成长话题之读后续写剖析讲义-2025届高三英语一轮复习

· 成长话题之读后续写 · 一.成长类之室内比赛类话题 · 本话题通常与家庭生活、校园生活有关相关，作者本人在学校遇到问题，家人、朋友、老师给予帮助，并且战胜自我。 · 场所特点：活动在校内—回到家里-返回学校参赛/展示 · 二.行文策略 · 1.契诃夫的枪（物尽其用原则） · 找出文章中的隐性线索，使用篇章中的人/物，使文章内容充实。 · 2.五定十句法：根据第一段首句定首段第二句。根据第二段首句定第一段末句。根据第二段首句定第二段第二句。根据前文的内容定第二段最后的主题句（可以用一到两句话）。其余内容根据前文内容进行推导其余句子，推导方法如下： · 1.勾出前文出现的人物、地点等内容（5个w和1个h）。 · 2.勾出前文人物出现的动作，循环利用动词或替换同义词。 · 3.根据前文合理推导后文动作，增添情绪，使用环境描写烘托气氛。 · 句子的格式： · 主角+动作（+心情） 对话（主角/配角） 配角+动作（+心情） 环境+主角心情 主角+动作+环境+心情 · 三.公式句 · 公式1►　　(a burst/wave/sense/feeling of＋)表情绪的名词＋特定动词(短语)＋sb，表示“某人感到……”或“一阵/一种……向某人袭来” · 公式2►　　表“情感”的介词短语，主＋谓 · 常用的表情绪的“to one's＋情感名词或in/with＋情感名词”，如with delight/anger/terror“高兴地/生气地/惊恐地”等介词短语置于句首，能使情感细节描写更为具体。 · 公式3►连贯动作： Sb did A, did B and did C · 注意：第三个动作可以变为V-ing形式作伴随状语 · 公式4►V-ing（时间状语），主角/配角+谓语（过去时）+其他 · 公式5►形容词(短语), 主＋谓．.. · 公式6►过去分词+by+it, 主＋谓． · 四.成长比赛类常用肢体动作 · patted拍 stood 站 dragged one's feet 拖着脚步 · lowered/dropped the head低头 raise the head抬头 · shook the head摇头 thumbed up on sb对某人竖大拇指 · added补充 replied回复 comforted安慰 · spotted目击 observe注视 · 五.成长比赛常用情绪 · 情绪走向： · 第一段：害怕/焦虑—释怀 · 第二段：紧张—冷静—泰然自若—开心/兴奋 · 形容词：anxious/stressed out（焦虑的）relaxed轻松的 · 名词：anxiety焦虑/relief轻松 · 动词：calm down冷静下来 · 介词短语：at ease轻松 to one‘s joy/delight令某人开心的是 with excitement兴奋地 · 六.成长话题常用室内环境句 · 家里看户外 · Stars appeared in the sky, twinkling their eyes at them in happiness，seeming to inspire me/ him/her.天上繁星点点，高兴地向他们眨着眼睛。 · At the time,there was a bright moon in the sky.Then I prayed to it for good luck.此刻天空有一轮明月。于是我开始向它祈求好运。 · Dotted with glittering stars, the sky, midnight blue, gave the scene a fairytale quality.Seeing this sight,I felt relieved.深蓝色的天空点缀着闪烁的星星，给这一场景增添了童话般的色彩。看到这个场景时我倍感宽慰。 · · 七.表演时的情绪 · 人 felt the throat tight and the palms sweating. · 某人感到喉咙发紧，手心流汗。（用于第二段开头的紧张情绪） · With the light splashing on his/her face，a sense of excitement seized him/her. · 灯光洒在他/她的脸上，一种兴奋感油然而生。 · 八.成长比赛类话题常用对话 · Don't worry，my kid！ · Well done/A good job！干得好 · Come on！加油 · Thanks,my teacher！ · 九.成长类话题常用时间副词或短语 · after that在那之后 afterwards之后 · at the time此刻 at that time那时 · at first/initially起初 · In the beginning开始时 · The match being over比赛结束后（独立主格） · from then on从那以后 · 成长类话题之主题句 · 人 came to realize that without Mum and the teacher，人 wouldn’t have overcome the difficulty. · 考题链接（11月湖北新协作体高三联考） · Mary could not forget the way she had frozen in front of the class today. Mr. Brown had asked the class to do presentations. Today was Mary’s turn. However, her hands shook so badly that she couldn’t read her notes. Her voice became softer to the point of silence. Mr. Brown kindly ended Mary’s part of the presentation, even though she did clearly not finished. He also asked Mary to stay after class for a moment. · “Mary. I know you’ re shy, but you worked hard on this project. I’d hate to see you give up on yourself.” Then Mr. Brown hesitated, before saying. “If I give you another chance until tomorrow, do you think you can find your courage?” Mary nodded, grateful for the chance. She went as quickly as she could to her next class. She kept her head down and hoped the school day would end soon. · When she reached home that afternoon, she could see an inviting light coming from the kitchen windows. Mom was baking. Mom studied Mary’s face as she came into the kitchen. “What’s wrong, baby?” · Tears shone in Mary’s brown eyes. She told Mom the whole story. Mom was silent for a moment. her hands still busy with the cake. “Why is it that you can talk to me about everything, but you can’t talk to your class?” Mom asked and then said, “Let me show you something.” · Mary followed Mom to her bedroom. There Mom showed her a book filled with newspaper clippings and pictures. In it there was a red ribbon（丝带）that said “First Place” and a picture of herself when she was very young, standing with her parents. · “I won it for public speaking. When I started on the speech team I was quiet as a mouse, but I ended the year as the winner. It wasn’t easy at first — I wasn’t sure of myself at all. I worked hard, and mostly I faced my fears. You just need to find your courage.” · 注意：1．续写词数应为150左右；2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 · Hearing Mom’s words. Mary gazed at the precious red ribbon.______________________________________ · The next day Mary again walked to the front of the classroom to give her presentation. __________________ · 范文讲解 · 本文属于成长班级展示话题，前提提要如下： · 前文讲述了Mary在班级不敢做陈述，Mr Brown又给了她一次机会。回到家后她闷闷不乐，正在做蛋糕的妈妈知道了一切，拿出以前努力获得的红丝带鼓舞她。 隐含线索：第一段发生的时间是下午，红丝带就是“契诃夫的枪”，必须提及。妈妈当时在做蛋糕，而顺延时间可以提到做晚饭。然后第二天要继续进行陈述，因此第一段必须提到在家里联练习。 · 第二段必须提到灵魂人物Mr Brown，同时也可以用红丝带推进剧情。Mary上台的时候情绪由波折：从紧张到平复，再到成功后的喜悦，最后升华主题。 · 原创范文赏析（第一篇） · Hearing Mom’s words,Mary gazed at the precious red ribbon.It witnessed her mother’s success.Mum patted her shoulder gently，adding,“This ribbon is your mascot making you brave.”After that，mum continued making the cake and dinner.After dinner，Mary returned to her bedroom,intending to practice the presentation.She stood in front of the mirror to read her notes.At first she still shook her hands badly. However,recalling what her mum had said，Mary calmed down,trying to make the presentation fluent.Having practiced it for ten times，a sense of relaxation seized her.At the time,there was a bright moon in the sky.She prayed to the moon,wore the red ribbon,and then slept. · The next day Mary again walked to the front of the classroom to give her presentation.Initially when facing her classmates，she felt her throat tight and her palms sweating.Suddenly, she lowered her head,seeing the red ribbon.Encouraged by it,she raised her voice,making the presentation natural.To her joy，the presentation ended up with a storm of applause from the classroom.Afterwards,Mr. Brown thumbed up on her,praising,“Well done!”“Thanks for your chance,my teacher.”replied Mary,whose smile lit up the whole classroom. She came to realize that without her mother and her teacher，she wouldn’t have overcome the difficulty.From then on，Mary was no longer shy. · 点评 · 第一段完全覆盖了前文出现的点（红丝带、妈妈做蛋糕、练习陈述），心情由不好变好。大量使用了动作链、 · 无灵主语、分词结构作后置定语、状语，表达多样性。同时还运用了拟人表达，比如画线后的第一句。环境描写画面性强（对着月亮祈祷） · 第二段提到了展示初期的紧张—看到红丝带后振作，赢得掌声—开心—受到老师表扬，深化主题。本段还运用定语从句，将情绪融入掌声之中，用虚拟语气升华主题。 · 范文2 · Hearing Mom’s words,Mary gazed at the precious red ribbon.Mum patted her shoulder gently，adding,“This ribbon is your mascot bringing you fortune.”And then mum continued making the cake as well as dinner.After dinner，Mary returned to her bedroom,embarking on practicing the presentation.She stood in front of the mirror to read her notes.At first she still shook her hands badly . But recalling what her mum had said，Mary took a deep breath,trying her best to make the presentation fluent.After practicing it for ten times，she felt at ease.At the same time,through the window she observed a bright moon in the sky.She prayed to the moon,wore the red ribbon,and then went to bed. · The next day Mary again walked to the front of the classroom to give her presentation.Initially when facing her classmates,a sense of anxiety seized her.Suddenly, she dropped her head,seeing the red ribbon.Under the spell the ribbon，she calmed down,making the presentation natural by raising her sweet voice.What astonished her was that the presentation ended up with a storm of applause.Soon after,Mr. Brown thumbed up on her,praising,“Well done!”“Thanks,my teacher.”replied Mary,whose smile lit up the whole classroom.It dawned upon her that without her mother and her teacher，she wouldn’t have been enough brave.From then on，Mary was not shy any longer. · 范文二替换了部分表达方式，用红色字体勾出。 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$