2025届高考英语读后续写专题之亲情类--父子俩的铁人三项赛 讲义

读后续写题目 Lauri, 59, and his son, Johnny, 28, set out to begin the first of three legs of the Ironman competition in Cambridge. They weren’t the typical contestants. Johnny has cerebral palsy. His difficulty walking is caused by muscle weakness. Lauri would act as his arms and legs, literally carrying the weight of his son throughout the race. To qualify as having finished, contestants must complete 140 miles of swimming, bicycling, and running under 17 hours.From the day Johnny was born, Lauri refused to let his son’s disabilities hold him back. Determined to show Johnny that he could pursue his dream of being an athlete when he was 15, Lauri signed him up with Team Triumph, an organization helping kids with disabilities engage in endurance sports. ”It gave me a new perspective on life,“ Johnny says.Johnny started practicing in racing, and Lauri wanted to be a part of it. Lauri began waking up at 4 a.m. so he could run while pushing Johnny in a personally-designed wheelchair called a racing chair. And Johnny tried so hard to walk using his walker for finishing the last minutes of the Ironman competition, so he may step over the finishing line with his father. ”I wanted to fulfill his dreams," Lauri said. The race began with a 2.4-mile swim in the Choptank River. Lauri helped Johnny into a kayak. With one end of a rope tied to his waist and the other end to the kayak, Lauri eased himself into the water. Swimming while dragging another person is tough enough. The pair completed the swim in 90 minutes, and it was on to the next leg: a 112-mile bicycle ride. Paragraph 1: Their specially-made bike has an additional back seat facing backward for Johnny.____________________________________ Paragraph 2: Then they set their sights on the final leg of the race with Johnny sitting in the racing chair.__________________________ 语篇分析 故事梗概 Lauri是一位59岁的父亲，他的28岁儿子Johnny患有脑瘫，行动不便。然而，从Johnny出生起，Lauri就拒绝让儿子的残疾成为限制他生活的障碍。Johnny梦想成为一名运动员，于是Lauri帮助他加入了Team Triumph，一个支持残疾孩子参与耐力运动的组织。通过日复一日的训练，父子二人开始挑战一项艰难的目标——完成铁人三项赛（包括2.4英里游泳、112英里骑行和26.2英里跑步），总时限为17小时。 比赛当天，Lauri在游泳阶段拖着Johnny乘坐的皮艇，用90分钟完成2.4英里的水域穿越。接着，他们使用一辆为Johnny特别定制的自行车完成了112英里的骑行。在最后的跑步阶段，Lauri推着Johnny坐在比赛专用的轮椅上奔向终点，而Johnny则希望用助行器完成最后的几步。尽管困难重重，父子俩在观众的欢呼声中完成比赛，展示了超越身体限制和无条件父爱的力量。这段旅程不仅帮助Johnny实现了梦想，也成为一段关于坚持与爱的感人故事。 人物分析 Lauri（父亲） 性格：坚韧、无私，充满对儿子的爱与支持。 行为：通过身体力行为儿子完成铁人三项比赛，展现了父爱的力量与无条件的付出。 动机：不让儿子的残疾限制他的梦想，帮助Johnny实现成为运动员的愿望。 Johnny（儿子） 性格：乐观、坚强，有实现梦想的坚定信念。 行为：尽管患有脑瘫，仍积极参与训练，并努力完成比赛最后的步行部分。 动机：追求梦想，希望证明自己能够突破身体限制，超越人生挑战。 情节分析 1. 背景铺垫 Lauri不让Johnny的残疾成为障碍，通过Team Triumph让Johnny参与耐力运动。 Lauri用实际行动激励Johnny，同时也成为他的伙伴。 2. 比赛过程 游泳阶段：Lauri拖着绑在腰间的皮艇，完成了挑战。 骑行阶段：父子二人继续合作，使用定制的自行车完成漫长的骑行。 3. 高潮（待续写部分） 跑步阶段是比赛的最后一部分，父子两人要在有限的时间内冲向终点。Johnny想用助行器完成最后的部分，这既是他的梦想，也体现了他自我突破的努力。 情绪发展 1.希望与坚持：Lauri和Johnny不惧困难，始终怀着希望，坚持训练并参赛。 2.挑战与压力：比赛过程中体力的消耗和身体的限制带来巨大压力，但他们没有放弃。 3.激动与感动：在终点处，观众的鼓励和父子共同的努力将情绪推向高潮，体现了温情与感动。 主题分析 1.无条件的父爱：Lauri通过陪伴和支持帮助Johnny突破自我，体现了深沉的父爱。 2.超越身体的限制：Johnny尽管有身体障碍，但通过努力和坚持实现了梦想。 3.坚持与合作的力量：通过父子的共同努力，他们完成了几乎不可能的挑战。 续写方向 1.第一段细化骑行阶段的情节     描述Lauri在体力消耗巨大时如何克服困难，Johnny如何用鼓励支持父亲完成骑行。以及观众对他们的支持和鼓励，增强故事的温暖氛围。 2.详细描述跑步阶段+主题升华  Lauri在推着Johnny奔向终点时的辛苦，以及两人如何激励彼此。 Johnny用助行器完成最后几步，父亲在旁守护，观众热烈欢呼，情感升华。 可以通过父子间的对话总结他们的感受，比如Johnny对父亲的感激，Lauri对儿子的骄傲，进一步升华亲情、坚持和爱的主题。 续写协同 这篇续写大体学生能把握，就是father Lauri协助儿子Johnny完成铁人三项的三个项目，但是有一个容易被忽视的协同情节——第三段 Lauri began waking up at 4 a.m. so he could run while pushing Johnny in a personally-designed wheelchair called a racing chair. And Johnny tried so hard to walk using his walker(助行器) for finishing the last minutes of the Ironman Competition.根据这段话可知，在最后一个running环节，父亲跑步，推着儿子在一辆特制的轮椅车a racing car中前进，但是在最后几分钟的时候换成了助行器walker，由儿子自己走路完成这段跑步的距离。 而如果没能协同这一情节，只是父亲帮助儿子一起走向终点，文章就无法达到另一个高度：Johnny pushed his own limits and fulfilled his dreams.同时父亲放手也是一种父爱支持儿子圆梦的一个方式，这何尝不是另一种爱的表达。 参考范文1 Paragraph 1: Their specially-made bike had an additional back seat facing backward for Johnny.With determination etched on his face, Lauri mounted the bike, adjusted the straps to secure Johnny, and began the grueling 112-mile journey. The wind whipped against them. The scorching sun bore down. But Lauri pressed on, his legs pumping rhythmically. Despite the burning pain in his muscles, his heart swelled with pride every time he heard Johnny cheer, “You’re doing great, Dad!” The wind whipped past them, the miles seemed endless, and  fatigue crept in, but the sight of spectators cheering loudly, shouting words of encouragement kept their spirits high. After nearly seven hours of relentless cycling, they crossed the second checkpoint, exhaustion etched on Lauri’s face but joy radiating from Johnny’s.【经过近7个小时的不懈地骑行，他们穿过了第二个关卡，Lauri脸上满着疲惫，但Johnny的脸上散发出喜悦。】（共112字） Paragraph 2: Then they set their sights on the final leg of the race with Johnny sitting in the racing chair. With determination shining in Johnny’s eyes and Lauri’s heart swelling with pride, they transitioned to the final leg. Lauri, though utterly exhausted, pushed the racing chair with every ounce of strength he had left, the love for his son driving him forward. Near the finish line, Johnny insisted on walking the final few steps with his walker. Lauri’s eyes brimmed with pride and concern as he steadied his son. When Johnny crossed the finish line, his father at his side, the crowd erupted into a deafening roar. They had done more than complete the race—they had shattered boundaries, defied the odds, and proven that love and determination could conquer any challenge.【他们所做的不仅仅是完成了比赛——他们打破了界限，不顾困难，并证明了爱和决心可以战胜任何挑战】(共111字） 参考范文2 Paragraph 1: Their specially-made bike has an additional back seat facing backward for Johnny. This unique design allowed Lauri to pedal while Johnny was securely fastened to the seat, facing his father. The bike was engineered to accommodate Johnny's physical limitations, ensuring his comfort and safety during the long ride. As they traversed the 112-mile course, Lauri's strength and determination were evident in every pedal stroke. The bond between father and son was palpable, with Johnny's encouragement ringing in Lauri's ears, spurring him on despite the physical strain. The landscape whizzed by as they worked in tandem, a testament to their teamwork and the spirit of overcoming adversity. Paragraph 2: Then they set their sights on the final leg of the race with Johnny sitting in the racing chair. This was the most grueling part, a 26.2-mile run that would test their physical and mental endurance to the limit. Lauri, though exhausted from the swim and bike ride, found renewed energy in the knowledge that they were so close to achieving their goal. The racing chair, designed for speed and maneuverability, allowed Lauri to run with Johnny, his son's weight distributed evenly across the chair's frame. Crowds along the route cheered them on, moved by their story and the incredible display of love and perseverance. As they neared the finish line, the fatigue was evident on Lauri's face, but so was the pride and joy of sharing this moment with Johnny. Together, they crossed the finish line, not just completing a race, but proving that with love and determination. 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$