专题20 2024年1月浙江卷（脑图定位找目标）-高考英语读后续写历年真题解析（PPT课件

读后续写真题 2024年1月浙江卷： 脑图定位找目标 1 1 试题再现 2 试题分析 3 写作思路 4 范文赏析 目录 CONTENTS 2 2024 试题再现 历年高考英语读后续写真题分析 01 3 Eva spent the first week of high school trying to keep her head above water. One of the major headaches for her was finding her way in the huge school building. It was a six-story building. On each floor, hallways stretched in four directions, leading to classrooms, laboratories, and teachers’ offices. Somewhere in the building, there was also a library, a cafeteria, and a gym. Having a poor sense of direction, Eva found it impossible to get around in such a huge building. All the different hallways and rooms were too much to think about, let alone commit to memory. She decided that she would memorize where her classes were and then pretend that the rest of the place didn’t exist. In her first PE class, Eva was shocked when Coach Pitt announced that everyone had to run one mile around the track outside. She searched the faces of her classmates for signs of panic. There was nothing she feared more than having to run a whole mile. To Eva, “a mile” was used to describe long distances. It was ten miles from her home to her grandfather’s, and that always seemed like a long way, even in a car! When Coach Pitt blew his whistle (哨子), Eva figured she would be left in the dust. However, while some of her classmates edged ahead, others actually fell behind. ” It’s just the beginning, “she thought.” I’ll come in last for sure. “ Soon Eva began to breathe hard, with her heart pounding and legs shaking. Feeling desperate, Eva started using a mind trick on herself. She stopped thinking about the word” mile. “Instead, she focused on reaching the shadow cast on the track by an oak tree up ahead. Then she concentrated on jogging to the spot where the track curved (拐弯). After that, she tried to see if she could complete her first lap. One lap turned into two, then three, then four. 注意: 1. 续写词数应为150左右; 2, 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1: When Coach Pitt said “Nice work!” to her at the finish line, Eva was surprised. Paragraph 2: Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building. 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 A MOTHER’S DAY SURPRISE The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother’s Day. How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed. They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge. They had watched their mother in the kitchen. There was nothing to it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do. The big day came at last. The alarm rang at 6 a.m. The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen. They decided to boil the porridge first. They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast. Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk. Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture. Next, Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan. Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread. The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds. Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread. This time, she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely. Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake. The next minute, the porridge boiled over and put out the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly. But the stove was a mess now. Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge. But Jeff’s hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cold water. Then she caught the smell of burning. Oh dear! The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well. 注意： 1. 续写词数应为 150 左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. 高中英语写作 新题型 读后续写 试题再现 2024 试题分析 历年高考英语读后续写真题分析 02 5 本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了高中生Eva因为方向感不强，经常在学校里迷路，在一次体育课上教练要求他们沿着校园跑步的时候Eva发现跟着树的影子能找到方向，她通过这个方法重新认识到了校园。 故事梗概 1.开始 故事的开始描述了Eva在新学校的挣扎，她发现自己无法在庞大的学校 建筑中找到方向。文章开头写道：“Eva spent the first week of high school trying to keep her head above water.”这句话表明了她在新学校 的第一周的困难处境。 试 卷 讲 评 课 件 7 2.发展 在故事发展中，Eva面对了在体育课上跑一英里的挑战。文章写道： “Eva was shocked when Coach Pitt announced that everyone had to run one mile around the track outside.”这句话展示了她面临的挑战， 以及她对此感到震惊的心情。 试 卷 讲 评 课 件 8 3.冲突 Eva的内心斗争体现在她对长距离跑步的恐惧和在庞大的学校建筑中的 迷失感。文章写道：“There was nothing she feared more than having to run a whole mile.”和“Having a poor sense of direction, Eva found it impossible to get around in such a huge building.”这两句话突出了 她的挑战。 试 卷 讲 评 课 件 9 2024 写作思路 历年高考英语读后续写真题分析 03 10 tip1: finding the elements to filling the chart.[ Tense:___________ ] where who when what why how school playground Eva Eva,Pitt first week first PE class can’t find the way can’t finish the race poor sense of direction such a long distance ? mind trick tip2:using the chart to form the plot and draw the story mountain past tip3: forming the plot and draw the story mountain Eva was shocked She feared. She started using a mind trick. Pitt said Nice at the finishing line.(para1) ?--para 1 headache for finding the way impossible to get around. decided to memorize where her classes were decided to use the same trick(para.2) ?--para 2 tip4: reading for expressions确保续写内容上下文一致 step3: instruction 描写方式：语言、动作、情绪、心理、环境、肖像描写? ✔ ✔ ✔ tip5: reading the first sentences of 2 paragraphs----echoing para1:When Coach Pitt said “Nice work!” to her at the finishing line, Eva was surprised. para 2:Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building. playground school stopped thinking about a mile focused on the shadow completed the first lap then the second... at the finishing line mind trick stopped thinking about the region? focused on one hallway? memorized the first building then the second... ✔ P1 When Coach Pitt said “Nice work!” to her at the finishing line, Eva was surprised. P2 Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building. ①接P1： ⑥接P2： ② ⑦ ③ ⑧ ④ ⑨结局： ⑤接P2： ⑩升华 tip6：阅读段首两句十句定大纲+提问互动法 What’s Eva’s reaction? Eva realized the trick was useful. the detailed descriptions of the steps. She memorized all of the buildings successfully emotion changing: confident She wanted to figure out the reason. She begun to recall and reflect. the specific practice for the first building her reaction and emotion for the success 遇到复杂问题时,细化问题,坚持下去,就会解决问题. Eva realized the trick was useful. tip7:analysis the style of the article ——确保续写内容上下文一致 描写方式：语言、动作、情绪、心理、环境、肖像描写? ✔ ✔ ✔ 微技能1——对话和情绪描写 ✔ 公式：① v.+adv. ②v.+adv. +with a+sth.③ v.+adv. +in a+sth. eg.Tom担心地/着急地/不耐烦地/温和地/轻轻地/充满爱意地问， “.....?” “.....?”asked Tom worriedly/ anxiously/ impatiently/ gently/ softly/ lovingly. 微技能2——动作情感描写素材 笑 开心 看 放松 sb.’s face lights up/ brightens stare at/take one’s eyes off sth. draw/take a deep breath a big smile spread across her face widen/ narrow one’s eyes breathe a sign with relief tip7:analysis the style of the article ——确保续写内容上下文一致 微技能3——情感+动作描写 公式：人/主语+ v.+adv.副词/系表结构， with+sth. +v-ing +（adv.副词)+介词短语。 人/主语+ v.+adv.副词/系表结构， sth. +v-ing +（adv.副词）+介词短语。 eg. 她静静地站着，泪水顺着脸颊淌下来。 She stood silently, tears streaming down his cheeks. 微技能 4——动作三连 A, B and C eg.“这个歌手唱歌” 想一想：歌手唱歌，这个动作前面或后面会有哪些动作？ 歌手唱歌 = 扫视观众 + 深吸一口气 + 开始演唱 The singer glanced at the audience, took a deep breath and began to sing. 段落续写： ①由第一段首句内容“当Pitt教练在终点线对她说:“干得好!”，伊娃很惊讶。”可知，第一段可描写Eva通过自己追随影子的方法找到方向，并且受到了教练的称赞。 ②由第二段首句内容“Eva决定用同样的手段来记住学校大楼。”可知，第二段可描写Eva通过记住影子的方法来记住学校大楼并且通过这件事之后的感悟。 续写线索： 方向感太差记不住学校建筑的位置——体育课上绕着学校跑却找不到方向——害怕最后一名心里非常紧张——跟随影子找到方向——受到教练的赞赏——获得感悟 2024 范文赏析 历年高考英语读后续写真题分析 04 19 范文赏析 Paragraph 1: When Coach Pitt said “Nice work!” to her at the finish line, Eva was surprised. She stood there, (很累)panting, the sweat glistening on her forehead. Looking around, she saw her classmates, some still running, some already finished. 成就感A sense of accomplishment washed over her, 不敢置信mixed with the disbelief that she had actually completed the mile run. 对比害怕Despite her initial fears, she had pushed through and succeeded, earning praise from her coach赢得表扬的结果. 试 卷 讲 评 课 件 20 Paragraph 2: Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building. 决心With determination in her eyes, she took a mental note of her surroundings. The vast corridors stretched out before her, lined with lockers and classroom doors. 深吸一口气Taking a deep breath, 关注熟悉的地标she focused on a familiar landmark - the colorful bulletin board near her history classroom. 发生变化、成长 With each step, her confidence grew stronger. She navigated the halls with purpose, no longer feeling lost in the sea of unfamiliar faces and corridors.主题升华 Eva's perseverance and adaptability were evident as she conquered yet another challenge, proving to herself that she could overcome any obstacle with the right mindset and determination. 试 卷 讲 评 课 件 好词句背诵和默写 panting, the sweat glistening on her forehead，A sense of accomplishment washed over her， mixed with the disbelief that she had actually completed the mile run； Despite her initial fears,earning praise from her coach, With determination in her eyes,she focused on a familiar landmark, feeling lost in the sea of unfamiliar faces,perseverance and adaptability, conquered yet another challenge,overcome any obstacle with the right mindset 试 卷 讲 评 课 件 22 好词句场景运用微写作- Sarah在一次跑步比赛中战胜自己，跑到终点，这使她更加自信的面对 新学校的一切 As Sarah crossed the finish line, panting and with sweat glistening on her forehead, a surge of accomplishment washed over her. Mixed with disbelief, she couldn't believe she had completed the mile run. Despite her initial fears, she earned praise from her coach, filling her with pride. Now, standing in the bustling school hallway, determination gleamed in her eyes. She focused on a familiar landmark amidst the sea of unfamiliar faces. With perseverance and adaptability, she conquered yet another challenge, knowing she could overcome any obstacle with the right mindset. 试 卷 讲 评 课 件 23 THANK YOU 24 $$