专题05 2024浙江1月语料10类40句(路痴女孩的自我救赎)-2025年新高考英语读后续写提分宝典

《2025年高考英语读后续写高分宝典》 专题05 2024浙江1月语料10类40句(路痴女孩的自我救赎) 原卷版 【读后续写六年高考考情】 年份 卷别 主题 话题 类型 2025 浙江1月卷 人与社会/自我 勇寻真相并且学会共情的重要性 生活故事类 八省联考卷 人与社会/动物 铁汉柔情让我感动流浪犬守护者 关爱动物类 2024 新课标I&II卷 人与社会 车站履行承诺还钱给出租车司机 个人成长类 浙江1月卷 人与自我 利用脑图来确定方位找到教学楼 校园生活类 九省联考卷 人与自然 志愿者训练意外发现海豚的秘密 关爱动物类 2023 新课标I&II卷 人与自我 老师鼓励参加作文比赛终获大奖 写作竞赛类 浙江1月卷 人与自然 作者两次与蜂鸟的神奇邂逅感悟 关爱动物类 2022 新课标I&II卷 人与自我 鼓励身残志坚男孩参加校越野赛 越野比赛类 浙江6月卷 人与社会 为社区无家可归的人们发放食物 助人为乐类 浙江1月卷 人与社会 与“最不合拍”搭档终成为好朋友 校园生活类 2021 新课标I&II卷 人与社会 孩子母亲节给妈妈做早餐送惊喜 家庭亲情类 浙江6月卷 人与自我 作者上学时一次打工挣钱的经历 个人成长类 浙江1月卷 人与社会 少年头意外卡在南瓜中爆红网络 生活故事类 2020 新课标I&II卷 人与社会 三个孩子帮助贫困家庭孩子挣钱 个人成长类 浙江7月卷 人与自然 与北极熊面对面的一次脱险经历 关爱动物类 浙江1月卷 人与自然 帮助宠物狗重获快乐收获新伙伴 关爱动物类 【读后续写情节衔接思维导图】 ( 点 1 ： 位于续写 第一段段首 ，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语； 点 2 ： 位于续写 第一段段尾 ，流畅衔接第二段段首句； 点 3 ： 位于续写 第二段段首 ，续写衔接第二段段首语； 点 4 ： 续写 结尾 主旨 升华 ，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。 ) 【读后续写语言表达满分策略】 【读后续写真题深度解读】 【原题呈现】 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Eva spent the first week of high school trying to keep her head above water. One of the major headaches for her was finding her way in the huge school building. It was a six-story building. On each floor, hallways stretched in four directions, leading to classrooms, laboratories, and teachers’ offices. Somewhere in the building, there was also a library, a cafeteria, and a gym. 段落大意：Eva对复杂校园环境的无力感 情节线：描述六层教学楼结构复杂，走廊四通八达，功能区繁多 情感线：焦虑 Having a poor sense of direction, Eva found it impossible to get around in such a huge building. All the different hallways and rooms were too much to think about, let alone commit to memory. She decided that she would memorize where her classes were and then pretend that the rest of the place didn’t exist. 段落大意：Eva选择性地简化空间认知 情节线：因方向感差→仅记忆必要路线→刻意忽略其他区域 情感线：无奈妥协 In her fast P.E. class, Eva was shocked when Coach Pitt announced that everyone had to run one mile around the track outside. She searched the faces of her classmates for signs of panic. There was nothing she feared more than having to run a whole mile. To Eva, “a mile” was used to describe long distances. It was ten miles from her home to her grandfather’s, and that always seemed like a long way, even in a car! 段落大意：体育课跑一英里引发的恐惧 情节线：教练宣布耐力测试→Eva联想"一英里"的遥远距离感 情感线：震惊与深度恐惧 When Coach Pitt blew his whistle (哨子), Eva figured she would be left in the dust. However, while some of her classmates edged ahead, others actually fell behind. “It’s just the beginning,” she thought. “I’ll come in last for sure.” 段落大意：起跑时的心理预期与实际差异 情节线：哨响后群体表现分化→Eva预设自己会垫底 情感线：自我怀疑→短暂困惑 Soon Eva began to breathe hard, with her heart pounding and legs shaking. Feeling desperate, Eva started using a mind wick on herself. She stopped thinking about the word “mile.” Instead, she focused on reaching the shadow east on the track by an oak tree up ahead. Then she concentrated on jogging to the spot where the track curved (拐弯). After that, she tried to see if she could complete her first lap. One lap turned into two, then three, then four. 段落大意：通过认知重构突破极限 情节线：生理痛苦→分解目标（树荫/弯道/单圈）→累计完成四圈 情感线：绝望→策略性专注→阶段性成就感 【原题呈现】 Eva spent the first week of high school trying to keep her head above water. One of the major headaches for her was finding her way in the huge school building. It was a six-story building. On each floor, hallways stretched in four directions, leading to classrooms, laboratories, and teachers’ offices. Somewhere in the building, there was also a library, a cafeteria, and a gym. Having a poor sense of direction, Eva found it impossible to get around in such a huge building. All the different hallways and rooms were too much to think about, let alone commit to memory. She decided that she would memorize where her classes were and then pretend that the rest of the place didn’t exist. In her fast P.E. class, Eva was shocked when Coach Pitt announced that everyone had to run one mile around the track outside. She searched the faces of her classmates for signs of panic. There was nothing she feared more than having to run a whole mile. To Eva, “a mile” was used to describe long distances. It was ten miles from her home to her grandfather’s, and that always seemed like a long way, even in a car! When Coach Pitt blew his whistle (哨子), Eva figured she would be left in the dust. However, while some of her classmates edged ahead, others actually fell behind. “It’s just the beginning,” she thought. “I’ll come in last for sure.” Soon Eva began to breathe hard, with her heart pounding and legs shaking. Feeling desperate, Eva started using a mind wick on herself. She stopped thinking about the word “mile.” Instead, she focused on reaching the shadow east on the track by an oak tree up ahead. Then she concentrated on jogging to the spot where the track curved (拐弯). After that, she tried to see if she could complete her first lap. One lap turned into two, then three, then four. Paragraph1: When Coach Pitt said “Nice work!” to her at the finish line, Eva was surprised. _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2: Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building. _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【步步为赢】 2024年1月浙江首考卷读后续写延续校园生活，人与自我的主题，整个故事概言之就是“女孩通过跑步的方式辨识校园”。若依故事的发展顺序，我们可以理解为“面对问题——找到方法——实现成长”。按照角色的成长历程，我们可以将其分为三部分：自我摆烂——自我领悟——自我蜕变。 一、段落大意梳理 1.开篇困境 新生 Eva 在高中首周陷入方向感危机。六层教学楼的复杂结构（每层四条走廊通向教室、实验室、图书馆等）让她难以适应，最终选择自我设限 —— 仅记忆教室位置，回避探索其他区域。 2.体育课挑战 首次体育课上，教练要求跑一英里（约 1600 米）。Eva 将 “一英里” 与十英里外的祖父家长途联想，产生强烈恐惧，预判自己会垫底。哨响后，她虽呼吸急促、双腿颤抖，但通过心理策略（专注橡树阴影、弯道等阶段性目标）意外完成四圈。 3.意外突破 教练终点处的 “干得好” 让 Eva 震惊，意识到分解目标的方法奏效。她决定将此策略迁移到熟悉教学楼的任务中，逐步克服对复杂环境的恐惧。 二、情节线发展 1. 冲突引入 环境冲突：庞大教学楼与 Eva 方向感缺陷的矛盾。 心理冲突：对未知区域的逃避（假装其他区域不存在）与体育课被迫直面长距离的压力。 2. 转折与解决 跑步事件：通过 “化整为零” 的思维技巧（将一英里拆解为多个小目标），Eva 突破自我极限，完成看似不可能的任务。 方法迁移：将跑步策略应用于探索教学楼，从记忆教室扩展到熟悉图书馆、食堂等，最终融入校园环境。 3. 主题升华 成长隐喻：通过 “分解目标” 克服心理障碍，呼应 “适应新环境” 的核心主题。 象征意义：教学楼的 “迷宫” 与跑道的 “环形” 形成空间对照，暗示 “探索即成长” 的深层含义。 三、情感线剖析 1. 初始焦虑 环境压迫感：用 “keep her head above water”（勉强维持清醒）、“pretend...didn’t exist”（逃避现实）等表达，体现 Eva 对陌生环境的无力感。 恐惧具象化：将 “一英里” 等同于 “十英里车程”，强化心理距离的压迫。 2. 过程挣扎 生理反应：“heart pounding”（心跳加速）、“legs shaking”（双腿颤抖）外化紧张情绪。 心理博弈：从 “left in the dust”（被抛弃）的绝望到 “focus on shadow”（专注细节）的自我暗示，展现从被动接受到主动应对的转变。 3. 突破与蜕变 惊喜与顿悟：教练的肯定（“Nice work!”）触发 Eva 对自身潜力的认知。 自信建立：将跑步经验迁移至教学楼探索，用 “conquer”（征服）“familiar territory”（熟悉领域）等词体现成长。 【情节梳理】 ( 推断出第一段续写框架 ： 人物： Eva Eva 在跑步后感觉疲惫但高兴 ( 与第一段首句中跑步结束以及教练表扬衔接 ) → Eva 想起跑步时通过 Oak Trees 作为标志的方法 ( 注意 Oak Trees 相关细节 ) →联系 Oak Trees 想到相对应的策略 ( 将大的目标分解为一个个小目标 ) →通过策略联想到对学校路线的迷茫 ( 与第二段首句策略以及解决对学校路线的迷茫衔接 ) ) ( 两段首句定一框： 人物： Eva ， Coach Pitt ( 由两段首句推断第一段的框架 ) 由题目所给文章可知， Eva 对偌大的教学楼感觉迷茫，同时 Eva 通过“橡树策略”完成了跑步。 由第一段首句得知， Eva 完成跑步的行为，得到了皮特教练的夸赞。 由第二段首句得知， Eva 需要使用一个方法，解决对教学楼路线的迷茫。 ) ( 二框二首正能量 ： ( 由第二段首句和结局推断第二段框架 ) 由题目所给文章可知， Eva 对偌大的教学楼感觉迷茫，同时 Eva 通过“橡树策略”完成了跑步。 由第二段首句得知， Eva 需要使用一个方法，解决对教学楼路线的迷茫。 ) ( 推断出第二段续写框架： Eva 决定在教学楼的探索中使用自己发现的橡树策略 ( 与第一段尾句中的策略和解决对学校路线的迷茫衔接 ) → Eva 在探索教学楼中的细节以及策略的运用 ( 注意对学校环境描写 ) → Eva 成功解决教学楼路线迷茫问题 ( 正能量故事结尾 ) → Eva 以后可以做到直面困难，更有信心的去解决难题 ( 主题升华 ) ) 【321设计思路】 321原则 上下文推理 内容预测 衔接句 1 结合Eva刚完成一英里跑步的情节，段首句是教练对她的肯定“Nice work!”她感到惊讶。Eva在跑步过程中感到“unexpected pride”和成就感。 描写她对成功完成目标的感受，既惊讶又有些自豪，她意识到跑步并没有想象中那么难。 过渡句 1 上文描述她在跑道上迈出一步步逐渐接近目标，后文可以通过反思她的进步，加深自信的提升，让她感受到“一步步前进”的方法可能适用于其他挑战。 她从此次成功中体会到“分步实现目标”的力量，萌生信心应对未来的挑战。 衔接句 2 第一段结尾中Eva获得信心，感到可以用相同方法来应对其他挑战。第二段段首句“Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building”暗示她下定决心在校园探索中也采取这种方法。 她回想起校园的迷茫和对复杂建筑的恐惧，萌生将“分步应对”策略应用于找到教室和熟悉校园的想法。 衔接句 3 前一句表明她决定采取分步应对的策略，接下来描述她的具体做法和进展。 通过逐步记住路线和地标，她开始熟悉校园环境。 过渡句 2 Eva逐步适应校园的复杂布局，在此过程中积累了信心，开始看到成效。她意识到面对“看似无法克服”的挑战的转变过程，感受到越来越熟悉的环境。 她的恐惧感逐渐被成就感和信心取代，校园从一个迷宫逐步变得清晰起来。 结尾升华 Eva成功地用“分步应对”来适应校园生活，这一变化带来了对新挑战的信心，同时让她发现自己有能力克服困难。 总结她学到的应对策略，点明“分步克服困难”不仅适用跑步，也适用适应新环境甚至面对未来各种挑战。 【难点讲解】 1. keep her head above water： 这个词组是十八世纪初出现的，字面意思就是让头露出水面，不要被淹死。常用意思为在艰难的处境下为生系，克服生活、工作和财务上的困难。但是在这个语境中，这里是比喻的说法，它意味着Eva试图在困难的情况下应对第一周适应新环境的挑战，尤其是在巨大的教学楼中找路。 2. be left in the dust： 这个短语也是比喻的，来源于一个运动员迅速移动时扬起的尘土。如果有人“be left in the dust”，意味着他们正在落后或被其他人超越。在文章中，Eva最初认为自己会被同学们抛在身后，无法跟上大家在跑步活动中的步伐。 3.edged： 在这个语境中，“edge”的意思是to move or to move sth slowly and carefully in a particular direction （使）徐徐移动，表示Eva的一些同学正在逐渐向前移动。它暗示着缓慢的行进，一些学生成功地略微领先于其他人。 4.a mind trick： 指的是用于影响思维、情绪或行为的一种心理策略或技术。在文章中，当Eva面临跑一英里的挑战时，她采用了一种技巧。她不再专注于“一英里”这个令人畏惧的概念，她之前把它与很长的距离联系在一起。相反，她将任务分解为更小、更容易管理的目标。例如，她专注于达到跑道上的一个特定点，然后是另一个点，利用地标和关注点使任务看起来不那么艰巨。这种心理策略帮助她克服了最初的困难，成功完成了跑步活动。 【读后续写真题满分语料】 满分秘诀一、无灵主语（时间、地点、情感、自然现象、动作行为类名词作主语） 1. 1.她的努力得到了老师的肯定，老师称赞她的创新思维。 2. 2.同学们的点头和赞许的微笑呼应了她自己的惊讶和满足。 3. 3.成就感席卷了她，使她充满了新获得的自信。 4. 4.同学们热情的欢呼和雷鸣般的掌声使她非常激动。 满分秘诀二、动作链（A and B型，A, B and C 型） 5. 5.她信心大增，顺着影子走去，每次转弯和伸展都让自己大吃一惊。 6. 6.她利用要影子在走廊里导航，找到自己的班级，甚至找到学校的设施。 满分秘诀三、独立主格结构/with复合结构 7. 7.伊娃想出了一个好主意，脸上绽放着笑容。 8. 8.随着时间的流逝，伊娃最终在完成一英里跑步的过程中熟悉了这个迷宫。 满分秘诀四、非谓语短语（作主语、宾语、状语、定语、宾语补足语等） 9. 9.她成功地跑完了一英里，没有停下来，也没有落在最后。 10. 10.她已经做好了最坏的打算，期待着成为最后一个气喘吁吁地冲过终点线的人。 11. 11.作为一名大一新生，她经常在6层楼的迷宫中迷路，这让她非常无助。 12. 12.不知不觉，她找到了去图书馆或自助餐厅的路，没有迷路。 13. 13.征服这一英里跑是她跑步生涯中的一个里程碑！ 14. 14.回顾整个过程，她意识到自己的心棒对她来说其实是一根魔杖。 满分秘诀五、形容词+副词开头 15. 15.令人惊讶的是，Pitts教练的积极肯定给她的内心注入了巨大的成就感。 16. 16.她气喘吁吁，疲惫不堪，意识到克服挑战需要一个聪明的策略，就像她的思维技巧一样。 17. 17.渐渐地，她在脑海中添加了其他地标——图书馆、自助餐厅、健身房。 18. 18.一天比一天，曾经的迷宫变成了一系列熟悉的小路。 满分秘诀六、特殊句式（倒装+强调+省略） 19. 19.就在那一刻，一个绝妙的想法在她脑海中萌生了。 20. 20.这一成就对她来说曾经是难以想象的，现在看来是一个里程碑。 21. 21.她刚一回到迷乱的迷宫，就开始探索一楼。 22. 22.她做梦也没想到自己能取得如此引人注目的成绩！ 23. 23.她不仅对这种赞美感到惊讶，而且还对她认为无法实现的胜利感到惊讶。 24. 24.尽管她很恐慌，但她仍然试图一层又一层地揭开她面前未知世界的神秘面纱。 满分秘诀七、介词短语位于句首 25. 25.健身房旁边是一家自助餐厅，提供各种各样的食物和饮料。 26. 26.她没有被建筑的规模和复杂性所淹没，而是专注于导航到这些关键位置。 27. 27.从那时起，伊娃期待着体育课，并挑战自己每次都跑得更快、更长。 28. 28.她不会被它的大小和复杂性所淹没，而是会把它分解成更小、更易于管理的部分。 29. 29.她每走一步，都给那些追随她的人留下了灵感的遗产。 满分秘诀八、环境描写 30. 30.当太阳射出光芒时，女孩注意到阴影是如何在地面上形成图案，引导着她的去路的。 满分秘诀九、主从复合句 31. 31.一圈一圈地跑成功了！她突然意识到，目标更容易通过小步实现。 32. 32.伊娃意识到，就像完成一英里赛跑一样，她可以通过同样的策略来克服在学校大楼里迷路的恐惧。 33. 33.皮特教练的鼓励让她意识到自己有能力克服任何挑战。 满分秘诀十、主题升华句 34. 34.从那时起，伊娃不再被这座建筑的大小所压倒，而是将其视为一项需要克服的挑战。 35. 35.就像她在赛道上的成功一样，在学校的导航成为她个人成长和恢复力之旅中的又一个里程碑。 36. 36.这对伊娃来说是一个宝贵的教训——有时，克服恐惧和使用心理技巧可以帮助我们取得比想象中更多的成就。 37. 37.最终，伊娃以一种打破常规的心态踏上了高中之旅。 38. 38.她突然意识到，她所担心的距离与其说是她的身体能力，不如说是她的感知能力。 39. 39.这段经历给她上了宝贵的一课：只要有决心和积极的心态，她就能克服她从未想过的挑战。 40. 40.她意识到，无论是在轨道上行驶数英里，还是在学校的走廊上，所有的挑战都可以一步一步地克服。 【读后续写名校好题调研】 （2025·四川·二模）师恩如光，照亮艺术梦想征程 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 It was the day of the school’s art exhibition. Students from various classes had been preparing their artworks for weeks. The exhibition hall was filled with many paintings, sculptures, and handicrafts, each one carefully crafted and placed to display the students’ best efforts. The walls seemed to come alive with colors and shapes, as the morning sunlight streamed through the high windows, casting a warm light over the displays. Miss Smith, the art teacher, was walking around, admiring the students’ wonderful work. Suddenly, she noticed that Jack, one of her most talented students, was standing alone in front of his painting, looking rather depressed. His painting, which was usually filled with lively colors and unique perspectives(视角), seemed dull and unfinished today. The edges were rough, and the colors seemed to mix together without the usual harmony. Miss Smith went over and gently asked Jack what the matter was. Jack hesitated, and then admitted that he had been going through a tough time lately. His parents were pressuring him to focus more on academics and were considering making him quit art classes. This had been weighing heavily on his mind, and he had lost his inspiration. He had spent many sleepless nights wondering how to balance his love for art with his parents’ expectations. Miss Smith understood the situation all too well. She knew Jack had a real gift for art and didn’t want to see him give up so easily. She told Jack that she would talk to his parents and try to make them understand his passion. She told stories of famous artists who had faced similar challenges but had gone on pursuing their dreams. She also showed Jack some sketches(素描)she had made when she was young and had faced doubts about her own artistic path. Jack’s eyes widened slightly as he saw the familiar struggles in his teacher’s past works. 注意： 1. 续写词数应为150左右； 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1 Greatly inspired by his teacher, Jack headed for his art studio. _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph 2 Jack and his parents walked onto the award stage, happy and proud. _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ （24-25高二下·浙江温州·开学考试）破茧成蝶：从质疑到荣耀的逆袭密码 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 Awards lined the front wall of the music room from the past successes of large, talented classes. But a shift in educational policies (政策), with an emphasis on academics, had reduced my choir to a mere 32 students. My lead singers had graduated or been forced to drop music classes, leaving me with inexperienced kids who couldn’t read music and could sing only a simple melody (曲子). This year’s singing contest would be held in seven months. Compared to other school choirs, the Madison choir with 75 members, King School with 125 students and etc., ours was little in size. One day, a student asked eagerly, “What will we be singing for contest this year?” I feared this moment. “Maybe we’ll skip the contest,” I suggested. “No! We can make it!” the kids screamed. “I’ll have to think about it,” I said, hoping their enthusiasm would die off soon. But that didn’t happen. Every day they begged and insisted. However, I couldn’t tell them they weren’t good enough as I had to protect their self-esteem (自尊). My efforts to discourage their eagerness, by showing them a difficult piece of music from the contest list, simply ended with, “It’s okay, Mrs. Pliszka, we’ll get it.” I struggled to make a decision. If I destroyed their hope, would I destroy their spirit? I wasn’t afraid of hard work, and I enjoyed a challenge. But I wasn’t a miracle (奇迹) worker. So I considered this dilemma. Finally, one morning I stomped into class. “From now on, be in your seats with your music folders on the desk when the bell rings, and sit at attention, ready for warm-ups the instant I’m ready to begin. When I’m working with one section, there will be no talking from the others. You will listen, and you will learn. You will work harder. If all these rules are obeyed, we will be entering the contest. To achieve our big dream, …” The rest of my sentence was lost in shouts of delight and applause. I was certain they would fail to keep this promise, and no one would have to be embarrassed. 注意： 1. 所写短文的词数应为150 左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题纸的相应位置作答。 As the weeks progressed, the kids remained focused. _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ When the contest day finally arrived, the kids felt ready to take on the world! _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 原创精品资源学科网独家享有版权，侵权必究！ 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$ 《2025年高考英语读后续写高分宝典》 专题05 2024浙江1月语料10类40句(路痴女孩的自我救赎) 解析版 【读后续写六年高考考情】 年份 卷别 主题 话题 类型 2025 浙江1月卷 人与社会/自我 勇寻真相并且学会共情的重要性 生活故事类 八省联考卷 人与社会/动物 铁汉柔情让我感动流浪犬守护者 关爱动物类 2024 新课标I&II卷 人与社会 车站履行承诺还钱给出租车司机 个人成长类 浙江1月卷 人与自我 利用脑图来确定方位找到教学楼 校园生活类 九省联考卷 人与自然 志愿者训练意外发现海豚的秘密 关爱动物类 2023 新课标I&II卷 人与自我 老师鼓励参加作文比赛终获大奖 写作竞赛类 浙江1月卷 人与自然 作者两次与蜂鸟的神奇邂逅感悟 关爱动物类 2022 新课标I&II卷 人与自我 鼓励身残志坚男孩参加校越野赛 越野比赛类 浙江6月卷 人与社会 为社区无家可归的人们发放食物 助人为乐类 浙江1月卷 人与社会 与“最不合拍”搭档终成为好朋友 校园生活类 2021 新课标I&II卷 人与社会 孩子母亲节给妈妈做早餐送惊喜 家庭亲情类 浙江6月卷 人与自我 作者上学时一次打工挣钱的经历 个人成长类 浙江1月卷 人与社会 少年头意外卡在南瓜中爆红网络 生活故事类 2020 新课标I&II卷 人与社会 三个孩子帮助贫困家庭孩子挣钱 个人成长类 浙江7月卷 人与自然 与北极熊面对面的一次脱险经历 关爱动物类 浙江1月卷 人与自然 帮助宠物狗重获快乐收获新伙伴 关爱动物类 【读后续写情节衔接思维导图】 ( 点 1 ： 位于续写 第一段段首 ，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语； 点 2 ： 位于续写 第一段段尾 ，流畅衔接第二段段首句； 点 3 ： 位于续写 第二段段首 ，续写衔接第二段段首语； 点 4 ： 续写 结尾 主旨 升华 ，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。 ) 【读后续写语言表达满分策略】 【读后续写真题深度解读】 【原题呈现】 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Eva spent the first week of high school trying to keep her head above water. One of the major headaches for her was finding her way in the huge school building. It was a six-story building. On each floor, hallways stretched in four directions, leading to classrooms, laboratories, and teachers’ offices. Somewhere in the building, there was also a library, a cafeteria, and a gym. 段落大意：Eva对复杂校园环境的无力感 情节线：描述六层教学楼结构复杂，走廊四通八达，功能区繁多 情感线：焦虑 Having a poor sense of direction, Eva found it impossible to get around in such a huge building. All the different hallways and rooms were too much to think about, let alone commit to memory. She decided that she would memorize where her classes were and then pretend that the rest of the place didn’t exist. 段落大意：Eva选择性地简化空间认知 情节线：因方向感差→仅记忆必要路线→刻意忽略其他区域 情感线：无奈妥协 In her fast P.E. class, Eva was shocked when Coach Pitt announced that everyone had to run one mile around the track outside. She searched the faces of her classmates for signs of panic. There was nothing she feared more than having to run a whole mile. To Eva, “a mile” was used to describe long distances. It was ten miles from her home to her grandfather’s, and that always seemed like a long way, even in a car! 段落大意：体育课跑一英里引发的恐惧 情节线：教练宣布耐力测试→Eva联想"一英里"的遥远距离感 情感线：震惊与深度恐惧 When Coach Pitt blew his whistle (哨子), Eva figured she would be left in the dust. However, while some of her classmates edged ahead, others actually fell behind. “It’s just the beginning,” she thought. “I’ll come in last for sure.” 段落大意：起跑时的心理预期与实际差异 情节线：哨响后群体表现分化→Eva预设自己会垫底 情感线：自我怀疑→短暂困惑 Soon Eva began to breathe hard, with her heart pounding and legs shaking. Feeling desperate, Eva started using a mind wick on herself. She stopped thinking about the word “mile.” Instead, she focused on reaching the shadow east on the track by an oak tree up ahead. Then she concentrated on jogging to the spot where the track curved (拐弯). After that, she tried to see if she could complete her first lap. One lap turned into two, then three, then four. 段落大意：通过认知重构突破极限 情节线：生理痛苦→分解目标（树荫/弯道/单圈）→累计完成四圈 情感线：绝望→策略性专注→阶段性成就感 【原题呈现】 Eva spent the first week of high school trying to keep her head above water. One of the major headaches for her was finding her way in the huge school building. It was a six-story building. On each floor, hallways stretched in four directions, leading to classrooms, laboratories, and teachers’ offices. Somewhere in the building, there was also a library, a cafeteria, and a gym. Having a poor sense of direction, Eva found it impossible to get around in such a huge building. All the different hallways and rooms were too much to think about, let alone commit to memory. She decided that she would memorize where her classes were and then pretend that the rest of the place didn’t exist. In her fast P.E. class, Eva was shocked when Coach Pitt announced that everyone had to run one mile around the track outside. She searched the faces of her classmates for signs of panic. There was nothing she feared more than having to run a whole mile. To Eva, “a mile” was used to describe long distances. It was ten miles from her home to her grandfather’s, and that always seemed like a long way, even in a car! When Coach Pitt blew his whistle (哨子), Eva figured she would be left in the dust. However, while some of her classmates edged ahead, others actually fell behind. “It’s just the beginning,” she thought. “I’ll come in last for sure.” Soon Eva began to breathe hard, with her heart pounding and legs shaking. Feeling desperate, Eva started using a mind wick on herself. She stopped thinking about the word “mile.” Instead, she focused on reaching the shadow east on the track by an oak tree up ahead. Then she concentrated on jogging to the spot where the track curved (拐弯). After that, she tried to see if she could complete her first lap. One lap turned into two, then three, then four. Paragraph1: When Coach Pitt said “Nice work!” to her at the finish line, Eva was surprised. _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2: Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building. _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【参考范文】 When Coach Pitt said “Nice work!” to her at the finish line, Eva was surprised. In the vast expanse of her school, a girl with poor directional skills struggled to navigate and often got lost. One day, during gym class, she observed a unique way to find her way - following the shadows of trees. As the sun cast its rays, the girl noticed how the shadows created patterns on the ground, guiding her path. She took a leap of faith and followed the shadows, surprising herself with each turn and stretch. Her efforts were noticed by the teacher, who praised her innovative thinking. Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building. She used the shadows to navigate the school hallways, find her classes, and even locate the school's various facilities. This newfound skill not only helped the girl navigate her school but also instilled in her a sense of confidence and adventure. She learned excitedly that with a little creativity and observation, any challenge could be overcome. And with each step she took, she left behind a legacy of inspiration for those who followed in her footsteps, knowing that even without a clear sense of direction, there's always a way to find one's way. 【解析】 【导语】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了高中生Eva因为方向感不强，经常在学校里迷路，在一次体育课上教练要求他们沿着校园跑步的时候Eva发现跟着树的影子能找到方向，她通过这个方法重新认识到了校园。 【详解】1.段落续写： ①由第一段首句内容“当Pitt教练在终点线对她说:“干得好!”，伊娃很惊讶。”可知，第一段可描写Eva通过自己追随影子的方法找到方向，并且受到了教练的称赞。 ②由第二段首句内容“Eva决定用同样的手段来记住学校大楼。”可知，第二段可描写Eva通过记住影子的方法来记住学校大楼并且通过这件事之后的感悟。 2.续写线索：方向感太差记不住学校建筑的位置——体育课上绕着学校跑却找不到方向——害怕最后一名心里非常紧张——跟随影子找到方向——受到教练的赞赏——获得感悟 3.词汇激活 行为类 ①努力做某事：struggle to do sth./strive to do sth. ②导航：navigate/guide ③了解：learn/know/acknowledge 情绪类 ①使某人惊讶：surprise sb./astonish sb. ②激动地：excitedly/in excitement 【点睛】[高分句型1]Her efforts were noticed by the teacher, who praised her innovative thinking.（who引导的非限制性定语从句） [高分句型2]She learned that with a little creativity and observation, any challenge could be overcome. （that引导的宾语从句） 【步步为赢】 2024年1月浙江首考卷读后续写延续校园生活，人与自我的主题，整个故事概言之就是“女孩通过跑步的方式辨识校园”。若依故事的发展顺序，我们可以理解为“面对问题——找到方法——实现成长”。按照角色的成长历程，我们可以将其分为三部分：自我摆烂——自我领悟——自我蜕变。 一、段落大意梳理 1.开篇困境 新生 Eva 在高中首周陷入方向感危机。六层教学楼的复杂结构（每层四条走廊通向教室、实验室、图书馆等）让她难以适应，最终选择自我设限 —— 仅记忆教室位置，回避探索其他区域。 2.体育课挑战 首次体育课上，教练要求跑一英里（约 1600 米）。Eva 将 “一英里” 与十英里外的祖父家长途联想，产生强烈恐惧，预判自己会垫底。哨响后，她虽呼吸急促、双腿颤抖，但通过心理策略（专注橡树阴影、弯道等阶段性目标）意外完成四圈。 3.意外突破 教练终点处的 “干得好” 让 Eva 震惊，意识到分解目标的方法奏效。她决定将此策略迁移到熟悉教学楼的任务中，逐步克服对复杂环境的恐惧。 二、情节线发展 1. 冲突引入 环境冲突：庞大教学楼与 Eva 方向感缺陷的矛盾。 心理冲突：对未知区域的逃避（假装其他区域不存在）与体育课被迫直面长距离的压力。 2. 转折与解决 跑步事件：通过 “化整为零” 的思维技巧（将一英里拆解为多个小目标），Eva 突破自我极限，完成看似不可能的任务。 方法迁移：将跑步策略应用于探索教学楼，从记忆教室扩展到熟悉图书馆、食堂等，最终融入校园环境。 3. 主题升华 成长隐喻：通过 “分解目标” 克服心理障碍，呼应 “适应新环境” 的核心主题。 象征意义：教学楼的 “迷宫” 与跑道的 “环形” 形成空间对照，暗示 “探索即成长” 的深层含义。 三、情感线剖析 1. 初始焦虑 环境压迫感：用 “keep her head above water”（勉强维持清醒）、“pretend...didn’t exist”（逃避现实）等表达，体现 Eva 对陌生环境的无力感。 恐惧具象化：将 “一英里” 等同于 “十英里车程”，强化心理距离的压迫。 2. 过程挣扎 生理反应：“heart pounding”（心跳加速）、“legs shaking”（双腿颤抖）外化紧张情绪。 心理博弈：从 “left in the dust”（被抛弃）的绝望到 “focus on shadow”（专注细节）的自我暗示，展现从被动接受到主动应对的转变。 3. 突破与蜕变 惊喜与顿悟：教练的肯定（“Nice work!”）触发 Eva 对自身潜力的认知。 自信建立：将跑步经验迁移至教学楼探索，用 “conquer”（征服）“familiar territory”（熟悉领域）等词体现成长。 【情节梳理】 ( 推断出第一段续写框架 ： 人物： Eva Eva 在跑步后感觉疲惫但高兴 ( 与第一段首句中跑步结束以及教练表扬衔接 ) → Eva 想起跑步时通过 Oak Trees 作为标志的方法 ( 注意 Oak Trees 相关细节 ) →联系 Oak Trees 想到相对应的策略 ( 将大的目标分解为一个个小目标 ) →通过策略联想到对学校路线的迷茫 ( 与第二段首句策略以及解决对学校路线的迷茫衔接 ) ) ( 两段首句定一框： 人物： Eva ， Coach Pitt ( 由两段首句推断第一段的框架 ) 由题目所给文章可知， Eva 对偌大的教学楼感觉迷茫，同时 Eva 通过“橡树策略”完成了跑步。 由第一段首句得知， Eva 完成跑步的行为，得到了皮特教练的夸赞。 由第二段首句得知， Eva 需要使用一个方法，解决对教学楼路线的迷茫。 ) ( 二框二首正能量 ： ( 由第二段首句和结局推断第二段框架 ) 由题目所给文章可知， Eva 对偌大的教学楼感觉迷茫，同时 Eva 通过“橡树策略”完成了跑步。 由第二段首句得知， Eva 需要使用一个方法，解决对教学楼路线的迷茫。 ) ( 推断出第二段续写框架： Eva 决定在教学楼的探索中使用自己发现的橡树策略 ( 与第一段尾句中的策略和解决对学校路线的迷茫衔接 ) → Eva 在探索教学楼中的细节以及策略的运用 ( 注意对学校环境描写 ) → Eva 成功解决教学楼路线迷茫问题 ( 正能量故事结尾 ) → Eva 以后可以做到直面困难，更有信心的去解决难题 ( 主题升华 ) ) 【321设计思路】 321原则 上下文推理 内容预测 衔接句 1 结合Eva刚完成一英里跑步的情节，段首句是教练对她的肯定“Nice work!”她感到惊讶。Eva在跑步过程中感到“unexpected pride”和成就感。 描写她对成功完成目标的感受，既惊讶又有些自豪，她意识到跑步并没有想象中那么难。 过渡句 1 上文描述她在跑道上迈出一步步逐渐接近目标，后文可以通过反思她的进步，加深自信的提升，让她感受到“一步步前进”的方法可能适用于其他挑战。 她从此次成功中体会到“分步实现目标”的力量，萌生信心应对未来的挑战。 衔接句 2 第一段结尾中Eva获得信心，感到可以用相同方法来应对其他挑战。第二段段首句“Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building”暗示她下定决心在校园探索中也采取这种方法。 她回想起校园的迷茫和对复杂建筑的恐惧，萌生将“分步应对”策略应用于找到教室和熟悉校园的想法。 衔接句 3 前一句表明她决定采取分步应对的策略，接下来描述她的具体做法和进展。 通过逐步记住路线和地标，她开始熟悉校园环境。 过渡句 2 Eva逐步适应校园的复杂布局，在此过程中积累了信心，开始看到成效。她意识到面对“看似无法克服”的挑战的转变过程，感受到越来越熟悉的环境。 她的恐惧感逐渐被成就感和信心取代，校园从一个迷宫逐步变得清晰起来。 结尾升华 Eva成功地用“分步应对”来适应校园生活，这一变化带来了对新挑战的信心，同时让她发现自己有能力克服困难。 总结她学到的应对策略，点明“分步克服困难”不仅适用跑步，也适用适应新环境甚至面对未来各种挑战。 【难点讲解】 1. keep her head above water： 这个词组是十八世纪初出现的，字面意思就是让头露出水面，不要被淹死。常用意思为在艰难的处境下为生系，克服生活、工作和财务上的困难。但是在这个语境中，这里是比喻的说法，它意味着Eva试图在困难的情况下应对第一周适应新环境的挑战，尤其是在巨大的教学楼中找路。 2. be left in the dust： 这个短语也是比喻的，来源于一个运动员迅速移动时扬起的尘土。如果有人“be left in the dust”，意味着他们正在落后或被其他人超越。在文章中，Eva最初认为自己会被同学们抛在身后，无法跟上大家在跑步活动中的步伐。 3.edged： 在这个语境中，“edge”的意思是to move or to move sth slowly and carefully in a particular direction （使）徐徐移动，表示Eva的一些同学正在逐渐向前移动。它暗示着缓慢的行进，一些学生成功地略微领先于其他人。 4.a mind trick： 指的是用于影响思维、情绪或行为的一种心理策略或技术。在文章中，当Eva面临跑一英里的挑战时，她采用了一种技巧。她不再专注于“一英里”这个令人畏惧的概念，她之前把它与很长的距离联系在一起。相反，她将任务分解为更小、更容易管理的目标。例如，她专注于达到跑道上的一个特定点，然后是另一个点，利用地标和关注点使任务看起来不那么艰巨。这种心理策略帮助她克服了最初的困难，成功完成了跑步活动。 【读后续写真题满分语料】 满分秘诀一、无灵主语（时间、地点、情感、自然现象、动作行为类名词作主语） 1. Her efforts were acknowledged by the teacher, who praised her for her innovative thinking. 1.她的努力得到了老师的肯定，老师称赞她的创新思维。 2. Her classmates' nods and smiles of approval echoed her own surprise and satisfaction. 2.同学们的点头和赞许的微笑呼应了她自己的惊讶和满足。 3. The feeling of accomplishment washed over her, filling her with newfound confidence. 3.成就感席卷了她，使她充满了新获得的自信。 4. Enthusiastic cheers and thunderous applauses from her classmates kept her on the top of the world. 4.同学们热情的欢呼和雷鸣般的掌声使她非常激动。 满分秘诀二、动作链（A and B型，A, B and C 型） 5. She took a leap of faith and followed the shadows, surprising herself with each turn and stretch. 5.她信心大增，顺着影子走去，每次转弯和伸展都让自己大吃一惊。 6. She used the shadows to navigate the hallways, find her classes, and even locate the school's facilities. 6.她利用要影子在走廊里导航，找到自己的班级，甚至找到学校的设施。 满分秘诀三、独立主格结构/with复合结构 7. Eva came up with a good idea, with a smile blooming across her face. 7.伊娃想出了一个好主意，脸上绽放着笑容。 8. Time ticking away, Eva eventually got familiar with the maze in the way she finished the one-mile run. 8.随着时间的流逝，伊娃最终在完成一英里跑步的过程中熟悉了这个迷宫。 满分秘诀四、非谓语短语（作主语、宾语、状语、定语、宾语补足语等） 9. She managed to complete the mile run without stopping or coming in last. 9.她成功地跑完了一英里，没有停下来，也没有落在最后。 10. She had braced herself for the worst, expecting to be the last one panting across the line. 10.她已经做好了最坏的打算，期待着成为最后一个气喘吁吁地冲过终点线的人。 11. Being a freshman, she tended to get lost in the 6-story maze, leaving her so helpless. 11.作为一名大一新生，她经常在6层楼的迷宫中迷路，这让她非常无助。 12. Before she knew it, she was able to find her way to the library or cafeteria without getting lost. 12.不知不觉，她找到了去图书馆或自助餐厅的路，没有迷路。 13. Conquering this one mile was a milestone in her running career! 13.征服这一英里跑是她跑步生涯中的一个里程碑！ 14. Looking back at the whole course, she came to realize her mind wick was actually a magic wand for her. 14.回顾整个过程，她意识到自己的心棒对她来说其实是一根魔杖。 满分秘诀五、形容词+副词开头 15. Amazingly, Coach Pitts' positive affirmation infused an enormous sense of achievement into her heart. 15.令人惊讶的是，Pitts教练的积极肯定给她的内心注入了巨大的成就感。 16. Breathless and exhausted, she realized overcoming challenges needed a smart strategy like her mind trick. 16.她气喘吁吁，疲惫不堪，意识到克服挑战需要一个聪明的策略，就像她的思维技巧一样。 17. Gradually, she added other landmarks – the library, the cafeteria, the gym – to her mental map. 17.渐渐地，她在脑海中添加了其他地标——图书馆、自助餐厅、健身房。 18. Day by day, what was once a maze became a series of familiar pathways. 18.一天比一天，曾经的迷宫变成了一系列熟悉的小路。 满分秘诀六、特殊句式（倒装+强调+省略） 19. It was at that instant that a terrific idea germinated in her mind. 19.就在那一刻，一个绝妙的想法在她脑海中萌生了。 20. This achievement, once unthinkable for her, now seemed like a milestone. 20.这一成就对她来说曾经是难以想象的，现在看来是一个里程碑。 21. No sooner had she returned to the confusing maze than she set out to explore the first floor. 21.她刚一回到迷乱的迷宫，就开始探索一楼。 22. Never in her wildest dream had she imagined that she could achieve such an eye-catching score! 22.她做梦也没想到自己能取得如此引人注目的成绩！ 23. Not only was she amazed at the compliment but also the triumph she had thought she couldn’t achieve. 23.她不仅对这种赞美感到惊讶，而且还对她认为无法实现的胜利感到惊讶。 24. Panicked as she was, she still tried to demystify the unknown world before her one floor after another. 24.尽管她很恐慌，但她仍然试图一层又一层地揭开她面前未知世界的神秘面纱。 满分秘诀七、介词短语位于句首 25. Next to the gym was a cafeteria, which provided a wide range of foods and drinks. 25.健身房旁边是一家自助餐厅，提供各种各样的食物和饮料。 26. Instead of feeling overwhelmed by the size of the building, she focused on navigating to these key locations. 26.她没有被建筑的规模和复杂性所淹没，而是专注于导航到这些关键位置。 27. From then on, Eva looked forward to P.E. class and challenged herself to run faster and longer each time. 27.从那时起，伊娃期待着体育课，并挑战自己每次都跑得更快、更长。 28. Instead of feeling overwhelmed by its size and complexity, she would break it down into smaller, more manageable parts. 28.她不会被它的大小和复杂性所淹没，而是会把它分解成更小、更易于管理的部分。 29. With each step she took, she left behind a legacy of inspiration for those who followed in her footsteps. 29.她每走一步，都给那些追随她的人留下了灵感的遗产。 满分秘诀八、环境描写 30. As the sun cast its rays, the girl noticed how the shadows created patterns on the ground, guiding her path. 30.当太阳射出光芒时，女孩注意到阴影是如何在地面上形成图案，引导着她的去路的。 满分秘诀九、主从复合句 31. One lap at a time did work! It dawned on her that goals are easier to achieve in small steps. 31.一圈一圈地跑成功了！她突然意识到，目标更容易通过小步实现。 32. Eva realized that just like tackling the mile run, she could conquer her fear of getting lost in the school building by applying the same strategy. 32.伊娃意识到，就像完成一英里赛跑一样，她可以通过同样的策略来克服在学校大楼里迷路的恐惧。 33.The encouragement from Coach Pitt made her realize that she was capable of overcoming any challenges. 33.皮特教练的鼓励让她意识到自己有能力克服任何挑战。 满分秘诀十、主题升华句 34. From then on, Eva was no longer overwhelmed by the size of the building, but instead saw it as a challenge to overcome. 34.从那时起，伊娃不再被这座建筑的大小所压倒，而是将其视为一项需要克服的挑战。 35. Just like her success on the track, navigating the school became another milestone in her journey of personal growth and resilience. 35.就像她在赛道上的成功一样，在学校的导航成为她个人成长和恢复力之旅中的又一个里程碑。 36. It was a valuable lesson for Eva --sometimes, pushing through our fears and using mental tricks can help us achieve more than we ever imagined. 36.这对伊娃来说是一个宝贵的教训——有时，克服恐惧和使用心理技巧可以帮助我们取得比想象中更多的成就。 37. At length, Eva was able to embark on the journey of high school with a mindset outside of the box. 37.最终，伊娃以一种打破常规的心态踏上了高中之旅。 38. It dawned on her that the distance she had feared was more about her perception than her physical capability. 38.她突然意识到，她所担心的距离与其说是她的身体能力，不如说是她的感知能力。 39. This experience taught her the valuable lesson that with determination and a positive mindset, she could overcome challenges she never thought possible. 39.这段经历给她上了宝贵的一课：只要有决心和积极的心态，她就能克服她从未想过的挑战。 40. She realized that challenges—whether miles on a track or hallways in a school—could all be overcome, step by step. 40.她意识到，无论是在轨道上行驶数英里，还是在学校的走廊上，所有的挑战都可以一步一步地克服。 【读后续写名校好题调研】 （2025·四川·二模）师恩如光，照亮艺术梦想征程 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 It was the day of the school’s art exhibition. Students from various classes had been preparing their artworks for weeks. The exhibition hall was filled with many paintings, sculptures, and handicrafts, each one carefully crafted and placed to display the students’ best efforts. The walls seemed to come alive with colors and shapes, as the morning sunlight streamed through the high windows, casting a warm light over the displays. Miss Smith, the art teacher, was walking around, admiring the students’ wonderful work. Suddenly, she noticed that Jack, one of her most talented students, was standing alone in front of his painting, looking rather depressed. His painting, which was usually filled with lively colors and unique perspectives(视角), seemed dull and unfinished today. The edges were rough, and the colors seemed to mix together without the usual harmony. Miss Smith went over and gently asked Jack what the matter was. Jack hesitated, and then admitted that he had been going through a tough time lately. His parents were pressuring him to focus more on academics and were considering making him quit art classes. This had been weighing heavily on his mind, and he had lost his inspiration. He had spent many sleepless nights wondering how to balance his love for art with his parents’ expectations. Miss Smith understood the situation all too well. She knew Jack had a real gift for art and didn’t want to see him give up so easily. She told Jack that she would talk to his parents and try to make them understand his passion. She told stories of famous artists who had faced similar challenges but had gone on pursuing their dreams. She also showed Jack some sketches(素描)she had made when she was young and had faced doubts about her own artistic path. Jack’s eyes widened slightly as he saw the familiar struggles in his teacher’s past works. 注意： 1. 续写词数应为150左右； 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1 Greatly inspired by his teacher, Jack headed for his art studio. _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph 2 Jack and his parents walked onto the award stage, happy and proud. _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【满分范文】 Greatly inspired by his teacher, Jack headed for his art studio. Miss Smith, noticing Jack’s potential, reached out to his parents. She told them about Jack’s talent and the value of art. Initially hesitant, his parents gradually understood. With their support, Jack picked up his brush, painting with new enthusiasm. After days of hard work, Jack finished his painting and submitted it to a local competition. To his delight, his piece was selected as the winning entry. Jack excitedly shared the good news with his parents, and together they got ready for the award ceremony. Jack and his parents walked onto the award stage, happy and proud. Jack scanned the audience and spotted Miss Smith, whose eyes sparkled with pride. In that moment, Jack knew he owed his success to her. His parents, now beaming, had come to appreciate his passion. The painting that had once been a source of despair was now a symbol of his triumph. As the applause washed over them, Jack vowed to continue his artistic journey, forever grateful to those who had believed in him. 【导语】文章以人物为线索展开，讲述了在学校艺术展览日，艺术老师Miss Smith注意到她最有天赋的学生之一Jack独自站在自己的画作前，显得非常沮丧。Jack的画作与以往充满活力和独特视角的作品相比，显得黯淡且未完成。通过与Jack交谈，Miss Smith了解到Jack近期因为父母施加的压力，要求他更多地关注学业，并考虑让他放弃艺术课，这使他感到非常沉重，失去了创作的灵感。Miss Smith深表理解，并分享了自己年轻时面对艺术道路疑虑时的经历，以及一些著名艺术家面对类似挑战但仍坚持追求梦想的故事，鼓励Jack不要轻易放弃。 【详解】1.段落续写 ①由第一段首句内容“受老师的极大鼓舞，Jack朝他的艺术工作室走去。”可知，第一段可描写Smith老师告知Jack父母他的才华以及艺术的价值，Jack得到了父母的支持后，在比赛中获奖的过程。 ②由第二段首句内容“Jack和父母走上颁奖台，满心欢喜，无比自豪。”可知，第二段可描写Jack获奖后发自内心感谢Smith老师的支持并决定坚持自己的艺术之路。 2.续写线索：劝说父母——表示理解——得到支持——作品获奖——感谢老师——决定继续艺术之路 3.词汇激活 行为类 ①注意：notice/take notice of ②理解：understand/comprehend ③挑选：select/pick out ④为……做准备：get ready for/make preparations for ⑤欣赏：appreciate/admire 情绪类 ①兴奋地：excitedly/feverishly ②感激的：grateful/appreciative 【点睛】[高分句型1]Jack scanned the audience and spotted Miss Smith, whose eyes sparkled with pride.（运用了whose引导非限制性定语从句） [高分句型2]As the applause washed over them, Jack vowed to continue his artistic journey, forever grateful to those who had believed in him.（运用了as引导时间状语从句，who引导限制性定语从句） （24-25高二下·浙江温州·开学考试）破茧成蝶：从质疑到荣耀的逆袭密码 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 Awards lined the front wall of the music room from the past successes of large, talented classes. But a shift in educational policies (政策), with an emphasis on academics, had reduced my choir to a mere 32 students. My lead singers had graduated or been forced to drop music classes, leaving me with inexperienced kids who couldn’t read music and could sing only a simple melody (曲子). This year’s singing contest would be held in seven months. Compared to other school choirs, the Madison choir with 75 members, King School with 125 students and etc., ours was little in size. One day, a student asked eagerly, “What will we be singing for contest this year?” I feared this moment. “Maybe we’ll skip the contest,” I suggested. “No! We can make it!” the kids screamed. “I’ll have to think about it,” I said, hoping their enthusiasm would die off soon. But that didn’t happen. Every day they begged and insisted. However, I couldn’t tell them they weren’t good enough as I had to protect their self-esteem (自尊). My efforts to discourage their eagerness, by showing them a difficult piece of music from the contest list, simply ended with, “It’s okay, Mrs. Pliszka, we’ll get it.” I struggled to make a decision. If I destroyed their hope, would I destroy their spirit? I wasn’t afraid of hard work, and I enjoyed a challenge. But I wasn’t a miracle (奇迹) worker. So I considered this dilemma. Finally, one morning I stomped into class. “From now on, be in your seats with your music folders on the desk when the bell rings, and sit at attention, ready for warm-ups the instant I’m ready to begin. When I’m working with one section, there will be no talking from the others. You will listen, and you will learn. You will work harder. If all these rules are obeyed, we will be entering the contest. To achieve our big dream, …” The rest of my sentence was lost in shouts of delight and applause. I was certain they would fail to keep this promise, and no one would have to be embarrassed. 注意： 1. 所写短文的词数应为150 左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题纸的相应位置作答。 As the weeks progressed, the kids remained focused. _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ When the contest day finally arrived, the kids felt ready to take on the world! _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【满分范文】 As the weeks progressed, the kids remained focused. They followed the rules with no complaints and seemed to thrive on the discipline demanded of them. Each morning they sat attention, ready for warm-ups, learned, practiced, rehearsed and went over and over the songs to be sung in the contest. I was amazed at the driving force that kept pushing them on. The courage they had shown from day one overwhelmed me, changing something within myself. No more did I hesitate, but make every effort to teach them. With the passage of time, the kids were making steady and remarkable improvements, which was beyond my expectations. When the contest day finally arrived, the kids felt ready to take on the world! They mounted the stairs, smiles of confidence spreading on their faces. Their singing sounded good. The entire audience broke into loud applause the instant they finished their songs. My heart swelled with pride for this little group. After what seemed a century, the results were posted. There was our name at the very top! All around kids were squealing and embracing. Warm tears wet my cheeks. And I was surrounded by kids who had a dream—kids who refused to give up—kids who taught me to never doubt the possibility of success for any student or any class ever again. 【导语】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者作为合唱团指导老师，面对合唱团人数锐减、成员音乐能力不足等困境，以及学生们对参加歌唱比赛的坚持与努力，最终带领合唱团在比赛中取得优异成绩的故事。 【详解】1.段落续写： ①由第一段首句内容“几周过去了，孩子们一直专注认真。”以及第二段首句内容“比赛那天终于来临，孩子们感觉自己已经做好了征服世界的准备！”可知，第一段可描写孩子们坚持训练，而作者也不再犹豫，而是竭尽全力教导孩子们。 ②由第二段首句内容“比赛那天终于来临，孩子们感觉自己已经做好了征服世界的准备！”可知，第二段可描写孩子们表现得非常棒，作者也深有感触。 2.续写线索：孩子们一直专注认真，毫无怨言地遵守规则——每天，他们都认真训练，不断进步——孩子们的坚持震撼了作者，作者也竭尽全力教导孩子们——随着时间的推移，孩子们取得了显著的进步——比赛终于到来了，孩子们表现得很有信心——舞台上的孩子们打动了观众，而作者也为他们感到自豪——这件事让作者明白要相信每个孩子都会成功 3.词汇激活 行为类 ①尽全力：make every effort to/spare no effort to ②取得进步：make improvements/make advances ③拥抱：embrace/hug 情绪类 ①惊讶的：amazed/astonished ②笑容：smiles/smiling expression 【点睛】【高分句型1】I was amazed at the driving force that kept pushing them on.（运用了that引导的限制性定语从句） 【高分句型2】The courage they had shown from day one overwhelmed me, changing something within myself.（运用了省略关系代词的限制性定语从句和现在分词作状语） 原创精品资源学科网独家享有版权，侵权必究！ 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$