UNIT 1 Section Ⅴ Writing-【金版新学案】2024-2025学年新教材高一英语必修第一册同步课堂高效讲义配套课件（人教版2019）

UNIT 1 TEENAGE LIFE Section Ⅴ　Writing 内容索引 NO.1　单元写作——建议信 1 NO.2　续写微技能破茧——新入学场景 2 NO.3　巧用技法 突破续写 3 NO.1　单元写作——建议信 返回 原文呈现 10 September 2018 Dear Worried Friend， You wrote that you are very worried about your friend，Chen Lei.I understand quite well that you are anxious and feel terrible.You think that your friend plays computer games too often and spends too much time online. I recommend that you talk to your friend about his behaviour.It is not unusual for teenagers of your generation to be attracted to computer games and the online world.But spending too much time online is unhealthy and makes it very difficult to focus on other things in life.Some students even become addicted to the Internet and cannot concentrate on school and family life.I think you should encourage your friend to try new hobbies.Why not discuss the problem together? I am sure he will listen to you，since you are his good friend. All the best， Susan Luo 名师圈点 学语言 1．第一段第二句中使用anxious与terrible突出表现了对方的担忧。 2．第一段中连用三个句式：You wrote that...；I understand quite well that...；You think that...可以看出作者在建议信的开头，语气比较委婉礼貌，三个宾语从句的使用突显了作者使用高级句式表达的功底。 3．第二段第一句用recommend突出了建议信的写作特色，第二句中的双重否定not unusual的使用表明了作者的态度，第三、四句中的focus on，become addicted to，concentrate on等动词短语鲜明地表达了花太多时间上网的危害。 4．第二段运用it作形式主语；动词-ing形式短语作主语；it作形式宾语；宾语从句以及why not＋动词原形等高级句式突显出作者较强的语言功底。 知结构 1．该篇文章符合建议信的文章框架结构，首先引出问题；然后根据问题提出建议；最后表达自己的祝愿。 2．第一段开头用“You wrote that...”引出对方的问题，接着用“I understand quite well that...”表达出自己对对方的理解，然后引出对方让作者解决的问题。 3．第二段作者在提出建议时，语气委婉，并运用but，and等连接词使句子之间层次清晰，逻辑鲜明，语意连贯。 情境任务写作 假定你是李华，最近收到了你的美国朋友Jenny的来信。她在信中说：由于刚进入高中还不能适应新环境，她不知道如何去结交新朋友，因而情绪低落。请你回信，内容如下： 1.向Jenny表示问候和安慰； 2.针对她的问题提出以下建议： (1)放学后邀请同学一起参加课外活动； (2)遇到困难时，互相帮助。 注意：1.写作词数应为80左右； 2.请按如下格式作答。 Dear Jenny， ________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________ Yours， Li Hua 仿写程序步骤 1．一仿结构布局合理 第一段：______________ 第二段：______________________________ 第三段：__________ 2．二仿语言规范美观 (1)听说你进入高中后感觉很糟糕，我很难过。(terrible) I am sorry to hear that _____________________ after entering high school. (2)学生不能够及时适应高中的学校生活并不罕见。(形式主语；双重否定) _______________ for students not to adapt to the school life of senior schools in time. 指出问题所在 提出摆脱困境、适应环境的建议 给出祝愿 you feel terrible It is not unusual (3)你不必为此担心。(worried) You don't have to ________________________． (4)我建议你邀请你的同学一起参加一些课外活动。(recommend；take part in) _________________ you should invite your classmates to ________________ ______________________together. (5)这样能够帮助你们更好地了解对方。(understand) It will help ______________________________________． (6)像帮助困难的学生这样的行为是合适的。(suitable) Such behaviours as helping students in trouble _______________． (7)我希望你会发现我的建议有用。(find＋宾语＋宾语补足语) I hope you will _______________________________． be worried about it I recommend that take part in some extra-curricular activities you understand each other better are suitable find my suggestions useful 3．三仿句式高级表达 (8)用连词so连接句(2)和句(3) ________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________ (9)用含定语从句的句子连接句(4)和句(5) ________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________ It is not unusual for students not to adapt to the school life of senior schools in time，so you don't have to be worried about it. I recommend that you should invite your classmates to take part in some extra-curricular activities together，which will help you understand each other better. 4．四仿教材连句成篇 Dear Jenny， ________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________ Yours， Li Hua I am sorry to hear that you feel terrible after entering high school.As far as I know，it is not unusual for students not to adapt to the school life of senior schools in time，so you don't have to be worried about it.Here are some suggestions to help you. First，I recommend that you should invite your classmates to take part in some extra-curricular activities together，which will help you understand each other better by communicating with them.Besides，such behaviours as helping students in trouble are suitable. I do hope you will find my suggestions useful. 精彩素材积累 第一段：开门见山，说明写信的目的。 1．I know you are now having trouble communicating with others，and you may often feel lonely. 我知道你现在在与人交流方面有些麻烦，你也可能经常感到孤独。 2．I'm glad to receive your letter asking for my advice on how to get along well with your classmates. 很高兴收到你就如何与同班同学相处征求我的建议的来信。 3．Here are some tips/a few suggestions to help you. 这里有帮助你的一些建议。 4．I think you can make it if you follow the advice below.如果你听从以下建议，我认为你会做到的。 第二段：对所提问题进行分析，提出建议与改进措施并说明理由。 1．First(ly)，why not join a club? If you do this，you can make friends. 首先，为什么不参加一个俱乐部呢？你如果这样做的话，就会交到朋友。 2．Second(ly)，you should/can try to talk with others.Then/That way，you will feel better.其次，你应该尽力与他人交谈。那样，你会感觉更好。 3．Third(ly)，it would be a good idea if you read a book or listen to music.By doing this，you will calm yourself down.第三，看书或听音乐将会是个不错的主意。通过这样做，你会使自己平静下来。 4．Last but not least，you should talk with her first. 最后但同等重要的是，你应该先和她谈一谈。 5．As far as I am concerned/In my opinion，you should help each other. 就我而言/在我看来，你们应该互相帮助。 第三段：表达希望建议被采纳并盼望回复。 1．I hope you will find these ideas useful. 我希望你会发现这些办法有用。 2．As time goes on，people will know you better and will like to make friends with you if you can follow the above. 如果你遵从以上建议，随着时间的推移，人们会更加了解你，更愿意和你交朋友。 3．I believe that if you follow my advice，you'll get along well with your classmates.我相信，如果你听从我的建议，你会和同学们相处得很好。 4．I believe，with your trying，you can manage to overcome these difficulties. 我相信，在你的努力下，你会成功克服这些困难的。 返回 NO.2　续写微技能破茧——新入学场景 返回 Ⅰ. 话题表达聚焦 Ⅱ. 基于主题语境的续写实践 1．完成句子/句式升级 (1)我们打开包裹，摆放好家具，适应着阳光之州的新生活。(动词的联动) We ___________ the package，__________ the furniture and __________the new life in the Sunshine State. (2)我不是一个爱冒险的女孩，并且对新学校感到焦虑，脑子里充满了恐惧和担忧。(独立主格结构) I was not an adventurous girl and I felt anxious about my new school，____ __________________________． unwrapped arranged adjusted to my head full of fears and worries (3)________________________无论我多么努力地尝试)，I did not make any friend.(no matter how 引导让步状语从句) It made me feel like ____________ (一个彻底的失败者)．(抽象名词具体化) 用非限制性定语从句合并以上两个句子： ________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________ (4)我正要离开，这时篮球队长詹姆斯——新学校最受欢迎的学生来到我的面前。(be about to do...when...；同位语) I _______________________ James，___________________the most popular student in the new school came up to me. No matter how hard I tried a total failure No matter how hard I tried，I did not make any friend，which made me feel like a total failure. was about to leave when the basketball captain, (5)他问我是否可以帮助这个团队，因为他们很难完成高级文学作业。[as 引导原因状语从句；have difficulty (in)doing sth.] He asked if I could help the team out __________________________________ their assignments of advanced literature. (6)我点了点头，也正是从那一刻起，我开始适应新学校。(强调句型) I nodded and _________________________ I began to fit in the new school. as they had difficulty (in)finishing it was from that moment that 2．衔接美文 将以上各句合并成小短文并背诵，注意使用合适的过渡衔接词。 ________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________ We unwrapped the package，arranged the furniture and adjusted to the new life in the Sunshine State.At first，I was not an adventurous girl and I felt anxious about my new school，my head full of fears and worries.No matter how hard I tried，I did not make any friend，which made me feel like a total failure.Then one day，I was about to leave when James，the basketball captain，the most popular student in the new school came up to me.He asked if I could help the team out as they had difficulty (in)finishing their assignments of advanced literature.Immediately I nodded and it was from that moment that I began to fit in the new school. 返回 NO.3 巧用技法——突破续写 返回 记叙文一般以记人或者叙事为主，兼具写景及状物。最主要的内容形式为：写人物的经历和事物发展变化。记叙文的六要素包括：5W和1H，即人物(who)、时间(when)、地点(where)、事件的起因(why)、经过(what)和结果(how)。鉴于文本篇幅及特点，有时候一个文本并不具备全部要素。但是时间(when)和地点(where)往往充当背景；而人物(who)和经过(what)是每篇文本必不可少的要素。 Ⅰ.语篇阅读 阅读下面材料，完成以下任务。 (2021·新高考Ⅰ卷) A MOTHER'S DAY SURPRISE [1]The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother's Day.How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed.They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge.They had watched their mother in the kitchen.There was nothing to it.Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do. [2]The big day came at last.The alarm rang at 6 a．m.The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen.They decided to boil the porridge first.They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast.Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk.Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture.Next，Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan.Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread.The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds.Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread.This time，she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely. [3]Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake.The next minute，the porridge boiled over and put out the fire.Jenna panicked.Thankfully，Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly.But the stove was a mess now.Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge.But Jeff's hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain.Jenna made him put his hand in cold water.Then she caught the smell of burning.Oh dear! The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well. 注意：1.续写词数应为150左右； 2.请按如下格式作答。 As the twins looked around them in disappointment，their father appeared. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________ The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up._______ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Ⅱ.发现要素 1．通读全文，本文文体为： Narration记叙文　 Argument议论文　 Exposition说明文 2．审文本——获要素　可以采用在文中做标记或者在文边做简要笔记的方式列举要素。 √ 时态 一般过去时 六 要 素   When Mother's Day 特别注意具体的时间以及表示时间的从句或短语。按照文章发展顺序列举时间，有助于梳理文章线索和情节发展 Where 显性地点：in the kitchen 隐性地点：根据原文中[1] How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed.可以推测另外一个地点为：in bed 文中可能会出现多个地点。但是随着阅读的进行，要选定核心的关键地点 Who √The twins—Jenna and Jeff； √Their father； √Their mother 有些阅读文本中可能会出现多个人物，但是文章的核心人物是有限的，所以要确定核心人物 What √The twins cooked breakfast for their mother as a Mother's Day surprise，but an accident happened—Jeff's hand touched the hot burner；Jenna caught the smell of burning；the piece of bread in the pan had turned black． 本文有标题，要利用好标题信息。因为标题往往是文章的中心 时态 一般过去时 六 要 素     Why (可从原文和标题做出推测) √Why did the twins want to cook breakfast? The twins want to give their mother a Mother's Day surprise. How (找出原文句子) √How did the twins cook the breakfast? [2]The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen.They decided to boil the porridge first.They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast．Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk．Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture.Next，Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan.Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread． √根据原文推测：How would their father react? One possible answer： Their father helped the twins to finish the breakfast. 关注文章的冲突。在顺利的情况下，出现的意外就是文章的最大冲突。续写应该围绕冲突的解决展开，结合生活常识和体验做出合理推测 返回 谢 谢 观 看 ！ 返回 $$