18 高级表达进阶-2025年中考英语考前冲刺作文必背(模板、素材、分类押题范文)(通用版)

【综合提升篇】 第18讲 高级表达进阶 第一部分：中考英语写作精讲 18.1 句式升级技巧 1. 简单句变复合句 使用定语从句：将两个简单句合并，其中一个句子作为另一个句子中名词的修饰成分。例如：“I bought a book. The book is very interesting.” 可升级为 “I bought a book which/that is very interesting.” 定语从句能使句子信息更丰富，表达更高级。 运用状语从句：根据句子间的逻辑关系，添加时间、原因、条件、让步等状语从句。比如：“He didn't go to school. He was ill.” 改为 “He didn't go to school because he was ill.” 用because引导原因状语从句，清晰表明因果关系。再如 “I will go to the park. It doesn't rain tomorrow.” 可升级为 “I will go to the park if it doesn't rain tomorrow.” 用if引导条件状语从句。 2. 运用强调句 强调句结构为 “It is/was + 被强调部分 + that/who + 句子其他部分” 。例如：“Tom broke the window yesterday.” 强调主语Tom时，变为 “It was Tom who broke the window yesterday.” 强调时间yesterday时，改为 “It was yesterday that Tom broke the window.” 强调句可以突出重要信息，增强表达效果。 3. 使用倒装句 部分倒装：在一些含有否定意义的副词或短语位于句首时，句子要部分倒装，即把助动词、be动词或情态动词提到主语之前。如 “I have never seen such a beautiful place.” 变为 “Never have I seen such a beautiful place.” 再如 “He seldom goes to the cinema.” 可升级为 “Seldom does he go to the cinema.” 完全倒装：当表示地点的副词或介词短语位于句首，且句子主语为名词时，句子要完全倒装，即把谓语动词全部提到主语之前。例如 “A beautiful girl stands under the tree.” 变为 “Under the tree stands a beautiful girl.” 4. 非谓语动词的运用 动词不定式作主语、宾语、定语或状语：“To get good grades is very important.”（作主语）；“I want to go shopping.”（作宾语）；“I have a lot of homework to do.”（作定语）；“To catch the first bus, I got up early.”（作目的状语）。动词不定式能使句子结构更简洁，表达更精炼。 动名词作主语、宾语：“Swimming is my favorite sport.”（作主语）；“I enjoy reading books.”（作宾语）。动名词作主语常表示抽象的、一般性的行为，而动词不定式作主语多表示具体的某次行为。 分词作定语、状语或补足语：“The boy standing there is my brother.”（现在分词作定语）；“Seen from the top of the hill, the city looks very beautiful.”（过去分词作状语）；“I heard him singing in the classroom.”（现在分词作宾语补足语） 。分词可以使句子更生动形象，表达更丰富。 18.2 高级过渡词替换 1. 表示并列或递进关系 普通过渡词：and, also, then 。 高级过渡词：moreover, furthermore, in addition, besides, what's more 。例如：“He is good at math. He is also good at English.” 可替换为 “He is good at math. Moreover/Furthermore/In addition/Besides/What's more, he is good at English.” 2. 表示转折关系 普通过渡词：but, however 。 高级过渡词：nevertheless, nonetheless, yet, on the contrary, in contrast 。比如：“He worked hard. But he didn't pass the exam.” 可升级为 “He worked hard. Nevertheless/Nonetheless/Yet, he didn't pass the exam.” 或 “He worked hard. On the contrary/In contrast, he didn't pass the exam.”（后两者更强调对比反差） 3. 表示因果关系 普通过渡词：because, so 。 高级过渡词：therefore, thus, consequently, as a result, due to, owing to, thanks to 。例如：“He was ill. So he didn't go to school.” 可改写为 “He was ill. Therefore/Thus/Consequently/As a result, he didn't go to school.” 或 “Due to/Owing to/Thanks to his illness, he didn't go to school.” 4. 表示总结关系 普通过渡词：in a word, in short 。 高级过渡词：in conclusion, to sum up, all in all, altogether 。比如：“In a word, we should work hard.” 可替换为 “In conclusion/To sum up/All in all/Altogether, we should work hard.” 18.3 范文对比分析（普通版vs高级版） 题目： My Hobbies 普通版范文 I have many hobbies. Reading is one of my hobbies. I like reading because it can give me a lot of knowledge. I often read books in my free time. Another hobby of mine is playing basketball. I play basketball with my classmates after school. Playing basketball makes me strong and healthy. I also like listening to music. When I am tired, I will listen to music. It can make me relaxed. In a word, my hobbies make my life more interesting. 高级版范文 I am fond of a wide variety of hobbies, among which reading ranks high on my list. The reason why I am enthusiastic about reading is that it serves as a key to a vast ocean of knowledge. In my spare time, I frequently immerse myself in the world of books, exploring different cultures, historical events, and fascinating ideas. Moreover, engaging in basketball is another hobby that I truly enjoy. After school, I usually team up with my classmates to hit the basketball court. Not only does playing basketball contribute to my physical strength and health, but it also cultivates my teamwork spirit and competitive awareness. In addition, listening to music is an indispensable part of my life. Whenever I am exhausted, I will turn on my music player, allowing the beautiful melodies to wash away my fatigue and bring me a sense of tranquility. All in all, these hobbies have not only enriched my life but also broadened my horizons and shaped me into a more well - rounded individual. 对比分析： • 句式方面：普通版多为简单句，表达较为平淡。高级版运用了定语从句（among which reading ranks high on my list ）、表语从句（The reason why...is that... ）、倒装句（Not only does playing basketball... ）等，使句子结构更加复杂多样，增强了文章的逻辑性和连贯性。 • 词汇和过渡词方面：普通版用词简单，过渡词单一。高级版使用了 “be fond of”“enthusiastic about”“immerse myself in” 等高级词汇和短语，以及 “moreover”“in addition”“all in all” 等高级过渡词，使文章语言更加丰富、地道，衔接更加自然流畅。 第二部分：中考英语写作个人经历类范文必背 1．（2024·北京·中考真题）假设你是李华，你校英语社团将接待国外学生代表团来访，届时举办一次交流活动，为此在校内征集师生的建议。请你给英语社团公众号留言，提供一个交流活动设计并说明理由。 提示词语：visit, performance, make, opportunity, culture 内容提示： ·What do you suggest for the activity? ·Why do you suggest doing that? I’m Li Hua from Class 1, Grade 9. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ I hope my idea can be considered. Thanks. 【优秀满分范文】 I’m Li Hua from Class 1, Grade 9. For the foreign students visiting our school, I’d suggest a workshop on paper cutting. A teacher can first introduce its history and artistic value. Then we can help them to make paper cuttings. This activity will give them an opportunity to have a try at a traditional Chinese art form. What’s more, when they take these paper cuttings back to their home country and give them to their families as gifts, more people there may enjoy the beauty of Chinese culture. I hope my idea can be considered. Thanks. 【详解】[总体分析] ①题材：本文属于材料作文写作； ②时态：时态为“一般现在时”； ③提示：文章开头以及要点已经给出，按照提示的要点逐点阐述，可以适当增加细节，并突出写作重点。 [写作步骤] 第一步，承接短文开头，介绍建议什么类型的交流活动； 第二步，具体说明活动的内容以及建议举办此类活动的理由，可列举具体的事例； 第三步，表达希望方案能被考虑并书写结语。 [亮点词汇] ①give sb an opportunity to do sth给某人一个做某事的机会 ②give sth to sb as gifts把某物作为礼物送给某人 [高分句型] ①What’s more, when they take these paper cuttings back to their home country and give them to their families as gifts, more people there may enjoy the beauty of Chinese culture.（when引导的时间状语从句） 2．（2024·广东深圳·中考真题）假如你是李华，你的作品在“the Beauty of Nature”主题摄影展上获得了一等奖。你的英语老师邀请你在“英语一分钟演讲”上给同学们做分享。要点如下： 1. 拍摄的时间，地点，内容； 2. 选择这张照片的原因； 3. 参赛感受。 Dear________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ That’s all! Thank You! 【优秀满分范文】 Dear classmates, My name is Li Hua, who is interested in photography. Here I would like to share my picture with you. The picture was taken by me in Shenzhen on a sunny morning in April, which shows a beautiful park with colorful flowers and green grass. If you are careful enough, you will also find a few birds jumping in the grass in the picture. How cute they are! It is such a nice picture that I chose it for the photographic contest. Actually, it also shows us the harmony between the animals and nature. Taking part in this competition makes me realize the beauty of nature and let us protect our Earth together! That’s all! Thank you! 【详解】[总体分析] ①题材：本文是一篇应用文，为演讲稿； ②时态：以“一般过去时”和“一般现在时”为主； ③提示：写作要点已给出，注意不要遗漏信息，可适当补充细节。 [写作步骤] 第一步，首先介绍演讲的主题，即介绍自己在摄影展上获得一等奖的照片； 第二步，介绍照片拍摄的时间、地点以及内容； 第三步，阐述选择这张照片的原因； 最后，表达自己的参赛感受。 [亮点词汇] ①be interested in对……感兴趣 ②would like to do sth.想要做某事 ③harmony和谐 ④take part in参加 ⑤realize意识到 [高分句型] ①The picture was taken by me in Shenzhen on a sunny morning in April, which shows a beautiful park with colorful flowers and green grass.（which引导定语从句） ②If you are careful enough, you will also find a few birds jumping in the grass in the picture.（If引导条件状语从句） ③It is such a nice picture that I chose it for the photographic contest.（such a/an adj.+名词+that从句） 3．（2024·河北·中考真题）假定英语课上你们正在就“课堂表现”开展同伴互评活动，下面是你的同伴张军的自我课堂表现记录(Class Record)，请你根据记录内容写一篇短文，总结他五个方面的课堂表现并进行简单评价，然后就他需要改进的两个方面提出建议。 Class RecordName: Zhang Jun Questions Yes No Did you listen to the teacher carefully? √ Did you answer questions actively? √ Did you ask any questions? √ Did you work well in your group? √ Did you take notes? √ 注意：(1) 短文中不得出现真实的地名、校名和人名。 (2) 词数80个左右 (开头已给出，不计入总词数) 。 Well done, Zhang Jun! You listened to the teacher carefully in class and__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【优秀满分范文】 Well done, Zhang Jun! You listened to the teacher carefully in class and answered questions actively. So you got high marks in most of your subjects. You worked well in your group and you showed your ability to us. However, you didn’t ask any questions and you didn’t take notes. So we couldn’t know if you needed help. In my opinion, you should ask questions if you have any so that you can solve problems in time. What’s more, you should take notes so that you can review and digest what you don’t understand. I hope my advice is of help. 【详解】[总体分析] ①题材：本文是一篇材料作文； ②时态：一般现在时和一般过去时； ③提示：写作要点已给出，要求根据提示内容进行写作，适当添加细节，并突出写作重点。 [写作步骤] 第一步，简单评价张军的课堂表现； 第二步，就他需要改进的两个方面提出建议。 [亮点词汇] ①got high marks 得高分 ②take notes 做笔记 ③In my opinion 在我看来 ④so that 以便 [高分句型] ①So we couldn’t know if you needed help.（宾语从句） ②What’s more, you should take notes so that you can review and digest what you don’t understand.（目的状语从句和宾语从句） 4．（2024·北京·中考真题）某英文网站正在开展以“记好友，叙友情”为主题的征文活动。假设你是李华，请你用英文写一篇短文投稿，介绍你最好的一位朋友，并记述你们之间一段难忘的经历。 提示词语：kind, helpful, encourage, practice, support 内容提示： ·Who is your best friend? Please describe him/ her. ·Share an unforgettable experience you had with him/ her. I’m glad to say something about my best friend. _____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【优秀满分范文】 I’m glad to say something about my best friend. Her name is Alice. She is helpful and always has a sweet smile on her face. She is really good at dancing. Last term, there was a dancing festival in our school. We both signed up for it, but I was a little shy at first and afraid of dancing in front of a large crowd of people. She encouraged me a lot and helped me practice the moves. Together, we gave a very successful performance. I will never forget this experience. 【详解】[总体分析] ①题材：本文是一篇材料作文； ②时态：时态为“一般现在时”，介绍经历用“一般过去时”； ③提示：写作要点已给出，考生应注意不要遗漏信息提示的内容，适当增加细节，并且突出写作的要点。 [写作步骤] 第一步，介绍你最好的朋友并进行描述； 第二步，分享你们之间发生的一次难忘的经历。 [亮点词汇] ①have a smile on one’s face面带微笑 ②sign up for报名参加 ③a large crowd of一大群 ④a very successful performance一个非常成功的表演 [高分句型] ①Last term, there was a dancing festival in our school. (There be句型) ②We both signed up for it, but I was a little shy at first and afraid of dancing in front of a large crowd of people. (并列句) 5．（2024·安徽·中考真题）假设你是李辉，上周你在学校举行的 “消防安全日” 活动中学会了灭火器的使用方法。请结合下图信息，写一篇英语短文，给校英文报投稿。 要点: 1. 活动目的； 2. 灭火器的使用方法； 3. 你的体会。 注意: 1. 短文须包含上述要点，可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯； 2. 文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称； 3. 词数80~100（首句已为你写好，不计入总词数） Last week, our school carried out Fire Safety Day activities. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【优秀满分范文】 Last week, our school carried out Fire Safety Day activities. The purpose was to draw our attention to fire safety. Among the activities, how to use a fire extinguisher interested me most. When we use a fire extinguisher, we should first shake it after picking it up, and then pull off the safety pin quickly. As soon as we point the tube at the root of the fire, we are expected to press down on the handle until we put out the fire. During the period, we should be careful enough not to get hurt. From the activities I’ve learned a lot and realized the importance of fire safety. 【详解】[总体分析] ①题材：本文是看图作文； ②时态：一般过去时，一般现在时 ③提示：结合图示信息，注意不要遗漏信息，可适当补充细节。 [写作步骤] 第一步，首先介绍上周学校举行的 “消防安全日”，点明活动的目的； 第二步，具体介绍灭火器的使用方法； 最后，表达个人从这次活动中得到的感悟体会。 [亮点词汇] ①draw one’s attention 吸引某人的注意 ②pick up 捡起 ③pull off 拔出 ④as soon as 一……就…… ⑤put out 扑灭 [高分句型] ①When we use a fire extinguisher, we should first shake it after picking it up, and then pull off the safety pin quickly.（when引导时间状语从句） ②As soon as we point the tube at the root of the fire, we are expected to press down on the handle until we put out the fire.（as soon as引导时间状语从句） 6．（2024·河南·中考真题）在日常学习中，有的学生喜欢独自学习，有的则喜欢和大家一起学习。你更喜欢哪一种学习方式？校刊英语专栏正在以“Studying alone or studying with a group?”为题开展征文活动，请你根据写作要求，结合自身实际，从以下两种学习方式中任选其一，用英语写一篇短文，陈述你的理由，向专栏投稿。 Studying alone Studying with a group solve problems on my own get help from others keep my mind on schoolwork share ideas with group members 写作要求： 1．文中须包含所选学习方式的要点提示，可适当发挥； 2．文中不得出现考生的真实姓名和学校名称； 3．词数100左右（开头已给出，不计入总词数）。 Studying alone or studying with a group? Some students like to study alone. Others enjoy studying with a group.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【优秀满分范文】1: Studying alone or studying with a group? Some students like to study alone. Others enjoy studying with a group. As for me, I like studying alone better. Firstly, studying alone helps me learn to solve problems on my own. Most of the time, I need to think hard about them all by myself. So my thinking ability is improved at the same time. Secondly, when I study alone, I can keep my mind on what I’m doing. With a clear head, I am able to finish my homework quickly. In this way, I will gradually develop a good learning habit. I think studying alone is really a good way and it will benefit me a lot in my life. 【优秀满分范文】 2: Studying alone or studying with a group? Some students like to study alone. Others enjoy studying with a group. As for me, I prefer to study with a group. As the saying goes, “Two heads are better than one.” With a group, I can learn a lot from others. Whenever I have some questions, they are always ready to help. With their help, I become more and more confident in my study. Also, when I study with my classmates, we can discuss whatever puzzles me face to face. Through discussion, we can share different ideas and get to know more about each other. All in all, I think studying with a group provides many chances to improve myself and helps me to be a better person. 【详解】以Possible version 1为例 [总体分析] ①题材：本文是一篇材料作文； ②时态：时态为“一般现在时”； ③提示：要求以“Studying alone or studying with a group?”为题，根据提示内容进行写作，适当添加细节，并突出写作重点。 [写作步骤] 第一步，表明自己更喜欢哪种学习方式； 第二步，具体介绍为什么喜欢这种方式； 第三步，书写结语。 [亮点词汇] ①solve problems on my own 自己解决问题 ②at the same time 同时 ③keep my mind on... 集中注意力在…… ④develop a good learning habit 养成良好的学习习惯 [高分句型] ①Secondly, when I study alone, I can keep my mind on what I’m doing.（when引导的时间状语从句和宾语从句） ②I think studying alone is really a good way and it will benefit me a lot in my life.（省略that的宾语从句和并列句） 7．（2024·江西·中考真题）我国义务教育阶段实施“双减”政策以来，学生拥有更多的课余时间。为了引导学生更好地利用课余时间，增强时间管理意识，学校英语社团以“Making Better Use of Time”为题向学生征文，请你根据下列写作要点写一篇短文投稿。 写作要点： 1．When do you have free time? 2．What do you often do in your free time?（Give 3 examples） 3．Do you think your free time is better used? Why or why not? 要求： 1．短文应包括所有的写作要点，条理清楚，行文连贯，可适当发挥； 2．短文中不能出现真实的人名、校名、地名等信息； 3．词数80—120，短文开头已给出，不计入总词数。 Making Better Use of Time As a junior high school student, I have got more free time in recent years. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【优秀满分范文】 Making Better Use of Time As a junior high school student, I have got more free time in recent years. I am always free on weekends. When I am free, I have many activities. I usually play the piano and football. I like playing football very much. If I have time, I often go to the park with my friends to play football on weekends. I have piano lessons twice a week. I also have plenty of time to exercise in the evening. Sometimes, my parents and I look at the stars outside. I think my free time is better used because I do what I want to do and I balance study and entertainment. 【详解】[总体分析] ①题材：本文是一篇材料作文； ②时态：时态为一般现在时； ③提示：根据提示内容介绍自己的课余时间活动，适当增加细节。 [写作步骤] 第一步，介绍自己什么时候有空闲时间； 第二步，介绍自己空闲时间的活动； 第三步，介绍自己是否利用好自己的空闲时间以及原因。 [亮点词汇] ①on weekends在周末 ②plenty of大量的 ③look at看 [高分句型] ①When I am free, I have many activities. (when引导的时间状语从句) ②I think my free time is better used because I do what I want to do and I balance study and entertainment. (because引导的原因状语从句，what引导的宾语从句) 8．（2024·天津·中考真题）假如你是李华，请根据以下提示，给你的笔友Peter用英文写一封邮件，向他讲述你班同学王红所做的一件好事，并谈谈感受。 （1）上周四，王红在回家途中看到一位上年纪的盲人在街角徘徊。 （2）王红与老人交流后，主动帮他过马路。 （3）路上的司机都停下车耐心等候。 （4）王红将老人带到马路对面并向他告别。 （5）你认为…… 参考词汇：盲人   blind man           徘徊   wander 要求： （1）词数：80~100个。 （2）开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。 （3）要点齐全，行文连贯，可适当发挥。 Dear Peter, It is two weeks since you wrote to me. I’m writing to tell you a story about my classmate Wang Hong. Last Thursday,____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ What do you think of the story? Waiting for your reply! Yours, Li Hua 【优秀满分范文】 Dear Peter, It is two weeks since you wrote to me. I’m writing to tell you a story about my classmate Wang Hong. Last Thursday, Wang Hong saw an elderly blind man wandering around the street corner on her way home. Wang Hong offered to help him cross the road after communicating with the old man. When they crossed the road, the drivers on the road stopped their cars and waited patiently. Wang Hong took the old man across the road and said goodbye to him. I think Wang Hong is really a very warm-hearted and kind girl. I should learn from her and try my best to help others. What do you think of the story? Waiting for your reply! Yours, Li Hua 【详解】[总体分析] ①题材：本文是一篇电子邮件； ②时态：以“一般过去时”为主； ③提示：写作要点已给出，要求根据提示内容进行写作，适当添加细节，并突出写作重点。 [写作步骤] 第一步，表明写作意图； 第二步，具体介绍王红所做的好事； 第三步，书写结语。 [亮点词汇] ①on her way home 在她回家的路上 ②offer to do sth 主动提出做某事 ③communicate with 沟通 ④learn from 向某人学习 [高分句型] ①When they crossed the road, the drivers on the road stopped their cars and waited patiently.（when引导的时间状语从句） ② I think Wang Hong is really a very warm-hearted and kind girl.（省略that的宾语从句） 9．（2024·四川成都·中考真题）你校英语报就“团队合作”这一话题征稿。请根据以下图示，以“Be a Good Team Member”为题投稿。Be a Good Team Member 注意： 1. 词数80左右； 2. 文中不能出现真实姓名及学校名称。 _____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【优秀满分范文】 Be a Good Team Member There is an old saying in China, “Unity is strength.” It tells people the importance of teamwork. By discussing with members in the team, we can come up with the better ideas. But how to be a good team member? Here are some tips for you. First, communicate more with each other. There is no doubt that communication can help us know more about our teammates. We should listen to other people actively and express ourselves bravely. Second, work together on projects. When everybody adds fuel, the flames rise high. Finally, trust your teammates. All in all, teamwork plays an important role in our daily life. Let’s work together to build a brighter future. 【详解】[总体分析] ①题材：本文是一篇材料作文； ②时态：一般现在时； ③提示：写作要点已给出，考生注意不要遗漏要点，并适当添加细节，突出重点。 [写作步骤] 第一步，介绍团队合作的重要性； 第二步，细节介绍如何成为一名好团队成员的方法； 第三步，总结。 [亮点词汇] ①come up with提出 ②each other彼此 ③plays an important role发挥重要作用 [高分句型] ①When everybody adds fuel, the flames rise high.（时间状语从句） ②There is no doubt that communication can help us know more about our teammates.（同位语从句） 10．（2024·重庆·中考真题）雨天总让人烦恼，下雨了，愁眉苦脸的主人公又急又慌地赶往学校，哪知随后却有惊喜发生…… 发生了什么呢？请根据上述文字，并借助图片完整描述一个故事。文中需体现心情变化及感悟。 要求： 1.80—120词； 2.文中不能出现自己的姓名和所在学校的名称。 参考信息： sad, upset, umbrella, rush to, hurry... close to nature: raindrop, ant, plant, soil, fresh air... outdoor activities: raincoat, puddle (水洼), jump like frogs... indoor activities: class talent show, reading and storytelling... art: painting, drawing pictures, movie day... others: hug, praise, present, party... natural thing, enjoy, cheer, joy, better manage, bright side, don’t trouble yourself... ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【优秀满分范文】 One rainy day, Mary was in a rush to school, feeling sad and upset. But on the way, she noticed raindrops hitting the ground, ants scurrying around, and plants looking fresh. Several students, wearing raincoats and carrying umbrellas, were playing in puddles in the rain. They jumped like frogs and had a lot of fun. Mary joined them and felt little better. When Mary reached school, there was a class talent show. She performed well and got hugs, praises, and even a present, which made her surprised and happy. She realized that instead of being troubled by the rain, she should see the bright side. Just like in a story or a painting, there are always different aspects. She learned not to let small things bother her and to enjoy every moment. 【详解】[总体分析] ①题材：本文是一篇记叙文，为看图作文； ②时态：时态为“一般过去时”； ③提示：根据表格中的参考内容结合图片，完成故事的写作，注意语法正确，逻辑清晰。 [写作步骤] 第一步，引出故事发生的时间、地点、人物，并介绍上学路上发生的事情，以及主人公的心情； 第二步，介绍到了学校后发生的事情，以及主人公的感悟。 [亮点词汇] ①in a rush匆忙地 ②had a lot of fun玩得很开心 ③talent show才艺表演 [高分句型] ①When Mary reached school, there was a class talent show.（when引导的时间状语从句） ②She performed well and got hugs, praises, and even a present, which made her surprised and happy. （定语从句） ③She realized that instead of being troubled by the rain, she should see the bright side.（宾语从句） 2 原创精品资源学科网独家享有版权，侵权必究！ 1 / 1 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$ 【综合提升篇】 第18讲 高级表达进阶 第一部分：中考英语写作精讲 18.1 句式升级技巧 1. 简单句变复合句 使用定语从句：将两个简单句合并，其中一个句子作为另一个句子中名词的修饰成分。例如：“I bought a book. The book is very interesting.” 可升级为 “I bought a book which/that is very interesting.” 定语从句能使句子信息更丰富，表达更高级。 运用状语从句：根据句子间的逻辑关系，添加时间、原因、条件、让步等状语从句。比如：“He didn't go to school. He was ill.” 改为 “He didn't go to school because he was ill.” 用because引导原因状语从句，清晰表明因果关系。再如 “I will go to the park. It doesn't rain tomorrow.” 可升级为 “I will go to the park if it doesn't rain tomorrow.” 用if引导条件状语从句。 2. 运用强调句 强调句结构为 “It is/was + 被强调部分 + that/who + 句子其他部分” 。例如：“Tom broke the window yesterday.” 强调主语Tom时，变为 “It was Tom who broke the window yesterday.” 强调时间yesterday时，改为 “It was yesterday that Tom broke the window.” 强调句可以突出重要信息，增强表达效果。 3. 使用倒装句 部分倒装：在一些含有否定意义的副词或短语位于句首时，句子要部分倒装，即把助动词、be动词或情态动词提到主语之前。如 “I have never seen such a beautiful place.” 变为 “Never have I seen such a beautiful place.” 再如 “He seldom goes to the cinema.” 可升级为 “Seldom does he go to the cinema.” 完全倒装：当表示地点的副词或介词短语位于句首，且句子主语为名词时，句子要完全倒装，即把谓语动词全部提到主语之前。例如 “A beautiful girl stands under the tree.” 变为 “Under the tree stands a beautiful girl.” 4. 非谓语动词的运用 动词不定式作主语、宾语、定语或状语：“To get good grades is very important.”（作主语）；“I want to go shopping.”（作宾语）；“I have a lot of homework to do.”（作定语）；“To catch the first bus, I got up early.”（作目的状语）。动词不定式能使句子结构更简洁，表达更精炼。 动名词作主语、宾语：“Swimming is my favorite sport.”（作主语）；“I enjoy reading books.”（作宾语）。动名词作主语常表示抽象的、一般性的行为，而动词不定式作主语多表示具体的某次行为。 分词作定语、状语或补足语：“The boy standing there is my brother.”（现在分词作定语）；“Seen from the top of the hill, the city looks very beautiful.”（过去分词作状语）；“I heard him singing in the classroom.”（现在分词作宾语补足语） 。分词可以使句子更生动形象，表达更丰富。 18.2 高级过渡词替换 1. 表示并列或递进关系 普通过渡词：and, also, then 。 高级过渡词：moreover, furthermore, in addition, besides, what's more 。例如：“He is good at math. He is also good at English.” 可替换为 “He is good at math. Moreover/Furthermore/In addition/Besides/What's more, he is good at English.” 2. 表示转折关系 普通过渡词：but, however 。 高级过渡词：nevertheless, nonetheless, yet, on the contrary, in contrast 。比如：“He worked hard. But he didn't pass the exam.” 可升级为 “He worked hard. Nevertheless/Nonetheless/Yet, he didn't pass the exam.” 或 “He worked hard. On the contrary/In contrast, he didn't pass the exam.”（后两者更强调对比反差） 3. 表示因果关系 普通过渡词：because, so 。 高级过渡词：therefore, thus, consequently, as a result, due to, owing to, thanks to 。例如：“He was ill. So he didn't go to school.” 可改写为 “He was ill. Therefore/Thus/Consequently/As a result, he didn't go to school.” 或 “Due to/Owing to/Thanks to his illness, he didn't go to school.” 4. 表示总结关系 普通过渡词：in a word, in short 。 高级过渡词：in conclusion, to sum up, all in all, altogether 。比如：“In a word, we should work hard.” 可替换为 “In conclusion/To sum up/All in all/Altogether, we should work hard.” 18.3 范文对比分析（普通版vs高级版） 题目： My Hobbies 普通版范文 I have many hobbies. Reading is one of my hobbies. I like reading because it can give me a lot of knowledge. I often read books in my free time. Another hobby of mine is playing basketball. I play basketball with my classmates after school. Playing basketball makes me strong and healthy. I also like listening to music. When I am tired, I will listen to music. It can make me relaxed. In a word, my hobbies make my life more interesting. 高级版范文 I am fond of a wide variety of hobbies, among which reading ranks high on my list. The reason why I am enthusiastic about reading is that it serves as a key to a vast ocean of knowledge. In my spare time, I frequently immerse myself in the world of books, exploring different cultures, historical events, and fascinating ideas. Moreover, engaging in basketball is another hobby that I truly enjoy. After school, I usually team up with my classmates to hit the basketball court. Not only does playing basketball contribute to my physical strength and health, but it also cultivates my teamwork spirit and competitive awareness. In addition, listening to music is an indispensable part of my life. Whenever I am exhausted, I will turn on my music player, allowing the beautiful melodies to wash away my fatigue and bring me a sense of tranquility. All in all, these hobbies have not only enriched my life but also broadened my horizons and shaped me into a more well - rounded individual. 对比分析： • 句式方面：普通版多为简单句，表达较为平淡。高级版运用了定语从句（among which reading ranks high on my list ）、表语从句（The reason why...is that... ）、倒装句（Not only does playing basketball... ）等，使句子结构更加复杂多样，增强了文章的逻辑性和连贯性。 • 词汇和过渡词方面：普通版用词简单，过渡词单一。高级版使用了 “be fond of”“enthusiastic about”“immerse myself in” 等高级词汇和短语，以及 “moreover”“in addition”“all in all” 等高级过渡词，使文章语言更加丰富、地道，衔接更加自然流畅。 第二部分：中考英语写作个人经历类范文必背 1．（2024·北京·中考真题）假设你是李华，你校英语社团将接待国外学生代表团来访，届时举办一次交流活动，为此在校内征集师生的建议。请你给英语社团公众号留言，提供一个交流活动设计并说明理由。 提示词语：visit, performance, make, opportunity, culture 内容提示： ·What do you suggest for the activity? ·Why do you suggest doing that? I’m Li Hua from Class 1, Grade 9. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ I hope my idea can be considered. Thanks. 2．（2024·广东深圳·中考真题）假如你是李华，你的作品在“the Beauty of Nature”主题摄影展上获得了一等奖。你的英语老师邀请你在“英语一分钟演讲”上给同学们做分享。要点如下： 1. 拍摄的时间，地点，内容； 2. 选择这张照片的原因； 3. 参赛感受。 Dear________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ That’s all! Thank You! 3．（2024·河北·中考真题）假定英语课上你们正在就“课堂表现”开展同伴互评活动，下面是你的同伴张军的自我课堂表现记录(Class Record)，请你根据记录内容写一篇短文，总结他五个方面的课堂表现并进行简单评价，然后就他需要改进的两个方面提出建议。 Class RecordName: Zhang Jun Questions Yes No Did you listen to the teacher carefully? √ Did you answer questions actively? √ Did you ask any questions? √ Did you work well in your group? √ Did you take notes? √ 注意：(1) 短文中不得出现真实的地名、校名和人名。 (2) 词数80个左右 (开头已给出，不计入总词数) 。 Well done, Zhang Jun! You listened to the teacher carefully in class and__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 4．（2024·北京·中考真题）某英文网站正在开展以“记好友，叙友情”为主题的征文活动。假设你是李华，请你用英文写一篇短文投稿，介绍你最好的一位朋友，并记述你们之间一段难忘的经历。 提示词语：kind, helpful, encourage, practice, support 内容提示： ·Who is your best friend? Please describe him/ her. ·Share an unforgettable experience you had with him/ her. I’m glad to say something about my best friend. _____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 5．（2024·安徽·中考真题）假设你是李辉，上周你在学校举行的 “消防安全日” 活动中学会了灭火器的使用方法。请结合下图信息，写一篇英语短文，给校英文报投稿。 要点: 1. 活动目的； 2. 灭火器的使用方法； 3. 你的体会。 注意: 1. 短文须包含上述要点，可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯； 2. 文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称； 3. 词数80~100（首句已为你写好，不计入总词数） Last week, our school carried out Fire Safety Day activities. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 6．（2024·河南·中考真题）在日常学习中，有的学生喜欢独自学习，有的则喜欢和大家一起学习。你更喜欢哪一种学习方式？校刊英语专栏正在以“Studying alone or studying with a group?”为题开展征文活动，请你根据写作要求，结合自身实际，从以下两种学习方式中任选其一，用英语写一篇短文，陈述你的理由，向专栏投稿。 Studying alone Studying with a group solve problems on my own get help from others keep my mind on schoolwork share ideas with group members 写作要求： 1．文中须包含所选学习方式的要点提示，可适当发挥； 2．文中不得出现考生的真实姓名和学校名称； 3．词数100左右（开头已给出，不计入总词数）。 Studying alone or studying with a group? Some students like to study alone. Others enjoy studying with a group.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 7．（2024·江西·中考真题）我国义务教育阶段实施“双减”政策以来，学生拥有更多的课余时间。为了引导学生更好地利用课余时间，增强时间管理意识，学校英语社团以“Making Better Use of Time”为题向学生征文，请你根据下列写作要点写一篇短文投稿。 写作要点： 1．When do you have free time? 2．What do you often do in your free time?（Give 3 examples） 3．Do you think your free time is better used? Why or why not? 要求： 1．短文应包括所有的写作要点，条理清楚，行文连贯，可适当发挥； 2．短文中不能出现真实的人名、校名、地名等信息； 3．词数80—120，短文开头已给出，不计入总词数。 Making Better Use of Time As a junior high school student, I have got more free time in recent years. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 8．（2024·天津·中考真题）假如你是李华，请根据以下提示，给你的笔友Peter用英文写一封邮件，向他讲述你班同学王红所做的一件好事，并谈谈感受。 （1）上周四，王红在回家途中看到一位上年纪的盲人在街角徘徊。 （2）王红与老人交流后，主动帮他过马路。 （3）路上的司机都停下车耐心等候。 （4）王红将老人带到马路对面并向他告别。 （5）你认为…… 参考词汇：盲人   blind man           徘徊   wander 要求： （1）词数：80~100个。 （2）开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。 （3）要点齐全，行文连贯，可适当发挥。 Dear Peter, It is two weeks since you wrote to me. I’m writing to tell you a story about my classmate Wang Hong. Last Thursday,____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ What do you think of the story? Waiting for your reply! Yours, Li Hua 9．（2024·四川成都·中考真题）你校英语报就“团队合作”这一话题征稿。请根据以下图示，以“Be a Good Team Member”为题投稿。Be a Good Team Member 注意： 1. 词数80左右； 2. 文中不能出现真实姓名及学校名称。 _____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 10．（2024·重庆·中考真题）雨天总让人烦恼，下雨了，愁眉苦脸的主人公又急又慌地赶往学校，哪知随后却有惊喜发生…… 发生了什么呢？请根据上述文字，并借助图片完整描述一个故事。文中需体现心情变化及感悟。 要求： 1.80—120词； 2.文中不能出现自己的姓名和所在学校的名称。 参考信息： sad, upset, umbrella, rush to, hurry... close to nature: raindrop, ant, plant, soil, fresh air... outdoor activities: raincoat, puddle (水洼), jump like frogs... indoor activities: class talent show, reading and storytelling... art: painting, drawing pictures, movie day... others: hug, praise, present, party... natural thing, enjoy, cheer, joy, better manage, bright side, don’t trouble yourself... ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 2 原创精品资源学科网独家享有版权，侵权必究！ 1 / 1 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$