微技能二如何把握叙事节奏 讲义-2025届高三英语上学期一轮复习专项

微技能二 如何把握叙事节奏 一、选择恰当词汇，把控叙事节奏 请使用动态动词修改下列句子的画线部分。 1. The sisters were reading and I could only heard the pages were softly turned. 2. Wilbur walked up to the fence and saw one board was loose. He removed the board. In a minute he had squeezed through the fence and was standing in the long grass outside his yard. 3. Seeing his mother was asleep, he tiptoed towards the door and slipped out of the house. 4. This story tickled John's funny bone and he giggled and giggled but his sister didn't think it was any good. 5. I was walking alone on the street in the darkness, my heart was pounding in my ears. 6. His parents were secretly discussing in the bedroom. He pressed his ears to the door, but heard nothing. 7. His mother was complaining about his bad performance at school. He put his hands over the ears to block out what his mother was saying. 8. I cast my eyes around the room but couldn't see any familiar faces. 9. No sooner had she heard the news than her legs buckled and she collapsed on the floor. 10. She dragged her feet after a whole day's work. 二、控制句子长短，调节叙事节奏 (一)如何改写短句 请采用适当的方式，将以下句子改成短句。 1. The man heard people shouting after him, “He is the thief!” He kept running. Then came a taxi. In went the man.此处两个倒装句短句表达简洁明快,渲染了当时紧张、急促的氛围。 2. John walked in the wind, cold and hungry. 用形容词作状语的方法将句子改成短句,避免啰嗦。 3. Her mother lifted her hand to her mouth, tears filling her eyes. 用独立主格结构改成短句，简洁明了。 4. Mr. Wilson lived in a grand house, a lonely man with no family.用同位语结构使句子变得更加简洁。 5. He lost his balance, staggered back and toppled over.用几个动态动词直接明了地展示人物的状况。 6. He a regular customer, entered the shop, picking out the items he wanted within several minutes.用名词代替了原本的解释性句子,更加精炼。 (二)如何改写长句 请采用适当的方式，将以下句子改成长句。 1. Considering that this activity is meaningful, we intend to design a uniform suited to our own class.该句可以通过增添原因进行拓展。 2. I' ll spend some time staying with my parents, chatting with them and doing some housework.该句通过添加细节信息，交代了和父母一起做什么来拓展句子。 3. I admit that on the first day of school I was so nervous that the butterflies in my stomach were more like pigeons flying around my inside. 该句选自《奇迹男孩》,该句通过添加一些修辞手法来具体描述人物的情绪，从而拓展了句子的长度。 四、制造故事冲突，增强节奏张力 1.请修改以下句子的画线部分，使句子的节奏符合故事所要表达的意义。 1) Lots of people lined up in front of the store for the Christmas sales. When the door opened, there was a mad dash for the items. 【解析】一群人为了圣诞节大甩卖在商店门口排起了长队，那么当门一打开时，一群人应该是纷纷冲进去抢购商品才更符合当时的场景。该句中的后半句只是写了人们走进商店挑选自己最喜欢的物品，并没有凸显出当时这一情景中人们行动之快的节奏。修改后，dash 一词的使用马上将故事的节奏加快，非常符合人们在门一开后急于进入商店的着急情绪。 2)A mouse appeared on his bed. With a scream, he threw away the book and sprang out of bed. 【解析】他看到老鼠，十分害怕，尖叫一声，书都扔了，赶紧下床。这一场景中将原句中“get out of bed”改成“sprang out of bed”更能展现人物的害怕情绪。 spring 意思是以一种非常快的速度进行移动，是“跳跃”的意思，因此从节奏上来说，spring 比 get 更有意义。 3) He had been ill since last Monday. Weak as he was, he still insisted that he should go to school. Every morning, we could see him drag himself into the classroom. 4) 【解析】他生病好几天了，还坚持上学，但还是很虚弱，因此将画线中的 walk 改成drag，从走路的状态更能展现人物的虚弱。drag 的意思是“缓慢而费力地移动”，指他慢腾腾吃力地走进教室。 5) As Mary was walking on her way home, she spotted $20 on the street. Looking a- round without seeing anybody, she slid the money into the pocket. 【解析】当 Mary在路上发现20 美元，看看周围没人，赶紧将钱放进口袋。slide( slid)意思是“快捷而悄声地移动”，将put 改成slid 更能突出人物当时怕被发现的心理，突显了 Mary 的动作之快。 2.请根据中文提示补全以下短语或句子(开头字母已给出)。 1)短语中的头韵： ①safe and sound ②clear as crystal ③from top to toe ④first and foremost ⑤deep in debt ⑥calm and collected ⑦toss and turn ⑧twists and turns 【解析】这些都是一个短语中两个单词的首字母形成的头韵。 2)句子中的头韵： The flakes were falling thick and hard now, pouring past the window, a waterfall of mystery. 【解析】这个句子中，三个单词以上的首字母形成的头韵，增加了句子的音韵美，渲染了当时的场景。 3.请将以下句子的画线部分改成合适的动态动词(可以适当调整原句)。 1) Wang Wei dragged his legs when climbing the mountain. 【解析】修改后的句子用具体的爬山动作 drag his legs“拖着腿往前走”，来展现爬山对 Wang Wei 来说是艰难的。 2) At one point we pedaled our bicycles up and up, clouds enveloping us. 【解析】 pedal意思是“踩自行车踏板”，envelop 是“笼罩”的意思，这两个动词给读者一种画面感，人物踩着自行车沿着山越来越高，直到云雾都笼罩着他们，可见当时骑车爬山的高度。 3) It was 7 o’ clock. I would be late. My heart raced. I seized my bag and dashed out of the house. My legs were pumping. Panting, I ran straight to the bus station. 【解析】 my heart raced意思是“心跳加速”, dash out of…“冲出”,表示速度很快, pump在这里指的是“腿上下快速摆动”，pant意思是“气喘”，这些动词都非常形象地展现了人物因迟到而紧张，快速地飞奔向车站的情景。 4.请将以下片段根据实际场景的需要改成长短句交替(可适当删减单词)。 Just imagine the beautiful surroundings if we make our cities greener. Green trees line the streets. A clean river winds through the city, in which a lot of fishes abound. On the one side stand rows of willow trees. On the other side lies a stretch of grassland sprinkled with many yellow and red flowers. 【解析】原句片段几乎都是由简单句构成的，句型结构单一，而且句子长短类似，每个句子七八个词，十分单调。修改后的句子有三个长句、两个短句，长短交替，抑扬顿挫的节奏感就出来了。 5.请将以下句子中的画线部分翻译成英文。 1) Beth was much too shy to go to school with other children, so she studied at home with her father. When her father went away, and her mother was busy with war work, Beth continued to study by herself and helped Hannah keep the home tidy for the others. She also spent long, quiet hours alone, talking to her dolls or playing the old piano. Beth loved music and, although the family could not afford music lessons or a good piano for her, she tried hard to make herself a better musician. 【解析】该段文字选自《小妇人》，主要以概述的方法交代了人物 Beth的一些情况。第一句写的是父亲走之前 Beth在家自学。第二句，父亲走之后 Beth继续在家自学和做其他事情。第三句概括了 Beth通常会做的事情。作者用四句话简述了 Beth的日常和经历，向读者介绍了人物的信息，这是与细节描写截然不同的叙述节奏。 2) Edward got out of the car, stopped and looked out across the open sea. There was a thin, cold smile on his face. Then he turned and walked onto the ship and into the night. 【解析】该片段选自《一个国王的爱情故事》,文中 Edward 的这几个动作“ got out of”,“ stopped”，“ looked out”明显是慢下来的节奏，读者可以感受到人物离开家国时的不舍，最后转身离开。 6.请根据括号里的要求设计故事情节。 Step 1:I woke up, staring at my watch. Up I jumped. It was too late. Step 2:I strode to the washroom and finished washing my face and brushing my teeth. Step 3:I ran down the stairs, but suddenly, I fell and rolled onto the floor. Step 4:I tried to stand up, but in vain. My feet ached. Step 5:I couldn't be on time for the class. Step 6: At this moment, a teacher came up and helped me up. Step 7: Then the teacher supported me and took me to the classroom. Step 8: Finally, I made it and arrived on time. 【解析】一个故事必须要有冲突，到第三个阶段故事的冲突开始出现，“我”起床晚了，赶着去教室，但是问题是从楼梯上滚下去，最后站也站不起来，无法自己走去。在这个时候事情出现了转机，经过老师的帮助，最终“我”按时到达教室。整个故事有冲突，有高潮，节奏跌宕。 学科网（北京）股份有限公司 $$