读后续写--自行车上的母爱觉醒 讲义-江苏省南京市中华中学2024-2025学年高三上学期期初调研英语试题

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 School was over, the day was fading and it started to rain. I stood at the school gate, with a loaded backpack on my shoulders. It was Friday again — a weekend of joy with unlimited sleeping hours and dinner courses specially made to my taste. I waved goodbye to my friends as they jumped into their fathers’ warm and comfortable cars. Curiously, this gave rise to a disturbing feeling in me. It was not exactly what they called jealousy, but something like depression. I knew all 1 could expect was an old bike Mom would ride along on, with the badly-oiled chain creaking against the wheel to announce her arrival. Every Friday when Mom came to pick me up, it was a moment full of great expectation and great unease. I always felt my face burning as we rode our way in and out of the cars and saw my friends’ faces sticking out of the car windows. It was like stepping into a ballroom with beautifully dressed ladies and finding yourself in a smelly T-shirt. To tell you the truth, Mom is quite a headache occasionally. She looks like a homely middle-aged housewife. She knits most of my sweaters, chiefly in old styles. Whenever caught by some curious classmates asking what brand my sweaters are, I’d force a smile and reply in a half-joking manner: homemade. She simply doesn’t seem to understand what’s in fashion; Chanel or Gucci means nothing to her. I couldn’t remember when l started to find her such an embarrassment. As a little boy, I relied on her so much. She had been working at home, cooking in the kitchen, knitting by the lamp, or riding across town to buy me a book 1 badly needed. It had always been fun riding with her. I had enjoyed watching our shadows growing longer and shorter in an alternate fashion by the light of the streetlamps along the road. Just now there seemed to be something standing between us, something that made her so strange to me and me to her. 注意：1.续写词数应为150左右； 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Today Mom showed up in a raincoat. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Mom tried to cover me with the raincoat again as a storm set in. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 文章大意 文章讲述了一个周五放学后下雨，“我” 在学校门口等待妈妈来接。看到同学坐进父亲温暖舒适的汽车，“我” 心中产生一种不安情绪，因为妈妈总是骑着一辆旧自行车来接 “我”，一路上 “我” 总因与同学的对比而感到尴尬。同时，“我” 还觉得妈妈是个普通的中年家庭主妇，她织的毛衣款式老旧，不理解时尚，这让 “我” 觉得她是一种尴尬的存在。然而曾经小时候，“我” 很依赖妈妈，和她一起骑车很快乐。现在却感觉和妈妈之间有了隔阂。 故事山分析 · 开端：周五放学后下雨，“我” 在学校门口看着同学坐进汽车，等待骑旧自行车的妈妈来接，心中感到不安。 · 发展：回忆妈妈平时的样子，她是普通的家庭主妇，织的毛衣老土，让 “我” 在同学面前尴尬，“我” 觉得她是一种尴尬的存在。 · 高潮：在续写部分，妈妈与 “我” 在雨中骑车，可能会发生一些事情让 “我” 对妈妈的态度发生转变。 · 结局：“我” 理解了妈妈的爱，消除了与妈妈之间的隔阂。 伏笔以及在续写中的回应 1. 伏笔：小时候和妈妈骑车很快乐，享受看影子变化。回应：续写中可能在某个瞬间，“我” 回忆起曾经的快乐，重新感受到与妈妈之间的亲密。 2. 伏笔：妈妈总是骑着旧自行车，链条吱吱作响。回应：在雨中骑车时，旧自行车可能出现状况，凸显妈妈的不易。 3. 伏笔：“我” 觉得妈妈不理解时尚，毛衣款式老旧。回应：或许在经历一些事情后，“我” 意识到妈妈的爱比时尚更重要。 4. 伏笔：以前依赖妈妈，现在感觉和妈妈有隔阂。回应：续写中通过具体事件，让 “我” 重新理解妈妈，消除隔阂。 5. 伏笔：等待妈妈时心中的不安。回应：在雨中的经历会让 “我” 明白这种不安是因为自己的虚荣，从而改变对妈妈的看法。 续写要点（两段） · 第一段：着重描写妈妈穿着雨衣出现后的场景，比如 “我” 看到妈妈时的心理活动，妈妈的动作、神态，以及开始骑车后的情景，如雨中的环境等。 · 第二段：围绕妈妈给 “我” 盖雨衣这一情节展开，描述 “我” 的内心感受和想法发生的变化，以及最后 “我” 对妈妈的态度转变。 情感线 起初，“我” 因妈妈的平凡和不时尚，在同学面前感到尴尬和不安，对妈妈产生嫌弃和隔阂。随着在雨中与妈妈的相处，看到妈妈对 “我” 的关爱，如努力为 “我” 遮雨，“我” 开始回忆起小时候与妈妈的美好时光，内心的愧疚感逐渐升起，最终理解了妈妈的爱，消除了隔阂，重新感受到与妈妈之间深厚的亲情。 故事线 1. 周五放学下雨，“我” 等待妈妈来接，看到同学坐汽车离开，心中不安。 2. 回忆妈妈的平凡，织的毛衣老土，让 “我” 尴尬。 3. 妈妈穿着雨衣骑着旧自行车出现。 4. 雨中骑车，妈妈为 “我” 遮雨。 5. “我” 回忆起小时候和妈妈的快乐时光，内心发生转变。 6. “我” 理解了妈妈的爱，与妈妈消除隔阂。 主旨升华句 1. True love is not about fancy appearances or material things, but about the selfless care and sacrifice of those who love us. 2. We should cherish the love from our parents, for it is the most precious and unwavering thing in our lives. 3. In the journey of life, it is easy to be blinded by vanity, but we must remember to look beyond the surface and see the true value of love. 4. A mother's love, like a warm shelter in the rain, always protects us from the coldness of the world. 5. It is through the simple yet profound acts of love that we realize the true meaning of family and the depth of our parents' affection. 写作示范一 Today Mom showed up in a raincoat. Her hair was a bit messy, and the old bike seemed even shabbier in the rain. As I got on the bike behind her, I couldn't help but feel a sense of embarrassment again. The rain was pattering down, and the cold wind made me shiver. Mom pedaled hard, her back hunched against the rain. Suddenly, the bike chain got stuck. Mom got off immediately, trying to fix it in the rain with her bare hands. Watching her struggling figure, I remembered how she used to ride across town to buy me books without hesitation. Mom tried to cover me with the raincoat again as a storm set in. This time, I refused firmly and put it over both of us. I hugged her tightly from behind, feeling her warmth. The memories of our happy times in the past flooded back. I realized how selfish I had been. Her love was always there, never fading, no matter how old the bike was or how unfashionable my sweaters were. I whispered in her ear, "Mom, I love you." She turned her head slightly, and I saw a smile on her face through the raindrops. 写作示范二 Today Mom showed up in a raincoat. She greeted me with a warm smile, seemingly unaware of my uneasiness. As we rode on the wet road, the creaking of the bike chain was louder than ever in the rain. The cars beside us sped by, splashing water. Mom tried her best to keep me away from the splashes. I looked at her back, which was getting wetter and wetter. I remembered how she spent hours knitting sweaters for me in the cold winter nights. Mom tried to cover me with the raincoat again as a storm set in. I held her hand, stopping her. "Mom, let's share it," I said. She looked at me in surprise, and then a look of relief and happiness appeared in her eyes. In that moment, I let go of my vanity. I understood that her love was far more precious than any luxury car or fashionable brand. We rode slowly in the rain, our hearts closer than ever before. 【答案】 Paragraph 1: Today she showed up in a raincoat.When I saw her, I felt full of great expectation but great unease. It seemed so unfair that my classmates sat in their parents’ cars, but I just sat on an old badly-oiled chain creaking bike.Why I had to hide the rain from the ugly raincoat.I was full of complaint about all of these. I was sick of these.Howl wished I could also have a rich parents like my classmates. Thinking about these things, I was quite dissatisfied with my mother. I even didn’t want her to pick me up.So I didn’t say a word with her and sat on the bike silently. Paragraph 2: Mom tried to cover me with the back of the raincoat again as a storm set in. She also didn’t say a word with me. She just wanted to make sure that I didn’t get wet. She seemed to know What I felt. So She just wanted to comfort me and gave me the warmth and love She could give me. Thinking about these, my eyes was filled with tears. I didn’t feel uneased, but was full of greatness for the best she tried to give me. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$