专题06 话题作文之叙事描写类-【高分·技能】2025年中考英语写作常考题型全面突破

06 话题作文之叙事描写类 近三年考情分析 年份 地区 话题 命题形式 2024年 山东青岛 讲述你的成长故事 话题作文 云南 介绍自己的接近自然的经历 话题作文 四川达州 “An Unforgettable Day”难忘的一天 话题作文 2023年 辽宁丹东 讲述一次你帮助别人或别人帮助你的经历 话题作文 辽宁抚顺 “My First Day in the Middle School” 话题作文 吉林长春 “Challenge”为主题的故事 话题作文 新疆 “My First Try”为题记录你成长中的第一次尝试 话题作文 2022年 青海 以“China in Ten Years”为题，畅想并描述十年后的祖国 话题作文 写作方法指导 一、命题特点分析 主题聚焦个人成长 • 高频方向：成长故事（青岛2024）、首次尝试（新疆2023）、校园经历（抚顺2023）、克服挑战（长春2023） • 命题规律：70%题目围绕"自我成长"展开，强调对生活细节的观察和感悟 情境创设具体化 • 典型命题："接近自然的经历"（云南2024）、"帮助与被帮助"（丹东2023） • 共同特征：要求学生在具体生活场景中展开叙事，避免空泛议论 情感价值引导 • 题目暗含积极导向：如"难忘"（达州2024）、"挑战"（长春2023）等关键词 • 评分重点：在叙事中自然流露情感态度，体现正确价值观 二、核心能力要求 叙事结构搭建能力 • 三要素把控：时间（When）、地点（Where）、事件（What）的清晰呈现 • 经典结构：引入背景（1段）→ 发展过程（2段）→ 高潮结果（1段）→ 感悟收获（1段） 细节描写能力 • 感官描写：视觉（colors/shapes）、听觉（sounds）、触觉（feelings）的综合运用 • 对话插入：适当加入人物对话增强故事真实性（注意使用正确引语格式） 情感表达技巧 • 心理活动描写：nervous/excited/confused等情感词汇的准确使用 • 情感递进呈现：通过事件发展展示情感变化过程 三、典型题目解析 以2023新疆"My First Try"为例： 审题要点 • 限定词：first（强调首次经历的特殊性） • 重点：try的具体内容及带来的改变 内容构思示范 尝试类型：public speaking/cooking/riding bicycle... 描写重点：尝试前的紧张→过程中的困难→克服方法→最终收获 四、备考策略建议 素材积累 • 建立"个人经历档案"：分类整理10个以上生活片段（成功/失败/感动等） • 背诵30组优质表达：如描写紧张的"my hands were trembling"等 专项训练 • 五感描写练习：针对同一场景进行多维度描写训练 • 时态转换训练：重点掌握一般过去时、过去进行时的正确使用 提分技巧 • 开头段：使用悬念设置法（"I'll never forget the day when..."） • 结尾段：采用感悟升华法（"This experience taught me that..."） 写作模板 【模板一：成长突破型】 适用题目：My First Try（新疆2023）/ Challenge（长春2023） 结构亮点：时间线推进 + 心理变化描写 【开头】The moment I ______ (核心动作), my heart was beating like a drum. It was my first time to ______, which became a milestone in my growth. 【发展】At the beginning, ______ (困难描述). I still remember how ______ (感官细节: trembling hands/cold sweat). Just when I wanted to give up, ______ (转折点: 他人帮助/自我激励). 【高潮】Taking a deep breath, I ______ (具体行动). To my surprise, ______ (意外进展). The ______ (环境变化: cheering crowd/sunlight through clouds) gave me courage. 【结尾】Now looking back, I understand ______ (感悟). Life is like ______ (比喻). This experience made me believe ______ (积极态度). 【模板二：难忘经历型】 适用题目：An Unforgettable Day（达州2024）/ 帮助他人经历（丹东2023） 结构亮点：悬念开头 + 对话穿插 【开头】"______!" (关键对话) These words still echo in my mind whenever I recall that special day. It was ______ (时间地点), when I learned the true meaning of ______ (核心品质). 【经过】Everything started when ______ (事件起因). I noticed ______ (细节观察: 人物外貌/环境异常). Without hesitation, I ______ (援助动作). "______," I said ______ (语言动作). 【转折】However, ______ (突发困难). My ______ (身体反应: legs shook/voice trembled) showed my nervousness. Luckily, ______ (转机出现). 【结尾】Though ______ (简单总结), what really matters is ______ (价值升华). That day taught me ______ (道理), which I'll carry in my heart forever. 【模板三：校园生活型】 适用题目：My First Day in Middle School（抚顺2023） 结构亮点：对比结构 + 情感转折 【开头】The autumn wind carried both excitement and anxiety as I stepped into ______ (学校名). Everything here seemed ______ (初印象: giant maze/unknown world). 【对比】Morning: ______ (消极体验). I felt ______ (比喻: like a lost bird). Classroom desks were ______ (细节: too high/unfamiliar marks). 【转变】Afternoon: ______ (积极事件). A ______ (人物) smiled and said, "______." (关键对话) We ______ (共同行动). Laughter gradually melted my fears. 【结尾】When the sunset painted the sky ______ (颜色), I realized ______ (认知改变). This first day taught me ______ (成长收获), making me ready to ______ (未来展望). 【模板四：自然体验型】 适用题目：My First Day in Middle School（抚顺2023） 适用题目：接近自然的经历（云南2024） 结构亮点：五感描写 + 哲理升华 【开头】Never had I imagined that a ______ (自然事物: caterpillar/old tree) could teach me such a life lesson. It happened during ______ (时间场景), when I ______ (初始动作). 【环境】The air smelled ______ (嗅觉). ______ (声音) mixed with ______ (其他声音). Under my feet, ______ (触觉). 【观察】I noticed ______ (细节). It was ______ (状态描写). Suddenly, ______ (自然现象: raindrops/butterfly emergence). 【感悟】Watching ______ (自然过程), I understood ______ (道理). Nature's ______ (特点: patience/circle of life) reflects our own ______ (人生联系). 【结尾】Now whenever I ______ (相关场景), I'll remember ______ (呼应开头). This is the gift nature gave me - ______ (核心感悟). 常用表达 一、万能开头句式 悬念引入 "I'll never forget the day when..." (青岛2024适用) 例句: I'll never forget the day when I stood trembling before the crowd. "Little did I know that..." (达州2024难忘事件) 例句: Little did I know that a fallen leaf would change my view of life. 感官描写 "The scent of... filled the air as..." (云南2024自然经历) 例句: The scent of pine trees filled the air as I stepped into the forest. "A sudden... caught my attention" (丹东2023帮助经历) 例句: A sudden cry for help caught my attention near the bus stop. 二、情感描写黄金表达 1. 紧张 基础表达：feel nervous 高级替换：my heart raced wildly 例句：My hands turned icy cold while waiting for my turn 2. 惊喜 基础表达：feel surprised 高级替换：my eyes widened in disbelief 例句：The final result left me speechless 3. 感动 基础表达：feel touched 高级替换：warmth flooded my heart 例句：Tears welled up as I saw her handwritten note 4. 犹豫 基础表达：don’t know what to do 高级替换：stood at a crossroads 例句：I bit my lip, uncertain whether to step forward 易错提示：避免连续使用3个以上"feel"，可通过身体反应描写替代（如：My legs shook like leaves） 三、过渡词替换宝典 1. 时间推进 普通表达：then 高级替换：eventually / meanwhile 2. 转折关系 普通表达：but 高级替换：however / nevertheless 3. 因果关系 普通表达：so 高级替换：therefore / thus 4. 补充信息 普通表达：and 高级替换：What’s more / Moreover 避坑指南：避免连续使用两个"and"，可用分词结构优化 原句：I opened the door and saw... 优化：Opening the door, I spotted... 四、高频易错点自查表 1. 时态混乱 错误：I see an old man crossing the road. 正确：I saw an old man crossing the road. 2. 引语标点 中文引号 → 英文引号（“” → ""） 3. 主谓一致 集体名词用单数：My class is...（而非are） 五、动作描写升级方案 1. 动词精准化 基础动词：walk → 高级替换：stagger（蹒跚）/ tiptoe（踮脚走） 例句：I tiptoed to the stage, clutching the microphone. 基础动词：look → 高级替换：gaze（凝视）/ spot（突然发现） 例句：Spotting the injured bird, I knelt down carefully. 2. 拟声词运用 自然场景：rustle（沙沙声）/ splash（溅水声） 例句：Leaves rustled as the squirrel dashed through. 校园场景：chatter（叽喳声）/ slam（砰地关上） 例句：The classroom door slammed shut in the wind. 六、环境描写速记清单 自然场景 视觉：golden sunlight filtering through...（阳光透过...） 听觉：the chirping of cicadas blended with...（蝉鸣混合...） 嗅觉：the earthy smell after rain（雨后泥土香） 校园场景 物品细节：chalk dust floating in the sunbeam（阳光中的粉笔灰） 声音描写：the echoing footsteps in the hallway（走廊回响的脚步声） 高分技巧：用"with复合结构"浓缩场景 例句：The lake lay before us, with dragonflies skimming the surface. 中考真题精讲 （一）（2024·山东青岛·中考真题） 在多彩的初中校园生活中，你可能学会了一项体育技能，发展了一项艺术才能；也可能进行了一次精彩的演讲，参加了一次有意义的研学……这些都助力了你的成长，让你终身受益。假如学校公众号以My Story in Junior High School为题征稿，请选择1—2项内容，讲述你的成长故事，并谈论你的感受以及相关的发展计划。 要求： 1. 词数80—100； 2. 文中不得出现真实姓名、校名等相关信息。 ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ （二）（2024·云南·中考真题） 你校校刊英语专栏正在开展以“Getting Close to Nature”为题的征文活动。请你用英语写一篇短文，向专栏投稿，叙述一次你接近自然的经历及感悟（如郊游、研学、劳动实践等），或谈谈接近自然的好处。 要求： 1. 根据所给题目，写一篇短文，词数不少于80； 2. 语言流畅、书写规范、卷面整洁； 3. 文中不得使用真实姓名、校名，否则以零分计。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ （三）（2024·四川达州·中考真题） 赠人玫瑰手有余香。帮助别人自己会感到快乐，得到别人的帮助更是一种幸运。假设你校正举办以“我身边的好人好事”为主题的英语征文比赛，请根据以下内容提示，以“An Unforgettable Day”为题用英语写一篇记叙文。 内容提示：1. 时间    2. 地点     3. 人物     4. 事件   5. 感受 写作要求：1. 内容必须包括所给要点，可适当发挥一至两点。 2. 文中不能出现真实姓名、校名和地名。 3. 不少于90词（题目不计入总词数）。 An Unforgettable Day ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ （四）（2023·辽宁丹东·中考真题） 保持善良，传播爱心。我们都曾帮助过别人或接受过别人的帮助。请结合自身经历，以“The Spread of Love”为题，讲述一次你帮助别人或别人帮助你的经历，并谈谈你的感悟及今后的打算。 写作要求： 1. 语言表达准确，语意通顺连贯； 2. 书写工整规范； 3. 文中不得出现真实姓名、校名和地名； 4. 词数：70词左右。 ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ （五）（2023·辽宁抚顺·中考真题） 初中三年生活转瞬即逝，如今即将毕业离开母校，此时此刻，你是否还记得升入初中第一天的情景呢？请以“My First Day in the Middle School”为题，用英语写一篇短文，描述一下你入校当天的所见所闻、经历感受，再次体验曾经的美好时光，满怀信心地去迎接新的未来！词数：80~100词。 要求： （1）语意连贯，层次清晰，书写规范。 （2）文中不得出现真实姓名、校名和地名。 （3）短文开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。 My First Day in the Middle School When I first walked into the middle school, ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Now I will leave my school. I’m going to work hard in the future to make my school proud of me. （六）（2023·吉林长春·中考真题） 某报正在以“Challenge”为主题，举办英语征文比赛。请你写一篇不少于80词的英语故事及体会来投稿。 要求：1.写一个自身或其他人的故事； 2.适当增加细节，行文连贯； 3.文中不得出现考生的真实姓名和校名。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ （七）（2023·新疆·中考真题） 每个人的成长，都经历过很多次尝试，有成功、有失败、有欣喜、有泪水……请以“My First Try”为题，用英语写一篇短文，记录你成长中的第一次尝试。 要求：1.语句通顺，意思连贯，内容详实，语法正确，书写规范； 2.文中不得出现真实姓名、校名等信息； 3.词数80—120。开头已给出，不计入总词数。 My First Try     When it comes to the topic of “My First Try”,____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ （八）（2022·青海·中考真题） 当今，中国正迅速发展，在各方面都取得了令人瞩目的成就。请你以“China in Ten Years”为题，畅想并描述十年后的祖国。 要求：（1）内容积极向上，完整连贯； （2）逻辑清晰，表达准确，书写规范； （3）文中不得出现姓名、校名和地名； （4）词数：80—100（文章开头已给出，不计入总词数）。 China in Ten Years Nowadays, our country is developing fast. It has made great achievements in many fields. What will China be like in ten years? ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 名校模拟题提升练 1．（2024·吉林长春·模拟预测）在我们实现目标的过程中，努力是必不可少且关键的因素之一。请以“The harder you work, the better you will be.”为题，写一篇英语短文。 要点：1．描述一件与努力有关的事件；        2．谈谈你对努力的理解和感悟。 要求：1．不少于80词；         2．文中不得出现真实姓名和学习名称。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 2．（2024·云南昆明·一模）微笑能温暖人心，能给予人力量。回忆一下，在你的生活中，谁的微笑令你印象深刻呢？请你以 “A Smile I Can’t Forget” 为题，叙述一个你与“微笑”的故事。 要求： 1. 根据所给题目，写一篇短文，词数不少于80个； 2. 语言流畅、书写规范、卷面整洁； 3. 文中不得使用真实姓名、校名，否则以零分计； 4. 请将短文写在答题卡上，写在本试题卷上无效。 ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 3．（2024·贵州毕节·模拟预测）校园生活总是多种多样、精彩纷呈的，每一天都有着不同的事情发生，可能是快乐的、激动人心的、也可能是难过的、遗憾的……请你以“The ________ day of my school life”为题，根据写作要求，写一篇不少于80词的短文。 写作要求： 1.结合实际，用适当的形容词补全标题。 2.文中不能出现真实的人名和校名。 The ________ day of my school life ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 4．（2024·山西忻州·三模）面对转瞬即逝的初中生活，我们有太多的希冀与不舍，多少欢笑与泪水，多少成功与失败，对于我们青涩的青春我们想到的是什么？拼搏，希望，信任，友爱，鼓励……，请选择一个关键词，并分享背后的故事和你的感悟。 要求：1.不少于80词，文章开头已给出，不计入总词数； 2.不得出现真实的校名、人名。      Looking back at my junior school life, I think of many things. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 5．（2024·辽宁朝阳·三模）成长之路有鲜花，也有荆棘。有时候是我们自己披荆斩棘，勇往直前；有时候是我们的师长、好友，甚至是陌生人向我们伸出援助之手，引领我们一路向前。最近,某英文网站正在开展以“Thanks, _________!”为主题的征文活动。请你用英语写一篇短文投稿,分享你的故事。 要点如下： 1. 你想感谢谁? 2. 为什么要感谢这个人? 注意: 1. 将题目补充完整; 2. 词数80～100; 3. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯; 4. 短文中不能出现真实姓名及学校名称。 Thanks ________! ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 原创精品资源学科网独家享有版权，侵权必究！3 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$ 06 话题作文之叙事描写类 近三年考情分析 年份 地区 话题 命题形式 2024年 山东青岛 讲述你的成长故事 话题作文 云南 介绍自己的接近自然的经历 话题作文 四川达州 “An Unforgettable Day”难忘的一天 话题作文 2023年 辽宁丹东 讲述一次你帮助别人或别人帮助你的经历 话题作文 辽宁抚顺 “My First Day in the Middle School” 话题作文 吉林长春 “Challenge”为主题的故事 话题作文 新疆 “My First Try”为题记录你成长中的第一次尝试 话题作文 2022年 青海 以“China in Ten Years”为题，畅想并描述十年后的祖国 话题作文 写作方法指导 一、命题特点分析 主题聚焦个人成长 • 高频方向：成长故事（青岛2024）、首次尝试（新疆2023）、校园经历（抚顺2023）、克服挑战（长春2023） • 命题规律：70%题目围绕"自我成长"展开，强调对生活细节的观察和感悟 情境创设具体化 • 典型命题："接近自然的经历"（云南2024）、"帮助与被帮助"（丹东2023） • 共同特征：要求学生在具体生活场景中展开叙事，避免空泛议论 情感价值引导 • 题目暗含积极导向：如"难忘"（达州2024）、"挑战"（长春2023）等关键词 • 评分重点：在叙事中自然流露情感态度，体现正确价值观 二、核心能力要求 叙事结构搭建能力 • 三要素把控：时间（When）、地点（Where）、事件（What）的清晰呈现 • 经典结构：引入背景（1段）→ 发展过程（2段）→ 高潮结果（1段）→ 感悟收获（1段） 细节描写能力 • 感官描写：视觉（colors/shapes）、听觉（sounds）、触觉（feelings）的综合运用 • 对话插入：适当加入人物对话增强故事真实性（注意使用正确引语格式） 情感表达技巧 • 心理活动描写：nervous/excited/confused等情感词汇的准确使用 • 情感递进呈现：通过事件发展展示情感变化过程 三、典型题目解析 以2023新疆"My First Try"为例： 审题要点 • 限定词：first（强调首次经历的特殊性） • 重点：try的具体内容及带来的改变 内容构思示范 尝试类型：public speaking/cooking/riding bicycle... 描写重点：尝试前的紧张→过程中的困难→克服方法→最终收获 四、备考策略建议 素材积累 • 建立"个人经历档案"：分类整理10个以上生活片段（成功/失败/感动等） • 背诵30组优质表达：如描写紧张的"my hands were trembling"等 专项训练 • 五感描写练习：针对同一场景进行多维度描写训练 • 时态转换训练：重点掌握一般过去时、过去进行时的正确使用 提分技巧 • 开头段：使用悬念设置法（"I'll never forget the day when..."） • 结尾段：采用感悟升华法（"This experience taught me that..."） 写作模板 【模板一：成长突破型】 适用题目：My First Try（新疆2023）/ Challenge（长春2023） 结构亮点：时间线推进 + 心理变化描写 【开头】The moment I ______ (核心动作), my heart was beating like a drum. It was my first time to ______, which became a milestone in my growth. 【发展】At the beginning, ______ (困难描述). I still remember how ______ (感官细节: trembling hands/cold sweat). Just when I wanted to give up, ______ (转折点: 他人帮助/自我激励). 【高潮】Taking a deep breath, I ______ (具体行动). To my surprise, ______ (意外进展). The ______ (环境变化: cheering crowd/sunlight through clouds) gave me courage. 【结尾】Now looking back, I understand ______ (感悟). Life is like ______ (比喻). This experience made me believe ______ (积极态度). 【模板二：难忘经历型】 适用题目：An Unforgettable Day（达州2024）/ 帮助他人经历（丹东2023） 结构亮点：悬念开头 + 对话穿插 【开头】"______!" (关键对话) These words still echo in my mind whenever I recall that special day. It was ______ (时间地点), when I learned the true meaning of ______ (核心品质). 【经过】Everything started when ______ (事件起因). I noticed ______ (细节观察: 人物外貌/环境异常). Without hesitation, I ______ (援助动作). "______," I said ______ (语言动作). 【转折】However, ______ (突发困难). My ______ (身体反应: legs shook/voice trembled) showed my nervousness. Luckily, ______ (转机出现). 【结尾】Though ______ (简单总结), what really matters is ______ (价值升华). That day taught me ______ (道理), which I'll carry in my heart forever. 【模板三：校园生活型】 适用题目：My First Day in Middle School（抚顺2023） 结构亮点：对比结构 + 情感转折 【开头】The autumn wind carried both excitement and anxiety as I stepped into ______ (学校名). Everything here seemed ______ (初印象: giant maze/unknown world). 【对比】Morning: ______ (消极体验). I felt ______ (比喻: like a lost bird). Classroom desks were ______ (细节: too high/unfamiliar marks). 【转变】Afternoon: ______ (积极事件). A ______ (人物) smiled and said, "______." (关键对话) We ______ (共同行动). Laughter gradually melted my fears. 【结尾】When the sunset painted the sky ______ (颜色), I realized ______ (认知改变). This first day taught me ______ (成长收获), making me ready to ______ (未来展望). 【模板四：自然体验型】 适用题目：My First Day in Middle School（抚顺2023） 适用题目：接近自然的经历（云南2024） 结构亮点：五感描写 + 哲理升华 【开头】Never had I imagined that a ______ (自然事物: caterpillar/old tree) could teach me such a life lesson. It happened during ______ (时间场景), when I ______ (初始动作). 【环境】The air smelled ______ (嗅觉). ______ (声音) mixed with ______ (其他声音). Under my feet, ______ (触觉). 【观察】I noticed ______ (细节). It was ______ (状态描写). Suddenly, ______ (自然现象: raindrops/butterfly emergence). 【感悟】Watching ______ (自然过程), I understood ______ (道理). Nature's ______ (特点: patience/circle of life) reflects our own ______ (人生联系). 【结尾】Now whenever I ______ (相关场景), I'll remember ______ (呼应开头). This is the gift nature gave me - ______ (核心感悟). 常用表达 一、万能开头句式 悬念引入 "I'll never forget the day when..." (青岛2024适用) 例句: I'll never forget the day when I stood trembling before the crowd. "Little did I know that..." (达州2024难忘事件) 例句: Little did I know that a fallen leaf would change my view of life. 感官描写 "The scent of... filled the air as..." (云南2024自然经历) 例句: The scent of pine trees filled the air as I stepped into the forest. "A sudden... caught my attention" (丹东2023帮助经历) 例句: A sudden cry for help caught my attention near the bus stop. 二、情感描写黄金表达 1. 紧张 基础表达：feel nervous 高级替换：my heart raced wildly 例句：My hands turned icy cold while waiting for my turn 2. 惊喜 基础表达：feel surprised 高级替换：my eyes widened in disbelief 例句：The final result left me speechless 3. 感动 基础表达：feel touched 高级替换：warmth flooded my heart 例句：Tears welled up as I saw her handwritten note 4. 犹豫 基础表达：don’t know what to do 高级替换：stood at a crossroads 例句：I bit my lip, uncertain whether to step forward 易错提示：避免连续使用3个以上"feel"，可通过身体反应描写替代（如：My legs shook like leaves） 三、过渡词替换宝典 1. 时间推进 普通表达：then 高级替换：eventually / meanwhile 2. 转折关系 普通表达：but 高级替换：however / nevertheless 3. 因果关系 普通表达：so 高级替换：therefore / thus 4. 补充信息 普通表达：and 高级替换：What’s more / Moreover 避坑指南：避免连续使用两个"and"，可用分词结构优化 原句：I opened the door and saw... 优化：Opening the door, I spotted... 四、高频易错点自查表 1. 时态混乱 错误：I see an old man crossing the road. 正确：I saw an old man crossing the road. 2. 引语标点 中文引号 → 英文引号（“” → ""） 3. 主谓一致 集体名词用单数：My class is...（而非are） 五、动作描写升级方案 1. 动词精准化 基础动词：walk → 高级替换：stagger（蹒跚）/ tiptoe（踮脚走） 例句：I tiptoed to the stage, clutching the microphone. 基础动词：look → 高级替换：gaze（凝视）/ spot（突然发现） 例句：Spotting the injured bird, I knelt down carefully. 2. 拟声词运用 自然场景：rustle（沙沙声）/ splash（溅水声） 例句：Leaves rustled as the squirrel dashed through. 校园场景：chatter（叽喳声）/ slam（砰地关上） 例句：The classroom door slammed shut in the wind. 六、环境描写速记清单 自然场景 视觉：golden sunlight filtering through...（阳光透过...） 听觉：the chirping of cicadas blended with...（蝉鸣混合...） 嗅觉：the earthy smell after rain（雨后泥土香） 校园场景 物品细节：chalk dust floating in the sunbeam（阳光中的粉笔灰） 声音描写：the echoing footsteps in the hallway（走廊回响的脚步声） 高分技巧：用"with复合结构"浓缩场景 例句：The lake lay before us, with dragonflies skimming the surface. 中考真题精讲 （一）（2024·山东青岛·中考真题） 在多彩的初中校园生活中，你可能学会了一项体育技能，发展了一项艺术才能；也可能进行了一次精彩的演讲，参加了一次有意义的研学……这些都助力了你的成长，让你终身受益。假如学校公众号以My Story in Junior High School为题征稿，请选择1—2项内容，讲述你的成长故事，并谈论你的感受以及相关的发展计划。 要求： 1. 词数80—100； 2. 文中不得出现真实姓名、校名等相关信息。 ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】例文 My Story in Junior High School Last term, our teacher took us to a farm for a study tour. In the activity, we not only learned how to plant crops, but also experienced the importance of labor. At the same time, it also allowed us to experience the hardships of farmers. After this event, although we were tired, we were very happy. I think the school trip is really meaningful for us. We can not only relax ourselves but also learn a lot from it. I will take part in more such activities in my future free time. 【详解】[总体分析] ①题材：本文是一篇话题作文； ②时态：时态为“一般过去时”和“一般现在时”； ③提示：根据提示信息讲述你的成长故事，并谈论你的感受以及相关的发展计划，适当增加细节。 [写作步骤] 第一步，讲述你的成长故事； 第二步，谈论你的感受以及相关的发展计划。 [亮点词汇] ①not only...but also不但……而且 ②allow sb. to do sth.允许某人做某事 ③take part in参加 [高分句型] ①After this event, although we were tired, we were very happy.（although引导的让步状语从句） ②I think the school trip is really meaningful for us. （宾语从句） （二）（2024·云南·中考真题） 你校校刊英语专栏正在开展以“Getting Close to Nature”为题的征文活动。请你用英语写一篇短文，向专栏投稿，叙述一次你接近自然的经历及感悟（如郊游、研学、劳动实践等），或谈谈接近自然的好处。 要求： 1. 根据所给题目，写一篇短文，词数不少于80； 2. 语言流畅、书写规范、卷面整洁； 3. 文中不得使用真实姓名、校名，否则以零分计。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】例文 Getting Close to Nature Last summer, I had a chance to go hiking in the mountains near my hometown. It was an unforgettable experience getting close to nature. The fresh air, green trees, and the sound of birds singing all around made me feel relaxed and happy. As I climbed higher, I saw a breathtaking view of the valley below. It was like a painting that I could step into. This trip taught me that nature is our best friend. It heals our minds and gives us strength. I learned to appreciate the beauty of nature more and to protect it for future generations. 【详解】[总体分析] ①题材：本文是一篇话题作文； ②时态：时态为“一般过去时”； ③提示：要求以“Getting Close to Nature”为题，根据提示内容进行写作，适当添加细节，并突出写作重点。 [写作步骤] 第一步，介绍自己的接近自然的经历； 第二步，具体介绍亲近自然的好处； 第三步，书写结语。 [亮点词汇] ①an unforgettable experience一段难忘的经历 ②breathtaking view令人叹为观止的景色 ③step into走进去 ④heals our minds治愈心灵 [高分句型] ①It was like a painting that I could step into.（定语从句） ②This trip taught me that nature is our best friend.（宾语从句） （三）（2024·四川达州·中考真题） 赠人玫瑰手有余香。帮助别人自己会感到快乐，得到别人的帮助更是一种幸运。假设你校正举办以“我身边的好人好事”为主题的英语征文比赛，请根据以下内容提示，以“An Unforgettable Day”为题用英语写一篇记叙文。 内容提示：1. 时间    2. 地点     3. 人物     4. 事件   5. 感受 写作要求：1. 内容必须包括所给要点，可适当发挥一至两点。 2. 文中不能出现真实姓名、校名和地名。 3. 不少于90词（题目不计入总词数）。 An Unforgettable Day ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】例文 An Unforgettable Day As the saying goes, “Roses given, fragrance in hand.” In our daily life, we will meet with a lot of trouble. So it is necessary for us to help those who are in trouble. Here’s my unforgettable day of helping others. My classmate Jason was ill last week. He had to be in hospital, so I tried my best to help him. Yesterday was Saturday, and my classmates and I went to see him together. We gave him some flowers, because fresh and beautiful flowers could make him feel good and happy. What’s more, Jason asked me some questions about study and I brought him my notebooks. I was patient to answer his questions all the time. I hope he can be better soon. I like helping others. Firstly, helping others makes me happy. Secondly, helping others is also helping myself. All in all, a helpful person is welcomed everywhere. I will try my best to help others in the future. 【详解】[总体分析] ① 题材：本文是一篇话题作文； ② 时态：时态为“一般过去时”和“一般现在时”； ③ 提示：要求以“An Unforgettable Day”为题，根据所给提示完成写作，注意标点符号及大小写等问题，不要犯语法错误，可适当发挥。 [写作步骤] 第一步，表明写作意图； 第二步，具体介绍那天的经历； 第三步，表达感受。 [亮点词汇] ① in trouble 处困难中 ② What’s more 此外 ③ all the time 一直 [高分句型] ① So it is necessary for us to help those who are in trouble.（who引导的定语从句） ②We gave him some flowers, because fresh and beautiful flowers could make him feel good and happy.（because引导的原因状语从句） （四）（2023·辽宁丹东·中考真题） 保持善良，传播爱心。我们都曾帮助过别人或接受过别人的帮助。请结合自身经历，以“The Spread of Love”为题，讲述一次你帮助别人或别人帮助你的经历，并谈谈你的感悟及今后的打算。 写作要求： 1. 语言表达准确，语意通顺连贯； 2. 书写工整规范； 3. 文中不得出现真实姓名、校名和地名； 4. 词数：70词左右。 ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】例文 The Spread of Love Everyone has different ideas about life. In my opinion, life is beautiful and full of love. Several weeks ago, my classmate Bob was badly ill. He had to be in hospital for a long time. But his family was too poor to afford it. So I decided to raise money to help him. When I sent all the money to Bob, he and his parents were deeply moved. Helping others makes me happy. Maybe sometimes we feel unlucky, but we should believe that life is beautiful and love will be around us forever. And I will also help more people in the future. 【详解】[总体分析] ① 题材：本文是一篇记叙文，为话题作文； ② 时态：时态为“一般现在时”和“一般过去时”； ③ 提示：根据所给提示完成写作，不能遗漏信息，可适当发挥。 [写作步骤] 第一步，开门见山，介绍生活充满爱； 第二步，具体阐述你帮助别人或别人帮助你的经历； 第三步，最后表达自己的感悟及今后的打算。 [亮点词汇] ①in my opinion在我看来 ②too...to...太……而不能…… ③decide to do决定做 [高分句型] ①When I sent all the money to Bob, he and his parents were deeply moved.（when引导的时间状语从句） ②Maybe sometimes we feel unlucky, but we should believe that life is beautiful and love will be around us forever.（that引导的宾语从句） （五）（2023·辽宁抚顺·中考真题） 初中三年生活转瞬即逝，如今即将毕业离开母校，此时此刻，你是否还记得升入初中第一天的情景呢？请以“My First Day in the Middle School”为题，用英语写一篇短文，描述一下你入校当天的所见所闻、经历感受，再次体验曾经的美好时光，满怀信心地去迎接新的未来！词数：80~100词。 要求： （1）语意连贯，层次清晰，书写规范。 （2）文中不得出现真实姓名、校名和地名。 （3）短文开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。 My First Day in the Middle School When I first walked into the middle school, ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Now I will leave my school. I’m going to work hard in the future to make my school proud of me. 【答案】例文 My First Day in the Middle School When I first walked into the middle school, I was excited as well as worried. I was excited because I was a student of junior middle school now. I was worried because I didn’t quite know about the teachers and students in this school. I was afraid I couldn’t fit in well. However, when I sat down at my desk and began to know about my teachers and classmates, I found everyone was really nice to me. Teachers were very kind and ready to help us. My classmates were active and easy to get along with. After class, I played soccer with my newly-made friends on the playground. Looking at the beautiful campus, I gradually forgot my nervousness. I felt at home. At the end of that first school day, I felt no more fear and I believed I would have lots of fun at this new school. Now I will leave my school. I’m going to work hard in the future to make my school proud of me. 【详解】[总体分析] ①题材：本文是一篇记叙文，属于话题作文写作； ②时态：时态为“一般过去时”； ③提示：文章开头以及标题已经给出，按照提示的要点逐点阐述，可以适当增加细节，并突出写作重点。 [写作步骤] 第一步，承接短文开头，描述你入校当天的感受； 第二步，结合自身经历，描述你入校时的所见所闻和经历感受，可列举具体的事例； 第三步，抒发毕业感悟并书写结语。 [亮点词汇] ①as well as也，又，和 ②fit in适应 ③feel at home感觉自在 [高分句型] ①I was excited because I was a student of junior middle school now.（because引导的原因状语从句） ②I was afraid I couldn’t fit in well.（省略引导词that引导的宾语从句） ③Looking at the beautiful campus, I gradually forgot my nervousness.（现在分词短语作状语） （六）（2023·吉林长春·中考真题） 某报正在以“Challenge”为主题，举办英语征文比赛。请你写一篇不少于80词的英语故事及体会来投稿。 要求：1.写一个自身或其他人的故事； 2.适当增加细节，行文连贯； 3.文中不得出现考生的真实姓名和校名。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】例文： Challenge Life is full of ups and downs. No one can lead a life without any challenges. However, I believe challenges make a better me. I was poor in English in Grade 7, which troubled me a lot. Then I made up my mind to learn English well. From then on I got up early to memorize new words and useful sentence patterns. Besides, I did many English exercises. Indeed it was not an easy job to catch up with my classmates, but I kept going and never gave up. At last, my hard work paid off, and I made great progress in English. This taught me a lesson: Don’t be afraid of challenges, because they come hand in hand with achievements. 【详解】[总体分析] ①题材：本文是一篇话题作文； ②时态：时态为“一般过去时”和“一般现在时”； ③提示：题目要求以“Challenge”为题写短文投稿，结合自身或他人的故事来谈谈遇到的挑战及自己的感悟。 [写作步骤] 第一步，讲讲自身应对挑战的经历； 第二步，谈谈自己从这次挑战中学到了什么。 [亮点词汇] ①be full of 充满 ②make up one’s mind to do sth. 下定决心做某事 ③catch up with 赶上 [高分句型] ①I was poor in English in Grade 7, which troubled me a lot.（which引导非限制性定语从句） ②Don’t be afraid of challenges, because they come hand in hand with achievements.（祈使句的否定形式；because引导原因状语从句） （七）（2023·新疆·中考真题） 每个人的成长，都经历过很多次尝试，有成功、有失败、有欣喜、有泪水……请以“My First Try”为题，用英语写一篇短文，记录你成长中的第一次尝试。 要求：1.语句通顺，意思连贯，内容详实，语法正确，书写规范； 2.文中不得出现真实姓名、校名等信息； 3.词数80—120。开头已给出，不计入总词数。 My First Try     When it comes to the topic of “My First Try”,____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】例文： My First Try When it comes to the topic of “My First Try”, I’ll never forget the meaningful experience I had in Grade 7. It was my first time to be a volunteer. As a member of Animal Helpers, I volunteered to be responsible for washing, feeding and playing with homeless dogs. At the same time, I took some photos of them and made posters online to call on more people to give a hand. Through my efforts, over eight dogs were lucky to find their new homes. When I saw them taken good care of and they brought the people much fun, I got such a strong feeling of pride. I realize that each life is important and the tiny things I do can make a difference. 【详解】[总体分析] ①题材：本文是一篇记叙文，为话题作文； ②时态：时态为“一般现在时”和“一般过去时”； ③提示：要求“My First Try”为题，讲述自己成长中的第一次尝试，注意描述清楚细节，用词要准确，语句要通顺。 [写作步骤] 第一步，引出主题，讲述自己第一的尝试是在什么时候； 第二步，具体介绍第一次尝试做的事情，以及自己的感受； 第三步，书写结语。阐述自己的领悟。 [亮点词汇] ①volunteer to do sth志愿做某事 ②be responsible for负责 ③call on号召 ④take good care of好好照顾 [高分句型] ①When I saw them taken good care of and they brought the people much fun. (when引导的时间状语从句) ②I realize that each life is important and the tiny things I do can make a difference. (宾语从句) （八）（2022·青海·中考真题） 当今，中国正迅速发展，在各方面都取得了令人瞩目的成就。请你以“China in Ten Years”为题，畅想并描述十年后的祖国。 要求：（1）内容积极向上，完整连贯； （2）逻辑清晰，表达准确，书写规范； （3）文中不得出现姓名、校名和地名； （4）词数：80—100（文章开头已给出，不计入总词数）。 China in Ten Years Nowadays, our country is developing fast. It has made great achievements in many fields. What will China be like in ten years? ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】例文 China in Ten Years Nowadays, our country is developing fast. It has made great achievements in many fields. What will China be like in ten years? Can you imagine the future of China? I think China will be the largest, the richest and the most developed country in the world. In the future, we can live on any planet in the solar system. And we don’t have to worry about garbage pollution, because we can dissolve it as soon as possible, which will benefit our life. What’s more, people even don’t need to build a house by themselves, and robots can do it instead of human beings. Even so, education will be more convenient, no matter where you are, you can learn what you need from the Internet. That’s the future China. What’s your opinion? 【详解】[总体分析] ①题材：本文是一篇记叙文，为话题作文； ②时态：时态为“一般将来时”； ③提示：写作要点已给出，考生应注意不要遗漏，适当增加细节完整表述内容。 [写作步骤] 第一步，引出本文主题，畅想中国未来十年是什么样子； 第二步，从生活，工作，交通等方面畅想未来。 [亮点词汇] ①made great achievements 取得众多成就 ②worry about 担心 ③instead of 代替 [高分句型] ①And we don’t have to worry about garbage pollution, because we can dissolve it as soon as possible, which will benefit our life.（because原因状语从句；which引导非限制性定语从句） ②no matter where you are, you can learn what you need from the Internet.（no matter引导让步状语从句） 名校模拟题提升练 1．（2024·吉林长春·模拟预测）在我们实现目标的过程中，努力是必不可少且关键的因素之一。请以“The harder you work, the better you will be.”为题，写一篇英语短文。 要点：1．描述一件与努力有关的事件；        2．谈谈你对努力的理解和感悟。 要求：1．不少于80词；         2．文中不得出现真实姓名和学习名称。 ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】例文：                                  The harder you work, the better you will be       In the process of our achieving our goals, hard work is one of the essential and crucial factors.         One summer, I was determined to improve my running speed for an upcoming school sports event. Every morning, I would wake up early and practice running in the park. Despite the exhaustion and muscle pain, I never gave up. On the day of the competition, my hard work paid off—I won the first place.        This experience taught me that effort is the foundation of success. The harder you work, the more progress you will make. Challenges may be tough, but perseverance and dedication will always lead to improvement. 【详解】[总体分析] 题材：本文是一篇话题作文。 时态：一般过去时，一般现在时。 提示：写作要点已给出，注意不要遗漏 “信息提示” 中的要点内容，可适当发挥。注意写作时要按第一人称写。 [写作步骤] 第一步，点题，明确努力的重要性； 第二步，描述实例，展示努力的过程； 第三步，书写结语，抒发感悟，强调努力的价值和意义。 [亮点词汇] one of ... 其中之一 [高分句型] This experience taught me that effort is the foundation of success. （that引导的宾语从句） 2．（2024·云南昆明·一模）微笑能温暖人心，能给予人力量。回忆一下，在你的生活中，谁的微笑令你印象深刻呢？请你以 “A Smile I Can’t Forget” 为题，叙述一个你与“微笑”的故事。 要求： 1. 根据所给题目，写一篇短文，词数不少于80个； 2. 语言流畅、书写规范、卷面整洁； 3. 文中不得使用真实姓名、校名，否则以零分计； 4. 请将短文写在答题卡上，写在本试题卷上无效。 ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】例文 A Smile I Can’t Forget In my life, there is a smile that has deeply touched my heart. It came from my English teacher. Last term, I failed an important English exam. Feeling very sad and losing confidence, I was in a low mood. My English teacher noticed this and approached me with a warm smile. She gently said, “Don’t be sad. Failure is just a chance to learn. I believe you can do better next time.” Her smile was like sunshine, melting the ice in my heart. From that moment on, I studied English even harder. Whenever I think of her smile, I feel motivated. It is a smile I will never forget. 【详解】[总体分析] ①题材：本文是一篇记叙文，为话题作文； ②时态：时态为“一般现在时”和“一般过去时”； ③提示：根据题干，介绍自己与“微笑”的故事；注意适当发挥，突出文章的重点。 [写作步骤] 第一步，总述这个“微笑”，以及它来自何处； 第二步，讲述自己与这个“微笑”的故事； 第三步，谈谈这个“微笑”对自己的影响。 [亮点词汇] ①come from 来自 ②in a low mood 情绪低落 ③approach v. 靠近 [高分句型] ①I believe you can do better next time.（宾语从句） ②Whenever I think of her smile, I feel motivated.（whenever引导的时间状语从句） 3．（2024·贵州毕节·模拟预测）校园生活总是多种多样、精彩纷呈的，每一天都有着不同的事情发生，可能是快乐的、激动人心的、也可能是难过的、遗憾的……请你以“The ________ day of my school life”为题，根据写作要求，写一篇不少于80词的短文。 写作要求： 1.结合实际，用适当的形容词补全标题。 2.文中不能出现真实的人名和校名。 The ________ day of my school life ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】例文 The happiest day of my school life I had many wonderful days in my school life. However, I would like to talk about one of the happiest days in my school life. It was a Friday. I took part in the free exchange market in our school. Everyone brought all kinds of different objects to school. I brought something that I made by myself, such as wallets and bookmarks. When the activity started, I was worried that no one would come and exchange things with me, because my handmade works were not so perfect. To my surprise, my English teacher asked me if she could exchange her English novel for one bookmark. She also praised me for my handwork skill. That day was the best and happiest day of my school life. The book she exchanged with me also made me more interested in learning English. 【详解】[总体分析] ①题材：本文是一篇话题作文； ②时态：时态为“一般过去时”； ③提示：写作要点已给出，注意不要遗漏要点，可适当添加细节，并突出写作重点。 [写作步骤] 第一步，补充标题，开篇点题并引出下文； 第二步，具体阐述学校最开心的一天的过程以及抒发自己的感受； 第三步，书写结语，总结全文。 [亮点词汇] ①wonderful绝妙的 ②all kinds of各种各样的 ③exchange sth. with sb.与某人交换某物 [高分句型] ①I brought something that I made by myself, such as wallets and bookmarks.（that引导的定语从句） ②The book she exchanged with me also made me more interested in learning English.（定语从句） 4．（2024·山西忻州·三模）面对转瞬即逝的初中生活，我们有太多的希冀与不舍，多少欢笑与泪水，多少成功与失败，对于我们青涩的青春我们想到的是什么？拼搏，希望，信任，友爱，鼓励……，请选择一个关键词，并分享背后的故事和你的感悟。 要求：1.不少于80词，文章开头已给出，不计入总词数； 2.不得出现真实的校名、人名。      Looking back at my junior school life, I think of many things. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】One possible version: Looking back at my junior school life, I think of many things. Among them, encouragement impresses me the best, which is like a kind of magic. I am always encouraged to move forward because of it. I still remember when Mr. Li asked a question in the English class. I got an answer, but I was not sure whether my answer was completely correct because I was not a top student. All of sudden, I saw Mr. Li looking at me with a smile. Thinking for a while, I picked up the courage to say my answer. I never expected Mr. Li walked towards me and said loudly, “Perfect! What a great answer you gave.” Hearing this, my heart was full of hope, confidence and joy. Thanks to Mr. Li’s encouragement, I study even harder and I believe I can be a top student. It’s like the sunshine that lights the road ahead of me. 【详解】[总体分析] ①题材：本文是一篇话题作文； ②时态：主要时态为“一般过去时”； ③提示：在写作时首先要选好自己要谈论的关键词，根据关键词介绍其背后的经历，并描述自己的感悟。写作时要注意语言的准确性和逻辑性。 [写作步骤] 第一步，开门见山，明确要介绍的话题； 第二步，重点介绍该话题背后的经历； 第三步，介绍自己的感受，与第一步呼应。 [亮点词汇] ①because of由于 ②all of sudden突然 ③be full of充满 ④thanks to多亏 [高分句型] ①Among them, encouragement impresses me the best, which is like a kind of magic.（which引导的定语从句） ②I got an answer, but I was not sure whether my answer was completely correct because I was not a top student.（whether引导的宾语从句；because引导的原因状语从句） ③It’s like the sunshine that lights the road ahead of me.（that引导的定语从句） 5．（2024·辽宁朝阳·三模）成长之路有鲜花，也有荆棘。有时候是我们自己披荆斩棘，勇往直前；有时候是我们的师长、好友，甚至是陌生人向我们伸出援助之手，引领我们一路向前。最近,某英文网站正在开展以“Thanks, _________!”为主题的征文活动。请你用英语写一篇短文投稿,分享你的故事。 要点如下： 1. 你想感谢谁? 2. 为什么要感谢这个人? 注意: 1. 将题目补充完整; 2. 词数80～100; 3. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯; 4. 短文中不能出现真实姓名及学校名称。 Thanks ________! ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】参考例文: Thanks, my English teacher！ In my junior high school life, a lot of people have helped me. I thank them very much. But the person I want to thank most is my English teacher—Ms. Lee. She is very kind and easy-going. She helps me a lot. She is very tall. She has long hair and big eyes. She takes good care of me and often helps me with my English. When I am in trouble, she always encourages me to face my difficulties and gives me good advice. I still remember that once I failed in an important English exam and was upset. She cheered me up and told me some good ways to improve my English. Thanks to her, I have made great progress in English and am becoming more and more interested in it. From her, I learned the spirit of never giving up. I’m very thankful for all that she has done for me. I’ll try my best to live up to her expectations. 【详解】[总体分析] ① 题材：本文是一篇话题作文； ② 时态：时态以“一般现在时”和“一般过去时”为主； ③ 提示：写作话题已给出，考生要注意补全题目，并按照题干要求进行写作。 [写作步骤] 第一步，介绍自己想要感谢谁； 第二步，介绍自己想要感谢这个人的原因； 第三步，再次表达感激之情。 [亮点词汇] ① take good care of sb. 好好照顾某人 ② help sb. with sth. 在某事方面帮助某人 ③ in trouble 在困境中 ④ cheer sb. up 使某人振奋，使某人高兴起来 ⑤ make progress 取得进步 ⑥ live up to one’s expectations 不辜负某人的期望 [高分句型] ① When I am in trouble, she always encourages me to face my difficulties and gives me good advice.（when引导的时间状语从句） ② I still remember that once I failed in an important English exam and was upset. （that引导的宾语从句） ③ I’m very thankful for all that she has done for me. （that引导的定语从句）写作方法指导 写作方法指导 写作方法指导 写作方法指导 写作方法指导 写作方法指导 原创精品资源学科网独家享有版权，侵权必究！3 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$