专题19 2024年1月九省联考（聪明的海豚）-高考英语读后续写历年真题解析（PPT课件）

读后续写真题 2024年1月九省联考：聪明的海豚 1 1 试题再现 2 试题分析 3 写作思路 4 范文赏析 目录 CONTENTS 2 2024 试题再现 历年高考英语读后续写真题分析 01 3 Last summer, Hilda worked as a volunteer with dolphin trainers at a sea life park. Her job was to make sure the tanks were free of any items so that the trainers could train the dolphins to fetch specific items. However, one day after cleaning, one of the dolphins, Maya, presented Hilda with a candy wrapper from the tank. When Katherine, the trainer, saw this, she blamed Hilda for her carelessness. Upset but not discouraged by this event, Hilda decided to do some spying on Maya. The next morning, Hilda arrived at the park early. She put on her scuba gear（水下呼吸器）and jumped into the tank for her usual, underwater sweep. Finding nothing in the tank, she climbed out of the water just in time to see Katherine jumping in on the other side. After what happened yesterday, Hilda knew what she was doing. She watched as Katherine performed her underwater search, but Hilda wasn't surprised when she surfaced empty-handed. During the tank sweeps, Maya had been swimming playfully, but now the dolphin stopped suddenly and swam to the back part of the tank where the filter （过滤） box was located. She stuck her nose down behind the box and then swam away. What was Maya doing back there? Hilda wondered. She jumped back into the water and swam over to take a look behind the box, and her question was answered. Hilda then swam across the tank following Maya's path and emerged from the water to find Katherine removing her scuba gear. As Katherine turned around, her mouth dropped open. There was Maya at the edge of the tank with a comb（梳子） in her mouth waiting for her treat. “Maya! Where did you get that?” demanded Katherine, taking the comb and throwing her a fish. “I know where she got it,” declared Hilda climbing out of the tank with a handful of items still wet from their watery, resting place. “What's all this?” Katherine asked, obviously confused. 注意： （1）续写词数应为150个左右；（2）请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph1：“This is Maya's secret,” Hilda said with a big smile. Paragraph2：Now Katherine realized what had been going on. 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 A MOTHER’S DAY SURPRISE The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother’s Day. How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed. They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge. They had watched their mother in the kitchen. There was nothing to it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do. The big day came at last. The alarm rang at 6 a.m. The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen. They decided to boil the porridge first. They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast. Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk. Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture. Next, Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan. Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread. The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds. Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread. This time, she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely. Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake. The next minute, the porridge boiled over and put out the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly. But the stove was a mess now. Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge. But Jeff’s hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cold water. Then she caught the smell of burning. Oh dear! The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well. 注意： 1. 续写词数应为 150 左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. 高中英语写作 新题型 读后续写 试题再现 2024 试题分析 历年高考英语读后续写真题分析 02 5 【词汇、语块积累】 make sure the tanks were free of any items - 确保水箱内没有任何物品 present Hilda with a candy wrapper - 给希尔达一个糖果包装纸 blame Hilda for her carelessness - 因为她的粗心责备希尔达 decide to do some spying on Maya - 决定对玛雅进行一些侦查 surfaced empty - handed - 空手浮出水面 swam to the back part of the tank - 游到水箱的后部 stuck her nose down behind the box - 把鼻子伸到箱子后面 emerged from the water - 从水中出现 removing her scuba gear - 正在脱下她的水肺装备 with a comb in her mouth - 嘴里叼着一把梳子 waiting for her treat - 等待她的奖励 handful of items still wet - 一把仍然湿漉漉的物品 Our story unfolds here... 故事人物 Hilda: 一名在海洋公园与海豚训练师一起工作的志愿者。她聪明、观察细致，能够发现并解释玛雅的行为。 Katherine: 海豚训练师，最初因为误解责备 Hilda，后来意识到 Hilda 的洞察力和玛雅的特殊行为。 Maya: 一只聪明的海豚，喜欢收集物品，并将其藏在过滤箱后面。 开端：希尔达（Hilda）作为志愿者在海洋公园工作，负责清理水箱。 发展：凯瑟琳（Katherine）因玛雅（Maya）拿出一个糖果包装纸而错误地责备希尔达粗心。希尔达决定观察玛雅，发现了海豚收集和隐藏物品的行为。 高潮：希尔达揭开了玛雅的秘密，向凯瑟琳展示了海豚收集的物品。 结局：凯瑟琳意识到了希尔达的洞察力和玛雅的特殊行为，两人之间的误解得到解决。 尾声：故事以凯瑟琳对希尔达的认可和对玛雅行为的新理解结束，突出了观察、理解和团队合作的重要性 Read for settings when where settings One day last summer; the next morning A sea life park Scuba gear Filter box Tank Read for characters characters who Hilda, the item checker Katherine, the trainer Maya, the dolphin Read for the plot what plot Hilda worked to rid the tanks of items at a sea life park. Introduction: Rising action: Hilda was wrongly accused by Katherine for neglect of duty Climax: Hilda found out Maya’s secret and was questioned by Katherine Turn: Ending: 2.How did H find out M’s secret? 3.Why would Maya do that? Writing part how why 1.What is Maya’s secret? Read for emotional changes and personalities Hilda Katherine upset and but not discouraged dissatisfied and unhappy curious clear surprised and confused H was wrongly accused by K for neglect of duty. H decided to spy on M. H looked behind the box, and find K. responsible,but demanding persevering,obeservant,smart 2024 写作思路 历年高考英语读后续写真题分析 03 16 “This is Maya's secret,” Hilda said with a big smile. 第一段 主要写：How did Hilda reveal the secret? 思考：1.直接告知Maya的秘密？（这样会显得情节单调，很难拓展开来）2.间接告知：带着她一起进去看那个box，然后从中取出来一个物件。（这样就会有细节描写，尤其是是动作描写） 1.看到她的困惑，示意她一起进去水箱。（遵循Action – Response原则，一方的困惑，另一方的急切） 2.Hilda进去取东西。 3. Katherine的反应（遵循Action – Response原则） 第一段 1. Seeing the confusion in Katherine's eyes, Hilda gestured for her to put on the scuba gear and once again jump into the tank. Katherine followed closely, eager to see what tricks Hilda had up her sleeve. 2. Hilda reached the back of the tank, pointing at the box and the items outside. Then with great care, she leaned in to grope for something. 3. It didn’t take long before she took out an object and handed it to Katherine. Katherine's eyes widened in astonishment. 第一段 Now Katherine realized what had been going on. 第二段 主要写：得知真相后，如何对待Maya? 思考：这要和主题扣起来：Her job was to make sure the tanks were free of any items so that the trainers could train the dolphins to fetch specific items. 这样我们就确定情节：let Maya fetch her secret items 1. 遵循Action – Response原则: 让两个女士互动起来说话。 承接Katherine的提示句，继续拓展：Katherine说我总算明白了为什么老丢小东西。 2.Hilda回应（response） 3. Katherine的突然的想法——主题 第二段 1. After the two emerged from the tank, they exchanged knowing smiles. “I knew it! How come so many small things have been missing lately?” Katherine said, kind of embarrassed for misunderstanding Hilda. 2. But Hilda responded, “She’s just playing a game with us.” 3. “Well, why not have her fetch specific items from the box for the visiting guests?” Katherine exclaimed excitedly. 末句主题：In the days that followed, Maya enthusiastically presented her secret collection to everyone, the entire sea life park echoing with delighted laughter every day. 第二段 Important clues: the given sentences “This is Maya’s secret,” Hilda said with a big smile. Now Katherine realized what had been going on. What questions can you ask based on 2 sentences? Q1: What is Maya’s secret? Q2: Would Hilda show it to Katherine or just explain? Q3: What would be Katherine’s response to Hilda? Q4: How would the story end? let K know the truth K apologized&ending 4 significant sentences “This is Maya’s secret,” Hilda said with a big smile. Now Katherine realized what had been going on. the most important the second most important Read for the theme ＋ human&nature human&society We should appreciate the wonder of animals and live in harmony with them. We should admit our mistakes and ask for forgiveness when we are indeed wrong. theme human&nature human&society human&self Read for emotional changes and personalities Hilda Katherine upset but not discouraged dissatisfied and unhappy curious clear surprised and confused happy guilty forgiving，amazed and caring amazed and caring H was wrongly accused by K for neglect of duty. H decided to spy on M. H looked behind the box, and find K. H explained and K listened. H and K gave M treats with love and care. Maya happy happier responsible,kind but demanding persevering,obeservant,smart Coherence Hilda walks with elegance to the back part of the tank where filter box is located and bends forward to take out a toy wet with water. 1.Coherence in tense 2.Coherence in characters Suddenly, the smile vanished from Hilda’s face, replaced by a faint snear(冷笑) of satisfaction. “Maybe you don’t have what it takes to be the trainer.” said Hilda with contempt(鄙视). 3 principles Action-Reaction Conflict-Solution Negative-Positive H explained K understood and apologized M asked for treats M got treats Mystery truth K mistakenly blamed H K sincerely apologized to H 2024 范文赏析 历年高考英语读后续写真题分析 04 29 “This is Maya's secret,” Hilda said with a big smile. In her hand, she displayed the items she had retrieved behind the filter box. “Maya has been trading these for treats during training. She's not just retrieving them; she's been cleverly exchanging them with you for rewards.” Hilda's voice was warm with admiration as she showed Katherine the little treasures Maya had hidden away. It was a clever game of give-and-take that Maya had mastered, turning her training sessions into a personal treasure hunt. 阅读以下参考范文，学习范文的精彩表达和亮点表述。 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 A MOTHER’S DAY SURPRISE The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother’s Day. How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed. They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge. They had watched their mother in the kitchen. There was nothing to it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do. The big day came at last. The alarm rang at 6 a.m. The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen. They decided to boil the porridge first. They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast. Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk. Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture. Next, Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan. Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread. The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds. Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread. This time, she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely. Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake. The next minute, the porridge boiled over and put out the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly. But the stove was a mess now. Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge. But Jeff’s hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cold water. Then she caught the smell of burning. Oh dear! The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well. 注意： 1. 续写词数应为 150 左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. 高中英语写作 新题型 读后续写 范文学习 Now Katherine realized what had been going on. She looked at Maya, then at Hilda, and her stern expression softened into a smile. “I owe you an apology, Hilda. You've shown great initiative and care,” she said, her tone filled with newfound respect. Together, they watched Maya perform her tricks, understanding now that the dolphin's behavior was not a training issue but a sign of her intelligence and curiosity. The day ended not with blame, but with laughter and a sense of teamwork, as they all enjoyed Maya's clever antics. 阅读以下参考范文，学习范文的精彩表达和亮点表述。 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 A MOTHER’S DAY SURPRISE The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother’s Day. How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed. They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge. They had watched their mother in the kitchen. There was nothing to it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do. The big day came at last. The alarm rang at 6 a.m. The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen. They decided to boil the porridge first. They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast. Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk. Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture. Next, Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan. Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread. The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds. Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread. This time, she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely. Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake. The next minute, the porridge boiled over and put out the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly. But the stove was a mess now. Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge. But Jeff’s hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cold water. Then she caught the smell of burning. Oh dear! The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well. 注意： 1. 续写词数应为 150 左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. 高中英语写作 新题型 读后续写 范文学习 THANK YOU 32 $$