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2025届高三T8第一次联盟12月联考英语试卷

第四部分  写 作(共两节,满分 40 分 )

第一 节 (满分 15分 )

假定你是李华,在英国一所中学做交换生。你在该校举办的“Showcase the Cultural Charm of Your Nation”艺术创作大赛上获得了一等奖。 请你写一篇获奖感言,内容包括：1.介绍你的作 品；2.自己的感想。

注意： 1. 写作词数应为 80个左右； 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Dear teachers and friends,

 

第二节  (满分 25分 )阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。

My brother Jack was so smart that he earned a full scholarship to Harvard. I often wished he wasn't so perfect because it made me feel like I had to work twice as hard just to prove myself to others. On one hand, his success was a challenge that I enjoyed, but on the other hand, it was an immense pressure that I struggled to cope with.

To balance his record in high school, I felt like I was constantly running on a treadmill (跑步机) , dedicating every moment to a non-stop race. There was no room for relaxation as I pursued that perfect record. My life seemed to be compressed into a series of endless tasks and deadlines.

“I needed an A,” I repeated to myself before the biology test, so that I would maintain my perfect record and secure a place on the honor roll. I studied till the last minute of lunch and rushed to class. I felt a sense of confidence as I glanced over the first page of the test, quickly filling in the answers with a smile. However, as I turned to the last page, my mind went blank. Time ticked by, and soon, the classroom began to empty as students finished their tests and left, except me. “Lara, class ended. I need you to hand in your test,” Mrs. Phloem said, stretching out her hand. Reluctantly, I handed her the test paper.

The next day, I received my test back. I stared dumbfounded at the red mark: 76. Not even a B minus, my mind screamed. Just average. It ' s over. No perfect record. I felt an unprecedented(前所未有的) sense of frustration and disappointment. After school, I dragged my heavy feet back home. When I pushed open the door, Jack was sitting on the couch, reading. Seeing his leisurely state, I cried, hard to contain the jealousy and sadness in my heart. Jack immediately noticed the depression on my face. He asked with concern, “What's wrong, Lara?” Blinded by frustration mixed with a touch of jealousy, I shouted at him “How I wish you were not so perfect!”

注意:1. 续写词数应为 150个左右;2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Paragraph 1: With a hint of hurt and surprise in his eyes, Jack gently approached me.

Paragraph 2: His words were like a warm breeze, blowing my depression away and changing my mindset.

第三节  (满分 25分 )阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。

My brother Jack was so smart that he earned a full scholarship to Harvard(状从). I often wished he wasn't so perfect(宾从) because it made me feel like(状从) I had to work twice as hard just to prove myself to others(宾从). On one hand, his success was a challenge that I enjoyed(定从), but on the other hand, it was an immense pressure that I struggled to cope with(定从).

To balance his record in high school(非谓语做目的状语), I felt like I was constantly running on a treadmill (跑步机)(宾从) , dedicating every moment to a non-stop race(非谓语动词做伴随动作). There was no room for relaxation as I pursued that perfect record(as状从). My life seemed to be compressed into a series of endless tasks and deadlines.

“I needed an A,” I repeated to myself before the biology test, so that I would maintain my perfect record and secure a place on the honor roll(目的状从). I studied till the last minute of lunch and rushed to class. I felt a sense of confidence as I glanced over the first page of the test(as状从), quickly filling in the answers with a smile(非谓语动词做伴随动作). However, as I turned to the last page(as状从), my mind went blank. Time ticked by, and soon, the classroom began to empty as students finished their tests and left(as状从), except me. “Lara, class ended. I need you to hand in your test,” Mrs. Phloem said, stretching out her hand(非谓语动词做伴随动作). Reluctantly, I handed her the test paper.

The next day, I received my test back. I stared dumbfounded at the red mark: 76. Not even a B minus, my mind screamed. Just average. It ' s over. No perfect record. I felt an unprecedented(前所未有的) sense of frustration and disappointment. After school, I dragged my heavy feet back home. When I pushed open the door, Jack was sitting on the couch, reading. Seeing his leisurely state(非谓语动词做伴随动作), I cried, hard to contain the jealousy and sadness in my heart. Jack immediately noticed the depression on my face. He asked with concern, “What's wrong, Lara?” Blinded by frustration mixed with a touch of jealousy(非谓语动词做原因状语), I shouted at him “How I wish you were not so perfect!(宾从)”

注意:1. 续写词数应为 150个左右;2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Paragraph 1: With a hint of hurt and surprise in his eyes, Jack gently approached me.

Paragraph 2: His words were like a warm breeze, blowing my depression away and changing my mindset.

1. 类型分析与构思布局

分析角度	内容	原文反应句
续写类型	人物冲突类	“I cried, hard to contain the jealousy and sadness in my heart.”
构思思路	解决冲突，情感升华	在Jack和Lara的对话中找到情感的转折点，Jack化解Lara的内心困境，最终缓解她的压力。
布局	引出冲突，展开情感对话，化解冲突	开头是Lara对Jack的嫉妒情感，经过对话后，Jack帮助她走出困境，给她信心。
提炼框架	内心冲突 → 亲情支持 → 情感转折	Jack通过关心与鼓励引导Lara反思，最后达成情感上的理解与支持。
承接原文的事项	保持Lara的情绪波动，并注重人物心理的转变	强调Lara的嫉妒和自卑情感，以及Jack给予的情感支持。
注意事项	语言表达自然，情感表达真实	需要确保情感的流畅转折，避免过度牵强。
巧妙设计续写内容	通过对话引导情感升华，并让结局充满希望	Jack的话语成为Lara情感的转折点，帮助她获得自信。

2. 故事山模式分析 (Story Mountain)

分析点	内容
故事开端	Lara感到自己在Jack的阴影下总是感到压力。
冲突/问题	Lara因为自己的失败感到极度沮丧，并向Jack表达了嫉妒和自卑情感。
高潮	Jack意识到Lara的内心困扰后，开始与她进行深入的交流。
结局/解决	Jack通过鼓励和安慰帮助Lara走出困境，Lara逐渐恢复信心。

3. 原文中能与续写衔接的部分

分析角度	内容	原文反应句
人物刻画	Jack通过观察Lara的情绪变化来展现关怀。	“Jack immediately noticed the depression on my face.”
情感层次	从嫉妒和自卑到通过亲情关系获得理解与支持。	“I cried, hard to contain the jealousy and sadness in my heart.”
关键情节点	Lara的情绪爆发以及Jack的关怀是关键转折点。	“How I wish you were not so perfect!”
语言特色	采用直接而真切的对话展现情感变化。	“What’s wrong, Lara?”
心理描写	Lara的内心冲突、沮丧情感。	“I stared dumbfounded at the red mark: 76.”
动作描写	Jack的关心和Lara的情绪波动。	“Jack immediately noticed the depression on my face.”