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2025届高三T8第一次联盟12月联考英语试卷 第4部分 写 作(共两节,满分 40 分 ) 第一 节 (满分 15分 ) 假定你是李华,在英国一所中学做交换生。你在该校举办的“Showcase the Cultural Charm of Your Nation”艺术创作大赛上获得了一等奖。 请你写一篇获奖感言,内容包括：1.介绍你的作 品；2.自己的感想。 注意： 1. 写作词数应为 80个左右； 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Dear teachers and friends, 第2节 (满分 25分 )阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 My brother Jack was so smart that he earned a full scholarship to Harvard. I often wished he wasn't so perfect because it made me feel like I had to work twice as hard just to prove myself to others. On one hand, his success was a challenge that I enjoyed, but on the other hand, it was an immense pressure that I struggled to cope with. To balance his record in high school, I felt like I was constantly running on a treadmill (跑步机) , dedicating every moment to a non-stop race. There was no room for relaxation as I pursued that perfect record. My life seemed to be compressed into a series of endless tasks and deadlines. “I needed an A,” I repeated to myself before the biology test, so that I would maintain my perfect record and secure a place on the honor roll. I studied till the last minute of lunch and rushed to class. I felt a sense of confidence as I glanced over the first page of the test, quickly filling in the answers with a smile. However, as I turned to the last page, my mind went blank. Time ticked by, and soon, the classroom began to empty as students finished their tests and left, except me. “Lara, class ended. I need you to hand in your test,” Mrs. Phloem said, stretching out her hand. Reluctantly, I handed her the test paper. The next day, I received my test back. I stared dumbfounded at the red mark: 76. Not even a B minus, my mind screamed. Just average. It ' s over. No perfect record. I felt an unprecedented(前所未有的) sense of frustration and disappointment. After school, I dragged my heavy feet back home. When I pushed open the door, Jack was sitting on the couch, reading. Seeing his leisurely state, I cried, hard to contain the jealousy and sadness in my heart. Jack immediately noticed the depression on my face. He asked with concern, “What's wrong, Lara?” Blinded by frustration mixed with a touch of jealousy, I shouted at him “How I wish you were not so perfect!” 注意:1. 续写词数应为 150个左右;2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1: With a hint of hurt and surprise in his eyes, Jack gently approached me. Paragraph 2: His words were like a warm breeze, blowing my depression away and changing my mindset. 第3节 (满分 25分 )阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 My brother Jack was so smart that he earned a full scholarship to Harvard(状从). I often wished he wasn't so perfect(宾从) because it made me feel like(状从) I had to work twice as hard just to prove myself to others(宾从). On one hand, his success was a challenge that I enjoyed(定从), but on the other hand, it was an immense pressure that I struggled to cope with(定从). To balance his record in high school(非谓语做目的状语), I felt like I was constantly running on a treadmill (跑步机)(宾从) , dedicating every moment to a non-stop race(非谓语动词做伴随动作). There was no room for relaxation as I pursued that perfect record(as状从). My life seemed to be compressed into a series of endless tasks and deadlines. “I needed an A,” I repeated to myself before the biology test, so that I would maintain my perfect record and secure a place on the honor roll(目的状从). I studied till the last minute of lunch and rushed to class. I felt a sense of confidence as I glanced over the first page of the test(as状从), quickly filling in the answers with a smile(非谓语动词做伴随动作). However, as I turned to the last page(as状从), my mind went blank. Time ticked by, and soon, the classroom began to empty as students finished their tests and left(as状从), except me. “Lara, class ended. I need you to hand in your test,” Mrs. Phloem said, stretching out her hand(非谓语动词做伴随动作). Reluctantly, I handed her the test paper. The next day, I received my test back. I stared dumbfounded at the red mark: 76. Not even a B minus, my mind screamed. Just average. It ' s over. No perfect record. I felt an unprecedented(前所未有的) sense of frustration and disappointment. After school, I dragged my heavy feet back home. When I pushed open the door, Jack was sitting on the couch, reading. Seeing his leisurely state(非谓语动词做伴随动作), I cried, hard to contain the jealousy and sadness in my heart. Jack immediately noticed the depression on my face. He asked with concern, “What's wrong, Lara?” Blinded by frustration mixed with a touch of jealousy(非谓语动词做原因状语), I shouted at him “How I wish you were not so perfect!(宾从)” 注意:1. 续写词数应为 150个左右;2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1: With a hint of hurt and surprise in his eyes, Jack gently approached me. Paragraph 2: His words were like a warm breeze, blowing my depression away and changing my mindset. 1. 类型分析与构思布局 分析角度 内容 原文反应句 续写类型 人物冲突类 “I cried, hard to contain the jealousy and sadness in my heart.” 构思思路 解决冲突，情感升华 在Jack和Lara的对话中找到情感的转折点，Jack化解Lara的内心困境，最终缓解她的压力。 布局 引出冲突，展开情感对话，化解冲突 开头是Lara对Jack的嫉妒情感，经过对话后，Jack帮助她走出困境，给她信心。 提炼框架 内心冲突 → 亲情支持 → 情感转折 Jack通过关心与鼓励引导Lara反思，最后达成情感上的理解与支持。 承接原文的事项 保持Lara的情绪波动，并注重人物心理的转变 强调Lara的嫉妒和自卑情感，以及Jack给予的情感支持。 注意事项 语言表达自然，情感表达真实 需要确保情感的流畅转折，避免过度牵强。 巧妙设计续写内容 通过对话引导情感升华，并让结局充满希望 Jack的话语成为Lara情感的转折点，帮助她获得自信。 2. 故事山模式分析 (Story Mountain) 分析点 内容 故事开端 Lara感到自己在Jack的阴影下总是感到压力。 冲突/问题 Lara因为自己的失败感到极度沮丧，并向Jack表达了嫉妒和自卑情感。 高潮 Jack意识到Lara的内心困扰后，开始与她进行深入的交流。 结局/解决 Jack通过鼓励和安慰帮助Lara走出困境，Lara逐渐恢复信心。 3. 原文中能与续写衔接的部分 分析角度 内容 原文反应句 人物刻画 Jack通过观察Lara的情绪变化来展现关怀。 “Jack immediately noticed the depression on my face.” 情感层次 从嫉妒和自卑到通过亲情关系获得理解与支持。 “I cried, hard to contain the jealousy and sadness in my heart.” 关键情节点 Lara的情绪爆发以及Jack的关怀是关键转折点。 “How I wish you were not so perfect!” 语言特色 采用直接而真切的对话展现情感变化。 “What’s wrong, Lara?” 心理描写 Lara的内心冲突、沮丧情感。 “I stared dumbfounded at the red mark: 76.” 动作描写 Jack的关心和Lara的情绪波动。 “Jack immediately noticed the depression on my face.” 情感转折 Lara从嫉妒到接受Jack的帮助，获得情感升华。 Jack的关怀语言使Lara从情绪低谷中走出。 空间转换 从Lara的失落到Jack的关怀，情感和心理的变化。 没有明显的空间转换，但通过Lara的心态变化体现了情感转折。 时间过渡 从考试的失落到回家后的情感释放。 “After school, I dragged my heavy feet back home.” 4. 推荐动作、心理、环境描写的英文例句 动作描写： 1. She clenched her fists tightly, trying to control her anger. 2. Jack placed a reassuring hand on her shoulder, showing his support. 3. Lara wiped away her tears, trying to regain her composure. 4. He nodded slowly, his eyes filled with understanding. 心理描写： 1. A sense of relief washed over her as Jack spoke softly. 2. Lara’s mind raced with thoughts, but she found herself unable to articulate her emotions. 3. She felt a weight lifting off her chest as Jack’s words resonated within her. 4. His words slowly began to sink in, and Lara felt her frustration dissipate. 环境描写： 1. The living room felt warm and cozy, a stark contrast to Lara's cold emotions. 2. The silence between them was palpable, thick with unspoken words. 3. The late afternoon sun cast a gentle light into the room, softening the tension. 4. The air was heavy with the weight of Lara’s emotions, as if the room understood her struggle. 5. 高中语法现象分析 语法现象 常见搭配/词组 词意/词性 近义词 反义词 例句 虚拟语气 If I were you, I would... 表示假设条件 If only, As if Actually, Realistically “If I were you, I would try harder.” 过去完成时 had done 表示过去的动作已完成 completed, finished started, began “By the time I got home, Jack had already left.” 情态动词 should have, might have 表示推测、建议 could have, would have must have “You should have told me earlier.” 6. 写作推荐高分技法 文章 加分点语法 情绪描写 动作描写 亮点词汇 替换选项 1 虚拟语气，过去完成时 失落，沮丧 紧张、松弛 jealous, relief, frustration angry → upset, sad → melancholy 2 情态动词，过去完成时 难过，释然 握手，目送 encouragement, despair, understanding disappointed → disheartened 3 从句结构，情态动词 感激，温暖 伸出援手，拍拍肩膀 comfort, reassured, thoughtful content → pleased, motivated → inspired Possible Answer 1: Paragraph 1 With a hint of hurt and surprise in his eyes, Jack gently approached me. He paused for a moment before sitting down next to me on the couch. "Lara, I didn't realize you felt this way(宾从). I thought we could share everything, not just the good things but also the bad(宾从)." He spoke softly, his voice full of empathy(独立主格). I looked at him, my anger slowly dissipating(独立主格) as I realized that Jack had never meant to make me feel less than him(as状从+宾从). He continued, "You don’t have to be perfect, Lara. It's okay to make mistakes. What's important(主从) is that you try your best and learn from them(表从)." Paragraph 2 His words were like a warm breeze, blowing my depression away and changing my mindset(非谓语动词短语做后置定语). I felt a sudden weight lift off my chest as I realized that I didn’t have to live up to an impossible standard(as状从+宾从). Jack’s voice was reassuring, and for the first time in days, I felt understood. He gave me a hug, and I hugged him back tightly, feeling an overwhelming sense of relief(非谓语动词短语做伴随动作). “Thank you,” I whispered, finally letting go of my frustration(非谓语动词短语做伴随动作). I no longer cared about being perfect. What mattered now(主从) was the love and support we shared as siblings(定从). 分析： 1. 情感层次：从Lara的嫉妒、沮丧转到Jack的关怀与理解，再到Lara的释然，情感逐步升华。 2. 动作描写：通过Jack的动作（坐下来、给Lara拥抱）和Lara的反应（情感释放、感激）展现了人物的情感变化。 3. 心理描写：Lara从心里的愤怒与嫉妒转变为感激与释然，体现了内心的变化。 4. 环境描写：没有明确的环境描写，但通过心理和情感的转变突出了情节的核心。 Possible Answer 2: Paragraph 1 With a hint of hurt and surprise in his eyes, Jack gently approached me.I felt the sting of my words hanging in the air(非谓语动词短语做伴随动作) as I looked at Jack(状从), waiting for his reaction(非谓语动词短语做伴随动作). For a moment, there was silence, and I almost regretted what I had said. Then Jack, with a calm expression, said, “I understand how you feel. But you don’t need to prove anything to anyone. Not to me, not to anyone. Just be you.” I stared at him, my heart pounding in my chest. His words seemed to hit me like a wave of clarity. I realized that the pressure I had been putting on myself was unnecessary. Paragraph 2 His words were like a warm breeze, blowing my depression away and changing my mindset(非谓语动词短语做后置定语).Jack stood up and placed a hand on my shoulder. “Lara, I may seem perfect, but I have my own struggles too. We all do. Don’t let comparisons rob you of your own happiness.” His voice was soft but firm, filled with reassurance(非谓语动词做补语). I felt a tear roll down my cheek, not from frustration, but from gratitude. Jack didn’t see me as a rival; he saw me as his sister. Slowly, I began to smile, feeling a newfound sense of peace(非谓语动词短语做伴随动作). I didn’t need to compete with Jack. What mattered(主从) was that we supported each other(表从). 分析： 1. 情感转折：通过Jack的安慰与理解，Lara从嫉妒和沮丧中逐渐走出来，情感得到释放和升华。 2. 人物刻画：Jack的成熟和包容通过他的语言和行动体现，Lara的情感变化通过她的反应展现。 3. 情节推进：从冲突（Lara的嫉妒）到理解（Jack的安慰），最终到情感的升华和化解。 Possible Answer 3: Paragraph 1 With a hint of hurt and surprise in his eyes, Jack gently approached me.I sat in silence, the weight of my words hanging heavily between us(独立主格). Jack had always been the one everyone looked up to(定从), and now it felt as though I had lost my chance to prove myself(状从). But Jack didn’t seem to mind. He looked at me with those calm eyes, and I could see the concern behind them. “Lara, I know how hard you work. You don’t need to be perfect all the time. It’s okay to make mistakes. It’s okay to be real,” he said, his voice filled with warmth(独立主格). His words were like a balm to my wounded soul. Paragraph 2 His words were like a warm breeze, blowing my depression away and changing my mindset(非谓语动词短语做后置定语). I took a deep breath, feeling the tension in my chest slowly ease(非谓语动词短语做伴随动作). Jack’s acceptance was all I needed to hear(定从). “I’m sorry, Jack,” I whispered. He smiled at me, and I felt a flood of relief rush through me. “There’s no need to apologize,” he replied, giving me a gentle squeeze on the shoulder(非谓语动词短语做伴随动作). “We all have our own path, and sometimes that path is full of bumps. But as long as we keep moving forward, that’s all that matters.” His simple, yet profound words gave me a new perspective on life. I no longer needed to be perfect. I just needed to be myself. 分析： 1. 情感层次：从Lara的自卑到Jack的接纳与安慰，再到Lara的情感解放，展示了一个完整的情感转变过程。 2. 语言特色：Jack的语言简洁而富有哲理，帮助Lara从情感低谷中走出。 3. 情感转折：Lara从愤怒和自卑转到释然与接纳，情感转折自然流畅。 官方Possible Answer : Dear teachers and friends, I am honored to receive first prize in this competition.My artwork, Whispers of Bamboo, is a traditional Chinese ink wash painting that features bamboo(定从), symbolizing resilience and strength in Chinese culture(非谓语动词做后置定语). Through delicate brushstrokes and shades of green and black(状语), aimed to capture bamboo's beauty and vitality in a natural setting(非谓语动词短语做状语), with light and shadow adding a sense of serenity(状语). Winning this award(动名词做主语) means a lot to me, as it reflects not only my art but also the support from my teachers and classmates(状从). I am grateful for the chance to share my culture and learn from you all(非谓语动词短语做目的状语). Thank you! One possible version: With a hint of hurt and surprise in his eyes, Jack gently approached me. He placed a hand on my shoulder, asked me again what had happened. I took out my test paper and told him that I would never match up to him in a choked voice(宾从). Jack's smile grew warmer, and he gave my shoulder a reassuring squeeze. “You don't have to measure up to anyone and your worth isn't defined by grades and achievements. You're more than just a number on a test. Remember that be yourself; everyone else is already taken.(宾从)” His words were like a warm breeze, blowing my depression away and changing my mindset. I was still engaged in endless tasks and deadlines, but I no longer felt constrained by my brother's shadow. Realizing that comparison is the thief of joy, I strove for excellence instead of perfection, which is often unattainable and can lead to burnout(定从). I felt a weight lifted off my shoulders as I realized that my value wasn't tied to a single test score(状从+宾从). I felt more confident and less overwhelmed as I know that believing in doing my best will always be the ultimate best score(状从+宾从). 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$