2025届高三英语一轮复习读后续写练习：老师助力，点亮黛比一家的希望 课件

高考英语读后续写语篇练习 老师助力，点亮黛比一家的希望 1 王 均艳 (王) - 题目分析 读后续写 题目再现 范文呈现 努力方向 2 2 Part 1 题目呈现 3 3 续写原文 Every morning, Miss Martin liked to come into school early and get her classroom ready for her second graders. Then she’d walk to the front gate and see them arrive—many on the school bus, others with their parents. Miss Martin would lead her students into the classroom and the day would begin. But then she started noticing that one of her favorite students, a particularly bright little girl called Debbie McKay, always arrived late and alone. Miss Martin asked Debbie why she was always late. But the little girl looked frightened and embarrassed, so Miss Martin decided to contact her parents. 4 4 续写原文 She called Debbie’s mom, then her dad, but there was no answer. She saw the girl arrive at school on foot two more times and noticed that she devoured (狼吞虎咽地吃) her school lunch, and put some bread rolls into her pockets. The child was obviously going hungry. Something was going on, and Miss Martin decided it was time to take action. First, she spoke to the headmaster. “Mrs. Dalton, I think Debbie is definitely neglected. We need to help her!” she said. Mrs. Dalton agreed and decided to ask Miss Martin to trail the little girl home after school, and what she discovered left her in tears. After school, Miss Martin saw Debbie walk three blocks and head for a shabby house. She opened the broken door and went in and Miss Martin screctly followed her into the house. Lying on the old bed was a pale thin man, Mr. McKay, and Debbie was feeding him a bread roll and giving him a carton of milk to drink from. 5 5 续写原文 Suddenly, Debbie saw Miss Martin looking into the shabby house and screamed. Miss Martin immediately tried to calm her down. “Please don’t be scared, Debbie. I’m here to help you.” She approached the man and saw that he was burning up with fever. “Debbie,” she said gently, “I’m going to get your daddy to a hospital, OK? Then the doctors can help him.” 6 6 段首句 Paragraph 1： Debbie was shaking and kept crying. Paragraph 2： Then Miss Martin started a post in GoFundMe page. 7 7 Part 2 题目分析 8 8 续写原文分析 9 马丁小姐每天会提前准备教室迎接二年级学生。她注意到黛比・麦凯总是独自且迟到到校，询问时黛比表现惊恐。马丁小姐联系黛比父母无果，又发现她在学校狼吞虎咽还藏食物，判断她被忽视。在校长同意下，马丁小姐跟踪黛比回家，发现她父亲病卧在床，黛比在照顾他。看到马丁小姐，黛比惊恐尖叫，马丁小姐表示会帮忙。 9 点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语； 点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句； 点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语； 点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。 情节构建的重点 10 10 续写思路分析 Para 1：Debbie was shaking and kept crying. 黛比浑身颤抖，泪水止不住地流。马丁小姐心疼极了，她紧紧抱住黛比，轻声安慰：“宝贝，别怕，老师是来帮你和爸爸的。” 马丁小姐一边抚摸着黛比的头发，一边耐心解释，告诉她自己是真心想伸出援手。慢慢地，黛比的哭声变小了。马丁小姐迅速拨打了急救电话和社会服务部门的电话。等待过程中，她一直紧紧握着黛比的手，给予她力量。救护车来了，医护人员将黛比的父亲抬上车，黛比犹豫着也上了车。马丁小姐跟在旁边，告诉黛比：“老师会陪着你，别担心。” 到了医院，马丁小姐跑前跑后，帮着办理各种手续，让黛比在一旁安心等待。 11 11 续写思路分析 Para 2： Then Miss Martin started a post in GoFundMe page. 之后，马丁小姐在 GoFundMe 页面发布了一则求助信息。她详细讲述了黛比的遭遇，强调这个小女孩独自照顾生病父亲的坚强，以及他们家庭面临的困境。“黛比那么勇敢，却承受着不该承受的苦难，我们一起帮她度过难关吧。” 这则信息引发了广泛关注，许多爱心人士纷纷伸出援手，捐款如雪花般飞来。有了这些资金，黛比父亲的治疗费用得到解决，病情逐渐好转。黛比也不再为生活担忧，能安心学习。马丁小姐还时常去看望他们，黛比一家的生活慢慢步入正轨，充满了希望。 12 12 Part 3 范文呈现 13 13 范文呈现 Debbie was shaking and kept crying. Miss Martin held her close and soothed her, saying, "Don't be afraid, Debbie. I'm here to help you and your dad. I just want to make things better for you." She patiently explained her intention, trying to ease Debbie's fear. Gradually, Debbie calmed down. Miss Martin wasted no time in calling an ambulance and social services. While waiting, she never let go of Debbie's hand, offering her comfort and security. When the ambulance arrived, the paramedics carried Mr. McKay to the vehicle. Debbie, still hesitant, got in as well. Miss Martin followed closely, saying, "I'll be with you all the way." At the hospital, Miss Martin busied herself with handling various procedures, making sure Debbie could wait in peace. 14 14 范文呈现 Then Miss Martin started a post in GoFundMe page. She described Debbie's story in detail, highlighting the little girl's strength in taking care of her sick father alone and the difficulties their family was facing. "Debbie is so brave, but she shouldn't bear all these hardships alone. Let's join hands to help her out." The post caught the attention of many people. Before long, donations from kind - hearted individuals poured in. With the money, Mr. McKay's medical expenses were covered, and his condition gradually improved. Debbie no longer worried about life and could focus on her study. Miss Martin often visited them. Slowly, Debbie's family life returned to normal, full of hope. 15 15 升级版范文呈现 Debbie was shaking and kept crying. With a gentle embrace, Miss Martin tried to comfort the terrified girl, murmuring, "There's nothing to fear, Debbie. I'm here to bring you and your father relief. My only aim is to make your world a better place." Patiently, she elaborated on her intentions, hoping to dispel Debbie's anxiety. Gradually, Debbie's tremors subsided and her sobs quietened. Without delay, Miss Martin reached for the phone, dialing the ambulance and social services. Throughout the wait, her grip on Debbie's hand remained firm, offering a lifeline of reassurance. When the ambulance screeched to a halt, the paramedics carefully transferred Mr. McKay. Debbie, still hesitant, climbed aboard. Miss Martin trailed closely behind, vowing, "I'll stand by you every step of the way." At the hospital, it was Miss Martin who scurried around, handling the red - tape, ensuring Debbie could wait without a care. 16 16 升级版范文呈现 Then Miss Martin started a post in GoFundMe page. In great detail, she chronicled Debbie's ordeal, spotlighting the girl's remarkable courage in single - handedly caring for her ailing father and the formidable challenges their family faced. "Debbie, a paragon of bravery, should not shoulder these burdens alone. Let us unite and be the beacon of hope she needs." The post spread like wildfire, drawing the attention of numerous compassionate souls. Soon, donations from across the community flooded in. Thanks to this outpouring of generosity, Mr. McKay's medical bills were settled, and his health steadily improved. Debbie, freed from the shackles of worry, could now immerse herself in her studies. Miss Martin, a constant presence, frequently visited them. Step by step, Debbie's family life was mended, brimming with hope once again. 17 17 Part 4 努力方向 18 18 高级结构 名词性从句 高级结构 三连动 虚拟语气 形容词做状语 无灵主语 19 定语从句 状语从句 （包含倒装句） 强调句 副词做状语 非谓语 （包括独立主格） 19 20 Thank you! $$