云南省昆明市五华区2024-2025学年九年级上学期11月期中统测英语试题应用文写作--叙述一个你与微笑的故事

24年11月20日昆明市五华区初三统测应用文写作 微笑能温暖人心，能给予人力量。回忆一下，在你的生活中，谁的微笑令你印象深刻呢?请你以“A Smile l Can't Forget”为题，叙述一个你与“微笑”的故事。 注意：1. 写作词数应为80左右；2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 题目分析和写作策略建议 微笑是人类共同的肢体语言，也是最常见的表情之一。考生一定不缺和“微笑”有关的生活体验和写作素材。因此，叙述一个和“微笑”相关的故事不是一件难事。 提醒大家一句话：英语水平一般的同学不要试图描写“微笑”的面部细节。原因不难理解，描写面部细节需要使用如“嘴角上扬”（A faint upward curve formed on the lips.）“眼中带笑”（eyes sparkled with joy）“露齿微笑”（A wide grin stretched across the face）等细化的词汇，然而英语水平一般的同学可能缺乏相关表达，容易用词不当，导致表述生硬或含义模糊。 对于大多数同学，我们建议大家不如用简洁的形容词来大致描述，如“温暖的微笑”（A heartwarming smile）或“鼓励的微笑”（An encouraging smile），直接传递情感和意义。要知道，在不少阅卷老师眼里，在中学阶段的英语考试作文实际评价体系中，语法和拼写的正确性是第一位的。 语言积累 1. A smile is a curve that sets everything straight.（微笑是一道能让一切变直的曲线。） 2. A simple smile can hide a thousand pains.（一个简单的微笑可以隐藏千般痛苦。） 3. A smile is the universal language of kindness.（微笑是善良的通用语言。） 4. Her smile was like a beam of light in the dark.（她的微笑就像黑暗中的一束光。） 5. The power of a smile can break down barriers.（微笑的力量可以打破障碍。） 6. A smile costs nothing but gives much.（微笑无需付出代价却给予很多。） 7. With a smile, you can make a stranger a friend.（带着微笑，你可以让陌生人成为朋友。） 8. His warm smile made me feel at ease.（他温暖的微笑让我感到自在。） 9. A smile is the best makeup a person can wear.（微笑是一个人能拥有的最好妆容。） 10. The memory of her smile lingers in my heart.（她微笑的记忆萦绕在我心中。） 写作示范（137 words） A Smile I Can't Forget  Smiles can always warm people's hearts. In my life, there are so many smiles. The one I remember most is my mother's smile when I was in Grade 8. I had performed poorly on a math exam and was filled with fear and anxiety on my way home, expecting my mom to criticize me. However, when I showed her the test paper, she didn't scold me. Instead, she gave me a gentle smile and said, "Let's figure out what went wrong together." Her smile was full of understanding and encouragement, making me feel supported rather than ashamed. Together, we reviewed my mistakes and found ways to improve. Now, looking back, I realize how much that smile shaped my attitude towards failure and growth. My mom's smile gave me the strength to face challenges and strive for better results. 写作点评 写作素材是非常具有学生和老师体验共性的。她讲到“我”初二的某一次数学考试考得很差，担心自己无法面对母亲，但没想到母亲用微笑和理性的分析帮“我”解除了焦虑找到了走出困境的办法。大家可以学习张老师的这种素材选取策略。选择简单且符合学生实际的故事来描述，很容易就能被阅读者（阅卷老师）理解。 另外，尽管此次考试出题人没有在题目中明确要求考生写“感悟”，但是在叙述故事结束之后，在文章结尾搞一些小“升华”、说一些“正能量鸡汤”是一种安全、稳妥、主流的中考英语写作习惯。“鸡汤感悟”是“…that smile shaped my attitude towards failure and growth. My mom's smile gave me the strength to face challenges and strive for better results.” 词汇和表达推荐 perform poorly  (verb phrase) 表现不好 anxiety (noun) 焦虑 criticize (verb) 批评 scold (verb) 责备、 a gentle smile (noun phrase) 一个温柔的微笑 figure out (phrasal verb) 弄清楚 encouragement (noun) 鼓励 ashamed (adjective) 羞愧的 review (verb) 回顾，复习 attitude (noun) 态度 failure (noun) 失败 growth (noun) 成长 strive for sth (phrasal verb) 努力争取某事 下水文1 A Smile I Can't Forget It was a dull, gray day and I was feeling down. I had just received a poor grade on my math test and was walking home in a bad mood. As I trudged along the sidewalk, I noticed an old man sitting on a bench. He seemed to be poor, with shabby clothes and a worn-out hat. He looked up at me and smiled. It was a warm, genuine smile that reached his eyes. His teeth were not perfect, but that didn't matter. In that smile, I saw kindness and understanding. It was as if he knew what I was going through and was trying to comfort me. That simple smile changed my day. It made me realize that a small act of kindness could have a big impact. I smiled back at him and continued my walk home, feeling a little bit better. His smile has stayed with me ever since, a reminder that even in the darkest times, a smile can bring light and hope. 下水文2 A Smile I Can't Forget I remember the first day of my new school. I was nervous and shy, not knowing anyone. As I walked into the classroom, I felt like all eyes were on me. I found a seat and sat down, trying to make myself as small as possible. The teacher walked in and started the class. After a while, she asked me a question. I stood up, my face turning red, and stammered out an answer. I was sure I had made a fool of myself. But then, the girl sitting next to me smiled at me. It was a friendly, encouraging smile. Her smile gave me the confidence to continue. I started to participate more in class and made some friends. That smile was the beginning of a great school year for me. It made me feel welcome and accepted. I will never forget that girl's smile, which was like a beam of sunshine on a cloudy day, brightening my new school life. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$