2025届高考英语复习读后续写练习：列车上的温暖：陌生人的善意 课件

高考英语读后续写语篇练习 列车上的温暖：陌生人的善意 1 王 均艳 (王) - 题目分析 读后续写 题目再现 范文呈现 努力方向 2 2 Part 1 题目呈现 3 3 续写原文 At a noisy train station, a young couple boarded a train with their one-year-old son. The child, already battling a fever at home, was further unsettled by the motion of the train and the unfamiliar environment. His discomfort made him cry loudly. The noise filled the carriage (客车厢), breaking the quietness that most travelers had found in their books or the peaceful landscape passing by the windows. Among the passengers was a businessman, seated next to the family, who had been looking forward to a peaceful rest to make up for a sleepless night. The child’s continuous crying disrupted (打乱) his plans, and his annoyance became obvious. 4 4 续写原文 The young mother, with an apologetic smile, tried to rock her son back to calm, softly whispering endearments into his tiny ear. The father, with a helpless look at the surrounding passengers, turned to the visibly annoyed man. “We apologize for the disturbance,” he said. “Our boy has fallen ill, and the motion of the train is not helping matters.” Upon hearing this, the businessman’s annoyance softened. He had a nephew (外甥) around the same age and understood the challenges of traveling with a sick child. His anger died away, replaced by a wave of understanding. “Don’t worry,” he replied, his voice gentle, “I can try to help.” 5 5 续写原文 He reached into his bag and took out a small wooden rattle (拨浪鼓), a gift for his own nephew. Then he offered a gentle hand to the little boy. He tried to make soft sounds with the wooden rattle, together with making funny faces, trying to distract (使分心) the child from his discomfort. To everyone’s surprise, the little boy’s tears began to stop as the rattle’s gentle sound caught his attention. Soon, he was attracted by the toy. The mother’s relief was evident as she offered a silent, heartfelt “thank you” to the man. 6 6 段首句 Paragraph 1： Then the atmosphere in the carriage began to change. Paragraph 2： With the shared care of the passengers, the little boy eventually went into a peaceful sleep. 7 7 Part 2 题目分析 8 8 续写原文分析 9 在嘈杂的火车站，一对年轻夫妇带着生病发烧的一岁儿子登上列车。孩子因火车晃动和陌生环境哭闹不止，打破了车厢的宁静。坐在旁边的一位商人原本期待能安静休息，孩子的哭声让他十分烦躁。孩子父母向商人解释并道歉后，商人想起自己的外甥，理解了他们的不易，拿出拨浪鼓逗孩子。孩子逐渐被吸引，停止哭泣。这场小小的风波，让陌生人之间的善意在车厢里流淌，传递出温暖与关怀。 9 点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语； 点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句； 点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语； 点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。 情节构建的重点 10 10 续写思路分析 Para 1： Then the atmosphere in the carriage began to change. 随后，车厢里的氛围开始转变。原本被孩子哭声弄得有些烦躁的乘客们，态度发生了一百八十度大转弯。坐在前排的一位老奶奶，从自己的包里翻出一个小热水袋，小心翼翼地递给孩子妈妈，贴心地说：“给孩子暖暖肚子，兴许能舒服些。” 还有几个小朋友，把自己心爱的零食和玩具都拿了出来，围在小宝宝身边，想要逗他开心。整个车厢里充满了欢声笑语，大家齐心协力，只为让这个生病的小宝贝能好受一点。之前的不愉快一扫而空，取而代之的是浓浓的温情。 11 11 续写思路分析 Para 2：With the shared care of the passengers, the little boy eventually went into a peaceful sleep. 在众多乘客的共同关爱下，小宝宝终于进入了甜美的梦乡。孩子妈妈轻轻地把孩子放在座位上，用毛毯仔细地裹好，生怕他着凉。她抬起头，眼里闪着泪光，向周围的乘客们一一表达感激之情。孩子爸爸也站起身，真诚地向大家道谢，他的声音微微颤抖，满是感动。商人看着这一幕，欣慰地笑了，他说：“谁都有遇到难处的时候，大家互相帮衬着，这趟旅程才更有意义。” 车厢里再次恢复了安静，但这安静中，满是人与人之间的温暖与善良。 12 12 Part 3 范文呈现 13 13 范文呈现 Then the atmosphere in the carriage began to change. Passengers who were initially annoyed by the crying baby started to show their kindness. An old lady, who was sitting in front of them, rummaged through her bag and took out a small, warm - water bottle. She handed it to the mother, saying, "This might help the baby feel better." Some children, full of enthusiasm, brought their favorite toys and candies, trying to amuse the little one. They surrounded the baby, making funny noises and showing their toys. As time went by, the once - tense atmosphere was replaced by a warm and harmonious one. Everyone was doing their best to comfort the sick child. 14 14 范文呈现 With the shared care of the passengers, the little boy eventually went into a peaceful sleep. The mother carefully laid the baby on the seat, covering him with a soft blanket. She looked around at the passengers, her eyes filled with gratitude. She expressed her sincere thanks to each one, her voice filled with emotion. The father also stood up and thanked everyone from the bottom of his heart. The businessman, who had taken the lead in helping, smiled gently and said, "We are all in this together. Helping each other makes our journey more meaningful." The carriage became quiet again, but this time, the quietness was filled with the warmth of human kindness. 15 15 升级版范文呈现 Then the atmosphere in the carriage began to change. Passengers who had been irritated by the baby's crying moments ago, now filled with compassion, sprang into action. An elderly lady, seated ahead, rummaged through her bag, retrieving a warm - water bottle, which she tenderly handed to the mother, saying, "This could ease the baby's discomfort." Some young kids, driven by enthusiasm, rushed over with their cherished toys and candies, surrounding the little one, making funny sounds and gestures to amuse him. Gradually, the once - tense air was replaced by a harmonious and warm ambience, with everyone pitching in to comfort the ailing child. 16 16 升级版范文呈现 With the shared care of the passengers, the little boy eventually went into a peaceful sleep. The mother gently laid the baby on the seat, covering him snugly with a soft blanket. Looking around, her eyes brimming with gratitude, she expressed heartfelt thanks to each passenger, her voice choked with emotion. The father, likewise, rose to his feet, sincerely thanking everyone from the bottom of his heart. The businessman, who had initiated the act of kindness, smiled gently, saying, "We're all in this together; helping one another enriches our journey." The carriage once again fell silent, yet this quietness was suffused with the warmth of human kindness. 17 17 Part 4 努力方向 18 18 高级结构 名词性从句 高级结构 三连动 虚拟语气 形容词做状语 无灵主语 19 定语从句 状语从句 （包含倒装句） 强调句 副词做状语 非谓语 （包括独立主格） 19 20 Thank you! $$