2025届高考英语复习读后续写练习：老人的馈赠：一场心灵的转变 课件

高考英语读后续写语篇练习 老人的馈赠：一场心灵的转变 1 王 均艳 (王) - 题目分析 读后续写 题目再现 范文呈现 努力方向 2 2 Part 1 题目呈现 3 3 续写原文 A Change of Heart It was one of those days, an ordinary October day. I woke up feeling tired of all of the housework. I wasn’t feeling any sense of thankfulness for my comfortable home or lovely family, I dropped my two older children at school with a sense of relief and unwillingly headed to the supermarket to buy groceries with my youngest. I was feeling bad at having to go in the first place (why do they have to eat? ) and my son, just four years old at the time, responding to my feelings, was being difficult. I raced around with the trolley (手推车) , thoughtlessly throwing items in with no regard to cost, while trying to control my naughty (调皮的) boy whose behavior now was completely out of control. Yes, I was that mother, shouting, threatening, at a small child, the kind of behavior you see in others before you have children and think, I will never be one of those people. 4 4 续写原文 We eventually made it to the checkout, and stood in the queue waiting our turn. After a short time, I noticed that someone had joined the line behind us. I turned around and saw an old man. He was bent over and wore a dirty overcoat, tied around the middle with rope. His shoes were worn out and his trousers hung around sockless ankles on this cold, wet day. In his hands he carried a small bottle of long-life milk. 5 5 续写原文 As I had a trolley full of groceries, I asked him if he’d like to go ahead of me. It wasn’t an act of kindness on my part, but rather an automatic (无意识的) reaction, rooted in me since childhood from the time I went shopping with my mother. Perhaps I just did it out of a sense of responsibility or guilt. Perhaps I just wanted him gone. After all, his presence made me uncomfortable, in the same way I feel uncomfortable and look away when passing a homeless person. He looked shocked and uncertain. “No, I couldn’t possibly. Are you sure?” “How kind of you!” he said. Hesitantly, he went ahead, paid for his milk, and took his change. 6 6 段首句 Paragraph 1： Then, to my amazement, he turned to my little boy and gently pressed the change into his hand. Paragraph 2： Waving back to him, with my young son by my side, I felt a change of heart. 7 7 Part 2 题目分析 8 8 续写原文分析 9 在一个普通的十月天，“我” 因厌倦家务，带着烦躁情绪去超市购物，四岁的儿子也调皮捣蛋，让 “我” 更加心烦。在超市排队结账时，“我” 看到身后有个穿着破旧的老人，出于习惯或某种复杂心理，“我” 让老人先结账。老人买完牛奶后，做出了令人惊讶的举动，这一举动让 “我” 的内心发生了改变。 9 点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语； 点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句； 点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语； 点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。 情节构建的重点 10 10 续写思路分析 Para 1： Then, to my amazement, he turned to my little boy and gently pressed the change into his hand. 接着，令我惊讶不已的是，他转向我的小男孩，轻轻地把零钱塞到他手里。他脸上带着和蔼的笑容，眼神中满是慈爱，轻声说道：“拿着，小家伙，去给自己买个糖果吧。” 我儿子先是一愣，随即眼睛里闪烁着惊喜的光芒，开心地大声说道：“谢谢您，爷爷！” 那一刻，我仿佛被一道电流击中，整个人都愣住了。我本以为老人会默默离开，没想到他竟如此慷慨地对待我的儿子。看着儿子纯真的笑容，再看看老人那朴素甚至有些寒酸的模样，我心中涌起一阵强烈的愧疚感。我开始反思自己之前对老人的嫌弃与偏见，仅仅因为他的外表就心生厌恶，实在是太不应该了。 11 11 续写思路分析 Para 2： Waving back to him, with my young son by my side, I felt a change of heart. 我和年幼的儿子一起向他挥手告别，那一刻，我感觉自己的内心发生了变化。望着老人渐渐远去的背影，他那略显佝偻的身躯在我眼中却仿佛变得高大起来。我心中满是羞愧，为自己之前肤浅的判断而自责。同时，我也对老人充满了感激，是他用这无声的举动给我上了一课。我意识到，不能以貌取人，每个人都有自己的尊严和善良。从那以后，我决定改变自己，珍惜生活中的点滴，以更友善、包容的心态去对待身边的每一个人，不再让偏见蒙蔽自己的双眼。 12 12 Part 3 范文呈现 13 13 范文呈现 Then, to my amazement, he turned to my little boy and gently pressed the change into his hand. With a kind smile on his face and affection in his eyes, he said softly, "Here, little fellow. Buy yourself a treat." My son was startled at first, and then his eyes sparkled with surprise. He exclaimed happily, "Thank you, sir!" At that moment, I was completely stunned. I had thought the old man would just leave after paying for his milk. However, he showed such generosity to my son. Looking at my son's innocent smile and the old man's shabby appearance, a strong sense of guilt welled up in me. I began to reflect on my previous dislike and prejudice towards the old man. It was really wrong of me to judge him just by his appearance. 14 14 范文呈现 Waving back to him, with my young son by my side, I felt a change of heart. As I watched the old man walking away, his hunched back gradually disappearing from my sight, I was filled with shame. I was ashamed of my previous shallow judgment. Meanwhile, I was deeply grateful to the old man. It was he who taught me a lesson with his silent act. I realized that we shouldn't judge people by their appearance. Everyone has their own dignity and kindness. From then on, I decided to change myself. I would cherish every bit in life and treat everyone around me with more kindness and tolerance, no longer letting prejudice blind my eyes. 15 15 升级版范文呈现 hen, to my amazement, he turned to my little boy and gently pressed the change into his hand. His face adorned with a kind smile and eyes brimming with affection, he murmured softly, "Here, little chap. Go get yourself a sweet." My son, initially taken aback, had his eyes instantly light up. "Thank you, sir!" he cried out merrily. At that instant, I was rendered speechless, rooted to the spot. Having assumed the old man would depart after purchasing his milk, I was completely caught off - guard by his generosity towards my son. Gazing at my son's innocent smile and the old man's tattered appearance, a wave of guilt washed over me. How wrong I had been to judge him merely by his exterior! 16 16 升级版范文呈现 Waving back to him, with my young son by my side, I felt a change of heart. As the old man's hunched figure faded into the distance, I was consumed by shame. Ashamed of my previous shallow judgment, I also felt a deep sense of gratitude towards him. It was he who, with his wordless act, imparted a valuable lesson to me. I came to realize that one should never judge a book by its cover; everyone harbors their own dignity and kindness. From that moment on, I resolved to transform myself, cherishing every aspect of life and treating others with greater kindness and tolerance, determined never again to let prejudice cloud my vision. 17 17 Part 4 努力方向 18 18 高级结构 名词性从句 高级结构 三连动 虚拟语气 形容词做状语 无灵主语 19 定语从句 状语从句 （包含倒装句） 强调句 副词做状语 非谓语 （包括独立主格） 19 20 Thank you! $$