读后续写——家庭温暖篇 讲义-2025届高三上学期英语一轮复习专项

文本原文 It was a privilege for Eloise to have her grandson Josh living with her while he was attending college away from home, Eloise had struggled to keep herself busy since her husband's death three years ago, But having Josh around was motivation for Eloise to stay active, Now most of her days were spent baking bread and cookies or with friends and neighbors. When Eloise returned from a get-together with her friends one evening, josh pointed to a black-and-white picture lying on the table, and said, “Hi, Grandma. I found this in my closet(橱). Is that you and Granddad?” Eloise looked at the picture and laughed quietly.“Oh, that was a long time ago. I must have overlooked it when I was cleaning to make room for your things. “That's your granddad and me before we were married,We met at a party. I loved to dance, and he was a go0ddancer,” Eloise smiled, enjoying the memories that came flooding back. “ After we got married, we rarely had time to go dancing.But every once in a while, after the children went to bed, we'd pull out the record player and dance in the backyard under the stars. Leaning back in his chair, Josh appeared to be enjoying“Wow, Granddad was quite a romantic guy!”the story. “Yeah. He was very romantic, l still miss him dearly.Eloise shook her head, attempting to get rid of the lonely“Well, it's getting late feeling that was beginning to form,,“I've really enjoyed hearing the now, Let's get some sleep.story about you and Granddad,” Josh hugged his grandma.Then he went back to his room. Two hours ago, Mum called to tell him that the next day would be Grandma's birthday, He eagerly wanted to give a special present to Grandma, but he was short of money. After hearing Grandma's words and knowing their story, he got a brilliant idea in his mind. Paragraph 1: The next morning, Josh started to prepare his "present from the past" secretly.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2: After finishing dinner that night, Josh invited and led his grandma to the backyard.________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 一、文章主旨 文章围绕 Eloise 和她的孙子 Josh 的生活展开，讲述了 Josh 偶然发现 Eloise 与丈夫婚前的照片，Eloise 回忆起与丈夫的过往，包括相识于舞会以及婚后偶尔在星空下跳舞的浪漫经历。之后 Josh 得知第二天是 Eloise 的生日，因缺钱而决定利用这些回忆准备一份特殊的 “来自过去的礼物”，文章通过祖孙间的互动与回忆，展现了家庭情感的温暖与传承，表达了对往昔美好情感的怀念与珍视。 二、文章结构与段落大意 第一段：文本开篇介绍了 Eloise 在丈夫去世后的生活状态以及 Josh 与她同住给她带来的积极影响。接着讲述了 Josh 发现照片引发 Eloise 对过去爱情故事的回忆，包括与丈夫的相识和婚后的浪漫瞬间。最后提及 Josh 得知 Eloise 生日且因缺钱而有了准备特殊礼物的想法。此段为后文 Josh 准备礼物做铺垫，可续写 Josh 具体准备礼物的过程，如他如何寻找音乐、布置场地等，以营造出曾经的浪漫氛围。 第二段：承接第一段，续写 Josh 准备好礼物后，在晚餐后邀请 Eloise 到后院的情节。这里可以详细描述后院的场景布置、Eloise 的反应以及祖孙俩在 “重现” 的浪漫氛围中的互动，最终体现这份特殊礼物对 Eloise 的情感触动，展现家庭情感在代际间的传递与深化。 三、语言特色与词汇运用 情感表达细腻：通过 Eloise 的回忆和情感流露，如 “Eloise shook her head, attempting to get rid of the lonely feeling that was beginning to form”，生动地展现了她对丈夫的思念之情以及在回忆中的情感波动，使读者能深切感受到她内心的情感世界。 日常词汇传递温情：使用 “baking bread and cookies”“get-together”“hugged” 等日常词汇，描绘出家庭生活的温馨场景和祖孙间亲密的关系，让故事充满生活气息和亲情的温暖。 对话推动情节：文中 Josh 与 Eloise 的对话自然流畅，如 “Hi, Grandma. I found this in my closet (橱). Is that you and Granddad?”“That's your granddad and me before we were married. We met at a party.” 这些对话不仅丰富了人物形象，还巧妙地推动了故事的发展，引出回忆和后续情节。 四、续写思路示例 第一段续写： Josh 首先在网上搜索了 Eloise 那个年代流行的浪漫舞曲，精心挑选了几首并下载到手机里。然后，他将后院简单地布置了一番，搬来一张小桌子，在桌子上放置了一个老式的蜡烛台，插上蜡烛。他还从邻居家借来一台便携式音箱，将手机连接好，确保音乐能够顺利播放。接着，他在院子中央清理出一块空地，就像 Eloise 回忆中他们跳舞的场地一样。之后，他写了一张温馨的小卡片，上面写着对 Eloise 的生日祝福以及对她和爷爷爱情故事的敬意。一切准备就绪后，他怀着期待又紧张的心情等待夜晚的到来。 第二段续写： 当 Eloise 来到后院时，她被眼前的景象惊呆了。蜡烛的微光在微风中摇曳，熟悉的音乐缓缓响起。Josh 走到 Eloise 面前，微微鞠躬，像一位绅士一样伸出手，说道：“奶奶，生日快乐。我想带您回到过去。”Eloise 的眼中闪烁着泪花，她握住 Josh 的手，仿佛看到了年轻时的丈夫。他们在院子里慢慢地舞动起来，Eloise 沉浸在回忆中，脸上洋溢着幸福的笑容。随着音乐的流淌，Eloise 轻声地给 Josh 讲述着更多与爷爷的故事，Josh 静静地听着，祖孙俩的心灵在这一刻更加贴近。舞毕，Eloise 紧紧地抱住 Josh，感激他为自己准备的这份特殊而珍贵的礼物，这个夜晚成为了他们心中一段难忘的美好回忆。 续写答案 The next morning, Josh started to prepare his "present from the past" secretly. He rummaged through the attic, searching for the old record player that his grandma had mentioned. After much effort, he finally found it covered in a layer of dust. He carefully cleaned it and checked if it still worked. Then, he rushed to the local thrift store to buy a vinyl record of the kind of music his grandparents used to dance to. Back home, he set up the record player on a small table in the backyard and arranged some chairs around it. He also picked a bouquet of wildflowers from the nearby field and placed it in a vase beside the table. After finishing dinner that night, Josh invited and led his grandma to the backyard. As they walked through the door, Eloise gasped in surprise. The soft glow of the moonlight illuminated the backyard, and the old record player was playing a familiar, nostalgic tune. The wildflowers added a touch of natural beauty to the scene. Josh took Eloise's hand and led her to the makeshift dance floor. "Grandma, happy birthday. I wanted to bring back a bit of the past for you," he said with a warm smile. Eloise's eyes filled with tears of joy as she remembered those wonderful nights with her husband. They began to dance slowly, and Eloise felt as if she was transported back in time. She told Josh more stories about her life with his granddad as they twirled around. When the dance ended, Eloise hugged Josh tightly. "This is the most beautiful gift I've ever received. Thank you, dear," she whispered. Josh beamed with pride, knowing that he had created a truly memorable and meaningful birthday for his beloved grandma. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$