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湖北省九师联盟•宜昌市协作体2024-2025学年高三上学期期中考试英语试题 第二节（满分25分） 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 “Daddy, I want to ask your permission to study in America,” I said to my father a few months before my graduation from high school. But hardly before I finished, he shouted, “No!” “But why?” I replied. “If you are worried about money, it will be OK since I have got a scholarship...” But he refused to give in. At the moment, I didn’t know what to say. For more than two years, I had been working very hard to pass all the necessary examinations. I had not told my father because I wanted to give him a pleasant surprise. I thought he would be very proud of me because it was many of my classmates’ parents’ dream to send their children to study abroad. “Why do I have to get your permission? I am already 18 and I’m not a kid anymore,” I said angrily and rushed to my bedroom, shutting the door violently. Blinded by anger, I found that I could not stay at my hometown any longer. Late that night, I slipped out of the house and decided to take the bus to the railway station to start my own life as far away from my home as possible. The bus stop was just two blocks away from my home. When I got there, I found that I forgot to take any money with me and missed the last bus. I did not want to go back home, so I sat down on the bench and closed my eyes to have a break. Suddenly, I was woken up by my phone. I looked around and found the road was deserted and the street was so quiet that I regretted that I had left home in such a hurry. I picked up the phone and answered the phone even without checking the number. “Have you had a good sleep? It’s going to rain. Shall we go home now?” 注意：1.续写词数应为150个左右； 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1: It was my father’s voice! Paragraph 2: I grabbed my bag and hurried toward him. 原文分析：红色定从/定语；蓝色宾从；黄色状从，只标连词；下划线标黄单词为需掌握积累单词；从句类会用斜体标注；需积累部分黑体加粗下划线；(定语从句1) 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。第二节（满分25分） 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 “Daddy, I want to ask your permission to study in America,” I said to my father a few months before my graduation from high school. But hardly before I finished, he shouted, “No!” “But why?” I replied. “If you are worried about money(状从), it will be OK since I have got a scholarship...” But he refused to give in. At the moment, I didn’t know what to say(宾从). For more than two years, I had been working very hard to pass all the necessary examinations. I had not told my father because I wanted to give him a pleasant surprise(状从). I thought he would be very proud of me(宾从) because it was many of my classmates’ parents’ dream to send their children to study abroad(状从). “Why do I have to get your permission? I am already 18 and I’m not a kid anymore,” I said angrily and rushed to my bedroom, shutting the door violently(非谓语动词短语做伴随动作). Blinded by anger(非谓语动词短语做原因状语), I found that I could not stay at my hometown any longer(宾从). Late that night, I slipped out of the house and decided to take the bus to the railway station to start my own life as far away from my home as possible. The bus stop was just two blocks away from my home. When I got there(状从), I found that I forgot to take any money with me and missed the last bus(宾从). I did not want to go back home, so I sat down on the bench and closed my eyes to have a break(状从). Suddenly, I was woken up by my phone. I looked around and found the road was deserted and the street was so quiet(宾从) that I regretted that I had left home in such a hurry(目的状从+宾从). I picked up the phone and answered the phone even without checking the number. “Have you had a good sleep? It’s going to rain. Shall we go home now?” 注意：1.续写词数应为150个左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1: It was my father’s voice! Paragraph 2: I grabbed my bag and hurried toward him. 第一部分：文章分析与语料整理 1. 高中语法现象 - 倒装句：如“Hardly before I finished...”（否定副词放句首，主谓倒装）。 - 情态动词：如“shall we go home now?”表示提议和建议。 - 强调句型：如“Why do I have to get your permission?”（do用于加强语气）。 - 现在完成时：如“I have got a scholarship...”（描述过去对现在的影响）。 - 宾语从句：如“I thought he would be very proud of me...” - 非谓语动词：如“Blinded by anger...”（过去分词作状语）。 2. 常见搭配与可积累语料 - 常见搭配： - ask one’s permission to do something（请求某人许可做某事） - give in（让步） - take the bus to（乘车去某地） - proud of someone（为某人感到骄傲） - 可积累语料： - I didn’t know what to say.（表达无语或惊讶） - It was going to rain.（预示天气变化） - I regretted that I had left home...（表示后悔的句式）。 3. 生词短语解析 第二部分：读后续写思路与方法 1. 构思框架 根据高考读后续写要求，情节发展需要承接原文并适当拓展： - 核心情节：父亲找到主人公、父女关系化解，主人公理解父亲的出发点，父亲支持主人公的梦想。 - 段落设计： 1. 父亲的语气、态度及主人公的心理变化（惊讶、感动）。 2. 父女回家路上的对话，化解矛盾，父亲表露关心，主人公承诺努力。 2. 注意事项 - 情感流露：需体现父爱的无声关怀和主人公的成长。 - 衔接连贯：采用代词、逻辑词承接，例如“then,” “however,” “finally”。 - 细节描写：如环境、动作、心理描写，增加画面感。 3. 推荐例句 动作描写： 1. He extended his hand to me, his face soft with concern. 2. I grabbed my bag and rushed toward him without a second thought. 3. He gently draped his jacket over my shoulders to keep me warm. 心理描写： 1. My heart skipped a beat as I realized it was my father’s voice. 2. Guilt washed over me as I thought about my impulsive decision. 3. Gratitude filled my heart when I saw him standing there in the rain. 环境描写： 1. The streetlights cast a dim glow on the wet pavement. 2. A cold wind whispered through the empty street, sending chills down my spine. 3. The first drops of rain began to fall, dotting the ground with dark spots. 第三部分：分类与续写指导 文章类型分类 该文章属于亲情类续写，需要重点突出情感的表达和人物关系的变化。 巧妙设计续写内容与方向 1. 强调父亲的无私关怀，例如为了保护孩子深夜外出寻找。 2. 主人公的情感成长，从叛逆到理解与感恩。 3. 巧用自然环境（雨夜）衬托情感氛围。 Possible Answer 1 Paragraph 1: It was my father’s voice! I froze in disbelief, clutching my phone tightly. My father was never one to show his emotions openly, but his familiar tone was filled with worry. “I’m sorry, Dad,” I whispered, my voice trembling. “I didn’t mean to hurt you.” He sighed heavily, but his voice softened. “I know, but you scared me. Let’s talk this through at home.” Paragraph 2: I grabbed my bag and hurried toward him, tears streaming down my face. When I saw him standing under the streetlight, holding an umbrella, I felt a surge of relief. He opened his arms, and I ran into them, sobbing. On the way home, he told me he only wanted the best for me, and I realized how much he cared. That night, we reached an understanding, and I promised to never shut him out again. 语料升级与替换 - 短语替换： - ask one’s permission → seek one’s approval - give in → compromise - 词汇升级： - angry → furious - regret → remorse 一、文章分析 1. 高中语法现象分析 - 间接引语 - 示例：“Daddy, I want to ask your permission to study in America,” I said to my father... - 特点：直接引语用双引号包裹，展示人物对话。 - 可积累语料： - ask sb. for permission to do sth. - said to sb. - 倒装句 - 示例：Hardly before I finished, he shouted... - 特点：表示否定意义的副词开头时需用部分倒装。 - 原因状语从句 - 示例：If you are worried about money, it will be OK... - 特点：使用从句解释因果关系。 - 可积累语料： - If you are worried about..., it will be fine. - 定语从句 - 示例：I thought he would be very proud of me because it was many of my classmates’ parents’ dream to send their children to study abroad. - 特点：定语从句修饰名词 dream。 2. 常见搭配与可积累语料 - ask permission to do sth. - refuse to give in - rush to one’s bedroom - miss the last bus - slip out of the house - pick up the phone 二、续写思路分析 1. 构思框架 续写应以情节发展和情感升华为核心： - Paragraph 1: 父亲在电话中询问女儿状况，语气关心但含蓄，表现父亲对女儿的爱与担忧。女儿听到父亲声音后情绪复杂，意识到自己鲁莽的行为。 - Paragraph 2: 父亲到达车站，父女重逢并冰释前嫌。结尾可点出父亲的包容与爱，女儿理解父亲的初衷。 2. 提炼框架要点 - 父亲如何找到女儿？体现父亲的用心与紧张情绪。 - 女儿如何反应？表现心理转变（从叛逆到后悔）。 - 重逢场景的环境、动作、情绪描写。 3. 实施要点 - 注意人物心理变化的渐进性，不要过于跳跃。 - 结尾升华主题，可通过细节暗示父爱的深沉。 4. 注意事项 - 时态以过去时为主，偶尔使用过去完成时。 - 人物对话符合语境，避免生硬。 - 不要忽略环境描写的作用，用以渲染情感氛围。 --- 三、情境描写推荐例句 1. 动作描写 - He ran his fingers through his hair, looking anxious and tired. - She tightened her grip on the bag, unsure of what to do next. - His footsteps echoed in the quiet street as he approached cautiously. 2. 心理描写 - A wave of regret washed over her as she realized how impulsive she had been. - He couldn’t help but worry about her safety, imagining the worst scenarios. - Her heart skipped a beat when she heard his familiar voice over the phone. 3. 环境描写 - The dim streetlights cast long shadows on the deserted road. - A light drizzle began to fall, adding a chill to the already cold night. - The silence was broken only by the rustling of leaves in the breeze. --- 四、续写范文 范文一 Paragraph 1: It was my father’s voice! For a moment, I was stunned, unable to believe that he had come to find me. “Dad?” I stammered, tears welling up in my eyes. “Why are you here?” His voice remained calm but carried a trace of worry. “Because you’re my daughter. No matter how angry you are, your safety comes first,” he said. The warmth in his words melted my stubbornness, and I realized how much I had hurt him with my rash actions. Paragraph 2: I grabbed my bag and hurried toward him, tears streaming down my face. He stood there, his coat wet from the light drizzle, holding an umbrella for me. “Let’s go home,” he said softly, his eyes filled with love and concern. On our way back, he explained why he had refused my request earlier. “I was afraid of losing you,” he admitted. I finally understood his feelings and promised to communicate better in the future. 范文二 Paragraph 1 It was my father’s voice! My heart froze as a whirlwind of emotions swept through me—shock, relief, and guilt all at once. “Dad,” I whispered, barely able to form words. “How did you find me?” His voice, steady but tinged with concern, replied, “I’ve always known where to find you. You’re my daughter; no matter where you go, I’ll follow.” The weight of his words pressed on my chest, and a lump formed in my throat. How blind I had been to his silent love and care, masked by his stern demeanor. Paragraph 2 I grabbed my bag and hurried toward him, my legs trembling with each step. The sight of him standing under the streetlight, his figure silhouetted against the faint glow, struck me like a poignant painting. “I’m sorry, Dad,” I murmured, tears spilling down my cheeks as the rain began to fall. Without hesitation, he opened his umbrella and held it over me, shielding me from the cold drops. “Let’s talk at home,” he said, his voice softer than ever. That night, as we sat together, he explained his fears—fears of losing me, fears of the unknown. It dawned on me that his refusal stemmed not from lack of support but from overwhelming love. --- 范文三 Paragraph 1 It was my father’s voice! The moment I heard it, a wave of guilt crashed over me. My rebellion seemed so petty under the moon’s pale light. “Dad?” I said hesitantly, clutching the phone tighter. His voice was calm, but I could sense the exhaustion in it. “It’s late. You must be cold. Let’s go home,” he said. The simplicity of his words pierced through the wall of anger I had built. How foolish I was to think he didn’t care! I realized that his love was not in words but in actions—steady, unwavering, and always present. Paragraph 2 I grabbed my bag and hurried toward him, my steps quickening as the drizzle turned into a downpour. As I approached, I saw him standing in the rain, holding a flashlight to guide me. “Dad!” I called out, my voice cracking with emotion. He turned and smiled faintly, his face etched with concern and relief. “You’ve grown up, but to me, you’ll always be my little girl,” he said, pulling off his jacket to drape it over my shoulders. That night, back home, we talked for hours. For the first time, I saw the world from his perspective, and he listened to my dreams with an open heart. In the end, we found common ground, proving that love doesn’t always require agreement—it simply requires understanding. --- 范文亮点 1. 高分词汇与短语 - A whirlwind of emotions swept through me (情感描写) - Steady but tinged with concern (修辞手法) - Pierced through the wall of anger I had built (隐喻) - His figure silhouetted against the faint glow (环境描写) - Dawned on me (常用高频表达) 2. 修辞方法 - 比喻与拟人：a wave of guilt crashed over me - 对比：父亲的严厉与关爱之间的矛盾体现情感深度。 - 反复：No matter where you go, I’ll follow 强调父爱的无私与坚定。 3. 语法点覆盖 - 倒装：How blind I had been to his silent love! - 感叹句：What a fool I had been! - 现在完成时：It dawned on me that his refusal stemmed from love. - 定语从句：The sight of him standing under the streetlight... 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$