Unit 4 Period 8 Writing—Continuing a sci-fi story （课件）-【步步高】2023-2024学年高二英语选择性必修第三册（外研版2019）

Period 8 Writing—Continuing a sci-fi story Unit 4 A glimpse of the future 细读文本 写作指导 写作实践 细读 文本 3 Read the story on P62 and choose the best answer. 1.What is responsible for the escape of the prisoner according to Carolyn? A.The faulty robots and poor maintaining. B.The poor management of the company. C.It was just a small error which happened accidentally. D.Carolyn left her emergency call device behind. Activity 1　Read for some details √ 2.What’s Carolyn’s attitude towards their prison? A.Doubtful and worried. B.Supportive and worried. C.Confident and positive. D.Indifferent and doubtful. √ Setting At home，Todd informed his wife Carolyn of the news：1.“_________________________”. Plot The old facility and 2.________________ caused the prison breakout and the couple discussed the 3.________________ of robots. Ending Carolyn went to work and she forgot to take her 4.__________ ___________. Ⅰ.Read the story on P62 and finish the task. Activity 2　Read for the structure Another prison breakout faulty robotics potential risks emergency call device Ⅱ.According to the story we can learn when continuing a story，we can use the following outline.(写作模板) P1 the beginning of the story，the setting P2 the development and highlights of the story P3 ending 1.Please find out the sentence that is used to describe feelings. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 2.Please find out the sentence that is used to describe comparison. ______________________________________________________________ 3.Please find out the sentence that is used to describe actions in a hurry. ______________________________________________________________ Activity 3　Read for some good sentences 返 回 Todd cried out in shock and waved his arm at the pale blue screen hovering above the breakfast table. That place isn’t as advanced as ours. She grabbed her bag from the kitchen counter and rushed out of the door. 写作 指导 9 本单元的写作任务是续写科幻故事。故事一般有环境、人物、情节以及文学的艺术性。在体裁上属于记叙文，情节的发展多以时间、地点的转移为线索。写故事时，要展开丰富的想象，适当构思情节，并把故事情节写得生动有趣，同时要合乎逻辑。此外，续写时，要注意续写内容和原文的衔接。续写部分必须忠于原文的中心、内容与形式。 一、篇章结构 第一部分为故事的开始，交代故事的背景； 第二部分叙述故事的发展和高潮； 第三部分为故事的结局。 二、注意事项 1.谓语动词多用一般过去时，但是要根据具体情况使用其他时态。 2.正文需要注意： (1)精读原文，确定线索 阅读是写作的根基，没有充分的阅读，写作是很难出彩的。读懂内容是续写的基础，找到该文章是以时间还是空间为线索，有利于考生“顺藤摸瓜”，这样续写才会有根有据，情节发展才会合情合理。在读的过程中要留意人物的语言、动作、神态、外貌和心理等细节描写，以细节描写为伏笔；要留意文中反复出现或重点描写的特定物品，以特定物品为伏笔；要留意续写部分的段首句，以续写段首句为伏笔。 (2)仔细审题，明确续写要求 考生要立足段首句分析，合理构思情节，才能帮助自己理清思路，续写出符合逻辑且结构紧凑的故事。虽然续写鼓励情节的创造性，但创意须合理，故事应体现积极的情感态度和价值观。 (3)回扣原文，制定续写思路 在开展续写之前，考生应考虑如何将段首句等提示信息转化为搭建读后续写的支架，站在原文作者的角度去理解文本含义，找到隐含线索，逐步培养自觉模仿语言和创造内容的意识。 [常用表达] 1.表情感或心理活动的句式 All the frustration and stress that had been building up inside of me came to a complete stop. Seeing her condition，I immediately felt a huge surge of sympathy for her. 2.表动作或事件的句式 It was the patient’s dangerous condition that cost the doctors and nurses a sleepless night. His rising fortune fueled a growing appetite for a lavish living. 3.评价人物或事件的句式 Face the past with the least regret，face the present with the least waste and face the future with the most dreams. 返 回 写作 实践 16 阅读课本第62页的材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Carolyn had a long commute to the prison，even by aircar.________ ______________________________________________________________ Shocked，Carolyn hurriedly opened her bag and reached for her emergency call device.___________________________________________ ______________________________________________________________ 第一步　获取原文基本信息 1.故事要素 Who→Carolyn，Todd When→In the morning before going to work Where→At home What→The husband，Todd，was informing Carolyn of some morning news about another prison breakout caused by the faulty robots. 2.故事情节 Todd的妻子Carolyn是一所监狱的管理者，其监狱的看守都是机器人。丈夫一大早就看到了又一所监狱因为机器人出故障导致犯人越狱的新闻，并对妻子的监狱表示担心。但是妻子很自信地认为自己管理的监狱非常先进，机器人看守也定期被检修，所以不会出问题。然后吃过饭便去上班了，但是却把工作中使用的紧急呼叫设备落到家里了。 第二步　提取情节发展线索 第一段开头是“Carolyn坐飞行汽车花了很长时间到达监狱”。由此可知，本段接下来会涉及Carolyn到达监狱后看到的一些情况，又根据第二段的开头“Carolyn非常震惊，赶紧打开包，伸手去拿她的紧急呼叫设备”以及原文的暗示，可知第一段一定是发生了什么不好的事情——机器人出故障，监狱即将出现越狱现象。原文中提到，紧急呼叫设备被落在了家里，所以Todd会出现在第二段中向其提供帮助。根据续写的原则“故事要有正向、积极的结尾”，问题应该是得到了圆满解决。 第三步　理清情节发展脉络 第一段：来到监狱→看似一切正常→突然发现异常→异常状况描写→寻求帮助 第二段：发现没带应急设备→惊慌害怕→Todd来送设备并带着警察出现→问题得到圆满解决 第四步　审题定调 1.确定人称：本文的主要人称为第三人称。 2.确定时态：由于本文是记叙类文章，且发生在过去，所以时态以一般过去时为主。 第五步　列出要点提纲 Paragraph 1：arrived at the prison→everything seemed normal→a loud alarm sounded→all robots were out of control→prisoners rushed out to freedom Paragraph 2：sought for her emergency call device→realized that she had left it at home→her husband came with police→the trouble was solved 第六步　组句成篇 [参考范文] Carolyn had a long commute to the prison，even by aircar.When she arrived，everything seemed normal except for a motionless robot lying at the front gate.She passed through the gate，noticing that everything else was apparently in order.But just as she closed her office door behind her，a loud alarm sounded，which meant a general system failure.She looked out of the reinforced glass of her office window into the prison below and found that all robots were out of control.Most had stopped moving at all.But some were randomly operating the cell gates.She could see excited prisoners rush out to freedom. Shocked，Carolyn hurriedly opened her bag and reached for her emergency call device.But soon，she realized that she had left it at home.Without the device，she couldn’t ask the police for help.At that time，the door burst open，and the room was suddenly flooded with armed police as well as her husband Todd，who briefly explained that he had come to bring her the emergency call device and activated it to call in the police when he saw there was trouble.“Thank goodness.But for your help，I can’t imagine what would happen，”said Carolyn.The husband hugged Carolyn and winked，“You see，even the most advanced and regularly-maintained robots can break down.” 返 回 $$