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东北三省一区2025届高中毕业班第一次质量检测英语试题 第四部分 写作(共两节，满分40分) 第一节 (满分15分) 46. 假定你是李华，你班英语夏令营时，有人建议取消英语辩论比赛。请给随队外教Smith写封邮件表达你的想法，内容包括： 1．反对取消； 2．你的建议。 注意： 1．写作词数应为80左右； 2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Dear Mr. Smith, _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Yours, Li hua 第二节 (满分25分) 47. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Some of my earliest memories of music were the days when I played violin together with my grandpa, whose favorite song was “Big Eyed Rabbit”. “As long as you’ve got music, you’ve got good company,” my grandfather always said. However, I didn’t have either in my life these days. Having left my hometown where my family and friends were, I was in an up-hill struggle to earn money from temporary jobs as I battled to get auditions(试听) for my acting career in New York. Trapped in self-doubt, I felt alone and abandoned. “Would I ever find happiness again?” I thought while visiting the park near where I lived. Suddenly, I heard something unexpected—a sound that winded its way here. Somewhere nearby, an orchestra (管弦乐队) was practising. I followed the sounds to a red-roofed building. Inside, the musicians had started to practice, stopping and starting, trying again, laughing at some joke the conductor had made. I approached the director during a break to admire the music. “This is a community orchestra,” he said, “you’re welcome to join. All you need is an instrument.” If only I could afford to buy one! “I’ll keep that in mind,” I said to the director, and walked back home. The next day the director told me they would have a music show at the city centre and invited me to go with them to get familiar with everything in the orchestra. I arrived early that day and decided to wander around. As I past a bookstore, a sign made me stop short: Schumacher Violin Maker. I stepped inside. Stringed instruments hung from the ceiling. At the very corner lay an old violin, which drew my attention. It reminded me of my grandfather’s. An older man in a brown coat sat at a worktable, looking carefully over the top of his glasses as he adjusted the bridge on a violin. “It’s funny I noticed your shop today,” I said and told him my story. “So, you need a violin,” he said when I’d finished, raising a bushy eyebrow. “Do you happen to rent them?” 注意： 1．续写词数应为150左右： 2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 He shook his head. “But I do have something,” he said. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________ Standing in the city center with the musicians, I started to play the old violin. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________ 第二节 (满分25分) 47. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Some of my earliest memories of music were the days when I played violin together with my grandpa(定从), whose favorite song was “Big Eyed Rabbit”(定从). “As long as you’ve got music, you’ve got good company,” my grandfather always said. However, I didn’t have either in my life these days. Having left my hometown (非谓语动词短语做原因状语)where my family and friends were(定从), I was in an up-hill struggle to earn money from temporary jobs as I battled to get auditions(试听) for my acting career in New York(as状从). Trapped in self-doubt(非谓语动词做原因状语), I felt alone and abandoned. “Would I ever find happiness again?” I thought while visiting the park near where I lived(状从+定从). Suddenly, I heard something unexpected—a sound that winded its way here(定从). Somewhere nearby, an orchestra (管弦乐队) was practising. I followed the sounds to a red-roofed building. Inside, the musicians had started to practice, stopping and starting, trying again, laughing at some joke the conductor had made(定从). I approached the director during a break to admire the music. “This is a community orchestra,” he said, “you’re welcome to join. All you need(定从) is an instrument.” If only I could afford to buy one! “I’ll keep that in mind,” I said to the director, and walked back home. The next day the director told me they would have a music show at the city centre and invited me to go with them to get familiar with everything in the orchestra.(宾从) I arrived early that day and decided to wander around. As I past a bookstore(as状从), a sign made me stop short: Schumacher Violin Maker. I stepped inside, stringed instruments hung from the ceiling(独立主格). At the very corner lay an old violin, which drew my attention(定从). It reminded me of my grandfather’s. An older man in a brown coat sat at a worktable, looking carefully over the top of his glasses(非谓语动词做伴随动作) as he adjusted the bridge on a violin(状从). “It’s funny I noticed your shop today(宾从),” I said and told him my story. “So, you need a violin,” he said when I’d finished(状从), raising a bushy eyebrow(非谓语动词做伴随动作). “Do you happen to rent them?” 注意： 1．续写词数应为150左右： 2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 He shook his head. “But I do have something,” he said. Standing in the city center with the musicians, I started to play the old violin. 1. 高考英语读后续写分析 分析内容 说明 续写类型 本文为成长与励志类型的读后续写。主角通过寻找一把提琴，最终找回音乐与人生的意义。 构思思路 - 冲突设定：主人公的孤独与迷茫，缺少音乐陪伴。 - 转折点：意外遇见社区乐团并获得演奏机会，发现旧提琴。 - 情感变化：孤独 → 感动 → 找回自我。 布局与框架提炼 1. 引入：介绍故事情境，主人公的困境。 2. 冲突与转折：遇见乐团与提琴制作店，得到帮助。 3. 高潮：演奏旧提琴，回忆与情感升华。 4. 结局：主人公重拾希望与自信。 实施步骤 1. 明确承接原文情节，延续孤独和音乐的主题。 2. 强调提琴的象征意义，与爷爷的回忆相结合。 3. 引导情感的转折，主人公从迷茫走向自信与幸福。 承接原文事项 - 保持主角的情感一致性：孤独到找到音乐的陪伴。 - 保持提琴的象征意义。 - 使用原文的语言风格，简洁而富有情感。 整体注意事项 - 确保续写自然衔接，不打乱情节的节奏。 - 描写细腻的情感和动作，突出音乐带来的情感治愈。 - 合理设计转折点，避免突兀。 巧妙设计内容 - 利用提琴作为情感的纽带，增添对爷爷的回忆。 - 在情感高潮处加入感人的细节，如音乐带来的慰藉与成长。 - 结尾时突出音乐的力量，唤起主人公内心的力量与希望。 2. 故事山模式分析 (Story Mountain) 分析角度 内容 原文反应句 起因 主角的孤独与迷茫，生活缺乏音乐的陪伴。 “I felt alone and abandoned.” 发展 偶遇社区乐团与提琴制作店，发现机会。 “So, you need a violin,” he said when I’d finished. 高潮 得到旧提琴，感受到爷爷的陪伴与温暖。 “It’s funny I noticed your shop today,” I said and told him my story. 解决 在乐团的演出中找回自信和归属感。 “I started to play the old violin.” 结局 音乐带给主角希望和新的人生目标。 “As long as you’ve got music, you’ve got good company.” 3. 推荐动作、心理、环境描写英文例句 类型 英文例句 动作描写 1. He carefully placed the violin in his hands, fingers trembling slightly. 2. She lifted the bow, eyes focused on the strings. 3. I pressed the violin to my chin, the strings vibrating under my touch. 心理描写 1. I could feel my heart race as I thought of Grandpa’s gentle smile. 2. My mind was flooded with memories as the music began. 3. A wave of nostalgia washed over me as the violin began to sing. 环境描写 1. The quiet of the city center was broken only by the sound of music floating in the air. 2. The room smelled of wood and varnish, the only light coming from a single lamp overhead. 3. The orchestra hall buzzed with energy as the musicians prepared for the performance. 常见单词的高级替换词 原词 替换词 场景 孤独 alone isolated, abandoned 主角困境 感动 moved touched, overwhelmed 遇见乐团后情感转折 音乐 music melody, symphony 乐团与提琴相关场景 语法现象 说明与例句 非谓语动词 - “Trapped in self-doubt, I felt alone.” - “Having left my hometown, I felt lost.” 定语从句 - “The violin that reminded me of Grandpa…” - “The musician who spoke to me was kind.” 倒装句 - “Only then did I realize the importance of music.” - “Never before had I felt so connected to the past.” 4. 高中语法现象分析与搭配现象 生词短语 词性 词义 近义词 反义词 例句 self-doubt 名词 自我怀疑 uncertainty, insecurity confidence “I was trapped in self-doubt, unsure of my future.” struggle 动词 奋斗，挣扎 battle, fight relax “I struggled to make ends meet while chasing my dream.” 5. 写作高分技法 范文 语法亮点 情绪描写亮点 动作描写亮点 高级替换词 范文1 使用定语从句： “The violin that changed my life” “I felt the weight of sadness lift as I began to play.” “I tightened the bow, ready to play.” “sad → melancholic, lonely → isolated” 范文2 使用倒装句： “Only then did I realize…” “Tears welled up in my eyes as the music filled the air.” “I raised the bow, and the first note floated out.” “grateful → thankful, music → melody” 范文3 使用非谓语动词： “Having played for hours, I…” “A sense of peace washed over me as the orchestra played.” “I moved across the stage, the violin cradled in my arms.” “peaceful → serene, overwhelmed → touched” Possible Answer 1: Paragraph 1: He shook his head. “But I do have something,” he said. He reached under the counter and pulled out an old violin, worn but still beautiful(adj做后置定语). “This one’s been with me for years,” he continued. “It might not be new, but it will play just as well.” My heart raced as I held the violin in my hands(状从). It reminded me of my grandfather’s, and for a moment, I could almost hear him playing the melody of “Big Eyed Rabbit” in the background. Paragraph 2: Standing in the city center with the musicians(非谓语动词做伴随动作), I started to play the old violin. The first note felt strange, like my fingers had forgotten how to move.(宾从) But then, slowly, the music began to flow, and I felt a warmth in my chest. As the orchestra played around me(as状从), I remembered my grandfather’s words: “As long as you’ve got music, you’ve got good company.” The feeling of loneliness faded as I joined the community(as状从), no longer just a stranger but part of something much bigger. 语法亮点： - 使用定语从句：“The violin that changed my life.” - 过去完成时与非谓语动词的结合：“Having played for hours, I…” 情绪描写亮点： - 描写主人公内心情感的变化：“My heart raced…” - 表达通过音乐找回平静与归属感：“The feeling of loneliness faded…” 动作描写亮点： - 细腻的动作描述：“I held the violin in my hands…” - 音乐的变化与主人公的进步：“The first note felt strange, like my fingers had forgotten…” 高级替换词： - “strange” → “unfamiliar, odd” - “faded” → “disappeared, vanished” Possible Answer 2: Paragraph 1: He shook his head. “But I do have something,” he said.When I saw the violin(状从), I could hardly believe it. It was old, but something about it struck a chord within me.(非谓语动词短语做后置定语) The violin maker smiled, “It’s not much, but it has soul.” I held the instrument carefully, fingers gently tracing its curves(独立主格), and for the first time in weeks, I didn’t feel lost. It was as though the violin had awakened a part of me that had been sleeping.(表语从+定从) Paragraph 2: Standing in the city center with the musicians, I started to play the old violin.The performance at the city center was a blur of emotions. Standing on stage with the orchestra(非谓语动词做伴随动作), I was no longer the lost, confused person I had been just days ago(定从). The music flowed through me like a river, and as I played(状从), I felt the energy of the crowd, the warmth of the other musicians beside me. The sound of the violin echoed in my ears, bringing with it memories of my grandfather’s love and the strength of his words(非谓语动词短语做伴随动作). “You’ve got good company,” he used to say. And for the first time, I truly believed it. 语法亮点： - 倒装句：“Only then did I realize the power of music.” - 使用非谓语动词：“Having played the violin for years, I could never forget…” 情绪描写亮点： - 音乐的治愈力：“For the first time in weeks, I didn’t feel lost.” - 孤独感的消失：“I was no longer the lost, confused person I had been…” 动作描写亮点： - 细腻的动作描写：“Fingers gently tracing its curves…” - 对音乐的投入：“The music flowed through me like a river…” 高级替换词： - “lost” → “confused, adrift” - “flowed” → “poured, surged” Possible Answer 3: Paragraph 1: He shook his head. “But I do have something,” he said. When I left the shop with the violin(状从), I felt as though I was carrying more than just an instrument(表从); I was carrying the weight of my past, my memories of my grandfather. The city around me seemed to blur, the noise of the streets fading into the background(独立主格) as I walked toward the orchestra hall(as状从). I knew this was a step forward, a chance to rediscover the music(同位语) that had been missing from my life.(定从) Paragraph 2: Standing in the city center with the musicians, I started to play the old violin. As the performance began(as状从), I felt the familiar strain of the strings beneath my fingers. The music filled me with a sense of calm, and I could feel the tension in my body melt away(非谓语动词做后置定语). I glanced at the other musicians, each absorbed in the music(独立主格), and for the first time, I felt a deep connection to them. We weren’t just playing music—we were sharing something beautiful, something that transcended words(定从). The music became my companion, and in that moment, I knew that I had found my way back home. 语法亮点： - 使用倒装句：“Never had I felt so connected to the music.” - 定语从句的使用：“The city around me seemed to blur, the noise of the streets faded into the background.” 情绪描写亮点： - 音乐带来的安抚：“The music filled me with a sense of calm…” - 自信的重建：“For the first time, I felt a deep connection to them.” 动作描写亮点： - 对音乐的专注：“I could feel the tension in my body melt away.” - 和乐团的互动：“I glanced at the other musicians, each absorbed in the music…” 高级替换词： - “melt away” → “dissipate, vanish” - “deep” → “profound, intense” Possible Answer 官方: 第一节 (满分15分) Dear Mr. Smith, I hope this email finds you well. I am writing to express my opposition to canceling the English debate competition in our summer camp. The competition enhances our critical thinking and English proficiency through engaging discussions. Instead of canceling, I suggest incorporating diverse topics and interactive sessions like team collaborations to make it more appealing. These changes can ensure that the activity remains beneficial and enjoyable for everyone(宾从). Looking forward to your understanding. Yours, Li Hua 第二节 (满分25分) He shook his head. “But I do have something,” he said. He surveyed the rows of instruments and selected an old violin with a faded color. “Take it,” he said. “Go and make your music.” I stood there, surprised, as he handed it to me(状从). Holding the violin(非谓语动词做伴随动作), I felt like I’d just woken up from a dream(宾从). But it was real — as real as the strings I was touching(状从). After saying thanks, my heart pounding with excitement(独立主格), I headed for the park. Standing in the city center with the musicians, I started to play the old violin. Playing the violin(非谓语动词做伴随动作), I immediately felt at home. We had a wonderful performance. The crowd burst into thunderous applause. I made a ton of friends there. I had a sense of belonging, determined to attend the community orchestra very often(adj做主语的补语). Music brought me good company,  just as my grandfather had promised(定从). I am full of gratitude to my grandfather and the owner of the bookstore. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$