读后续写 从紧握到放手：杰克的分享启蒙 讲义-江西省鹰潭市2023-2024学年高二下学期期末质量检测英语试题

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 My four-year-old son Jack had a vast collection of toy cars, his prized possessions. One day, I jokingly suggested, “Jack, how about giving away some of your toy cars to the children who don’t have any?” “No, these are mine,” he said angrily, holding on to his toy cars tightly. At that moment, I knew he didn’t grasp the importance of sharing. Therefore, I decided it was time for me to teach him a valuable lesson. The next day, I planned a special day out with him with the aim of gently getting him to open his heart. Our special day began with a visit to the local park, a place where Jack always feels pleased. We found a tree coming into flower, bathed in the warm sunlight. Nearby, a group of children were playing together. “Look, Jack,” I pointed out. “See how they’re sharing their toys? Notice the smiles on their faces?” Those children attracted Jack’s attention. He watched carefully as one child passed a bright red toy truck to another, and he noticed how their faces lit up in a shared moment of happiness. It made him feel curious. I continued, “Sharing doesn’t just make others happy, it can make you feel good too.” Jack kept silent with his expression becoming thoughtful and a bit doubtful. On the way home, we stopped by a small community center which was hosting a charity event. Volunteers, cheerful and warm, were collecting toys for the poor children. Tables in front of them were decorated with various kinds of toys. Jack observed some children of his age eagerly contributing toys, their faces shining with pride and happiness. “See, Jack,” I whispered. “A small act of kindness can bring great joy to you and others.” Jack made no reply but from his hesitant look I could see he was struggling with an internal conflict. 注意： 1．续写词数应为150左右； 2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1: As we were about to leave, a little girl arrived. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2: Moved by the little girl, Jack urged me to take him home. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 文章大意： 儿子杰克有很多玩具车但不愿分享，“我” 决定带他出去通过一些场景让他懂得分享的意义。先是在公园看到孩子们分享玩具很开心，接着在社区中心看到同龄孩子踊跃捐赠玩具，杰克虽有些触动但仍犹豫。回家前看到一个小女孩捐赠了自己破旧的娃娃，杰克深受感动，回家后主动拿出心爱的玩具车，要捐给贫困儿童，他终于理解了分享的快乐和价值，完成了一次心灵的成长。 故事山分析： · 开端：杰克视玩具车为珍宝，不愿分享，“我” 决定引导他，通过提议捐赠引出后续情节，展现杰克性格中的自私和不懂分享，为故事发展提供起点和矛盾点。 · 发展：“我” 带杰克去公园，让他看到孩子们分享玩具的快乐场景，后又到社区中心目睹同龄孩子捐赠玩具的自豪神情，这两个场景逐步触动杰克，使他内心产生动摇和思考，推动故事走向高潮。 · 高潮：小女孩捐赠破旧娃娃的举动成为关键转折点，她的无私和纯真深深打动杰克，引发其内心的深刻转变，将故事情感推向高潮，打破杰克内心的挣扎与犹豫。 · 结局：杰克回家后主动拿出玩具车捐赠，完成从不愿分享到主动奉献的转变，体现他的成长，也呼应开头 “我” 想要教导他的目的，升华故事主题，让读者感受到分享带来的温暖和力量。 五处伏笔及续写中的回应： 1. 伏笔：“My four-year-old son Jack had a vast collection of toy cars, his prized possessions. One day, I jokingly suggested, ‘Jack, how about giving away some of your toy cars to the children who don’t have any?’ ‘No, these are mine,’ he said angrily, holding on to his toy cars tightly.”（我四岁的儿子杰克有一大堆玩具车，那是他最珍贵的宝贝。有一天，我开玩笑地建议：“杰克，把你的一些玩具车送给那些没有玩具的孩子怎么样？”“不，这些是我的，” 他生气地说，紧紧抓住他的玩具车。） · 回应：突出杰克起初对玩具车的珍视和不愿分享的态度，为后续他的转变做强烈对比。续写中，杰克看到小女孩捐赠破旧娃娃后，内心受到极大冲击，回想起自己之前的自私行为，从而促使他改变想法，主动拿出玩具车捐赠，体现了他从不懂分享到学会分享的成长过程，与伏笔中他的固执形成鲜明反差，使故事发展更具戏剧性和感染力。 2. 伏笔：“Our special day began with a visit to the local park, a place where Jack always feels pleased.”（我们特别的一天从参观当地公园开始，那是一个杰克总是感到开心的地方。） 4. 回应：表明公园是杰克熟悉且有好感的环境，在此处看到孩子们分享玩具的场景更容易引起他的关注和思考。续写中，公园里孩子们的分享行为成为杰克接触分享理念的第一步，为他后续在社区中心以及看到小女孩捐赠后的内心变化奠定基础，推动故事在熟悉且轻松的氛围中逐渐展开，使杰克的情感转变更加自然流畅。 3. 伏笔：“Jack watched carefully as one child passed a bright red toy truck to another, and he noticed how their faces lit up in a shared moment of happiness. It made him feel curious.”（杰克仔细地看着一个孩子把一辆鲜红色的玩具卡车递给另一个孩子，他注意到他们在分享的快乐时刻脸上洋溢着光彩。这让他感到好奇。） 4. 回应：描述杰克在公园看到分享场景后的反应，“好奇” 一词暗示他内心开始有所触动，为后续进一步的情感变化埋下伏笔。续写中，这种好奇逐渐发展为对分享意义的思考和理解，尤其是在看到小女孩捐赠后，他将内心的好奇转化为实际行动，主动回家拿玩具车捐赠，体现了情节发展的连贯性和逻辑性，也展现了杰克在不断接触分享行为后的成长与转变。 4. 伏笔：“On the way home, we stopped by a small community center which was hosting a charity event. Volunteers, cheerful and warm, were collecting toys for the poor children.”（在回家的路上，我们顺便去了一个小型社区中心，那里正在举办一场慈善活动。志愿者们热情友好，正在为贫困儿童收集玩具。） 4. 回应：引出社区中心的慈善活动，让杰克有更多机会接触到捐赠玩具的场景，进一步加深他对分享的认识。续写中，社区中心的氛围和其他孩子捐赠玩具时的自豪神情都对杰克产生了影响，与公园的场景相互呼应，逐步引导杰克走向内心的转变，使故事的情节更加丰富多样，也强化了 “分享” 这一主题的呈现。 5. 伏笔：“Jack made no reply but from his hesitant look I could see he was struggling with an internal conflict.”（杰克没有回答，但从他犹豫的表情我可以看出他内心在挣扎。） 4. 回应：表现出杰克在社区中心看到捐赠场景后的内心矛盾，说明他已经开始思考分享的问题，但尚未做出决定。续写中，小女孩的出现打破了他的犹豫，使他最终下定决心捐赠玩具车，解决了这个内心冲突，完成了故事的高潮和结局部分，使杰克的人物形象更加丰满真实，也让读者更能感受到他成长的不易和可贵。 续写要点： 第一段： · 情节：详细描述小女孩的穿着、神态和动作，比如她穿着朴素但整洁的衣服，眼神中透露出坚定和善良，小心翼翼地将娃娃放在桌上，仿佛那是她最珍贵的东西。接着描写杰克的表情和反应，他可能目不转睛地看着小女孩，脸上露出惊讶、敬佩的神情，内心受到强烈的震撼，开始反思自己之前的行为，意识到自己的玩具车也可以给其他孩子带来快乐。 · 情感：杰克从最初的惊讶，到内心的触动和反思，逐渐理解了分享的意义，产生了想要效仿小女孩的想法，情感上有了明显的转变和升华。 第二段： · 情节：描述回家路上杰克的急切心情，他可能不停地催促 “我” 快点走，嘴里念叨着要把玩具车送给其他孩子。回到家后，他迅速跑回房间，精心挑选出自己心爱的玩具车，并且向 “我” 解释为什么选择这些玩具，表现出他的认真和真诚。最后，“我” 带着杰克回到社区中心，他郑重地将玩具车交给志愿者，脸上洋溢着自豪和快乐的笑容，周围的人对他的行为给予赞扬和鼓励。 · 情感：杰克从决定捐赠时的急切和坚定，到挑选玩具时的认真，再到捐赠后的自豪和快乐，充分展现了他在学会分享后的积极情感体验，完成了从自私到慷慨的情感蜕变，也让读者感受到分享所带来的温暖和正能量。 情感线： 故事开始，杰克对自己的玩具车极度珍视，不愿分享，表现出孩子的自私和对物品的占有欲，“我” 因此感到担忧并决定教导他。在公园看到孩子们分享玩具时，杰克产生了好奇，内心开始有了一丝松动，对分享的概念有了初步的接触和思考，情感上从完全的拒绝转向了些许的好奇与疑惑。在社区中心看到同龄孩子捐赠玩具后，他的内心更加矛盾挣扎，既对分享有所心动，又难以割舍自己的玩具，处于一种纠结的情感状态。当看到小女孩捐赠破旧娃娃时，杰克受到极大触动，内心被小女孩的善良和无私深深震撼，从而彻底改变想法，从犹豫挣扎转变为坚定地想要分享，情感得到了质的升华。回家后，他急切地挑选玩具车捐赠，最终在捐赠时感受到了自豪和快乐，完成了从自私到懂得分享、从犹豫到坚定、从内心矛盾到内心满足的情感历程，让读者清晰地看到了杰克在分享这一主题下的情感成长轨迹，深刻体会到分享所带来的积极情感力量和人性的美好。 故事线： 1. 杰克有很多玩具车但不愿分享，“我” 决定带他出去引导他学会分享。 2. 在公园，杰克看到孩子们分享玩具很开心，有些好奇。 3. 在社区中心，杰克看到同龄孩子踊跃捐赠玩具，内心犹豫挣扎。 4. 小女孩捐赠破旧娃娃，杰克深受感动，内心发生转变。 5. 杰克回家后主动拿出玩具车，要去捐赠。 6. 杰克回到社区中心捐赠玩具，体会到分享的快乐和自豪。 主旨升华句（英文）： 1. Sharing is not about giving away what we have; it's about opening our hearts to the joy of making others happy.（分享不是放弃我们所拥有的；而是敞开心扉，感受让他人快乐的喜悦。） 2. In the act of sharing, we discover that the smallest gesture can create the biggest impact on someone's life.（在分享的行为中，我们发现最微小的举动也能对他人的生活产生最大的影响。） 3. True wealth lies not in the abundance of possessions, but in the richness of a giving spirit.（真正的财富不在于拥有丰富的物质，而在于拥有一颗慷慨的心灵。） 4. The beauty of sharing is that it multiplies the happiness, not divides the resources.（分享的美妙之处在于它能使快乐倍增，而不是使资源减少。） 5. When we teach our children to share, we are not just giving them a lesson in kindness; we are equipping them with the power to change the world, one small act at a time.（当我们教导孩子分享时，我们不仅仅是在给他们上一堂关于善良的课；我们是在赋予他们改变世界的力量，一次一个小举动。） 写作示范： 第一篇 As we were about to leave, a little girl arrived. She was wearing a simple dress, her hair tied in two ponytails. In her small hands, she held a doll that had seen better days, with its clothes a bit frayed and its hair tangled. But the way she held it, with such care and tenderness, made it seem like the most precious thing in the world. She walked up to the table, her eyes fixed on the growing pile of toys. With a shy smile, she placed the doll gently on top. Jack's eyes were glued to her, his mouth slightly open in surprise. I could see the wheels turning in his head as he watched the girl. After a moment, he turned to me and said, "Mom, that girl didn't have much, but she shared. I think I want to share too." Moved by the little girl, Jack urged me to take him home. As soon as we walked through the door, he sprinted to his room. I followed and saw him rummaging through his toy box, carefully selecting his favorite cars. "I want to give these to the kids who don't have any," he said, his voice filled with determination. He held the cars close to his chest as we made our way back to the community center. When we arrived, he walked up to the volunteers and handed them the cars, his face beaming with pride. The volunteers thanked him, and the other children there looked at him with admiration. Jack turned to me and said, "Mom, I feel really happy. Sharing is good." From that day on, Jack understood the true meaning of sharing and would often look for opportunities to give to others, his little heart filled with the joy of kindness. 第二篇 As we were about to leave, a little girl arrived. She was a petite figure, her clothes showing signs of wear but clean. Her eyes were bright and filled with a sense of purpose. In her arms was a tattered teddy bear, its fur matted in places. She walked hesitantly at first, but then with more confidence, towards the collection table. She placed the bear down and looked at it for a moment, as if saying goodbye. Jack stared at her, his brows furrowed in concentration. I could sense his inner turmoil as he watched the girl part with her beloved toy. After she left, Jack was quiet for a while. Then he looked up at me and said, "Mom, that was brave. I want to be brave like her and share my toys." Moved by the little girl, Jack urged me to take him home. On the way, he was unusually quiet, deep in thought. Once home, he rushed to his room and emerged with a handful of his most cherished toy cars. "These are the ones I want to give," he announced. We returned to the community center, and he handed the cars to the volunteers. The smile on his face was one of pure joy and contentment. As we left, he said, "I know now that sharing makes my heart feel big and happy." Jack had truly learned the value of sharing, and his newfound spirit of giving became a beautiful part of his character, inspiring those around him to embrace the power of kindness and generosity. 参考答案 As we were about to leave, a little girl arrived. Jack’s gaze was fixed on the girl who was no older than him. She walked into the community center with a firm step, her hands holding a well-worn teddy bear tightly. Handing the volunteer her teddy bear, she said, “This is my only toy, but I want to give it away to pass on my best wishes to others.” Jack’s eyes widened as he absorbed the simple yet powerful message. Then his hesitant expression was replaced by a determined look. Moved by the little girl, Jack urged me to take him home. Upon arriving home, he rushed into his bedroom and care fully sorted through his toy cars. “Dad, I want to give these to other kids,” he said earnestly, showing me a fistful of his favorites. We packed them together and headed back to the community center. As we arrived, Jack eagerly handed his cars over to the volunteers, his eyes full of the joy of sharing. Seeing his transformation filled my heart with huge pride. It was a meaningful day for both of us. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$