2025届读后续写写作练习-人与社会：孤山独守，圣诞情暖 讲义

读后续写-人与社会：孤山独守，圣诞情暖 第二节(满分25分) 阅读下面短文, 根据所给情节进行续写, 使之构成一个完整的故事。 December strode(阔步走)into the mountains of Colorado, shooting snowflakes and blowing them into a thick blanket of white. As Christmas approached, the farmers there closed down most wooden houses for a holiday cheer. Not all were closed, however. There was still work to be done, and someone had to stay. That someone was Slim Carter. Old Jake, another farmer there, had offered to keep him company, but Slim shook his head. “After all, a young man like me has got plenty of Christmases ahead, ”Slim joked. Before Jake offered to stay again, Slim hurried on. “I'll just have a private Christmas this year, and that's the way I want it. ”So he was left alone at the house. Alone, with his horse in the farm and the wolves roaring in the forest nearby. Truth was, Slim had decided not to celebrate Christmas at all. It wasn't that he didn't like Christmas. In fact, his Christmas memories were good ones. His mother would fill their house with the light of candles and the smell of candy. His father would make their Christmas tree hunt an all-day, men-only affair. Slim smiled as he remembered sitting on the broad back of their horse with the freshly cut tree along behind. Back home, they would cover the tree with paper snowflakes and homemade decorations and sing all the Christmas songs they knew. And that's the way he liked it. Those were the memories he pulled out on nights when he was working alone. Such memories warmed him inside, even if his outsides were aching with cold. This was Slim's first year away from home. “Christmas is nothing if not spent with family, "Slim declared to the empty house. That was the real reason he'd sent Jake away. He figured he would handle Christmas better if he just pretended it was an ordinary winter workday. But on Christmas Eve, as Slim headed back with snow beneath his feet and stars overhead, his head hung low. It was Christmas, even without the tree and the gifts. Christmas, and he was all alone. 注意： 1. 续写词数应为150 左右； 2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Then he remembered decorating the tree with his family again. ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ While singing to his decorated Christmas tree, Slim heard a knock on the door ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 一、事件线索 1. 12 月来临，科罗拉多山区被白雪覆盖，圣诞节将至，大多数农户关闭木屋去度假，Slim Carter 选择留下，老 Jake 想陪伴他但被拒绝，Slim 表示要独自过圣诞。 2. Slim 回忆起在家时美好的圣诞场景，包括和家人一起找圣诞树、装饰圣诞树、唱圣诞歌等，他因思念家人而决定不过圣诞，想把这一天当作普通工作日。 3. 圣诞前夜，Slim 结束工作，在孤独中往回走，尽管没有圣诞树和礼物，但他意识到这依然是圣诞节。 二、人物情感线索 1. 开始时，Slim 表现出乐观、洒脱，拒绝他人陪伴，想要独自享受私人圣诞。 2. 回忆起家庭圣诞场景时，充满了温馨和怀念。 3. 圣诞前夜独自走在归途，情感变得低落、孤独、惆怅，因思念家人而对圣诞产生复杂情绪。 三、文章主旨 文章主要讲述了 Slim 在远离家乡的科罗拉多山区独自度过圣诞节的经历。通过描述 Slim 拒绝他人陪伴、回忆家庭圣诞的美好、圣诞前夜的孤独落寞，以及后续他自己寻找圣诞氛围的行动和最终迎来意外陪伴等情节，展现了 Slim 对家庭温暖和圣诞传统的怀念与眷恋。同时，传达出即使身处孤独困境，爱与温暖仍可能在不经意间降临，人们可以在特殊的情境中重新体会到友情、亲情等情感的慰藉，也体现了对圣诞节所蕴含的团聚、欢乐等精神内涵的坚守与感悟，强调了情感在面对孤寂时的力量以及传统节日对人们心灵的滋养与支撑作用。 四、续写思路 续写第一段：可以写 Slim 因回忆而有所触动，他决定自己找一棵圣诞树来装饰，在装饰过程中，他的心情逐渐好转，仿佛又回到了与家人共度圣诞的时光，他开始享受这个独自的圣诞准备过程，比如他精心地制作装饰品，哼着圣诞歌曲等。 续写第二段：当听到敲门声时，Slim 先是惊讶，然后开门看到是老 Jake 或者是其他意外的访客（如迷路的旅人等）。如果是老 Jake，他可能带来了一些简单的圣诞礼物或者食物，与 Slim 一起分享，让 Slim 感受到了温暖和友情；如果是迷路的旅人，Slim 会热情地招待，在这个过程中他体会到了帮助他人的快乐，也让自己的圣诞不再孤单。最后可以升华主题，表达即使没有家人在身边，爱与温暖依然可以在这个圣诞夜传递。 五、优秀范文 Then he remembered decorating the tree with his family again. Moved by the memories, Slim made up his mind to find a tree for himself. He trudged through the snow until he found a suitable one. With great care, he cut it down and dragged it back to the house. He then started to decorate it. Using some paper and odds and ends, he made simple yet charming ornaments. As he worked, he hummed the Christmas carols softly, his heart growing lighter. The tree gradually took on a festive look, and Slim felt a sense of satisfaction and warmth, as if his family were there with him. While singing to his decorated Christmas tree, Slim heard a knock on the door. He opened it and was surprised to see Old Jake standing there, a big smile on his face and a basket of goodies in his hand. "Thought you might need some company and a little something for Christmas," Jake said. Slim's eyes welled up with gratitude. They spent the rest of the evening by the fire, sharing stories and laughter. That Christmas, though different from the ones in the past, was filled with a special kind of warmth and friendship that Slim would always remember. 6、 高分表达 1. stride “阔步走” 2. roar“吼叫” 3. declare“宣称；宣布” 4. trudge“艰难地走；跋涉” 5. ornament“装饰品” 6. hum“哼唱” 7. gratitude“感激；感恩之情” 8. festive“节日的；喜庆的” 9. suitable“合适的；适宜的” 10. charming“迷人的；可爱的” 11. “Truth was, Slim had decided not to celebrate Christmas at all. It wasn't that he didn't like Christmas.” 句式类型：表语从句和强调句结合。 释义：“Truth was...” 是表语从句结构，用于陈述事实；“It wasn't that...” 是强调句结构，用于强调原因，整体使文章在表达逻辑上更严谨，先表明事实，再解释原因，增强行文的层次感。 12. “Those were the memories he pulled out on nights when he was working alone.” 句式类型：定语从句。 释义：“he pulled out...” 是定语从句，修饰先行词 “memories”，“when he was working alone” 是定语从句修饰 “nights”，通过多层定语从句使句子所传达的信息更丰富，更精准地限定所描述的对象和情境。 13. “Using some paper and odds and ends, he made simple yet charming ornaments.” 句式类型：现在分词作状语。 释义：“Using some paper and odds and ends” 是现在分词短语作方式状语，表明主语 “he” 制作装饰品的方式，使句子简洁明了且丰富了句式结构，体现了非谓语动词在写作中的灵活运用。 14. “He opened it and was surprised to see Old Jake standing there, a big smile on his face and a basket of goodies in his hand.” 句式类型：独立主格结构。 释义：“a big smile on his face and a basket of goodies in his hand” 是独立主格结构，在句中作伴随状语，补充说明 “Old Jake” 当时的状态和携带的物品，使人物形象和场景描绘更加生动形象，独立主格结构可使句子在表达上更加灵活多样。 15. “That Christmas, though different from the ones in the past, was filled with a special kind of warmth and friendship that Slim would always remember.” 句式类型：让步状语从句和定语从句。 释义：“though different from the ones in the past” 是让步状语从句，表明这个圣诞节与以往的不同；“that Slim would always remember” 是定语从句，修饰 “warmth and friendship”，该句式通过让步状语从句先进行对比转折，再用定语从句进一步说明，使句子结构复杂且表意清晰，能深刻地表达出特定情境的意义和人物的感受，提升文章的表达深度。 学科网（北京）股份有限公司1 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$