03 “三个公式”解锁情感描写-2025年高考英语读后续写高分技能提升

“三个句式” 解锁情感描写 在故事的发展中，人物情感的变化是展现其性格的关键。续写时延续情感线索，不仅能凸显人物性格，还能升华文章主题。细腻的情感描写能让文章细节更加生动，使情节与细节相得益彰，提升文章的精彩程度。然而，许多学生在情感描写上存在词汇匮乏、表达单一的问题。为此，我们总结出三个实用句型，助力同学们提升写作水平。 万能句式一：adj 1 and adj 2, 主句，doing… / 独立主格结构 句式来源 “Worn out and famished, he made his way home, keeping silent all the way.” （他疲惫不堪又饥肠辘辘地往家走，一路上沉默不语。） 用法示例 1. **原句**：She stepped onto the stage to receive the award. **升级后**：Amazed and delighted, she stepped onto the stage to receive the award, beaming with pride. （她既惊奇又高兴，走上台领奖，满脸自豪。） 2. **原句**：He got acquainted with many companions. **升级后**：Friendly and sociable, he soon got acquainted with many companions, having a great time with them. （因友善且善于交际，他很快结识了许多伙伴，与他们相处愉快。） 3. **原句**：We met at the school gate early in the morning. **升级后**：Anxious and eager, we met at the school gate early in the morning, chattering animatedly all the while. （带着急切与渴望，我们一大早就在校门口会合，一直兴致勃勃地聊着。） 用法体验 1. Thrilled and dedicated, we were discussing with our classmates and jotting down our ideas, hoping to contribute to solving the tough problem. （满心激动，我们专注地和同学讨论并写下想法，希望能助力解决难题。） 2. Deeply shocked and perplexed, I read letter after letter, each conveying a similar sentiment. （万分震惊与迷茫之中，我一页页翻看信件，每封都传达着相似的情绪。） 3. Overjoyed and excited, Tom quickened his steps and rushed towards the brand - new car, knowing that he finally owned it. （汤姆欣喜若狂，加快步伐奔向那辆崭新的汽车，深知自己终于拥有了它。） 4. Content and pleased, my sister looked at the painting, regarding it as the most outstanding work in the world. （妹妹心满意足地看着那幅画，觉得它是世界上最出色的作品。） 用法实战 1. Terrified and helpless, he stood there motionless for a while, unable to believe what he had just witnessed. （既恐惧又无助，他愣在那儿好一会儿，不敢相信刚刚目睹的一切。） 2. Despairing and exhausted, Lucy slowly crouched down, with tears trickling down her face. （绝望又疲惫，露西缓缓蹲下，泪水顺着脸庞滑落。） 3. Curious and thrilled, we couldn't wait to exchange gifts with the international friends, expressing our profound friendship thereby. （好奇又兴奋，我们迫不及待地和国际友人互换礼物，以此表达我们深厚的友谊。） 4. Highly excited and focused, we were discussing with our classmates and recording our suggestions, hoping to play a part in solving the problem. （激动万分，我们全神贯注地与同学探讨并记录建议，期望能为解决问题出份力。） 句式改造 **原句**：He entered the library. (紧张) **升级后**：Nervous and a bit jittery, he quietly slipped into the quiet library, book in hand and heart pounding. （他紧张又有些颤抖，悄悄溜进安静的图书馆，手里拿着书，心跳加速。） 万能句式二：量词 + 表情感状态的名词 + 动词 + sb 常用量词 a gush / rush / torrent / spurt / feeling of… 常用动词 grab, clutch, take hold of，creep（蔓延），engulf（吞没），well up（涌起），rush（冲），sweep across（席卷），overpower（征服） 用法示例 1. **原句**：When he learned that he won the competition, he felt extremely excited. **升级后**：The moment he was informed of his victory in the competition, a gush of excitement grabbed him. （当他知道比赛获胜时，一股兴奋的情绪抓住了他。） 2. **原句**：She was extremely sorrowful. **升级后**：She was clutched by a rush of sorrow and couldn't help weeping bitterly. （她悲痛万分，忍不住失声痛哭。） 3. **原句**：I felt frightened. **升级后**：I was seized by a strong feeling of dread with my heart pounding. （我感到恐惧，心跳加速。） 用法体验 1. At the sight of her sweet smile, a feeling of warmth swept across me. （看到她甜美的笑容，一股温暖涌上我心头。） 2. Hearing his promise, Lily smiled broadly, a rush of happiness welling up in her heart. （听到他的承诺，莉莉绽开笑容，一股幸福的暖流涌上心头。） 3. Hearing my mother's comfort on the phone, I was filled with a rush of gratitude, my eyes welling up with tears. （听到电话里母亲的安慰，我心中满是感激，眼眶湿润。） 句式变化 “doing…, sb. felt a strong sense of + 情绪名词 + surging up in sb’s heart and coursing through sb, doing…” 意为“某人感到一股强烈的……在内心涌起、流淌”。句首可加 doing sth 表情绪产生原因；句尾可加 doing sth 或 which 表情绪产生结果。 1. Seeing her child's excellent performance on the stage, the mother felt a strong sense of pride surging up in her heart and coursing through her, couldn't help clapping her hands. （看到孩子在舞台上出色表演，妈妈心中满是骄傲，不禁鼓起掌来。） 2. Seeing his lost - and - found pet, he felt a strong sense of surprise surging up in his heart and coursing through him, hugging it tightly. （看到失而复得的宠物，他心中满是惊喜，紧紧抱住它。） 3. Imagining the upcoming holiday, the students felt a strong sense of anticipation surging up in their hearts and coursing through them, couldn't help cheering. （想象着即将到来的假期，学生们心中满是期待，忍不住欢呼起来。） 万能句式三：（doing…），so + adj / adv + 部分倒装 + that…, (doing…) 用法示例 1. **原句**：He couldn't help laughing. **升级后**：Recalling the funny story, so amused was he that he couldn't help laughing, tears streaming down his face. （回想起那个有趣的故事，他觉得太好笑了，忍不住大笑起来，眼泪都流了下来。） 2. **原句**：Spotting the approaching danger, so frightened was the little rabbit that it trembled all over like a leaf. **升级后**：看到逼近的危险，小兔子吓得浑身像树叶一样抖个不停。 3. **原句**：Catching sight of the fierce tiger, so scared did I feel that my hands started shaking and my feet refused to move. **升级后**：看到那只凶猛的老虎，我吓得双手开始颤抖，双脚也挪不动了。 用法体验 1. Recalling those warm memories, so touched was she that her eyes filled with tears and she couldn't speak for a long time. （回想起那些温馨的回忆，她感动得热泪盈眶，久久无法言语。） 2. So excited was John that he rushed forward and hugged his friend tightly. （约翰兴奋极了，冲上前去，紧紧拥抱了他的朋友。） 技法综合体验 听到这个惊人的消息，他兴奋地跳起来，眼中闪烁着光芒。“Hearing this astonishing news, he leaped up in excitement, with his eyes glistening brightly.” 亲眼见到自己的偶像，艾米激动得几乎窒息，呆呆地站在那里，嘴巴张得老大。“Seeing her idol in person, Amy was so thrilled that she almost gasped for breath, standing there dumbfounded with her mouth wide open.” 向朋友倾诉完烦恼后，他不安地坐在椅子上，手指不停敲打着桌面，心跳加速。“Having poured out his troubles to his friend, he sat restlessly on the chair, his fingers drumming on the table and his heart racing.” 他恶狠狠地盯着对手，几乎无法抑制心中的怒火，声音因愤怒而颤抖。“Glaring at his opponent viciously, he could barely contain his anger, his voice shaking with rage.” 马克冷得浑身发抖，疲惫不堪，完全不知道该如何摆脱这糟糕的处境。“Shivering with cold and extremely exhausted, Mark was completely at a loss as to how to get out of this terrible situation.” 刹那间，泪水模糊了双眼，他感动得说不出话来。“In an instant, with tears blurring his eyes, he was too touched to say a word.” 听到这个尴尬的问题，大卫满脸通红，不停地挠着头，试图找个合适的回答。“On hearing this embarrassing question, David blushed deeply, scratching his head constantly, trying to find a proper answer.” 从未想过自己会陷入如此困境，她感到无比的焦虑和无助。“Never had she thought that she would be trapped in such a predicament that she was overwhelmed with anxiety and helplessness.” 素材积累 开心 得知孩子们的想法，梅雷迪思夫人喜形于色。而后，孩子们欢快地准备起爆米花。带着一篮爆米花，他们兴高采烈地前往伯纳德家，欲与他分享这绝妙计划。听闻此言，伯纳德喜极而泣，眼中满是泪花。看到那篮爆米花，他的父母也欣喜万分。不久，令他开心的是，爆米花美味至极，很快售罄。他归来时，满脸洋溢着喜悦。笑声在房间中回荡。 “Learning the children’s idea, Mrs. Meredith was so overjoyed that she smiled brightly. Then, the children got down to preparing popcorn cheerfully. With a basket of popcorn, they left for the Bernard’s joyfully to share with Bernard the good plan. Hearing what they said, Bernard danced with joy, with tears filling his eyes. At the sight of the basket of popcorn, his parents were also seized with joy. Later, much to his delight, the popcorn was so tasty that it soon sold out. He soon returned, his whole face beaming with delight. Laughter lingered around the room.” 伤心 今年我被选中代表学校参加即将到来的比赛。但因太过骄傲，我忽视了练习的重要性。比赛当天，我信心全无，饱受怯场之苦。最终，我满眼含泪走下舞台。比赛结束后，结果公布，我未获奖。我满心悲伤，咬着下唇，拖着沉重的双腿，心情沉重地走出演讲厅。我伤心垂头，悲伤笼罩双眼。走进教室，失望与悲伤如潮水般涌来，泪水滑落脸颊。接下来的日子，我仿佛置身悲伤的海洋，什么都不想做。 “I was selected to represent my school in the approaching contest this year. But I was so proud that I neglected the importance of practicing for the contest. On the day of the contest, I began to lose confidence in myself and suffered from stage fright. In the end I walked off the stage, my eyes filled with tears. Finally, results were announced after the contest. I did not win any prizes. I bit my bottom lip with sadness filling her heart. I dragged my heavy legs with a sinking heart and moved out of the lecture hall. I hung my head in sadness, great sorrow clouding my eyes. On entering the classroom, disappointment and sadness came in waves and tears streamed down my cheeks. The next following days, I felt like she was floating in an ocean of sadness, not wanting to do anything.” 生气 门开了，进来一个年轻人。看到我们往行李箱装东西，他愤怒地大叫，眼中闪烁着恼怒。他大发雷霆，跺脚来回走动。他指责我们非法闯入他的房间，并威胁要报警，这把我的孩子们吓得不轻。就在这时，我丈夫购物回来。听到这人的无礼言语，他心中燃起怒火。似乎局面已无法调和，达到沸点。争吵令他怒火更盛，如火山爆发。最终，我丈夫无法遏制怒火，气冲冲地摔门而出。 “The door opened and in came a young man. Shocked to see us packing things into our suitcase, the young man let out a yell of anger, with his eyes shining with annoyance. He was in a furious passion, and went stamping about. He accused us of illegally entering his room and threatened to call the police, which scared my children to death. Just at that moment, my husband returned after his grocery shopping. Hearing the man's rude words, a fire of rage burning in his heart. It seemed that no settlement would be possible, and the situation reached a boiling point. Quarrels fueled his anger and he erupted like a volcano. Eventually, unable to contain his anger, my husband stormed out of the room, slamming the door furiously behind him.” 害怕 饥饿的熊循着气味来到我们被高铁丝网围住的营地。它又拉又咬铁丝网，后腿站立，推搡木栅栏。恐惧将我完全笼罩，我动弹不得。我惊恐万分，双腿颤抖，手心冒汗。身旁的妻子呆立原地，被吓得动弹不得。看到北极熊的血盆大口，她几乎被吓死。这毛茸茸的家伙攻击围栏，瞬间撕开一个小口。看到这可怕场景，我们感觉血液凝固。喉咙发紧，双腿发软。我和埃利尝试了所有防熊措施，大声呼喊、猛敲锅具、向空中鸣放空弹。 “The hungry bear followed his nose to our camp, which was surrounded by a high wire fence. He pulled and bit the wire. He stood on his back legs and pushed at the wooden fence posts. A burst of horror held me entirely in its power, and I was unable to move an inch. Extremely frightened/panicked, I felt my legs trembling and my palms sweating. Beside me was my wife, who was rooted to the ground, who was rooted to the ground, frozen with fear. At the sight of the polar bear’ bloody mouth, she was nearly dead with fright. The furry creature launched an attack on the fence, instantly leaving a narrow opening on it. We felt that the blood in our body froze because of the terrible sight. Our throats tightened and our knees felt weak. Elli and I tried all the bear defense actions we knew. We yelled at the bear, hit pots hard, and fired blank shotgun shells into the air.” 紧张 完成测试表演后，我向巴特勒先生致谢，知晓结果次日会张贴在合唱室门口。我整夜辗转难眠。次日清晨，我匆忙赶到学校，紧张地瞥向合唱室门口的名单，感觉心都提到嗓子眼。名单顶端正是我的名字。备受鼓舞的我，为表演日更加刻苦练习。终于，表演日来临。站在后台，紧张感扑面而来。听到叫我的名字，我心里忐忑不安。颤抖的双腿带我走上舞台，我手心冒汗，心跳加速。满是观众的大厅让我愈发不安。我的心剧烈跳动，仿佛要蹦出来。此时，我看到角落的巴特勒先生，他点头与我坚定对视，让我安心。音乐响起，我开始歌唱。结束时，礼堂爆发出如潮的欢呼声。 “When I finished her testing performance, I thanked Mr. Butler and knew the result would be posted on the door of the choral room the next day. I couldn’t fall asleep, tossing and turning in bed for a whole night. By the next morning, I hurried to the school and nervously glanced at the list on the door of the choral room, feeling as if my heart were in my mouth. There, at the top of the list was posted my name. Inspired, I practiced even harder for the day of performance. Finally the day for the performance came. When I was standing backstage, nervousness/tension came flooding over me. When my name was called I could feel butterflies in my stomach. My trembling legs brought me onstage, and I could feel my palms sweating and heart racing. The hall crowded with audience made me even more uneasy. My heart was pounding/thumping hard, as if it were about to pop. At that moment, my eyes parked on Mr. Butler at the corner. He nodded and exchanged a determined glance with me, which timely put my heart back in place. With the music rising, I began my singing. When I finished, the auditorium erupted into a sea of cheers.” 感动 次日，我们想起带来的崭新帐篷，决定沿河露营。旅途中景色绝美，妈妈激动不已。每到新地方，妈妈都难掩兴奋，像孩子般欢呼雀跃。她会下车，兴奋地又笑又跳。抵达露营地，妈妈激动尖叫，找到一片空地，立刻指挥我们搭帐篷。我们眼中闪烁着兴奋光芒，坐在草地上，享受壮丽的大自然。 “The next day we remembered the brand new tent we had brought with us. We decided to camp along the river. The views on the journey were surprisingly beautiful, a wave of excitement taking hold of Mom. Every time we got to a new place，Mom could hardly contain her excitement, and would cheer up like a child. She would get off the car, laughing and dancing around with excitement. The moment we arrived at the camping place, letting out a scream of thrill, Mom located a clearing and immediately guided us to pitch the tent. With eyes glittering \twinkling with excitement，we sat on the grass, enjoying the splendid nature.” 尴尬 此时，我们站在长长的假日结账队伍中。我觉得是个好机会，便躺地上，不停尖叫：“我要那电话。” 妈妈声音颤抖：“贝基，你最好马上起来。” 我充耳不闻，继续撒泼。妈妈涨红的脸写满窘迫，我却依旧我行我素。突然，妈妈竟也躺我旁边，同样又踢又叫，索要她渴望的东西。见状，我愈发尴尬，心跳加速，脸热得发烫。仿佛空气都消失了，感觉全世界都在注视我们。“妈妈，停下。妈妈，起来。” 我含泪哀求。她看我一眼，起身，掸掸衣服上的灰尘。 “By now we were standing in the long holiday line to pay the bill. and I figured it was a good chance. I threw myself on the ground, screaming, “l want that telephone.” over and over again. “Becky, you’d better get up at once”, my mother said with a trembling voice, embarrassment written in her red face. 综合演练： “I just want a normal birthday party,” April told Bailey as they walked home from school. Bailey knew what April meant. April’s parents loved the environment. And because April happened to be born on Earth Day, all her parties had an Earth Day theme. “Remember when you turned seven?” said Bailey. “How could I forget the Throw-Out Blowout?” said April. “We helped out at your garage sales and donated the money to charity. And when you turned eight...” “It was a Tree Spree,” finished April. “We planted maples.” “Last year, we all collected newspapers to recycle,” said Bailey. “The Print Sprint.” April groaned. Bailey giggled. “I thought it was fun.” Later that night, as April loaded the dishwasher, she said, “I’d like to plan my own party this year.” “Sure,” said Mom. “We could have a Composts Carnival.” “Great idea!” said Dad. April cleared her throat. “I’d like to go to Maze Craze instead.” “Really?” said Dad, surprised. “I guess we could do that. Dad and I can send you kids there.” said Mom. April couldn’t wait for her birthday! She and her friends would have so much fun. And they wouldn’t have to think one bit about the earth. At school the next day, April told her friends. “I’m having my birthday party at Maze Craze!” “You are?” said Josie. “But we always do something earthy on your birthday.” “Remember that salamander we found two years ago?” said Tyler. “Yeah,” said April. “This year, we’re not even going outside.” “Oh!” said Tyler. The following weekend, everyone gathered in the parking lot outside of Maze Craze. “Thanks for coming,” said April. “I’ve been so excited about my party. No shovels. No collecting recyclables. Nothing earthy about it.” She shifted her feet. “Then I got here this morning and saw this parking lot.” April’s friends glanced around. Plastic bottles bounced across the ground. Newspapers and fast-food sacks blocked the storm drain. Shopping bags rustled in the trees. 注意： 1. 续写词数应为 150 左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 “What a mess!” April frowned. ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ April looked at the collected rubbish and smiled. ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 续写单句训练 1. “多么糟！”阿普丽尔皱了皱眉头。 2. 虽然她一直渴望一个非地球日的生日，但很难对这样的混乱视而不见。 3. 她转过身来对朋友们说：“先捡垃圾怎么样？” 4. 她的提议很快得到了其他人的批准，很快他们就成功了。 5. 艾普丽尔的妈妈从后备箱里拿了一些手套，而她爸爸设法取出了树里的购物袋。 6. 艾普丽尔和贝利拿着这些袋子收集了散落的瓶子。 7. 在下水道旁，乔西和泰勒竭尽全力清除了堵塞物。 8. 许多人都能动手轻松地干活。 9. 不久之后，三个袋子里装满了罐子和报纸，以供回收利用。 10. 阿普丽尔看着收集到的垃圾，笑了笑。然后她抬头看着她的朋友们。 11. 他们参加生日派对的整洁衣服浑身湿透，但他们的脸上却很满意。 12. 为地球做些事感觉很好。 13. “大家，地球日快乐，”April说。“现在我们准备好迎接迷宫大火了。”“April生日快乐！”她的朋友们喊道。 14. “我很幸运能出生在地球日了！””（“哇，又一个朴实的生日，”）April自想。“明年的堆肥嘉年华可能是个好主意。” 参考答案： 【文本解析】 【分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了April过生日疯狂迷宫玩时，看到外面很多垃圾，于是建议朋友们先捡垃圾，他们为参加生日聚会而穿的整洁衣服被汗水湿透了。但他们的脸上洋溢着满意的神情，能为地球做点事的感觉真好。 【详解】1.段落续写： ①由第一段首句内容“‘真是一团糟!’April皱起了眉头”可知，第一段可描写April建议朋友们先捡垃圾，描述他们捡垃圾的经过。 ②由第二段首句内容“April看着收集的垃圾笑了”可知，第二段可描写April对捡垃圾的感受以及朋友们的反应。 2.续写线索：April皱眉——April建议捡垃圾——大家设法捡垃圾——April和朋友们感觉为地球做点事真好 3.词汇激活 行为类 渴望：long for/desire 支持：approve/ support 努力做某事：make great efforts to do sth./ take pains to do sth. 情绪类 困难：difficult / rough 良好：good / great 得分句型 1：Though she had been longing for a non-Earth Day birthday, it was difficult to turn a blind eye to such a mess. (运用了though引导让步状语从句) 2：How about picking the trash first? (运用了动名词作宾语) 单句训练 1) “What a mess!” April frowned. 2) Though she had been longing for a non-Earth Day birthday it was difficult to turn a blind eye to such a mess. 3) She turned around to her friends, “How about picking the trash first?” 4) Her proposal was quickly approved by others and soon they were in business. 5) April’s mum grabbed some gloves from the trunk while her dad managed to remove those shopping bags in the trees. 6) With the bags, April and Bailey collected scattered bottles. 7) By the drain, Josie and Tyler made great efforts to clear the blockage. 8) Many hands make light work. In a short while, three bags were filled with cans and newspapers to recycle. 9) April looked at the collected rubbish and smiled. 10) Then she looked up at her friends. 11) Their neat clothes for the birthday party were soaked with sweat, but their faces glowed with satisfaction. 12) It felt so good to do something for the earth. 13) “Happy Earth Day, everyone,” said April. “Now we are ready for Maze Craze.” “Happy Birthday, April!” shouted her friends. 14) “I’m so lucky to have been born on Earth Day! ” (“Wow, another earthy birthday,” )April thought to herself. “A Composts Carnival may be a good idea for next year.” 范文： “What a mess!” April frowned. Though she had been longing for a non-Earth Day birthday it was difficult to turn a blind eye to such a mess. She turned around to her friends, “How about picking the trash first?” Her proposal was quickly approved by others and soon they were in business. April’s mum grabbed some gloves from the trunk while her dad managed to remove those shopping bags in the trees. With the bags, April and Bailey collected scattered bottles. By the drain, Josie and Tyler made great efforts to clear the blockage. Many hands make light work. In a short while, three bags were filled with cans and newspapers to recycle. April looked at the collected rubbish and smiled. Then she looked up at her friends. Their neat clothes for the birthday party were soaked with sweat, but their faces glowed with satisfaction. It felt so good to do something for the earth. “Happy Earth Day, everyone,” said April. “Now we are ready for Maze Craze.” “Happy Birthday, April!” shouted her friends. “I’m so lucky to have been born on Earth Day! ” (“Wow, another earthy birthday,” )April thought to herself. “A Composts Carnival may be a good idea for next year.” / 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$