读后续写--贫瘠土地上的希望之花：母子情暖花园讲义-2024届广西壮族自治区贵港市高三下学期5月模拟预测（三模）英语试题

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 “You should throw me in the bin, Mummy.” Those are the words my son say to me, words a mother should never hear their child say. When I asked him why, he told me that like his digger, he was broken and could not be fixed. My heart cracked a little more at that and I knew that, I had to try and find a way to bring back the joy into our world. At age two, he was diagnosed with type two diabetes and he was “just losing his puppy fat”. My son grew sicker and sicker until eventually, he was admitted into hospital. Motherhood changed in that moment. I went from “Mummy” to nurse, always keeping a watch for signs he might be in danger from his own body. It can be hard to find the balance between the demands of being a full-time carer for a child with illness and being a mother. In those early days, it broke me to hear him beg and cry for me not to hurt him with needles again. The risks that come along are as big as they can be: blindness, organ failure, coma, death. His life is, and always will be, dependent on the monitoring and assessment of all these factors. Yet, I had to find a way to raise him to know that he could live it fully and with all his dreams within reach. I had to learn how to live with these two roles, just as he had to learn to live with the demands his body would place on him. What I had not expected was to find the way through in the mud and rubble (瓦砰) of a new-build social housing estate. My husband, son and I moved to the new estate in Cumbria when my son was four. The back garden was nothing more than a patch of newly sown grass, and a thin layer of topsoil. Underneath that was rubble and rock. The site was a former industrial stoneworks, and but to us, it was a place of hope. 注意： 1.续写词数应为150左右； 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Soon after we moved in, my son and I decided to plant a garden. _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ This small garden let us both live again. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 文章大意：“我” 的儿子两岁时被诊断出患有二型糖尿病，病情严重，“我” 从母亲的角色转变为护士，时刻警惕他的身体状况，内心痛苦挣扎。在儿子四岁时，一家人搬到了坎布里亚的新住宅区，后花园虽条件恶劣，但 “我” 和儿子决定在此种植花园，希望借此为生活带来新的生机与希望，后续花园的种植过程及对两人的影响成为故事的发展方向，展现了母子在困境中努力寻找生活乐趣与意义的历程。 故事山分析： · 开篇：儿子令人心碎的话语引出他因疾病而产生的自我否定，同时也交代了家庭所面临的困境，引起读者对孩子病情和家庭状况的关注，为故事奠定了沉重的情感基调，激发读者对后续发展的好奇。 · 上升情节：回顾儿子患病的过程，包括从最初被误诊到病情逐渐加重，住院治疗等情况，突出疾病对家庭的沉重打击，使读者更加深入了解母子所经历的苦难，进一步增强故事的紧张感和情感张力。 · 转折：搬到新家后，尽管后花园环境不佳，但母子决定种植花园，这一情节为故事带来转折，从疾病的阴霾转向对生活新希望的追求，给读者带来一丝温暖和期待，预示着故事将朝着积极的方向发展，同时也为后续情节的展开提供了新的线索和场景。 · 高潮：续写部分中花园种植的过程以及花园给儿子带来的积极变化，将成为故事的高潮部分。通过描述儿子在花园中的欢笑、成长以及对生活重新燃起的热情，使读者深刻感受到希望和坚持的力量，达到情感的共鸣，让整个故事充满感染力和正能量。 · 结局：花园让母子俩重新找回生活的意义，儿子从疾病的阴影中逐渐走出，“我” 也看到了生活的希望，家庭氛围变得温馨和谐，故事以一个充满希望和温馨的结局收尾，给读者留下深刻的印象，同时也传达了积极向上的生活态度和价值观。 五处伏笔及续写中的回应： 1. 伏笔：儿子说自己像坏掉的挖掘机一样 “broken and could not be fixed”，暗示他因疾病而产生的消极情绪和自我否定，为后续通过花园种植帮助他重新找回自信和快乐做铺垫。 · 回应：在续写中，详细描述儿子在花园里的积极变化，如他的眼神从黯淡变得明亮，笑声从稀少变得频繁，通过这些细节展现花园对他心理状态的积极影响，让他重新认识到自己的价值和能力，克服了之前的消极情绪，回应了他最初的自我否定，体现了成长和希望的主题。 2. 伏笔：儿子被诊断出患有严重的二型糖尿病，病情不断恶化，这为整个故事营造了紧张压抑的氛围，也预示着母子将面临诸多困难和挑战，同时强调了疾病对家庭生活的巨大影响。 5. 回应：后续情节中，虽然没有直接描述疾病的治疗过程，但通过花园种植这一活动，展现了母子在困境中积极寻找生活乐趣和希望的一面，与疾病带来的痛苦形成对比。同时，儿子在花园中逐渐恢复的活力和乐观态度，也暗示着他在精神上对疾病的一种抗争和超越，回应了疾病这一伏笔，体现了生命的顽强和坚韧。 3. 伏笔：“我” 从母亲转变为护士的角色，时刻关注儿子的身体状况，体现了 “我” 在面对儿子疾病时的无奈和坚强，也暗示了 “我” 为了儿子愿意付出一切的决心，同时为 “我” 和儿子之间的情感发展埋下伏笔。 5. 回应：在花园种植的过程中，“我” 不仅是儿子的照顾者，更是他的陪伴者和引导者。“我” 与儿子一起劳作，分享故事，见证他的成长，进一步加深了母子之间的情感联系。这种情感的深化回应了 “我” 角色转变的伏笔，展示了亲情在困难时刻的支撑作用，使故事更加温馨感人。 4. 伏笔：新家后花园的恶劣条件，如只有新种的草和薄薄的表土，下面是瓦砾和岩石，与母子种植花园的决心形成鲜明对比，突出了他们对美好生活的向往和追求，也预示着种植过程将充满艰辛，为后续故事的发展设置了障碍和挑战。 5. 回应：续写中详细描述了母子在种植过程中克服困难的过程，如他们如何小心翼翼地清理瓦砾，如何精心挑选适合贫瘠土壤的种子，以及如何坚持不懈地浇水施肥。这些细节展现了他们的努力和毅力，回应了花园恶劣条件的伏笔，突出了在困境中不屈不挠、努力创造美好生活的主题，使故事更加真实可信且富有感染力。 5. 伏笔：提到这片土地曾经是工业石场，如今却成为母子的希望之地，这种对比暗示了生活的转变和希望的重生，为故事的发展赋予了更深层次的含义，即无论过去经历了多少困难，都有可能迎来新的希望和美好。 5. 回应：在后续情节中，花园逐渐变得生机勃勃，成为了儿子快乐成长的乐园，这一美好的景象与土地曾经的荒芜形成鲜明对比，进一步强调了希望的力量和生活的转变。通过花园的变化，回应了土地历史的伏笔，使故事的主题更加深刻，让读者感受到生活的无限可能和希望的永恒存在。 续写要点： · 第一段：详细描述种植花园的具体过程，包括母子如何准备工具和种子，如何小心翼翼地翻土、播种，以及在这个过程中遇到的困难和挑战，如坚硬的土壤、难以清理的瓦砾等。同时，着重刻画儿子的表现和反应，他可能会因为好奇而兴奋地忙碌着，也可能会因为遇到困难而有些沮丧，但在 “我” 的鼓励下继续坚持。可以提及 “我” 在这个过程中对儿子说的一些鼓励的话语，以及儿子的回应，展现母子之间的互动和情感交流，突出他们对花园的期待和对美好生活的向往。 · 第二段：讲述花园建成后给母子俩带来的积极影响和变化。描述花园里的植物逐渐生长、开花、结果的景象，以及儿子在花园中的快乐时光，如他在花丛中嬉戏、观察昆虫、与邻居小伙伴分享花园的喜悦等。重点突出儿子的心理变化，他从之前的消极、自卑逐渐变得自信、开朗，对生活充满了热情和希望。同时，也可以描写 “我” 看到儿子变化后的内心感受，如欣慰、感动等，体现亲情的温暖和力量，以及花园在他们生活中的重要意义。最后，通过母子在花园中的温馨场景，升华文章的主题，传达出在困境中保持乐观、积极创造美好生活的信念和勇气。 情感线：故事开始时，儿子因疾病产生自我否定，“我” 则因儿子的病情而感到痛苦、无奈和焦虑，整个家庭笼罩在疾病的阴影之下，情感氛围沉重压抑。在种植花园的过程中，儿子逐渐表现出好奇和兴奋，“我” 也因此看到了一丝希望，情感上有了一些积极的转变，从绝望中慢慢挣扎出来，开始期待花园能给儿子带来改变。随着花园的逐渐建成和植物的生长，儿子变得越来越快乐、自信，“我” 也感受到了欣慰和幸福，家庭氛围变得温馨和谐，情感从消极走向积极，最终达到了充满希望和温暖的状态，生动地展现了情感在困境中随着生活的变化而发生的转变，突出了希望和爱的力量对人们心理的积极影响。 故事线： 1. 儿子因病陷入自我否定，“我” 深感痛心。 2. 儿子两岁时被诊断患有二型糖尿病，病情逐渐加重，“我” 成为全职护理者。 3. 四岁时，全家搬到新住宅区，后花园条件恶劣。 4. 母子决定在花园种植，开启新希望。 5. 详细描述种植过程及儿子在其中的表现和变化。 6. 花园建成后，儿子重获快乐自信，家庭充满希望。 主旨升华句： 1. In the harshest of circumstances, a glimmer of hope can be found, and with love and perseverance, it can grow into a beautiful garden of life, filling our hearts with joy and purpose.（在最艰难的环境中，也能找到一丝希望之光，凭借爱与毅力，它可以成长为美丽的生命花园，让我们的内心充满喜悦和目标。） 2. Life may present us with challenges as rocky as a barren garden, but it is our determination and the love we share that can transform it into a place of wonder and renewal, where the seeds of hope can blossom.（生活可能会给我们带来像荒芜花园般崎岖的挑战，但正是我们的决心和彼此的爱，能够将其转变为一个充满奇迹和新生的地方，让希望的种子绽放花朵。） 3. When faced with the broken pieces of life, like a child's shattered spirit, it is through the act of nurturing and the power of love that we can piece them back together, creating a mosaic of beauty and strength.（当面对生活的破碎，如同孩子破碎的心灵时，正是通过培育的行为和爱的力量，我们可以将它们重新拼凑起来，创造出一幅美丽与力量的镶嵌画。） 4. The journey of motherhood, intertwined with a child's struggle against illness, is like tending to a difficult garden. But with every act of care and every moment of love, we can cultivate a world of hope and happiness, defying the odds.（母亲的旅程与孩子对抗疾病的斗争交织在一起，就像照料一个艰难的花园。但通过每一个关爱的举动和每一刻的爱，我们可以培育出一个充满希望和幸福的世界，战胜困难。） 5. In the rubble of despair, a simple act of planting a garden can sow the seeds of transformation, not only for the land but for the human spirit. It is a testament to the power of hope and the resilience of the human heart.（在绝望的废墟中，一个种植花园的简单行为可以播下转变的种子，不仅为这片土地，也为人类的精神。这是希望的力量和人类心灵韧性的证明。） 写作示范一 Soon after we moved in, my son and I decided to plant a garden. We gathered our shovels and trowels, and with great anticipation, began to dig into the unyielding earth. My son's small hands grasped the seeds tightly, as if they held the key to a better world. As we worked, the sun beat down on us, but we didn't mind. We carefully removed the rocks and debris, making room for our precious plants. My son's eyes were filled with determination, and he whispered to the seeds, "Grow strong, just like me." When we finally planted the first seeds, he clapped his hands in delight, and for a moment, the weight of his illness seemed to lift. This small garden let us both live again. It became a haven of peace and joy. The first sprouts emerged, and my son watched them with awe, as if witnessing a miracle. He would spend hours in the garden, watering the plants and chasing butterflies. His laughter filled the air, and I saw the light return to his eyes. Through this garden, he learned that life was full of possibilities, even in the face of adversity. And I learned that love and hope could bloom in the most unlikely of places. As we sat among the flowers, hand in hand, I knew that our journey had been transformed, and that together, we could face anything that came our way. 写作示范二 Soon after we moved in, my son and I decided to plant a garden. We went to the local store and picked out a variety of seeds, imagining the colorful blooms and delicious vegetables that would one day grace our yard. Back home, we rolled up our sleeves and got to work. The soil was tough, but we persevered. My son's face was smeared with dirt, but he had a smile that could brighten the darkest day. When we hit a particularly large rock, he looked at me and said, "We can do it, Mummy." And so, we dug around it and continued. As we planted each seed, we said a little prayer, hoping for a bountiful harvest. This small garden let us both live again. It was a place where my son could forget about his illness and be a child again. He would run through the rows of plants, his laughter echoing through the neighborhood. The flowers bloomed in a riot of colors, attracting bees and birds, and filling our hearts with wonder. The garden became a symbol of our resilience and the power of hope. It taught us that even in the most difficult times, we could create something beautiful. And as my son's health improved, I knew that it was in part because of the love and life we had nurtured in that small patch of earth. We had found our paradise, and it was right there in our backyard. 参考答案 Soon after we moved in, my son and I decided to plant a garden. He worked out plans with his drawings. Soon after we started digging, slowly seeing the bones of his dream become reality. We used what we could find. We taught ourselves how to build ponds, and how to grow food. For plants, we rescued the weeds that would otherwise be dug up. My son tenderly transplanted these into our new beds with a welcome, as if each were the most delicate of flowers. Plant by plant, our garden grew, creating a place of magic and medicine, for all that lived there - plants, animals and humans. This small garden let us both live again. He brought delight into my world, and I scattered into his the magic of small seeds. As our little garden took shape, we both discovered an important thing: that even though things might not be perfect, even though there might be things that are hard and hurt, even though the ground may be broken, this soil still holds the potential to nurture and grow our dreams. We imagined ourselves a secret garden that began with the simplest of things: a weed. From it, we grew joy. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$