内容正文:
Unit 4 I used to be afraid of the dark
【写作目标】
能用本单元所学的语言知识来描写自己或他人与过去相比所发生的一些变化。
【 基 础 写 作 】
假如你校英文网Change 专栏正面向全校学生征稿,题目为 How I have changed! 请你根据以下提示,写一篇100词左右的英语短文介绍你的变化,然后向该专栏投稿。
Step 1审题列提纲
文体:说明文
人称:第一人称为主
时态:一般过去时(可用本单元的used to结构)和一般现在时
内容:关于自己的外貌、性格、爱好、习惯、学习等方面的变化,可详细介绍一个最重要的变化。
Step 3 有用表达
短语提炼
used to be:过去常常(表示过去的状态或习惯)
fall in love with:爱上(某事物)
from time to time:时不时地
Thanks to:多亏了(表示原因或感激)
take up:开始从事(某项活动或工作)
build a strong body:强身健体
make a speech in public:在公众面前演讲
spend more time:花更多时间
be absent from:缺席(某课程或活动)
the most important change:最重要的变化
句型提炼
主语 + has/have changed a lot + 时间段(表示某人在某段时间内发生了很大变化)
I used to be + 过去的状态, but now I’m + 现在的状态(表示过去与现在的对比)
Thanks to + 某人的建议/帮助, 主语 + started to + 动词原形 + 目的(表示因为某人的建议或帮助而开始某项活动)
Slowly + 主语 + fall in love with + 某事物, and now + 主语 + spend + 时间 + on it(表示逐渐爱上某事物并投入大量时间)
I think + 宾语从句(表示个人观点或看法)
Step 4 连词成句
How I have changed !
My life has changed a lot in the last few years.I used to be short and weak, but now I’m tall and strong. I used to be shy and quiet, but now I dare to make a speech in public. I used to dislike reading, but now I spend more time reading different kinds of books.
The biggest change in my life is that I become interested in P.E.. When I was in Grade 7, I used to hate P.E. and I used to be absent from P.E. classes. As a result, I used to be ill from time to time.Thanks to my friend Peter's advice, I started to take up exercise to build a strong body. He often invited me to play basketball with him and encouraged me to practice more.
Slowly I fall in love with it and now I spend a lot of time on it. It has made me strong and happy. I think this is the most important change in my life.
范文分析
用词分析
1. 简洁明了:文章使用了大量简单易懂的词汇,如“short and weak”(短小虚弱)、“shy and quiet”(害羞安静)、“dare to make a speech”(敢于演讲)等,这些词汇直接描绘了作者过去和现在的对比,易于读者理解。
2. 对比强烈:作者通过“used to be”和“now”的对比,如“I used to be short and weak, but now I’m tall and strong.”,强烈地突出了自己的变化,使文章更加生动有力。
3. 具体细节:在描述对体育态度的变化时,作者提到了具体的年级(Grade 7)、具体的活动(play basketball)和具体的结果(build a strong body),这些细节增加了文章的真实性和可信度。
逻辑分析
1. 总分结构:文章开篇即点明主题“My life has changed a lot in the last few years.”,随后分点描述自己的变化,包括身体、性格和兴趣方面的变化,最后总结最大的变化是对体育的兴趣,形成了清晰的总分结构。
2. 因果关系:作者在描述对体育态度的变化时,明确指出了原因(Thanks to my friend Peter's advice)和结果(I started to take up exercise to build a strong body. It has made me strong and happy.),这种因果关系使文章的逻辑更加严密。
3. 时间顺序:文章按照时间顺序描述了作者的变化,从过去到现在,这种顺序使文章条理清晰,易于读者跟随作者的思路。
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