering from the cold and their energy completely drained, were still trapped in the freezing water, their eyes filled with a mix of relief for the man and worry for themselves.​ 第二段续写​ Lobb and Jafri remained in the water a few minutes more, until they were rescued by the Coast Guard. The sound of the Coast Guard boat cutting through the water was like music to their ears. As the boat approached, the crew members, with practiced precision, threw life jackets towards them. Lobb and Jafri, barely able to move, fumbled to put them on. Then, strong hands reached down and pulled them aboard. Once on the boat, they collapsed onto the deck, their faces pale. The crew wrapped them in thick, warm blankets. They learned that the rescued man had been rushed to the hospital and was in stable condition. News of their heroic act spread like wildfire. The community hailed them as heroes, and their story was featured in local newspapers. Their selfless act not only saved a life but also became a beacon of hope, inspiring others to be brave and kind in the face of adversity.​ 写作示范二​ 第一段续写​ On the pier, a crowd had gathered, their faces filled with shock and concern. Some were shouting, “Hang in there!” while others were on their phones, frantically calling for help. A man, his brow furrowed in concentration, found a long rope and hurled it towards the struggling men in the water. The rope landed with a splash near Lobb and Jafri. Lobb, his body weak from the cold and the strenuous effort, reached out and grasped the rope. He and Jafri, using their last reserves of strength, carefully wrapped the rope around the unconscious man. The people on the pier, united in their efforts, began to pull. Their feet planted firmly on the ground, they strained and heaved. With every pull, the man in the water came closer to the pier. Finally, he was safely on the pier. But Lobb and Jafri, their limbs heavy and cold, were still in the water, their bodies numb with fatigue and the biting cold.​ 第二段续写​ Lobb and Jafri remained in the water a few minutes more, until they were rescued by the Coast Guard. The Coast Guard boat sped towards them, its siren blaring. The crew on board wasted no time. They tossed life jackets to Lobb and Jafri, and then, with great care, hauled them onto the boat. Once on board, Lobb and Jafri were immediately given warm drinks and wrapped in blankets. They learned that the rescued man was on his way to recovery. The community was abuzz with their heroic deeds. People praised them for their courage and selflessness. Their story was shared far and wide, becoming an inspiration for all. It showed that in times of crisis, the power of human kindness and the bond of friendship can overcome any difficulty and bring hope to the darkest of situations.​ 参考答案 Paragraph 1: On the pier, a crowd had gathered. Some shouted for help, some scrambled to throw ropes and life jackets into the water, and even someone called the Coast Guard. The man remained unconscious, his body heavy and lifeless, but Lobb and Jafri refused to give up. Despite their exhaustion, they held onto him tightly, their arms and legs buming from the effort. With the two men pushing from below and the crowd pulling from above, the man’s body slowly rose until helping hands pulled him onto the pier. Paragraph 2: Lobb and Jafri stayed in the water for over 15 minutes before being rescued by the Coast Guard. When they were safely brought to the pier, the crowd erupted in cheers. Exhausted and bleeding from shellfish cuts, the two men managed to smile with relief as they watched the nearly drowned man being loaded into an ambulance. Despite their fatigue, they felt a profound sense of pride, knowing they had done something extraordinary. Their courageous and selfless act of saving a life left a lasting impression on all who witnessed it. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$