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个人成长类 丢手机的孩子，抓住机会成长变化 2024 学年第一学期浙南名校联盟第一次联考 高三联考 原文分析 读后续写 原文审读 多篇范文呈现 解题思路分析 读后续写可积累文本 1. 原文赏析 第二节  (满分 25分) 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Ava, a fifth-grader, longed for a cell phone like her peers but had to wait until she was thirteen. To persuade her parents, she penned an essay, demonstrating she was mature enough for a cell phone. Her parents, impressed, gave her an old phone. “Ava,” her dad said seriously, “a cell phone isn’t just for fun and games. It’s a significant responsibility. You must keep your phone secure. You must silence it in public spaces. You must...” He listed all of the ways that she had to be responsible with her phone. But Ava, too busy with choosing the perfect wallpaper, downloading apps and chatting with her best friend Sarah, only half-listened. Over the weekend, Sarah's mom took the girls to a movie. Normally Ava avoided horror films, but Sarah’s pleading words with funny memes (表情包) had somehow convinced Ava that the movie might actually be enjoyable. Before the movie started, Sarah's mom instructed the girls to silence their phone s out of respect for others. As the movie’s tension built, Ava found herself growing increasingly uncomfortable. “I need to go to the bathroom,” Ava whispered to Sarah. After the movie, while waiting for Sarah's mom to fetch the car, Ava felt a sinking feeling. “I can’t find my phone!” she shrieked, patting down all of her pockets. Panic-stricken, Ava searched her bag, yet her phone seemed to have vanished. Ava got into the car, her stomach in knots. “Are you going to tell your parents?” Sarah whispered to Ava on their ride back. Ava was silent, her mind racing with the consequences. She could envision her parents’ disappointed faces and harsh words. She feared that this incident might lead to her parents taking away the privilege of having a phone altogether As they arrived, Ava climbed out of the car and trudged home, her heart heavy with what had happened. 注意: 1. 续写词数应为150左右: 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1: The moment Ava walked in, her parents greeted her with a smile. _________________   Paragraph 2: Then her parents drove Ava back to the cinema. ______________________________ 2、 原文审读 红色定从/定语；蓝色宾从；黄色状从，从句斜体；下划线+标黄单词+斜体 为需掌握积累单词、短语；黑体标黄，非谓语；可积累部分为 embody； 注释(定语从句) 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Ava, a fifth-grader, longed for a cell phone like her peers but had to wait until she was thirteen(状从). To persuade her parents, she penned an essay, demonstrating she was mature enough for a cell phone(非谓语动词短语+宾从做伴随动作). Her parents, impressed, gave her an old phone. “Ava,” her dad said seriously, “a cell phone isn’t just for fun and games. It’s a significant responsibility. You must keep your phone secure. You must silence it in public spaces. You must...” He listed all of the ways that she had to be responsible with her phone(定语从句). But Ava, too busy with choosing the perfect wallpaper, downloading apps and chatting with her best friend Sarah, only half-listened(此处不是句子，是主语的补充说明). Over the weekend, Sarah's mom took the girls to a movie. Normally Ava avoided horror films, but Sarah’s pleading words with funny memes (表情包) had somehow convinced Ava that the movie might actually be enjoyable. Before the movie started, Sarah's mom instructed the girls to silence their phones out of respect for others. As the movie’s tension built(状语从句), Ava found herself growing increasingly uncomfortable.(非谓语动词) “I need to go to the bathroom,” Ava whispered to Sarah. 2、 原文审读 红色定从/定语；蓝色宾从；黄色状从，从句斜体；下划线+标黄单词+斜体 为需掌握积累单词、短语；黑体标黄，非谓语；可积累部分为 embody； 注释(定语从句) After the movie, while waiting for Sarah's mom to fetch the car(状从的省略), Ava felt a sinking feeling. “I can’t find my phone!” she shrieked, patting down all of her pockets(非谓语动词做伴随动作). Panic-stricken, Ava searched her bag, yet her phone seemed to have vanished. Ava got into the car, her stomach in knots(独立主格). “Are you going to tell your parents?” Sarah whispered to Ava on their ride back. Ava was silent, her mind racing with the consequences(独立主格). She could envision her parents’ disappointed faces and harsh words. She feared that this incident might lead to her parents taking away the privilege of having a phone altogether.(宾从) As they arrived(状从), Ava climbed out of the car and trudged home, her heart heavy with what had happened(独立主格+宾从).  1. 高中语法现象分析与常见搭配积累    语法现象： - 时态使用：全篇以一般过去时描述过去发生的事件，并用一般现在时表达普遍事实，如"A cell phone isn’t just for fun and games."。掌握时态切换与一致性对高考英语阅读和写作都很重要。 - 从句：文中有许多宾语从句，如"Ava found herself growing increasingly uncomfortable"中的“自己越来越不安”的发现表述；"Sarah whispered to Ava on their ride back"中“在回程中悄悄告诉她”的句式等。 - 情态动词：如“must”表示责任感，强调手机的使用规则；“might”表示不确定性和对电影的期待。 - 非限定动词结构：如“to silence their phones”表明要“把手机调成静音”；“choosing the perfect wallpaper”表达进行的动作，用作描述。    常见搭配： - long for + 名词：表示对某事的渴望。如“Ava longed for a cell phone like her peers”。 - a sinking feeling：指内心的一种不祥之感，适合表达心情起伏。 - pat down / search pockets/bags：指对物品的寻找。 - trudge home：指在疲惫或心情沉重下走回家。  2. 读后续写的思路构思与框架提炼   在完成读后续写时，要先思考文章的情节发展与情感主线，本文中Ava丢失手机后可能产生的心理变化和行动可以作为续写的重点。    构思步骤： 1. 情节推演：想象Ava回家后是否会告诉父母？她如何面对父母的反应？ 2. 心理描写：Ava的内心挣扎和压力，可以通过细腻的内心描写表现出她对父母失望的恐惧。 3. 情感升华：续写可以加入她因误解或自责而成长的心路历程，最终可能主动承担责任或重新赢得父母的信任。    实施要点： - 情绪表达：善于使用情绪性词汇，比如“nervous,” “regretful,” “conflicted”来展现心理过程。 - 关键动词：用"confess," "admit," "reveal"等表示坦白的词。 - 环境渲染：用“silence filled the room”表现紧张气氛，“the comforting glow of home lights”呈现家庭温暖。 两种构思方法 “四到一行” “线索呼应” 看 听 想 说 做 找出线索，前后呼应 “两法六句” 第一步 依据首句，构思框架 两段首句定一框，二框二首正能量。 (1) 读懂两段首句 第一段首句后的衔接句、第一段尾句 、第二段首句后的衔接句。 即第二段的尾句——能体现故事圆满结局的句子或故事给我们启示的句子。 (2) 写好三个衔接句 (3) 写好一个升华句  3. 情绪、动作、心理和环境描写推荐短语 - 情绪：anxious smile, heavy-hearted, a mixture of fear and hope - 动作：hesitated before knocking, slowly approached, nervously glanced around - 心理：a surge of guilt, torn between honesty and fear, mentally preparing for the worst - 环境：dimly lit hallway, the quiet hum of the car, distant laughter echoing from the street 开放式写作As Ava slowly opened the front door(状从), she could feel her heart pounding. She wanted to confess about the lost phone but dreaded her parents’ reaction. With each step, her guilt grew heavier. Finally, her mother noticed her unusually quiet demeanor and asked gently, "Honey, is everything okay?" Ava looked down, unable to meet her mother’s eyes(形容词短语做补语). After a brief pause, she murmured, "Mom, I… I lost the phone. I’m so sorry." Her words tumbled out, filled with regret and worry(filled 非谓语动词做后置定语). "I was careless, and I didn’t listen to Dad’s advice. I’m really, really sorry." Her mother’s expression softened, and she placed a comforting hand on Ava’s shoulder. “Thank you for telling us the truth,” she said. Ava’s dad, who had overheard(定从), joined them. Though his face showed a hint of disappointment(状从), he managed a reassuring smile. “We trusted you with a phone because we believed you were ready for the responsibility(宾从). Mistakes happen, and what's important(主从) is that you learn from this experience(表从),” he said gently. Ava felt a glimmer of relief but also a renewed determination. She promised to be more responsible in the future and took on extra chores to save up and eventually replace the lost phone. Over time, her parents saw her growing sense of responsibility, and months later, on her birthday, they surprised her with a new phone. This time, however, Ava made sure to follow every rule her parents had set(表从). She kept her phone secure, silenced it when necessary, and handled it with care. Through this experience, Ava learned that responsibility wasn’t just about owning something, but about respecting her parents’ trust and her own commitments.  范文中高中语法现象分析   1. 宾语从句    - 句型示例："I was careless, and I didn’t listen to Dad’s advice."      - 分析：宾语从句用作动词的补充说明，如“listen to Dad’s advice”作为"didn't"的宾语。    2. 非限制性定语从句    - 句型示例："Her mother, who had overheard, joined them."      - 分析：“who had overheard”作为定语修饰mother，提供补充信息。   3. 动名词作主语    - 句型示例："Mistakes happen, and what's important is that you learn from this experience."      - 分析：动名词短语“learn from this experience”作为句子补充，强调经历对成长的重要性。   4. 不定式作宾语补足语    - 句型示例："They believed you were ready for the responsibility."      - 分析：“to be ready for”用作“believed”的宾语补足语，表明信任。  常见搭配与可积累语料   1. Feel one’s heart pounding – 形容紧张和内疚感      - 例句：As he approached the stage, he could feel his heart pounding.    - 例句：The news made her heart pound with excitement.   2. Make a promise to do – 承诺做某事      - 例句：She made a promise to herself to work harder.    - 例句：He promised to be more careful next time.   3. Through this experience – 表示通过某经历学到某事      - 例句：Through this experience, he learned the value of patience.    - 例句：She matured a lot through this experience.   生词短语  1. Responsibility      - 词性：noun      - 词义：责任      - 近义词：duty, accountability      - 反义词：irresponsibility, neglect      - 例句：Taking care of a pet is a big responsibility.      - 例句：He accepts responsibility for his actions.   2. Determine      - 词性：verb      - 词义：决心，决定      - 近义词：resolve, decide      - 反义词：hesitate, doubt      - 例句：She determined to improve her grades this semester.      - 例句：After careful thought, he determined to change his career path.   3. Relief      - 词性：noun      - 词义：宽慰，解脱      - 近义词：comfort, consolation      - 反义词：distress, anxiety      - 例句：He felt a huge relief after the test was over.      - 例句：Her words brought him great relief. 4. Significant      - 词性：adjective      - 词义：重要的，显著的      - 近义词：important, noteworthy      - 反义词：insignificant, trivial      - 例句：This discovery is significant for the field of science.      - 例句：She made a significant contribution to the team. 读后续写思路分析  1. 构思过程    - 提炼核心情节：在开头提供的信息中，Ava因手机遗失而内疚，并预感到父母的失望反应。可以围绕“承认错误”和“自我成长”展开故事，使情节具有起伏感。    - 选择情感基调：由于续写内容侧重情感变化，宜采用逐步释放紧张感，最后以父母的谅解和Ava的成长为落脚点的方式来推进情节。  2. 框架提炼    - 情节推进：Ava经历内疚→犹豫是否承认错误→鼓起勇气承认错误→得到谅解并承诺改正。    - 关键事件：加入与母亲的对话场景，通过Ava坦诚手机丢失的情节展现她的成长。  3. 实施写作    - 明确情感递进：情感递进可以分为“担忧→后悔→勇敢→释怀”。在续写过程中，通过内心描写及对话展示Ava的情感变化。    - 强调情感细节：如通过Ava的心理描写和父母的安慰对话来营造情感起伏，让故事有较强的感染力。  4. 注意事项    - 保持逻辑连贯：情节应合乎逻辑，不能在中途出现不合理的行为或情感转折。    - 用词准确：词汇应符合人物年龄段的表达特征，避免过于复杂或不适合小学生的词汇。 Possible Answer 1 Paragraph 1: The moment Ava walked in, her parents greeted her with a smile, but she could barely return it. Her heart pounded as she weighed the options(状从): to confess or to hide her mistake. Her mom noticed her unusually tense face and asked if everything was alright(宾从). Ava took a deep breath, her face turning pale(独立主格), and stammered, “I… I lost my phone.” The atmosphere in the room turned somber as her parents exchanged a look of disappointment(状从).   Paragraph 2: Then her parents drove Ava back to the cinema, hoping to find the lost phone(非谓语动词短语做伴随). Along the way, Ava could hardly meet her parents' eyes, shame tightening her throat(独立主格). Once they arrived(状从), she frantically retraced her steps, scanning the floor and asking the staff(非谓语动词短语做伴随动作). Just when she was losing hope(状从), a worker held up her phone, and Ava's face lit up with relief. Her parents smiled, though they reminded her of the importance of responsibility(状从).    亮点词汇短语 情绪描写 heart pounded 近义词: heart raced, heart thumped 替换词: pulse quickened, heartbeat surged 联想词: nervous, anxious 例句: Her heart pounded as she admitted the truth. / My heart raced when I realized I had left my wallet at home. a look of relief flooding her face 近义词: expression of relief, sense of relief 替换词: wave of calm washed over, her face softened with relief 联想词: relieved, thankful, calm 例句: A look of relief flooded her face when she found her keys. / His face softened with relief when the test was finally over. 动作描写 took a shaky breath 近义词: took a deep breath, inhaled deeply 替换词: steadied herself, caught her breath 联想词: nervous, hesitant, anxious 例句: She took a shaky breath before telling her parents the news. / He inhaled deeply to calm his nerves. clenched her hands tightly 近义词: gripped her hands, held her fists 替换词: tightened her grip, clasped her hands 联想词: tense, anxious, determined 例句: She clenched her hands tightly as she waited for the results. / He gripped his hands nervously, afraid of the outcome. 环境描写   air in the room grew heavy 近义词: atmosphere became tense, tension filled the air 替换词: silence hung in the room, the room felt tense 联想词: silent, uncomfortable, intense 例句: The air in the room grew heavy after her confession. / Silence hung in the room, signaling their disapproval. Possible Answer 2  Paragraph 1: The moment Ava walked in, her parents greeted her with a warm smile, expecting tales of a fun day out(非谓语动词做后置定语). Ava, however, froze in the doorway, guilt pressing heavily on her chest(独立主格). Her dad's gaze softened as he asked how the movie was(状从), but she couldn’t hold it in. "I lost my phone," she muttered, tears welling up(独立主格). The disappointment in their eyes made her stomach churn, and she could only look down, ashamed.  Paragraph 2: Then her parents drove Ava back to the cinema, their silence making her guilt grow stronger(独立主格). As they searched the theater(状从), Ava replayed her dad’s words about responsibility in her mind. Finally, they found the phone at the lost-and-found desk. Her parents handed it to her with a gentle but firm reminder of responsibility, and Ava vowed to herself to be more careful in the future.  亮点词汇短语 - 情绪描写：guilt pressing heavily (近义词：guilt weighed on, sense of guilt overwhelmed)   - 例句：Guilt pressed heavily on her as she confessed her mistake. / His conscience made the guilt press heavily on him. - 动作描写：froze in the doorway (近义词：stood still, remained motionless)   - 例句：He froze in the doorway, unsure whether to enter. / She froze at the sight of the broken vase. Possible Answer 3  Paragraph 1: The moment Ava walked in, her parents greeted her with welcoming smiles. But Ava’s smile quickly faded as her fingers trembled(状从), clutching her bag(非谓语动词做伴随动作). Taking a shaky breath(非谓语动词做伴随动作), she blurted out, “I can’t find my phone!” Her parents exchanged concerned looks, and her mom put a reassuring hand on her shoulder, calming Ava’s racing heart(非谓语动词做伴随动作). “It’s okay,” her dad said. “Let’s go back and check.”  Paragraph 2: Then her parents drove Ava back to the cinema. She felt gratitude mixed with anxiety, clutching her hands tightly(非谓语动词做伴随动作). Once there, Ava’s eyes scanned the dark rows, her heart skipping a beat each time something glinted on the floor(独立主格+glinted 非谓语做后置定语). At last, an employee approached with her phone, and Ava felt her breath release in relief. Her parents smiled, gently reminding her of responsibility(非谓语动词做伴随动作), and Ava promised to be more cautious.  亮点词汇短语 - 情绪描写：heart racing (近义词：pulse quickened, heart thumped)   - 例句：Her heart raced as she prepared to admit her mistake. / His heart thumped loudly in his chest. - 动作描写：trembling fingers (近义词：shaking hands, unsteady fingers)   - 例句：Her trembling fingers held the paper tightly. / His unsteady fingers struggled to type the message. Possible Answer 4  Paragraph 1: The moment Ava walked in, her parents were there, welcoming her with warm smiles(非谓语动词做伴随动作). But Ava’s face fell, and she stared at the floor, her mind swirling with dread(独立主格). Finally, she spoke, her voice barely a whisper. “I think I lost my phone,” she admitted, her face flushed with shame. Her parents’ smiles faded, replaced by a mixture of surprise and disappointment,(replaced非谓语做后置定语) and Ava bit her lip, regretting her carelessness(非谓语动词短语作后置定语).  Paragraph 2: Then her parents drove Ava back to the cinema. She felt her cheeks burn as they traveled in silence(状从), her thoughts on her dad’s reminder about responsibility(独立主格). At the cinema, they retraced her steps together, and just when she was about to give up, a kind stranger handed her the phone. Relieved but humbled, Ava promised to her parents that she would be more careful in the future(宾从).    亮点词汇短语 - 情绪描写：face flushed with shame (近义词：cheeks reddened with embarrassment, face warmed with guilt)   - 例句：His face flushed with shame as he apologized. / She felt her cheeks redden with embarrassment. - 动作描写：bit her lip (近义词：nibbled her lip, pressed her lips together)   - 例句：She bit her lip nervously as she waited. / He pressed his lips together, deep in thought. 亮点词汇总结与替换   - 情绪：   - heart pounded / raced / thumped   - flushed with shame / reddened with embarrassment   - guilt pressed heavily / weighed on    - 动作：   - took a deep breath / inhaled deeply   - trembling fingers / shaking hands   - froze in the doorway / stood still 佳句赏析 1. His voice was choked with emotion.他情绪激动,难以成声。 2. His face was lit up with excitement.他的脸由于激动而放出光彩。 3. Her face was glowing with excitement.她因兴奋而显得容光焕发。 4. A ripple of excitement ran through them.一阵兴奋的涟漪掠过他们。 5. Her flushed face was shining with excitement.她红红的脸因激动而发亮。 6. My heart is in my mouth whenever I hear the national anthem.每当我听到国歌就激动不已。 7. Her heart was fluttering with anxiety as well as excitement.她的心又兴奋又不安，怦怦乱跳。 8. Tears of excitement welled up in her eyes as she accepted the flowers.当她接过献花时，激动的泪水充满了她的眼睛。 9. The teacher's encouragement warmed his heart. He felt a surge of excitement.老师的鼓励温暖着他的心,他感到一阵兴奋。 10. A shiver of excitement passed through her stomach when she heard the news.听到这个消息,一阵激动的战栗传到她的胃里。 11. Hearing the exciting news, she bounced up and down with excitement. 一听到这个激动人心的消息，她高兴得上蹦下跳。 12. When the host announced that she won the prize, a wild excitement took hold of her.当主持人宣布她获奖时,她兴奋得不能自已。 13. Dad said we would go camping next week, his eyes twinkling with excitement.  爸爸说下星期去露营，他的眼中闪烁着兴奋的光芒。 14. Unable to contain his joy and excitement, he threw himself into my arms, murmuring, “Thank you, dear mum.” 不能抑制住他的高兴和激动，他一下子扑到我的怀里，喃喃道：妈妈，辛苦了。 15. Sighing with relief, the twins hugged each other and shed tears of excitement and joy. 这对双胞胎松了一口气，互相拥抱，留下来激动和高兴的眼泪。 环境描写 高分技巧 情绪描写 心理描写 介词+情绪词，in/with/out of /to 无灵主语句 状语从句/定语从句 非谓语动词 doing / feeling做伴随动作 副词或形容词做状语；adv,或 a.+ a. 强调/倒装/感叹句 独立主格，with复合结构 非谓语动词 doing / feeling做伴随动作 亮点动词; mirror/ linger / echo etc. $$