读后续写：高中生毕业后被母亲建议去做志愿者，通过帮助他人获得对未来的方向感 讲义-2025届山东省济南市高三上学期期末学习质量检测英语试题

阅读下面材料，标黑加粗斜体黄，可积累文本！黑色块 动词积累或动作串；蓝色（宾从）红色（定从）单斜体（状从）；其余非谓语形式都会标注；B-eli-eve in every day’s accumulation!(注释) 山东省济南市2024-2025学年高三上学期期末学习质量检测英语试题 第二节（满分25分） 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 For Jake, the journey from high school to college had never seemed so challenging. The real world— the campus life he had heard so much about, the decisions on what to study, what career to pursue, and how to find his place— felt like a heavy weight on his chest. He had no clue what his future held. One afternoon, Jake's mom suggested he spend some time volunteering at the community center. “It might be a good way to take your mind off things,” she said. At first, he resisted. Volunteering didn't sound like the right way to prepare for college. He needed to focus on his future, not wasting time helping others. But eventually, he agreed unwillingly. When Jake first arrived at the center, the atmosphere felt unfamiliar but warm. It was a small, comfortable space with colorful walls, art supplies, and kids playing in the corner. He was assigned to help with the kids' art class. The first few days were uneventful. Jake just sat back, passing out crayons, organizing the art supplies, and occasionally offering a word of encouragement to the kids. But one particular day, a girl caught his attention. Her name was Layla, and she was sitting in the corner, quietly staring down at a blank canvas（画布）, with her hands wrapped tightly around a paintbrush. Her brush paused above the canvas as if she were waiting for permission to make the first mark. Jake had no experience with art and didn't know how to guide Layla. But something about her hesitation touched his heart. He walked over to her and asked, “Hey, Layla, what's going on? Why aren't you painting?” She looked up at him with large brown eyes, then down at her hands, which were holding the paintbrush tightly but not moving. “I'm not good at it,” she replied. “I don't know how to make it look like what's in my mind.” 注意： 1.续写词数应为150个左右； 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragrpah1 : Jake sat beside her, smiling. Paragraph 2: As Layla's confidence grew, Jake felt a shift within himself. 第二节（满分25分） 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 For Jake, the journey from high school to college(介词短语做定语) had never seemed so challenging. The real world— the campus life he had heard so much about(定从), the decisions on what to study(宾从), what career to pursue, and how to find his place(宾从*3 并列结构)— felt like a heavy weight on his chest(心理描写). He had no clue what his future held(宾从). One afternoon, Jake's mom suggested he spend some time volunteering at the community center(宾从). “It might be a good way to take your mind off things(非谓语动词做伴随动作),” she said. At first, he resisted. Volunteering(动名词做主语) didn't sound like the right way to prepare for college(todo做后置定语). He needed to focus on his future, not wasting time helping others(现在分词短语做伴随动作). But eventually, he agreed unwillingly. When Jake first arrived at the center(状从), the atmosphere felt unfamiliar but warm(环境描写). It was a small, comfortable space with colorful walls, art supplies, and kids(并列结构) playing in the corner(现在分词短语做后置定语). He was assigned to help with the kids' art class. The first few days were uneventful(客观描写). Jake just sat back, passing out crayons, organizing the art supplies, and occasionally offering a word of encouragement to the kids(现在分词短语做伴随动作 并列结构). But one particular day, a girl caught his attention. Her name was Layla, and she was sitting in the corner, quietly staring down at a blank canvas（画布）(现在分词做伴随动作), with her hands wrapped tightly around a paintbrush(with复合结构做状语). Her brush paused above the canvas as if she were waiting for permission to make the first mark(状从 比喻). Jake had no experience with art and didn't know how to guide Layla(宾从). But something about her hesitation touched his heart. He walked over to her and asked, “Hey, Layla, what's going on? Why aren't you painting?” She looked up at him with large brown eyes, then down at her hands(动作描写反应心理 ), which were holding the paintbrush tightly but not moving(定从). “I'm not good at it,” she replied. “I don't know how to make it look like what's in my mind(宾从+宾从).” 注意： 1.续写词数应为150个左右； 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragrpah1 : Jake sat beside her, smiling. Paragraph 2: As Layla's confidence grew, Jake felt a shift within himself. 1. 读后续写类型分析 分析角度 内容 原文反应句 续写类型 本文属于人物成长与情感转折型续写。 "But something about her hesitation touched his heart." 思路构思 通过对Jake和Layla之间的互动描写，展现Jake情感的成长和转变。 "Jake had no experience with art and didn't know how to guide Layla." 布局 续写应聚焦在Jake通过帮助Layla逐渐找到自我价值，并理解帮助他人的意义。 "He walked over to her and asked, 'Hey, Layla, what's going on? Why aren't you painting?'" 框架提炼 1. Jake开始尝试了解Layla的困境；2. Jake在帮助Layla的过程中逐渐获得成长；3. Jake发现自己内心的变化和感悟。 "He was assigned to help with the kids' art class." 实施 通过情感的细腻刻画，逐步揭示Jake的成长变化与情感突破。 "Her brush paused above the canvas as if she were waiting for permission to make the first mark." 承接原文的事项 1. 强调Jake与Layla的互动；2. 体现Jake从不情愿到主动帮助的转变。 "But eventually, he agreed unwillingly." 整体注意事项 1. 注意原文情感的发展和人物的心理变化；2. 保持Jake内心的变化要自然。 "Jake had no experience with art and didn't know how to guide Layla." 巧妙设计续写内容 可以设计Jake不仅帮助Layla找回自信，还自我反思，最终体会到助人和成长的双重意义。 "He walked over to her and asked, 'Hey, Layla, what's going on?'" 2. 故事山模式分析（Story Mountain） 分析角度 内容 原文反应句 人物刻画 Jake起初对社区服务不感兴趣，但通过与Layla的互动展现成长。 "Jake had no experience with art and didn't know how to guide Layla." 情感层次 1. 初步不情愿；2. 帮助Layla时开始感动；3. 通过帮助他人，Jake发现了自己的成长。 "But something about her hesitation touched his heart." 关键情节点 Jake走近Layla，主动提供帮助并逐渐获得自我反思的机会。 "He walked over to her and asked, 'Hey, Layla, what's going on?'" 语言特色 语言简单而富有情感层次，采用对话与内心描写融合的方式展现人物的成长。 "She looked up at him with large brown eyes, then down at her hands, which were holding the paintbrush tightly but not moving." 关键词分析 心理描写词汇：hesitation, confidence, heart；动作描写词汇：paused, looked, touched；环境描写词汇：warm, kids, corner。 "Her brush paused above the canvas as if she were waiting for permission to make the first mark." 心理描写 Jake的内心挣扎与自我觉醒，感受到帮助他人带来的转变。 "But something about her hesitation touched his heart." 动作描写 Layla的刷子停顿、手的紧握；Jake的行动、与Layla交流等。 "Her brush paused above the canvas as if she were waiting for permission to make the first mark." 环境描写 社区中心的温馨环境、彩色的墙壁、角落里的孩子们，增添故事的温暖氛围。 "It was a small, comfortable space with colorful walls, art supplies, and kids playing in the corner." 隐含主题 通过帮助他人，Jake自我成长，体现了奉献和个人成长的主题。 "She looked up at him with large brown eyes, then down at her hands, which were holding the paintbrush tightly but not moving." 情感转折 Jake从最初的不情愿到感动并实现内心的转变。 "Jake had no experience with art and didn't know how to guide Layla." 空间转换 从教室到Jake与Layla之间的对话空间，突出情感交流的转折。 "He walked over to her and asked, 'Hey, Layla, what's going on?'" 时间过渡 通过时间的推移，Jake逐步意识到帮助别人不仅能帮助他人，也能自我成长。 "At first, he resisted." 3. 动作、心理、环境描写的推荐英文例句 类别 推荐英文例句 动作描写 1. Jake leaned forward, ready to help her take the first step. 2. Layla lifted the brush hesitantly, as if unsure. 3. Jake gently placed his hand on her shoulder, offering support. 4. She held the paintbrush tightly, her grip firm yet uncertain. 5. With a deep breath, Layla dipped her brush into the paint. 6. Jake’s hands trembled as he reached out to help her. 7. Layla started to paint, her movements becoming more fluid. 8. Jake smiled as Layla’s expression shifted from uncertainty to confidence. 心理描写 1. Jake felt a knot in his stomach, uncertain of what to say. 2. Layla’s hesitation mirrored his own doubts. 3. For the first time in a long while, Jake felt his heart open. 4. The more he helped her, the more Jake realized he had been missing something in his life. 5. Layla’s shy smile made Jake feel an unexpected sense of accomplishment. 6. Jake wondered if helping Layla would help him too. 7. A wave of warmth washed over him as he saw her confidence grow. 8. For a moment, Jake felt at peace, knowing he had made a difference. 环境描写 1. The walls of the community center were painted with bright colors, creating a cheerful atmosphere. 2. The small space was filled with laughter, children’s voices, and the smell of fresh paint. 3. Outside, the sun was shining brightly, casting a warm glow through the windows. 4. The corner where Layla sat felt quiet and isolated, as if she were lost in her thoughts. 5. The gentle hum of the air conditioning made the room feel cozy and calm. 6. The classroom was filled with colorful drawings, creating an inspiring environment for creativity. 7. The soft music in the background added a peaceful ambiance to the room. 8. The bright yellow walls made the space feel welcoming and warm. 4. 高中语法现象分析 语法现象 常见搭配与短语 词意 词性 近义词 反义词 例句 定语从句 the girl who, the brush that, the moment when 关系代词引导的从句 代词 that, which -- 1. The brush that Layla held tightly was the only thing that mattered to her. 2. The girl who hesitated seemed to need help. 动词短语 get through, look up to, hold on to 动作短语 动词短语 carry on, continue give up 1. He managed to get through the tough situation. 2. Layla looked up to Jake for guidance. 情态动词 might, would 表示可能、愿意、请求等 情态动词 may, could cannot 1. She might be able to paint if she had the confidence. 2. Jake would offer his help whenever Layla seemed stuck. 并列句 but, and, so 连接两个相关的思想 连词 yet, for although 1. She was unsure, but she trusted Jake. 2. Jake wanted to help, and he felt a connection with Layla. Possible Versions Version 1 Paragraph 1: Jake sat beside her, smiling. As he watched Layla's brush move across the canvas(状从), she hesitated at first, unsure of her skills(adj做状语), but as she gained confidence(as状从), her strokes became more fluid and expressive(绘画过程描写). Jake felt a warmth in his heart(情绪描写) as he saw Layla’s transformation(状从). He realized that sometimes, helping others(现在分词短语做主语) not only makes a difference in their lives but also in your own(宾从). As Layla smiled at her finished painting(状从), Jake couldn’t help but feel proud of her progress. In that moment, he understood that it wasn’t just about preparing for college but also about understanding the importance of personal growth and helping others along the way. Paragraph 2: As Layla's confidence grew, Jake felt a shift within himself. He had initially resisted volunteering, thinking it would be a waste of time(现在分词短语做状语+宾从). However, the experience taught him a valuable lesson about selflessness and the impact of small acts of kindness(心理描写，收获). Jake began to realize that college wasn’t just about academics, but also about finding meaningful connections and making a positive difference(宾从，递进句式). With each session at the community center(介词短语状语), he felt more connected to the world around him, and slowly, the weight on his chest began to lift. He was no longer overwhelmed by the uncertainty of his future, as he understood(状从) that sometimes, the best way to move forward was by looking back and helping others(宾从). Version 2 Paragraph 1: Jake sat beside her, smiling. As he offered words of encouragement, (状从)Layla, once hesitant(adj做主语补语或状语), slowly began to paint with more determination(心理描写). She had always struggled with self-doubt, but with Jake’s gentle guidance(介词短语做原因状语), she started to find her voice through the art. Her brush moved across the canvas with purpose, each stroke more confident than the last(独立主格).(绘画的动作描写) Jake couldn’t help but feel a sense of fulfillment as he watched Layla’s transformation(状从). He had never realized how rewarding it could be to help someone overcome their fears and find their confidence(宾从). Paragraph 2: As Layla’s confidence grew, Jake saw the parallels in his own life. He, too, had been hesitant about his future, unsure of what direction to take(adj做主语补语或状语). But as he helped Layla express herself(状从), he realized that it was okay to not have all the answers right away.(宾从) Sometimes, the journey was about taking small steps, one at a time(中心描写). Jake felt a sense of peace settle over him as he understood that personal growth came in unexpected ways(状从+宾从). Helping Layla(动名词短语做主语) had allowed him to help himself, and he was no longer afraid of the future. Version 3 Paragraph 1: Jake sat beside her, smiling. As he encouraged Layla to take the first step(状从), at first, she was reluctant to trust herself, but with Jake's support(介词短语做原因状语), she began to paint. Each stroke of the brush seemed to wash away her insecurities(心理描写，收获), and she began to express herself more freely. Jake watched her closely, impressed(adj做主语补语) by how quickly she gained confidence(宾从). He felt an unexpected sense of pride in her progress. Through their interaction(介词短语做状语), he realized that sometimes, the best way to move forward was to help others find their strength first. Paragraph 2: As Layla’s confidence grew, Jake found himself reflecting on his own journey. He had spent so much time worrying about his future that he had forgotten to focus on the present(结果状从). Volunteering had shown him that sometimes, the answers to life's uncertainties came from unexpected sources(宾从，收获). By helping Layla, he had discovered a new sense of purpose, one that wasn’t defined by grades or career paths but by the connections(定从) he made with others(定从). The weight he had been carrying on his chest(定从) slowly began to lift, and he felt lighter, more hopeful about the future(adj做状语). 语法加分点分析 1. 定语从句: "as he watched Layla's brush move across the canvas" - 用来修饰“Jake”并提供背景信息。 1. 例句: The book that I borrowed was amazing. 2. 倒装句: "At first, she was reluctant to trust herself" - 用于强调时间的先后顺序。 2. 例句: Only after the rain stopped did the children go outside. 3. 独立主格结构: "Jake couldn’t help but feel a sense of fulfillment" - 用于表示主语外的附加信息，增强语气。 3. 例句: His mind wandering, he failed to hear the announcement. 4. 状语从句: "as he helped Layla express herself" - 用于说明动作发生的时间、原因或条件。 4. 例句: I felt happy as I watched my friends succeed. 情绪与动作描写亮点词汇短语 · 情绪描写: 1. "hesitation", "confidence", "self-doubt", "fulfillment", "sense of peace" 1. 同义词替换: 1. hesitation: uncertainty, doubt 1. confidence: self-assurance, belief 1. fulfillment: satisfaction, contentment 1. 例句: His uncertainty grew as he faced the challenge ahead. · 动作描写: 2. "hesitated", "paused", "moved across the canvas", "watched", "offered support" 2. 同义词替换: · hesitated: wavered, faltered · moved: glided, swept · watched: observed, saw 2. 例句: She faltered for a moment but then continued with more determination. 高级单词替换与场景总结 · 提升替换词: 1. struggle → wrestle 1. reluctant → hesitant 1. slowly → gradually 1. encourage → motivate 1. overcome → conquer · 场景总结: 2. 在描述人物情感或动作时，可使用高级词汇替换基础词汇，增强表达的层次感和细腻度。 官方读后续写： Jake sat beside her, smiling. “It doesn't have to be perfect,” he said gently. “Just let your imagination run wild and see where the brush takes you(宾从).” Layla hesitated for a moment, then slowly dipped her paintbrush into a bright blue. With a deep breath(介词短语做状语), she made the first stroke on the canvas. Jake nodded encouragingly. “See? You're doing great.” As the minutes passed(状从), Layla's strokes became bolder and more confident. She began to paint a beautiful landscape with a bright sun, green fields, and a sparkling river(并列). Jake watched in amazement as her creativity flowed(状从). As Layla's confidence grew, Jake felt a shift within himself. He realized that helping someone else find their way could be just as rewarding as focusing on his own future(心理描写，收获). The joy and pride in Layla's eyes as she finished her painting(状从的灵活位置) inspired him. He began to see that maybe his future didn't have to be figured out all at once(宾从). By taking small steps and helping others(方式状语), he could find his place in the world. From that day on, Jake continued to volunteer at the community center, not just to distract himself from his worries, but because he had discovered a new sense of purpose. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$