内容正文:
Dictation
1. opponent 2. cheat 3. seize 4. intense 5. follow in one’s footsteps
6. set out to do 7. burst onto 8. a far cry from 9. in a row
10. be assigned to 11. go wild 12. pay off 13. give way
14. associate名词 15. remark形容词 16. cooperate名词和形容词
17. 他看着凯瑟琳,满眼忧伤。
18. 她拿着信,双手颤抖,眼睛流露出被完全遗忘的深深悲伤。
如何生动写句子
读后续写之
主讲人:米江
目录
CONTENTS
情绪模板
01-
语言模板
02-
动作模板
03-
情感升华
04-
语言表达微技能:点线面升级法
具体的某个动作
点
线
将动作进行拆解
形成一条动作链
多面立体化
动作描写
情绪描写
心理描写
语言描写
面
情绪模板
1.情绪描写+心理描写/语言描写/动作描写
adj and adj, 主+谓,非谓语
(1)Frustrated and depressed/upset, I went back home, unwilling to contribute my hard-earned cash for family expense.
沮丧又失落,我回到家,不愿意贡献辛苦挣来的工资贴补家用。
(2)__________ and __________ , we almost __________ there, __________ that the giant animal would destroy our whole fence and bite us fiercely.
又慌张又害怕,我们愣在那里,害怕这个巨型动物会毁了我们的整个篱笆狠狠咬我们一口。
(3)__________ and __________ , Jane __________ near a stone, __________ her family at a distance.
又累又怕,Jane靠着一块石头躺下了,好想念远方的家。
Alarmed
panicked
froze
fearing
Exhausted
scared
lay down
missing
情绪模板
1.情绪描写+心理描写/语言描写/动作描写
With+adj.+n., 主+谓,(非谓语)
(1)With great curiosity and expectation, I entered the house, wondering if I could encounter my old friend。
心怀好奇和期待,我进了屋子,想知道我是不是能遇到我的老朋友。
(2)With ____________________, mom _________ that we should make full use of it and find a nice camping place.
带着兴奋的表情,妈妈坚持说我们应该好好利用帐篷。
(3)She __________with endless anxiety, and then became asleep with _______________________________.
她心里焦虑后悔万分,眼里含着泪花睡着了。
an excited look
insisted
regretted
shining tears in her eyes
情绪模板
1.情绪描写+心理描写/语言描写/动作描写
To one’s+(adj.)+n., 主+谓+... 让人…的是
(1)To her great surprise and excitement, a helicopter was flying overhead again and again. Eager and thrilled, she flagged her yellow blouse and spared no effort to yell so as to attract the rescuers’attention.
让他无比惊讶又激动的是,一架直升机在上空来回盘旋。焦急又激动,她用力挥舞黄色的衬衣,拼劲全力的吸引救援者们的关注。
(2)___________________, my friend was nowhere in the house.
令我惊讶的是,我的朋友在房子里无处可去。
(3)___________________, the furious bear succeeded in escaping the spay and tried best to tear down the fence with his massive paws.
令我们失望的是,愤怒的熊成功地逃脱了绝育,并尽力用他巨大的爪子推倒篱笆。
To my great surprise
To our disappointment
语言模板
1.语言中
语言对话模版: 直接引语短平快,间接引语双宾从出精彩,“说”字后置并替换, 转述非谓语 expressing/suggesting/explaining...
(1)“Our budget is tight,” sighed Mom. “Never mind”, Dad comforted mom, suggesting/expressing that he would do some extra work for family expense and I could spend my money on my football shoes and clothes.
(困难?支持鼓励!升级叠加)“家里太紧张了,“妈妈叹了口气。“别担心,”爸爸安慰妈妈,建议说他会多做些工作贴补家用,让我用自己的钱买喜欢的鞋和衣服。
语言模板
1.语言中
(2)“Oh, I forgot the pillows!” ___________ mom. With ______________________ on his face, dad ___________ that we sleep in the tent without pillows for a night and perhaps we could have an unforgettable night. (语言描写+情绪描写)
“哎呀!我忘记带枕头了!”妈妈尖叫了一声。脸上带着安慰的微笑,爸爸建议说我们就不用枕头在帐篷里睡就可以啦,可能我们还会有难忘的体验。
(3)“What’s wrong, boys?” ___________ Dad. With _______________, they __________ their intention and trouble in making breakfast for their mother.
“怎么啦,孩子们?”爸爸好奇的问。低着头,孩子们解释了自己的用意和给妈妈做早饭时遇到的麻烦。
screamed
a comforting smile
suggested
wondered
lowed heads
expressed
语言模板
2.语言后
语言后: 非谓语,主+谓
(1)Having heard what my parents said, I was lost in thought and had a new decision.
听完父母的话,我陷入和深思,有了新的决定。
(2)________________ their explanation,their father didn’t blame them, but offered to help.
听完他们的解释,他们不但没责备他们,反而主动提出帮助。
Having heard
动作模板
两动作/三动作连动 did, did and did
(1)The next day, I went to my parents’room, handed Dad my hard-earned cash, and expressed that I would like to contribute my pay to family expenses.
第二天,我走到父母的屋子里,交给了父母我辛苦挣的工资,表达说愿意为家里做贡献。
(2)He _________ some medicine to the burn, ________ cleaned up the mess ______________to teach the twins how to cook.
他给孩子擦了药,帮助清理了垃圾,然后教孩子们做饭。
(3)So they _________ to the local supermarket together to make preparations for the cooking popcorn, _________ they bought a bag of corn and some special bags for popcorn.
因此,他们一起去当地超市准备烹饪爆米花,并且/在那里他们买了一袋玉米和一些特殊的爆米花袋。
applied
helped
and started
headed
and/where
动作模板
伴随状语:主+谓,非谓语
(1)Dad rushed here and held the pumpkin, trying to pull my head out of the hole.
爸爸冲到这里,抱着南瓜,试图把我的头从洞里拉出来。
(2)All night long he ____________, ___________ of the problem.
他整夜躺在床上睡不着,思考着那个问题。
(3)The master ________the umbrella and _________ the room, _________ by his lovely dog.
主人把伞关了进了屋,后面跟着他可爱的狗。
lay awake
thinking
followed
closed
entered
动作模板
总分:主+谓--主+谓(多个动词并列)/非谓语并列 /名词并列
(1)The race proved to be a huge challenge for David— he fell down, struggled to stand up and continued to move forward.
事实证明,这场比赛对David来说是一个巨大的挑战——他摔倒了,挣扎着站起来,并继续前进。
(2)They were glad to see Poppy coming back to her usual self — ________ the little dog on daily walks and even ___________ with him her favorite toys.
他们很高兴看到Poppy回到她平时的自己——每天引导小狗散步,甚至与他分享她最喜欢的玩具。(非谓语并列)
(3)We were amazed at all the gorgeous scenery and attractive sights— the ________green grass, the __________ sheep, the setting sun and the _________stars at night. (名词并列)
我们对所有华丽的风景和迷人的景点感到惊讶——无限的绿草、流浪的绵羊、夕阳和夜晚无数的星星。
guiding
wandering
sharing
limitless
countless
情感升华模板
强调句型: It was…that
(1)It was at the moment that I was moved by my Dad’s understanding and support and at the same time I was proud of myself for my wise decision.
那一刻,我被父亲的理解和支持所感动,同时我为自己的明智决定感到自豪。
(2)It was __________________ that their mother _______________ the twins and she knew that her sons has grown up (and they has learned to take the responsibility.)
就在这一刻妈妈感到很骄傲,他知道孩子们长大了(已经学会了承担责任)
(3)It was __________________ that I learned that we should not rush to succeed but at the same time I was satisfied with the happiness and fun
正是从事件中,我倾向于我们不应该急于成功,但同时我对快乐和乐趣感到满意
felt proud of
from the incident
at the moment
最终研究方法
写作前要做的事情
1. 看段落两句,带着问题阅读原文
2. 确定中心
3 分析原文情节和情感两条线
4. 构建情节(五五拍戏法)
5. 根据中文情节确定英文续写(在旁边标记:这句中文情节我可以用情绪描写+动作描写,然后落实到具体句型)
6.检查时态,人称,连贯,拼写等问题
最终研究方法
评价标准
评分档次 第一项 第二项 第三项 第四项
第五档
(21-25分) 与所给短文融洽度高,与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理。 内容丰富 所使用语法结构和词汇丰富准确,可能有些许错误,但完全不影响意义的表达。 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分,使所续写短文结构紧凑。
第四档
(16-20分) 与所给短文融洽度高,与所提供各段落开头语衔接较合理。 内容比较丰富 所使用语法结构和词汇较为丰富、准确,可能有些许错误,但不影响意义的表达。 比较有效地使用了语句间的连接成分,使所续写短文结构紧凑。
第三档
(11-15分) 与所给短文关系较为密切,与所提供各段落开头语有一定程度衔接 写出了若干有关内容 应用的语法结构和词汇能够满足任务的要求,虽有一些错误,但不影响意义表达。 应用简单的语句连接成分,使所续写的短文结构紧凑。
第二档
(6-10分) 与所给短文有一定关系,与所提供各段落开头语有一定衔接。 写出了少数相关内容 语法结构单调,应用词汇有限,有些语法结构与词汇错误,影响了意义的表达。 较少使用语句间的连接成分,全文内容缺少连贯性。
第一档
(1-5分) 与所提供短文和开头语的衔接较差。 产出内容过少 语法结构单调,词汇很少,有较多语法结构和词汇方面的错误,严重影响了意义的表达。 缺乏语句间的连接成分,全文内容不连贯
三要:1. 不仅要内容语言一致;2. 而且要情节曲折;3. 最后要正能量满满。
六不要:1. 尽量不新增人物;2. 不用过多对话;3. 不要负能量结局;
4. 不要文末设悬念;5. 不偏离主题;6. 不违背逻辑常理。
最终研究方法
作业
1. 完成续写作业
福利:先交给我的两名同学可以获得AI 润色改写服务(如多人同时交优先选择书写好的同学)
2. 明天听写U4+续写9-11
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