读后续写：打破偏见：一次改变一切的勇敢对话 讲义- 江苏省盐城市、南京市2024-2025学年高三上学期期末调研测试英语试题卷

盐城市、南京市2024-2025学年度第一学期期末调研测试英语试题卷 第二节（满分25分） 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 I had always been cautious around Max. He was the quiet kid in our grade, the one who sat at the back of the classroom with his hood(连衣帽) pulled low over his face. Max rarely spoke to anyone, and when he did, his words were rudely brief and often misunderstood. Rumors about him spread like wildfire--some said he got into fights after shool, others claimed he had once stolen a teacher’s wallet, I didn’t know if any of them was true, but I stayed away, just like everyone else. Then one Friday morning, Max didn’t show up to class. A low voice of curiosity spread through the room, and soon enough, theories about his absence started flying. “ He got suspended,” whispered a girl next to me. “ I heard he struck a guy outside on the swings. His usual guarded expression was gone, and replaced by something I hadn’t expected: sadness. Against my better judgement, I walked over. “ Hey,” I said awkwardly. Max looked up, surprised. “What do you want?” He gave me a strange look but said nothing. I was about to walk away when I noticed a wrinkled piece of paper in his hand, “ What’s that?” I asked. For a moment, he hesitated. Then, with a shrug, he handed it to me. It was a hospital discharge form, and the name on it wasn’t his it was his younger sister’s. I looked at him, confused. “ She’s been sick for months,” Max explained, his voice barely heard. “Yesterday was bad. My mom couldn’t leave work, so I stayed at the hospital and looked after her all night.” It hit me then how wrong we had all been about Max. The tough outward appearance, the distance--he wasn’t trying to push people away. He was carrying a weight none of us understood. 注意： 1. 续写次数应为150词左右；2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的对应位置作答。 Paragraph 1: The next Monday, Max returned, but rumors remained. Paragraph 2: From that day forward, things began to change. 第二节（满分25分） 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 I had always been cautious around Max. He was the quiet kid in our grade, the one who sat at the back of the classroom(定从) with his hood(连衣帽) pulled low over his face(with复合结构). Max rarely spoke to anyone, and when he did, his words were rudely brief and often misunderstood.(如上均是Max的性格描写) Rumors about him spread like wildfire--some said he got into fights after shool(宾从), others claimed he had once stolen a teacher’s wallet(宾从), I didn’t know if any of them was true(宾从), but I stayed away, just like everyone else. Then one Friday morning, Max didn’t show up to class. A low voice of curiosity spread through the room, and soon enough, theories about his absence started flying. “ He got suspended,” whispered a girl next to me. “ I heard he struck a guy outside on the swings(宾从). His usual guarded expression was gone, and replaced by something(非谓语动词做后置定语) I hadn’t expected: sadness(定从). Against my better judgement, I walked over(我的转变). “ Hey,” I said awkwardly. Max looked up, surprised(adj做状语). “What do you want?” He gave me a strange look but said nothing. I was about to walk away when I noticed a wrinkled piece of paper in his hand(状从), “ What’s that?” I asked. For a moment, he hesitated. Then, with a shrug, he handed it to me. It was a hospital discharge form, and the name on it wasn’t his; it was his younger sister’s. I looked at him, confused(adj做状语). “ She’s been sick for months,” Max explained, his voice barely heard(独立主格). “Yesterday was bad. My mom couldn’t leave work, so I stayed at the hospital and looked after her all night.” It hit me then how wrong we had all been about Max. The tough outward appearance, the distance--he wasn’t trying to push people away. He was carrying a weight none of us understood(定从). 注意： 1. 续写次数应为150词左右；2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的对应位置作答。 Paragraph 1: The next Monday, Max returned, but rumors remained. Paragraph 2: From that day forward, things began to change. 1. 按高考英语读后续写要求对文章进行分类 分类角度 分析内容 类型 心理成长型读后续写（体现对误解的化解与成长的主题） 构思思路 以“消除误解、建立信任”为核心，围绕主人公与同学之间的关系变化展开，逐步发展情感和冲突解决过程。 布局 第一段：Max回归课堂，传言继续；通过情节描写进一步深化对误解的呈现。第二段：叙述转折点，主人公主动接触，群体对Max逐渐改观，展现和解和成长的结果。 框架提炼 引入冲突→展示矛盾→推动转折→完成和解与成长 实施策略 结合具体情节设计情感波动，抓住关键人物心理变化，利用环境和动作描写衔接情节发展。 注意事项 承接原文线索（误解和Max的真实背景）；保持人物言行符合性格特征；使用适当的情感描写推动故事发展；注意时态和语法一致性。 巧妙设计点 通过对话和细节动作展现心理变化；设置一个“关键事件”作为转折点（如主人公主动帮助Max）；在结尾点明主题，升华情感。 2. 故事山模式分析 分析角度 内容 原文反映句 背景介绍 Max是一个孤僻的孩子，传言四起，主人公和其他人保持距离。 "Rumors about him spread like wildfire." 冲突导入 主人公发现Max的沉默背后有未被理解的痛苦，开始对其产生好奇心。 "He wasn’t trying to push people away. He was carrying a weight none of us understood." 冲突升级 Max回到学校后，传言未止，主人公主动接触，尝试为他辩解。 "The next Monday, Max returned, but rumors remained." 高潮 主人公与Max的对话逐渐被更多同学注意，大家开始理解Max的境遇，氛围逐步缓和。 未明确标出，可在续写中补充情节。 解决方案 主人公的努力让大家对Max改观，帮助他融入集体，展现成长和友情的力量。 "From that day forward, things began to change." 伏笔：Max的安静与防备、持有的医院文件 冲突点：传言与Max的实际境遇的反差 隐含线索：Max的沉默是因为责任而非冷漠 3. 推荐读后续写情景描写语料 描写类型 英文例句 动作描写 - He clenched his fists tightly, his knuckles turning white. - She fidgeted with her pen, avoiding my gaze. - He leaned against the wall, exhausted. 心理描写 - A wave of guilt washed over me as I realized my mistake. - His heart sank when he overheard the rumors. - Relief flooded through me when he smiled. 环境描写 - The classroom buzzed with whispers, an air of tension lingering. - The gray clouds outside mirrored the mood inside the room. - The sunlit corridor felt unusually quiet. 高级替换词： · 普通：sad → heartbroken, distressed · 普通：help → assist, lend a hand 4. 高中语法与词汇分析 语法现象 例句 宾语从句 "It hit me then how wrong we had all been about Max." 现在完成时 "Rumors about him have spread like wildfire." 非谓语动词 "Carrying a weight none of us understood." 积累短语与词汇： 词汇 词性 词义 近义词 反义词 例句 cautious adj. 小心的 careful, wary reckless He was cautious when approaching the new kid in class. hesitation n. 犹豫 uncertainty, doubt confidence After a brief hesitation, he agreed to the plan. shrug v./n. 耸肩（表示疑惑） gesture, motion - He simply shrugged when asked about the rumors. 5. Possible Versions Version 1: Paragraph 1:The next Monday, Max returned, but rumors remained. Whispers and sideways glances followed him like shadows, each one a reminder of how misunderstood he was(宾从). I noticed his slumped(v.掉下跌落) shoulders and the exhaustion etched(vt.镌刻，蚀刻,非谓语动词做后置定语) on his face. Summoning my courage(非谓语动词做伴随动作), I stood up during lunch break and said, "Maybe instead of judging, we should just ask Max how he’s doing(宾从)." The room fell silent as my words hung in the air(状从). Paragraph 2:From that day forward, things began to change. Slowly, the whispers died down as more people started talking to Max(状从). They learned about his sister and his struggles, and some even offered help. Max began to open up, his guarded expression replaced by tentative smiles(独立主格). By the end of the semester, Max wasn’t the "quiet kid" anymore—he was a friend. We had all learned an invaluable lesson: understanding breeds kindness. Version 2 Paragraph 1:The next Monday, Max returned, but rumors remained. The whispers about his supposed "suspension" and "aggressive behavior" only grew louder. Some students cast doubtful glances at him, while others avoided him altogether. I watched as Max sank into his seat(状从), his head bowed(独立主格), and his hands clenched into fists(独立主格). Unable to bear the unjust judgment any longer(adj短语做原因状语), I stood up and approached him during the lunch break. "Max, I think you deserve to tell your side of the story(宾从)," I said, my voice steady but kind(独立主格). Paragraph 2:From that day forward, things began to change. Encouraged by my words(非谓语动词做原因状语), Max cautiously opened up during class discussions, and his classmates slowly started to notice his intelligence and humor. I even organized a small fundraiser for his sister's medical expenses, which received an overwhelming response(定从). The barriers that once surrounded Max crumbled(定从), and he began to shine. By the end of the term, he was no longer "the quiet kid" but someone everyone respected. And I learned that a small act of kindness could change someone's entire world(宾从). 亮点得分点分析： · 高分词汇与短语：cast doubtful glances, unjust judgment, cautiously opened up, crumbled barriers · 语法加分点： · 宾语从句：I think you deserve to tell your side of the story. · 非谓语动词：Encouraged by my words, Max cautiously opened up. · 定语从句：which received an overwhelming response. Version 3： Paragraph 1: The next Monday, Max returned, but rumors remained. As soon as he entered the classroom(专供), the whispers started again, cutting through the air like knives(非谓语动词做后置定语). I noticed how his shoulders drooped and his steps hesitated(宾从) before he reached his desk. That day, during a group project, I deliberately chose to work with him. "Hey, Max, we could use your help on this one," I said casually. At first, he looked surprised, but then he nodded, a flicker of gratitude flashing in his eyes(独立主格). Paragraph 2: From that day forward, things began to change. Our group discussions gave Max the confidence to share more about his life. Gradually, the truth about his sister’s illness spread, and sympathy replaced suspicion. Inspired by his strength(非谓语动词做原因状语), I suggested that we write him a heartfelt letter of encouragement(宾从) as a class. When he read it(状从), tears welled up in his eyes. For the first time, he looked around the classroom, not as an outsider but as someone who belonged(定从). And in that moment, we all grew a little closer. 亮点得分点分析： · 高分词汇与短语：cut through the air like knives, drooped shoulders, flicker of gratitude, heartfelt letter of encouragement · 语法加分点： · 现在完成时：The truth about his sister’s illness spread. · 状语从句：When he read it, tears welled up in his eyes. · 非谓语动词：Inspired by his strength, I suggested that we write him a heartfelt letter. 较好的语料积累 短语升级替换 普通短语 升级替换 feel sad feel heartbroken look around cast a glance around help someone lend a hand to someone misunderstood misjudged, misconceived 单词同义替换 普通词 同义词 例句 kind compassionate She gave him a compassionate smile, understanding his struggles. brave courageous It was a courageous act to stand up against the rumors. 范文亮点语法与词汇分析 精选例句 Encouraged by my words, Max cautiously opened up. 2. 语法点：过去分词短语作状语 2. 替换语句：Motivated by the support he received, Max began to engage more. The barriers that once surrounded Max crumbled. 2. 语法点：定语从句 2. 替换语句：The misconceptions that isolated him gradually faded away. The whispers started again, cutting through the air like knives. 2. 语法点：现在分词短语作伴随状语 2. 替换语句：The rumors spread once more, piercing the silence like sharp arrows. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$