2025届八省联考2024年12月13日——个人成长类——哥哥的光环与阴影 讲义

读后续写实战（2025届八省联考2024年12月13日——个人成长类——哥哥的光环与阴影） My brother Jack was so smart that he earned a full scholarship to Harvard. I often wished he wasn't so perfect because it made me feel like I had to work twice as hard just to prove myself to others. On one hand, his success was a challenge that I enjoyed, but on the other hand, it was an immense pressure that I struggled to cope with. To balance his record in high school, I felt like I was constantly running on a treadmill (跑步机) , dedicating every moment to a non-stop race. There was no room for relaxation as I pursued that perfect record. My life seemed to be compressed into a series of endless tasks and deadlines. “I needed an A,”I repeated to myself before the biology test, so that I would maintain my perfect record and secure a place on the honor roll. I studied till the last minute of lunch and rushed to class. I felt a sense of confidence as I glanced over the first page of the test, quickly filling in the answers with a smile. However, as I turned to the last page, my mind went blank. Time ticked by, and soon, the classroom began to empty as students finished their tests and left, except me.“Lara, class ended. I need you to hand in your test,” Mrs. Phloem said, stretching out her hand. Reluctantly, I handed her the test paper. The next day, I received my test back.I stared dumbfounded at the red mark: 76. Not even a B minus, my mind screamed. Just average. It's over. No perfect record. I felt an unprecedented(前 所 未 有 的) sense of frustration and disappointment. After school, I dragged my heavy feet back home. When I pushed open the door, Jack was sitting on the couch, reading. Seeing his leisurely state, I cried, hard to contain the jealousy and sadness in my heart. Jack immediately noticed the depression on my face. He asked with concern,“What's wrong, Lara?” Blinded by frustration mixed with a touch of jealousy, I shouted at him “How I wish you were not so perfect!” Paragraph 1:With a hint of hurt and surprise in his eyes, Jack gently approached me. Paragraph 2: His words were like a warm breeze, blowing my depression away and changing my mindset. 原文好词好句积累： earn a full scholarship获得全额奖学金struggle to do尽力做某事；挣扎着做某事 constantly始终；一直；重复不断地there was no room for relaxation 没有放松的余地 a series of endless tasks and deadlines一系列没完没了的任务和最后期限 my mind go blank我的大脑一片空白time tick by时间滴滴答答地流逝 stretch out her hand伸出她的手reluctantly不情愿地dumb一时说不出话的；不肯开口的 an unprecedented sense of frustration and disappointment前所未有的挫败感和失望感 drag my heavy feet back home拖着我沉重的脚回家 hard to contain the jealousy and sadness in my heart难以抑制心中的嫉妒和悲伤 with concern带有关切Blinded by frustration mixed with a touch of jealousy被挫折和一丝嫉妒蒙蔽了双眼gently approach sb. 温柔的靠近某人a warm breeze温暖的微风 文本大意： 这段文本描述了Lara内心深处的感受和她与哥哥Jack之间的复杂关系。Lara的哥哥Jack非常聪明，凭借自己的努力获得了哈佛大学的全额奖学金。Lara一方面为哥哥的成功感到骄傲，并且把哥哥的成功当作自己前进的动力；另一方面，她也感受到了巨大的压力，觉得必须加倍努力才能证明自己的价值。 为了在学业上与哥哥的表现相匹配，Lara感觉自己仿佛一直在跑步机上奔跑，一刻也不得停歇，每一个时刻都在追逐那个完美的成绩记录。她的生活被无尽的任务和截止日期所占据，几乎没有放松的时间。在一次生物学测试中，尽管Lara做了充分的准备，但最终却只得到了一个普通的分数——76分，这使她感到前所未有的挫败感和失望，因为这意味着她失去了保持完美记录的机会。 放学后回到家，看到Jack轻松自在地坐在沙发上阅读，Lara的情绪终于爆发，她无法抑制内心的嫉妒和悲伤，向Jack喊出了自己的不满：“我多么希望你不是那么完美！” Who: I , Jack, Mrs. Phloem What: My brother was very smart and he earned a full scholarship to Harvard. It made me feel like I had to work twice as hard just to prove myself to others, which brought me pressure. One day, in my biology test, I wanted to get A to balance his record in school. But I failed and just got a poor grade. Upon arriving home, seeing his leisurely state made me unable to contain my frustration and jealousy. I shouted at him: “How I wish you were not so perfect!” Predict the plot: Paragraph 1:With a hint of hurt and surprise in his eyes, Jack gently approached me. What feeling did I have? Seeing his look, I felt guilty for my behavior. What would he do? He asked me again what had happened. What would I do? I took out my test paper and showed him my grade. I complained to him the pressure I faced because of his excellence. What would he do? He comforted me, and told me that I don’t have to compete with him, what I should do was to focus on myself and compare with myself. Paragraph 2: His words were like a warm breeze, blowing my depression away and changing my mindset. What kind of mindset would I have? I learnt that I should not try to compare with him and balance his record in school. I found out my own interest and devoted myself to becoming better. What would I do? I apologized to him for my rude words. What did I learn from this experience? What was my relationship with my brother? Our relationship becomes much better and there are laughter echoing in our home. 参考范文： With a hint of hurt and surprise in his eyes, Jack gently approached me. He placed a hand on my shoulder,asked me again what had happened, I took out my test paper and told him that I would never match up to him in a choked voice. Jack's smile grew warmer, and he gave my shoulder a reassuring squeeze “You don't have to measure up to anyone and your worth isn't defined by grades achievements.You're more than just a number on a test. Remember that be yourself: everyone else is already taken. His words were like a warm breeze, blowing my depression away and changing my mindset. I was still engaged in endless tasks and deadlines,but I no longer felt constrained by my brother's shadow. Realizing that comparison is the thief of joy, I strove for excellence instead of perfection, which is often unattainable and can lead to burnout. I felt a weight lifted off my shoulders as I realized that my value wasn't tied to a single test score. I felt more confident and less overwhelmed as l know that believing in doing my best will always be the ultimate best score. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$