2025届高考英语复习读后续写练习：自闭症弟弟引来的意外善意 课件

高考英语读后续写语篇练习 自闭症弟弟引来的意外善意 1 王 均艳 (王) - 题目分析 读后续写 题目再现 范文呈现 努力方向 2 2 Part 1 题目呈现 3 3 续写原文 I’m used to people staring at me: Strange looks because of the strange sounds my brother makes. Public places have been difficult places for my family to deal with ever since Myles was diagnosed with autism (诊断为自闭症) at the age of two. I built a wall around my heart, a shell to protect my weakest parts from other people’s opinions about my family. It hurt too much when they didn’t understand, so I told myself it didn’t matter. So when I found myself at a restaurant with my brother, who started screaming and hitting the table, I looked up with cautious eyes at the middle-aged woman approaching. Her face was perfectly peaceful as she assessed the situation at the table with my brother and me. I readied my comeback. If she had a complaint about my brother’s behavior, I was prepared to pull the trigger and give her the piece of my mind I had held onto before. 4 4 续写原文 “Hi, how are you doing?” she asked, her tone kind, her eyes steady. “I’m fine,” I said carefully. “I hope you don’t mind me asking,” she continued. “But does your brother have autism?” I was surprised. “Yeah, he has autism,” I replied to the lady, who was waiting patiently. “Well, I raised a child with autism,” she began. Great. Now she really felt like she could tell me how to take care of my brother. I didn’t want to hear it. “I know you don’t know me, but my name is Pam,” she said, reaching to touch Myles’ shoulder. “Like I said, I raised a child with autism, and if you ever need any help, please call me.” I looked at the hand she offered, holding a piece of paper with her name and number on it. “I can help you,” she said. “If you ever want me to watch him for you. Give you guys a break.” 5 5 段首句 Paragraph 1: I couldn’t speak because I got emotional and was about to cry. Paragraph 2: I did call her, and she became as close as family and taught us a lot. 6 6 Part 2 题目分析 7 7 续写原文分析 8 文章讲述了一个因自闭症而面临困扰的家庭故事。作者弟弟迈尔斯两岁确诊自闭症后，公共场所对他们一家充满艰难，旁人异样目光让作者内心筑起防御之墙。一次在餐厅，迈尔斯突然尖叫拍桌，作者正防备他人指责时，一位中年女士帕姆走来。她不仅未指责，还称自己也抚养过自闭症孩子，并主动提供帮助，留下联系方式。这意外的善意深深触动作者，后来作者联系帕姆，她成为家庭亲密一员，给予诸多帮助。 8 点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语； 点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句； 点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语； 点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。 情节构建的重点 9 9 续写思路分析 Paragraph 1: I couldn’t speak because I got emotional and was about to cry. 自从弟弟迈尔斯被诊断为自闭症，每次身处公共场所，异样的目光就如芒在背。那天在餐厅，弟弟突然失控，尖叫着用力拍打桌子。我心中一紧，下意识挺直脊背，警惕地看着周围，那些投来的目光仿佛带着刺，让我做好了迎接指责的准备。我深知，在别人眼中，弟弟的行为是如此怪异，而我，必须像个战士一样守护家人。每一次这样的场景，都像一场战斗，让我疲惫又无奈。 10 10 续写思路分析 Paragraph 2: I did call her, and she became as close as family and taught us a lot. 就在我满心防备时，一位中年女士缓缓走来。她脸上带着平和的微笑，眼神里没有丝毫嫌弃。我有些诧异，不知她意欲何为。她轻声询问弟弟是否患有自闭症，我犹豫着承认后，她竟说自己也抚养过自闭症孩子，还主动递上写有联系方式的纸条，表示愿意帮忙照顾弟弟，给我们一家喘息机会。那一刻，我心中的防备之墙轰然倒塌，泪水在眼眶中打转，这突如其来的善意，如冬日暖阳，温暖了我长久以来冰冷的心。 11 11 Part 3 范文呈现 12 12 范文呈现 Ever since my brother Myles was diagnosed with autism, public places have been a source of great distress for our family. That day in the restaurant, Myles suddenly started screaming and hitting the table violently. I felt a surge of panic. I looked around warily, expecting the usual judgmental looks and possible complaints. I was mentally bracing myself for the worst, ready to defend my brother and family at any cost. The atmosphere in the restaurant seemed to freeze, with everyone's eyes fixed on us, making me feel extremely uncomfortable. 13 13 范文呈现 Just as I was on the verge of an outburst, a middle - aged woman approached. Her face was calm and kind. She asked me softly if my brother had autism. Surprised, I replied affirmatively. Then, to my astonishment, she said that she had raised a child with autism herself. She took out a piece of paper with her name and number on it and offered to help. She said she could watch my brother to give our family a break. I was completely taken aback by this unexpected kindness. I stared at her, unable to believe what I was hearing. 14 14 升级版范文呈现 Ever since my brother Myles was diagnosed with autism, public places have been nothing but a nightmare for our family. That day in the restaurant, Myles suddenly erupted into a fit of screaming and violent table - hitting. Instantly, I tensed up, my eyes scanning the surroundings warily. The eyes fixed on us, filled with curiosity and often judgment, made me feel like a cornered animal, ready to fight back. It was as if the whole world was against us, and I was determined to protect my family at all costs. 15 15 升级版范文呈现 Just when I was on the verge of losing my temper, a middle - aged woman, whose face was adorned with a warm and kind smile, approached. Softly, she inquired if my brother had autism. Surprised beyond words, I nodded. What followed left me completely stunned. She revealed that she, too, had raised a child with autism and, with a gentle gesture, handed me a piece of paper with her contact information, offering to watch my brother to relieve our family. Never had I expected such unexpected kindness, which melted the ice - cold wall I had built around my heart. 16 16 Part 4 努力方向 17 17 高级结构 名词性从句 高级结构 三连动 虚拟语气 形容词做状语 无灵主语 18 定语从句 状语从句 （包含倒装句） 强调句 副词做状语 非谓语 （包括独立主格） 18 19 Thank you! $$